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[mega1987]

I rather be on Doomtrain...



*got ran over by Doomtrain and got Zombie, Blind, Poison, Sleep, Vit 0, Confuse, Berserk, Stop, Slow, Silence and Slow-numb(Petrifying)*

[Shigan]

Originally Posted by ninryu

Why do I have a feeling all the great authors decided to jump on the "Soul Crashngly Depressing" train?

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

You might as well give up now. deathcurse is the train.

Don't write my skills as a happy-maker off! Given alcohol, a computer and some mango pudding, I'll out-happy any therapist!

Besides, I'm only concerned about the HxV Files, the rest of deathcurse's writing is her own to um... write.

[ninryu]

Originally Posted by Shigan

Besides, I'm only concerned about the HxV Files, the rest of deathcurse's writing is her own to um... write.

I doubt it is even possible for her to write a happy ending.

[Craxuan]

Usually we enjoy dropping people to the bottom of infinity, throw them a rope, then let them climb it while cackling with a pair of scissors hovering just millimeters away.

The current trend it to cut the rope right off the bat and throw down rocks, plus the occasional scissors magically appearing in your hand. So amazing.

Suddenly I have a question: What kind of ending do you guys expect from The Two Goddesses? For those who read it?

[Shigan]

Originally Posted by ninryu

I doubt it is even possible for her to write a happy ending.

We'll see who gets to write the final part of the Files (forthcoming in a hundred years or so...).

I rather like giving my characters happy endings, thou not necessarily the expected kind ^^.

[Tiresias]

It's cute how people here are currently seeing "DOOM!" everywhere just because of a one-shot, even moreso when one remembers that from the looks of it DC's trying her best to suppress her true nature and give HxV a happy ending

Besides, some of her stories did end happily. Just look at this one!

[Eagle8819]

...I would actually try making the train speed up more.

Originally Posted by Craxuan

Usually we enjoy dropping people to the bottom of infinity, throw them a rope, then let them climb it while cackling with a pair of scissors hovering just millimeters away.

The current trend it to cut the rope right off the bat and throw down rocks, plus the occasional scissors magically appearing in your hand. So amazing.

See me grin.

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by Tiresias

It's cute how people here are currently seeing "DOOM!" everywhere just because of a one-shot, even moreso when one remembers that from the looks of it DC's trying her best to suppress her true nature and give HxV a happy ending

I figure that's why "Prerogative of the Brave" chapters take so much time for her to write. It's so unnatural for her to write things that are funny and which lead towards a successful love confession!

@Craxuan: I stopped reading "The Two Goddesses" because it seemed more and more inevitable that it was going to end up in either the bloody wreckage of half the cast or a hellish pit of angst. One chapter is pretty much my tolerance level for tragedy/Bad End fics.

[Craxuan]

Originally Posted by Tiresias

It's cute how people here are currently seeing "DOOM!" everywhere just because of a one-shot, even moreso when one remembers that from the looks of it DC's trying her best to suppress her true nature and give HxV a happy ending

Besides, some of her stories did end happily. Just look at this one!

Actually, that did end happily. For me xD. Since that was most likely be Nanoha's mindset... Assuming that she's really not that dense.

Originally Posted by Eagle8819

See me grin.

I thought I felt an invisible hand poking my innards somewhere... So it was you?!

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

@Craxuan: I stopped reading "The Two Goddesses" because it seemed more and more inevitable that it was going to end up in either the bloody wreckage of half the cast or a hellish pit of angst. One chapter is pretty much my tolerance level for tragedy/Bad End fics.

Aw, too bad. Then again, the first chapter was somewhat very close to the ideal image I have in mind, I guess it speaks a lot. XD

... Don't want Hayate/Yuuno sweet times? There's one chapter on it~

[Nanya01]

Red

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Four Start

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Spoiler for Blood That Flows - Peak - Four PT3:

Nove blinked as she, Sein, Dieci, Tre and Quattro appeared on a hill just to the outside of a small farming village. "So..."

