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[Sumeragi]

That was week..... TOO weak.....

[Tsukino Kage Spectre]

Stephanie Meyer does not deserve any love, only HATRED.

Or at least that was all I was tempted to say but that would be rather troll-like ain't it? So comment on the story... I can't think of anything. It broke my brain. It's obviously made on drugs.

[Master Assassin]

You should just go to Japan and help a hentai mangaka write the plot for their next work.

Actually, it's starting to get unamusing already. I think I might stop acknowledging what is a Holy Crack anymore...

[MeisterBabylon]

Kill it with fire, only because the Meyer name was mentioned!

[Miraluka]

Something is lacking there Mr. Kyon, as if something were missing, take a break or it will become weak and I mean your crack.

[Breidaluk]

Don't waste your holy crack in minor stories! You must gather all holy crack that you have and use in your fanfics! I want to see more of worst!!!!!!!

[TkMacintosh]

Spoiler for Weird idea...maybe NSFW?:

So...the weirdest idea hit me a little bit ago...

Aogami, in attempt to get his own harem that'll match Touma's, starts to try and do a little ritual in an attempt to attract girls to him, but midway through it, he curses Touma for his luck and screws up the ritual and causes some weird ass shit to happen that affects Touma and doesn't give Imagine Breaker enough time to negate it before it goes into effect.

So the next morning Touma wakes up and goes out to see Index...who is sitting there completely naked and looking non-chalant as she watches TV.

Of course Touma freaks out and tells her to put on her clothes...which she replies that she is wearing clothes and asks if Touma is all right.

Touma waves his wand over his eyes with his right hand in an attempt to try and fix it, but once his hand is removed...he still sees Index naked.

Slightly put off, he tells her he's fine and he must've been seeing things for a moment there. Index, slightly suspicious at this point, shrugs her shoulders and asks Touma for breakfast.

So when Touma leaves his house, he freaks out when he sees just about every girl around him buck naked and walking around like nothing else is happening.

....Yeah...that's all I got really. I don't know how to end it or how to continue.

[Mr.Kyon]

Originally Posted by TkMacintosh

Spoiler for Weird idea...maybe NSFW?:

So...the weirdest idea hit me a little bit ago...

Aogami, in attempt to get his own harem that'll match Touma's, starts to try and do a little ritual in an attempt to attract girls to him, but midway through it, he curses Touma for his luck and screws up the ritual and causes some weird ass shit to happen that affects Touma and doesn't give Imagine Breaker enough time to negate it before it goes into effect.

So the next morning Touma wakes up and goes out to see Index...who is sitting there completely naked and looking non-chalant as she watches TV.

Of course Touma freaks out and tells her to put on her clothes...which she replies that she is wearing clothes and asks if Touma is all right.

Touma waves his wand over his eyes with his right hand in an attempt to try and fix it, but once his hand is removed...he still sees Index naked.

Slightly put off, he tells her he's fine and he must've been seeing things for a moment there. Index, slightly suspicious at this point, shrugs her shoulders and asks Touma for breakfast.

So when Touma leaves his house, he freaks out when he sees just about every girl around him buck naked and walking around like nothing else is happening.

....Yeah...that's all I got really. I don't know how to end it or how to continue.

...I had such an idea in mind long ago, but it affected every man on earth.

I had a scene where Knight Leader was weeping because he had seen the Queen like that.

Another was Fiamma trying to run away from Silvia, and she thinks he was going to betray her and Ollerus, so she tortured him BDSM style. Cue Ollerus waking up, seeing this, and going fucking Yandere mode.

[Master Assassin]

TkMacintosh: Now where have I seen that kind of plot. I remember it was from a manga I read, perhaps. All I could recall that a girl wished boys weren't perverts and the next morning she woke up to she finds her world turning into one where half-nakedness is the proper way of dressing and that putting proper clothes on is like stripping in public. And the boys get turned on when they saw her in full school uniform. It's not a H manga though, but NSFW nevertheless.

[TkMacintosh]

Originally Posted by Soul Assassin

TkMacintosh: Now where have I seen that kind of plot. I remember it was from a manga I read, perhaps. All I could recall that a girl wished boys weren't perverts and the next morning she woke up to she finds her world turning into one where half-nakedness is the proper way of dressing and that putting proper clothes on is like stripping in public. And the boys get turned on when they saw her in full school uniform. It's not a H manga though, but NSFW nevertheless.

