2010-02-07, 23:23 | Link #23002 |
IS: Liar's Mask
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Location: Sendai
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The topical conversation of the past couple pages...is really on a...different level >.>; maybe I should vanish till it pools over before i get caught in it XD
Very interesting stories though... I am surprised Teana isnt holding Subaru down like how Amy was with Crono. Signum and Shamal played their roles a little...too well it seemed to me LOL. Photoshoots to phonesex to pleasure feeding tentacle beasts...hoo boy...author's prerogative I guess XD
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2010-02-07, 23:26 | Link #23003 | |
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Takamachi family-get together dinner scene: Momoko: *staring at her daughter* You're what? Shiro: A phone sex line? I forbid it! Nanoha: It helps the children, and I live on my own now, dad. Momoko: Nanoha... there's just one thing I have to say... Shiro: You tell her, dear. No daughter of mine will be doing THAT. Momoko: *grabbing her daughters hands with stars in her eyes* Can I help out too? You know i met your father that way; I was raising money for college, and he kept calling me... teehee! Nanoha: DAD!? Shiro: *holds head in his hands* |
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2010-02-07, 23:44 | Link #23004 |
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I bet Momoko would do something food related!
But yeah, the weirdest part of Kaijo's fic is the call with the guy getting off by being 'dressed.' Made me arch an eyebrow until I decided I shouldn't be surprised that there's some one with such a fetish. ... Though I imagine it would be quite the curse of a fetish. Climaxing by getting dressed in the morning, but then you have to change your pants, which would result in you climaxing again, etc etc.
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2010-02-08, 00:33 | Link #23007 | |
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Quick! Let's slide into the Triangle Hearts universe!
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2010-02-08, 00:53 | Link #23008 |
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Join Date: Aug 2009
Location: Alberta, Canada
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I can only say this to what has been posted the past couple pages.
You are all weirdos. Back to working on a stupid English paper I should have had done Friday. (@Nanya: PM me the rest of that. )
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2010-02-08, 02:01 | Link #23009 |
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Some of that stuff sounded good and yet...for some reason...one of you guys had just given me a catalyst that would inspire me.
Although my fanfic is Adventure/Drama, I do try to add some innuendos to lighten the mood, yet I'm not sure if I'm succeeding. The thing I tried to point out with some of my characters is that my main one and his partner tend to sometimes remind Nanoha and Fate of themselves considering one worries about the other. In one of my later chapters, I try to incorporate some stuff regarding the incident that left Nanoha gravely injured. In short, Shiro (my main OC), gets banged up quite a bit that it causes his partner to break down emotionally. Here's a bit of a preview as to what I'm talking about: Mizuki: (to Kaname). How is he? Kaname: Shamal isn't sure about his current condition as of now. He seems to have taken some hard hits, some that would have almost affected his breathing. Mizuki: He'll be alright thought, won't he? (in a pleading voice). Kaname: *silence*. Mizuki: Please! Tell me he's going to be OK! Kaname: I'm sorry Mizuki. All we can do now is wait, I'm afraid. Mizuki: (tries to hold back tears). Kaname: It's OK to cry. You should cry, while you're still able to. (Mizuki clings to Kaname and sobs). Yuki: (looks at the two Aces). I'm guessing that this scene brings back unpleasant memories. Fate: Yes...it does. Nanoha: She really does care about him though. He really got her worried. Yuki: Sounds like someone that a certain blonde would know all too well. Fate: Those two remind me of that one night that I don't want to remember. |
2010-02-08, 09:49 | Link #23010 |
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Yeah, I have to agree with you on the most part. My Nanoha is generally an exhibitionist, and her personality shows that she knows exactly what people would do with nude shots of her. Changing her so suddenly in a fic could throw people off like it did you.
Also, the romance was kind of an afterthought and I wasn't going to really have it until the end, where I thought Fate needed to explain herself better to the dense!Nanoha in the story. I thought of a way to keep it more simple without a get together near the end, but I couldn't really find any reason that would allow Fate to be upset that much over it, specially after Hayate's scene. I wish I posted it here first instead of directly to FF.N so I could tweak it some >.< Oh well, I need to finish AltS first before I go back and change it. Thanks a lot for the helpful review Dezo <3
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2010-02-08, 09:50 | Link #23011 | |
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2010-02-08, 09:57 | Link #23012 |
Vividly Vivio
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@Thread: I thought I'd ask you guys about this. One review I got complained about me using dollars in my story for mid-childa's money. I think it is simpler that way, because 90% of the people reading know what a dollar is. I don't think creating some new currency for Mid would help at all. Actually, I think it would take away because if you see a currency you don't know, you'd probably instantly wonder how much that is in your native currency... thoughts?
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2010-02-08, 09:59 | Link #23013 | |
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2010-02-08, 11:20 | Link #23015 | |
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Just ask yourself how important having an exact money count is, and how important it is to specifically name a currency. Most of the time, you'll find it isn't real important to the plot. I'd be willing to help, if anyone has a section dealing with money that they'd like to rewrite to avoid using dollars or something. But this is just my personal opinion. Lastly, you could just use "credits" as currency. It's a neutral enough term that a society might natural drift to as it gets more advanced, and it's used in numerous sci-fi stories, so most people can relate to it. |
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2010-02-08, 11:34 | Link #23016 | |
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2010-02-08, 12:13 | Link #23017 |
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2010-02-08, 13:57 | Link #23018 |
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