"See what you can find out." Tre said as she wrapped her gray, hooded traveler's cloak around her body more. She had to admit, Due was right, this cloak was kind of nice, since it kept the high winds from pushing their hair against their faces.

Dieci adjusted the bandaged package against her back. "Nove and I can search the village below."

Tre nodded and looked at the mountain. "Sein and I will check out those mountains there." The blue-green-haired cyborg perked up at that. "Quattro?"

"Might as well go with Nove and Dieci." Quattro shrugged as Tre nodded, grabbed Sein and flew off into the distance. "Ugh... Those two..." Really, feeling raw excitement from Sein was not the feelings she expected to feel. What was Sein going to do on that trip anyway? Fondle Tre worse than usual?

(---)

Sein fought the urge to sneeze as her hands were phased through Tre's outfit and rubbing the taller cyborg's back. 'Where did that come from?'

Tre just rolled her eyes as she flew the two of them to the mountain. If Sein was grabbing more than just her back, she would have let the girl go.

Even if Sein's fingers working her back muscles did feel nice.

(---)

Nove looked at Dieci as the two walked through town. "So, any idea what we should ask?"

Dieci shook her head and looked at Nove's feet. "Roller blades?" She didn't train too much with Nove, as she was more long-range bombardment rather than close-range and thus Tre didn't train her much.

Nove shrugged at her. "If Tre-nee trained you more, you'd know that my roller blades help me move on my Airliner more."

"Ah." Dieci nodded at her sister. "You know that I'm more long-range support than close-range combat. I could stand to sit in on some of your training though."

"I guess so. But, I've seen your shots. Weren't you complaining about them being too powerful to the doctor the other day?" Nove looked at Dieci, who grimaced at that.

"Yes. I'm worried that I won't be able to keep my shots contained anymore soon."

Nove nodded and the two turned a corner in the village, only for Dieci to nearly run a small boy over. "Dieci, you okay?"

"I'm fine." She nodded as Nove helped her stand up fully. "Are you okay?" She knelt down to help the boy up and inspected him. "You're not hurt, are you?" Cinque had taken her time to drill politeness into each of her sisters and when knocking someone over when not fighting them without making sure that they were okay was both rude and mean.

"I'm okay." The child smiled as he stood up. "You're pretty, lady!"

Dieci's eyes widened and she felt her face heating up from that statement. "I, uh, thank you, huh?" She blinked as the boy gave her a flower.

"Mama says that you should always give a nice person a flower." He smiled brightly before running off and waving to the two.

Nove fought it, she really did, but she couldn't help the small grin that came to her face. "Looks like you made a friend."

"He called me pretty..." Dieci looked at Nove, her face completely red. "What am I supposed to say?"

Nove sweat-dropped. "Uh... I have no clue, it's not like we're called pretty by random people all the time." It was probably the only time that Nove wished that Cinque had taught them more with how to deal with people.

Then again, Cinque didn't seem to know very much either, but she was trying her best.

"Come on." Nove shook her head as they walked into town. "Let's see if anyone says anything."

"About what?" Dieci asked as she readjusted her cannon.

"I don't know, anything weird. Couldn't hurt, right?" Nove looked back and Dieci and grimaced slightly. She didn't dislike her family, they were interesting, even if she didn't spend much time with Uno, who was busy with Jail a lot, or Quattro, who was more interested in Lutecia, but they were her family and she enjoyed them.

No, what she disliked was how short she was. Sure, she had a nice pair of breasts, something Sein and Wendi commented on whenever they decided to grope her in the baths, and a nice butt, which, again, those two liked to comment on whenever they decided it was time for family fondling. But other than Cinque, Nove had to look up to see anyone in the eyes. She only hoped that at least one of the remaining three sisters were at least her height.

The only solace that Nove took from being short was that Quattro never made comments to her like she did to Tre.

She wasn't sure why Quattro felt the need to make fun of Tre for having large breasts and a big rear end, but Nove was sure Tre didn't appreciate it.

"You okay?" Dieci looked at Nove. "You spaced out for a second there."