Never read that manga, but the idea still came to me non-the-less.

[Mr.Kyon]

Spoiler for Preview for a serious one-shot:

Like he remembered, there were many containers—filled to the brim or flat out empty—in this place.

It was a switchyard in District 17 that held many memories for the Number One esper.

At the moment, it was in the middle of this cold day in November, as such he wore a pure white coat that melded with his albino appearance.

The workers that should be moving around and sweating for their living were having lunch somewhere.

Perfect and clean conditions for a nasty fight.

Someone from the Darkness had led him here, for a reason that escaped him.

Accelerator had decided to investigate and get it off his mind.

Using his esper powers, he cleanly jumped over the fence and landed on the pavement.

It held no scars of the battle that had taken place here; only a memory for the few that had been here months ago.

Accelerator shut off his powers by tapping his choker, now relying on his futuristic crutch that only suited him to stand upright.
He walked, then found a protruding shape sitting there in the middle of the yard.

It was a tombstone; a number was carved into it.

10031.

The message was clear.

And he knew exactly what it meant.

He bit his lower lip and glared at the concrete and mountains of metal containers around him.

“…If you would stop cowering, you can show yourself—whoever you are.”

He heard clapping.

There was nothing but spite in that motion. Yet it hadn’t been a bullet or a punch; refreshing from the usual routine.

Accelerator spotted a figure, still clapping, emerging from a shadow casted by the mass of containers.

There was a wide, cocky grin on that face.

“Must be a heart breaking notions—the fact that those girls never had a proper grave. I remedied that as a gift from me to you,” the familiar voice said. “I know what it’s like to feel such regret. The difference between you and I is that I broke like a human, and you… Well, you happened to have some glue lying around to reassemble your fragile puzzle.”

Accelerator squinted, not believing it at first, but it wasn’t his mind playing a trick on him.

“…Kakine?”

“Half-true I’m afraid.”

[MeisterBabylon]

Kaki/nda

[Jobless Josh]

Originally Posted by Mr.Kyon

Spoiler for Preview for a serious one-shot:

“…Kakine?”

“Half-true I’m afraid.”

Honestly you and your bloody Kakine ressurection fetish xD
And my god MeisterBabylon Kakine in a skirt I could handle but with a little girls legs I think I might throw up.

[Mr.Kyon]

Spoiler for There will be blood... (Revamp Promise Chapter 3):

One would think that Misaka Worst would wholly enjoy not having Accelerator around to play the typical Tou-san routine: That she would cause chaos and malice throughout Academy City that would end up mobilizing all of Judgement and Anti-Skill, getting so out of hand that Aleister Crowley himself would have to step in to stop the madness.

However, it wasn’t like that. Misaka Worst wasn’t actually doing anything considered malicious or had an expression that spoke of it. It surprised her how she wasn’t getting much negativity from the Network today—although that could suddenly change. It was kind of like teenage hormones spiking, then suddenly going low-profile.

Except there’s a lot less tissues involved, she nodded to herself. As she thought this, she heard a groan then a moan. It was a lamenting kind, unlike what she had just recalled doing herself.

“Such misfortune…”

Worst looked on over to see a certain spiky-haired boy kneeled in despair over the infamous vending machine 7116 that had robbed him of his money yet again.

“…It’s that Kamijou guy,” Worst said quietly as she approached, hands in her hoodie’s pockets.

Even if she had only seen him once and hadn’t even introduced herself to him, it was hard for a Misaka clone to not know who he was. There was an ungodly amount of things in the Misaka Network about him and his exploits, including some fetching pictures of him bare torso with sparkles around his face.

(In reality, his gakuran had been burned away, and for some reason, Mikoto was firing electricity at him.)

In fact, Worst did “owe” him a favor because he had loaded her on a military convoy after her fight with Accelerator. With the latter, but hey, she can’t be picky about that.

“Oi oi, are you some kind of M when you’re not off playing Superman?” Worst kicked Touma’s leg weakly as to snap him out of it

It did the trick as he turned his head towards her. “Oh, it’s that Misaka from before,” he said, rising.

“That’s Misaka Worst to you!” She winked and grinned, snapping her finger so purple lighting came forth for added special effects.

“I see.”

Worst glanced on over to the source of Touma’s despair. “What were you whining about just now?” Worst asked, leaning against the vending machine.