"Sorry, just grumbling about how it's not fair that I have to look up to everyone other than Cinque to see their faces."

Dieci giggled softly and hugged Nove from behind. "At least it's you and not Sein or Wendi. I know you won't take advantage of your height like that."

Nove sighed, even as she felt Dieci's breasts push against her head. "Thanks, Dieci."

"Hey! You hear about that new mine that was discovered two days ago?" The two blinked as they over-heard an older man talking to another man as they walked down the street. "I wonder who built it."

"Yeah, I heard about it, heard that there was some big doors blocking the way in."

Dieci let go of Nove and walked over to them. "Excuse me." The men turned to look at her. "What new mine?"

"Heh," the taller of the two, though that was all Dieci could tell, since they looked practically the same, where they brothers? "Well, there was a mine discovered in the mountains just to the South of town. Weird thing is, there's these doors that are blocking the way in."

Dieci nodded to him. "Thank you." She turned to Nove and nodded and the two ran off.

(---)

Quattro raised an eyebrow as she saw Dieci and Nove run, well, Nove was rollerblading, towards her. "Well?"

"Looks like there's a mine to the South here." Nove pointed towards the mountains not too far from the village. "Maybe it's there?"

Quattro nodded and turned towards the mountains before tapping her ear. "Hey, Tre, you there?"

"I think we found a door."

"That's nice, it's probably what we're looking for." Quattro turned to Nove and Dieci and nodded, before grabbing Dieci and the three took off into the air, Nove on her Airliner, as she had no real flight abilities of her own.

(---)

Minutes later...

Sein grinned as she popped through the doors, pulling Tre and Quattro with her. Nove and Dieci had been told to wait outside, to keep people from investigating too much. Just in case this was the place they were looking for. "Do you think the doctor will ever let us go on missions after this one's done?" She turned to Tre, who nodded.

"Very likely. He seems driven to do something." What, Tre wasn't sure, but she had overheard Jail talking to three people, and from what she had seen, which was very little, they looked like brains in jars. Something about creating weapons against those Mazoku he warned them about awhile ago.

Tre wasn't sure if he was talking about her and the rest of her sisters, but, deep down, a part of her ached at the thought of being nothing but a weapon.

Even so, she could ignore it. She had a job to do.

Quattro merely snorted as she walked behind Tre and Sein. 'That foolish doctor, to think he can fight against Mazoku when he can't notice the one under his nose.' Her shoulders shook with amusement as she pulled up a holographic screen in front of her fingertips. "Well, it looks like the doctor was right." She smiled as the two turned to her. "This is one of those sites."

"Good, let's hope that whatever it is he's looking for is here." Tre nodded to Quattro.

"Hmm... How much did he have left to get?" Sein asked as they walked down the hallway.

"Spear and the Heart." Tre answered for her. She turned a corner and her eyes widened as the next step she took nearly sent her flying off the edge. "...Seems shorter than most."

"Looks like this is an abandoned missile silo." Quattro muttered, frowning as her hacking of the computer systems revealed that not only were there none of the "megahs" that she wanted, there were also no missiles stored here anymore. "Let's just see if its worth our time."

"Gimme a second and I'll find out." Sein grinned as Tre grabbed her and the two disappeared into a purple flash.

Quattro narrowed her eyes as she looked at the schematics. 'Seriously, a missile silo in here? When there's no missiles around?' Growling, she slammed an open palm on the holo keyboard. "This is SO aggravating!"

"FOUND IT!" She heard Sein's voice pick up and waited for the two to reappear in front of her.

"Found what?" Quattro blinked at what Sein had in her hand. "A stick?"

"Actually, it was a sword down there." Sein blinked and gaped as the end shifted and changed into a pointed blade. "...This thing can change forms?" She yelped as the blade shot off the stick and went straight for Quattro's head. "EEEK!"

Quattro twisted and fell to the ground as the blade soared right through where her body was a moment ago. "What the hell? Trying to kill me?"

Sein shook her head. "Sorry, didn't mean to."