“It ate my money.” Touma’s shoulders sagged.

“Ah~?” Worst grinned, eyes wide. “How much~? Was it like 10000 or 20000 yen~? Gyhahahahaha!”

“…I don’t want to say it. Actually, this situation feels strangely déjà vu.”

“Should Misaka use her ability to recover it~?” As she said this, electricity gathered around Worst’s forehead, making her hair sway.

“N-no! I remember now! Mikoto did the same thing and it wasn’t funny at all!” he cringed at the thought of attracting the security bots and running like hell again.

“It makes it more interesting then!” Worst smiled evilly. “Oh, maybe we can go on a date so the Sisters, Original and Tou-san go all angsty…” she muttered in a low tone.

“Take pity! I really want to have a normal day for once! That bastard can keep my money! Argh! Such misfortune!” Touma yelled, scratching his head.

Misaka Worst sighed and let go of the machine, the sparks letting off. What a weakling, Worst murmured in her mouth. Who would want such an M for a boyfriend anyway? Really, at this point, I might have to re-educate my Onee-chans in their taste in men.

“‘Hmph, like you can teach us anything about men when you’re chasing after that person.’ says Misaka 10032 as she announces her presence to the savior and her little sister.”

Worst and Touma both jumped in surprise when the noticed the monotone narration of Misaka Imouto , who was standing right behind Worst.

“W-what the hell are you saying!-?” Worst stammered. “And did you have some super enhanced sonar to have heard that?-!”

She continued, coldly mocking Worst, “‘Although Misaka can admit he has changed and that what he has done for the Commander is touching, your actions seem to indicate that you are the real masochist here.’ says Misaka as she thinks you suffer from Stockholm syndrome or such abnormality, or maybe you retain certain character traits from Onee-sama.”

Misaka Worst’s forehead startling throbbing. “Oh, you did not just…” she uttered, gnashing her teeth.

She was not a Tsundere.

She was not a Yandere.

She’s the one and only Misaka Worst—not some generic Tsundere character like the Original.

…And there was that part about getting Number One’s first kiss, a feat in itself... B-but it’s not like she l-liked it!

While watching the electrified first face-to-face meeting between Worst and Imouto, Touma’s head popped with questions like: Eh, what’s going on here? Who’s the big and little sister again…?

He backed away slightly, unsure of what was going. His senses told him this might end badly. He had never seen such an expression on Imouto’s face.

It looked like she was sneering ever so slightly.

“‘But on second thoughts, pairing you with that person is a smart move.’ says Misaka as she reflects on quantifying certain things.”

There was a brief silence as Misaka Worst’s face went blank.

And then she understood what needed to be done.

“Oh, I see!” Worst hastily took Touma in an arm lock, puffing her cheeks and giving him a come-hither look. “Misakas are such jealous creatures, aren’t they? I wonder what would happen if Misaka took this guy in a dark alley and—”

Suddenly, rustling sounds were heard from nearby.

Touma’s inkling came true as three other Sisters emerged from many hiding places, such as behind trees, bushes and other strategic spots.

They had their FN2000 weapons drawn, locked and loaded for combat.

They were all pointed at Misaka Worst—the red laser points on her forehead proof of that.

Misaka Imouto, having an exceedingly dark aura about her, pointed to the unique Third Season clone as a small squad of military-grade clones stood behind her in formation.

“‘Misaka is afraid she can’t let you do that.’ says Misaka 10032 as she shows where your dark intentions originally come from.”

“Ho ho ho,” Worst grinned, licking her lips and pushing Touma aside. “Looking for a fight, huh? Well, even if this Misaka is your little sister, your clinging is quite disgusting. Misaka has no interest in your savior, but if she wishes to toy with him, then she will do exactly that.”

The wind picked up as the standoff became cemented. Iron sand began to gather into Worst’s hands, forming two vibrating katanas that could slice bullets like warm butter.

“‘You will not defile him.’ states Misaka 10039 as she readies her grenade launcher—”

“Woah, woah, WOAH!” said Touma as he got between the standoff. “Uh, Imouto-san, Worst-san, all I’m hearing is out of my realm of comprehension, but there are other ways to settle differences,” he shook his hands to both types of Misakas. “I don’t think Anti-Skill would take lightly to a squad of rifle-wielding schoolgirls duking it out with a ninja-like person with dual katanas,” Touma lectured. “This sounds more like a bad science fiction anime,” he added.

The Sisters, without a second thought, listened and withdrew their weapon.

Worst sighed, annoyed at the diffused situation. She let the iron sand katanas dissipate.

Damn, what’s with this guy? Worst asked herself. I felt that he had that sort of aura that was the antithesis of mine, but damn, that’s frightening…

“‘Fine’ says Misaka 19090 as she puts on the safety lock for her FN2000.”

“‘…However, to give you a clear message to mind your own business, us Misakas will use a special high-risk tactic.’ says Misaka 13577 as she smiles widely, knowing that things are about to go bad.”

For some reason, Touma began backing away slowly; the world of women was not for him.

“Oh yeah?” Worst put a hand on hip, frowning. “Come at me, Onee-chans.”

However, what Misaka Imouto said next made him run for cover.

“‘Kuroko-chan~ I love you~’ says Misaka as she attempts to put emotion into it.”

Hint: Kuroko is going to get completely M'd by Worst.

Spoiler for And...:

Then Accelerator barges, sees Worst and the spellbound Kuroko, and goes full Tsun-Tsun.

[Cundou]

Question!:

Is there a preferance for using Kamijou or Touma to address our main spiky-haired hero? In the light novels he seems to be referred to as Kamijou all the time, but is that consistent, and if so, is there a reason provided?

I personally feel like using Touma, but if it's part of his character to think of himself as "Kamijou", that's a good reason to change it.

Obviously I'm asking this in the fan fic thread because this is regarding writing fan fics. If anyone feels it's malplaced, please feel free to point in the right direction

[ovum]

Originally Posted by Cundou

Question!:

Is there a preferance for using Kamijou or Touma to address our main spiky-haired hero? In the light novels he seems to be referred to as Kamijou all the time, but is that consistent, and if so, is there a reason provided?

I personally feel like using Touma, but if it's part of his character to think of himself as "Kamijou", that's a good reason to change it.

Obviously I'm asking this in the fan fic thread because this is regarding writing fan fics. If anyone feels it's malplaced, please feel free to point in the right direction

From what I have seen there is no preference in what way he is addressed as. Examples are:

Mikoto: that idiot
Aogami/Tsuchimikado: Kami-yan
Index: Touma
His mother: Touma-san

Most other people refer him as Kamijou-san most probably because they don't really know him that good.

[Chaos2Frozen]

Originally Posted by Cundou

Question!:

Is there a preferance for using Kamijou or Touma to address our main spiky-haired hero? In the light novels he seems to be referred to as Kamijou all the time, but is that consistent, and if so, is there a reason provided?

I personally feel like using Touma, but if it's part of his character to think of himself as "Kamijou", that's a good reason to change it.

Obviously I'm asking this in the fan fic thread because this is regarding writing fan fics. If anyone feels it's malplaced, please feel free to point in the right direction

It's a matter of Japanese formality, but this depends on your writing style whether you want to westernized it, or retain the same feel as the Light Novel.

If you want to Westernized it, then by all means you can use their given name. But the Light Novel refers to all of them by their family name or full name, save for special occasions.

Index is the only one I know that refers to everyone by their given name, being a westerner herself this is to be expected but mostly because her character is naturally friendly and open.

[Cundou]

Hey there, thanks for the answers!
I think I wasn't clear enough in my question though.
I didn't mean when people are talking to or about him directly. I meant in the narrator's voice when writing from Touma's point of view.

Several times during the light novels it says "Kamijou did this, Kamjiou said that". Why doesn't the author use his first name? He doesn't seem to use the last name rule on all the characters (like when we're seeing Mikoto's point of view she's actually called Mikoto - most of the time).
I was wondering if this was a consistent thing throughout the series, or if it's just random when the author uses his first name or last name when writing from Touma's point of view.

Basically, does Touma usually refer to himself as "Kamijou" when he thinks?

[Tempy]

Howdy folks.

I'm a relatively new guy when it comes to writing stories in this series, but I do have the first chapter of something I recently got through finishing. If you folks don't mind, I would love if you could check it out and possibly give me feedback? It's a bit on the serious side, with action and dialogue.

As a word of warning, however: it's got a handful of OCs, so do read through it all before passing judgment. So, without further ado:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7301515/1/In_Bad_Company

[Chaos2Frozen]

Tempy ?!


Oh man, everybody's coming out of the woodworks Gotta to work faster on my own fics...