Tre shook her head and frowned at Sein. "Be careful. If you can't keep it from firing prematurely, you probably shouldn't be squeezing it so hard."

"Tre, Sein, Quattro, I need help! NOW!"

The three blinked as they heard Nove's voice over the comm-link.

"Nove?" Tre tapped her ear piece. "What's wrong?"

"It's Dieci! Calm down, dammit!"

The three blinked as they looked at each other in confusion, before Tre grabbed them, activated her IS and rushed for the doors.

(---)

As they phased through the doors, Quattro could only stare at the scene in front of her. Dieci on her knees crying was something new, but that wasn't what impressed her.

The entire landscape around them was covered in craters, mountains were missing and even the rivers to the distance were gone. "What the hell?"

Nove looked at her. "Right after you three disappeared, this... This army, two of them, showed up and started fighting... And... One of them blew up the village we were in a little bit ago."

"She destroyed everything because of that?" Quattro raised an eyebrow.

"That boy... He... He got killed because of them." Dieci sobbed while Nove rubbed her back and hugged her. "I... I had to... Make them... pay." Dieci suddenly pushed Nove away and grabbed her gun, which had been right at her feet and spun around. "You will all PAY for what you did!"

Before anyone could react, a powerful energy blast was fired. Quattro was the only one who didn't flinch away from the view, and she had to admit, the large onrushing wave of energy was massively impressive. Seeing it carve the land up as the size expanded, the Mazoku-possessed cyborg had to admit, she was impressed.

And partially scared and even a bit excited. 'That power...' Her eyes widened. 'It can't be...' She remembered this power, no wonder it was so familiar to her.

"Dammit, Dieci!" Tre yelled as she punched Dieci in the jaw, causing her to spin and stun her long enough for Tre to punch her berserk sister in the gut, knocking her out. "You'll destroy the planet if you're not careful."

"I think she did." Nove stared at the destruction. Her eyes widened as she saw magma start to bubble up in the distance. "What the hell?!"

Quattro tapped her ear piece twice. "Uno, I think it's time for a pick-up."

Sein looked at Dieci with worry as she picked up her sister's gun. She hoped that Dieci would be okay. She took a look at Nove and frowned slightly as Nove had a scared look on her face, before vowing to talk to Nove about what she saw.

It wouldn't be good for Dieci if her sisters were afraid of her.

A moment later, the five of them completely disappeared from the planet.

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by Craxuan

I don't really understand it myself. I don't have any criticism, nor do I have any praises to give except that the stories' good. Perhaps this is what you call perfection? A state of balance?

Well... I could say that the Hayate here seemed less... motivated. I don't remember whether Rein died (Which could be a factor, or else), but she doesn't seem the kind to back down if it's for someone else. I get a feeling she'll continue on even with an empty husk as long as her life meant something for someone.

Spoiler for spoiler for the story:

I tried to find a medium for poor Hayate--she really deserves her chance to get away from it all, but I hadn't wanted to kill the Wolkenritter off for her to do so. And so having Hayate fall into a coma to get her dreamless sleep and yet keep the Wolkies alive was the best scenario I can think of in terms of keeping the casualty rate down .

And it's also like what I said to yui--"Sleeping At Last" really should have come at the end of a long, multi-chapter story showing Hayate's misery . So you're not wrong in that it seems a little left-field for Hayate to be so down in a one-shot .

Originally Posted by ninryu

Why do I have a feeling all the great authors decided to jump on the "Soul Crashngly Depressing" train?

Originally Posted by Shigan

My soul purpose in this thread is to get at least deathcurse off that train. -_-

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

You might as well give up now. deathcurse is the train.

Originally Posted by Shigan

Don't write my skills as a happy-maker off! Given alcohol, a computer and some mango pudding, I'll out-happy any therapist!

Besides, I'm only concerned about the HxV Files, the rest of deathcurse's writing is her own to um... write.

Alcohol? Computer? Mango pudding? For me?

I'm trying to behave for the HxV Files ..........trying.........that counts, right?

Originally Posted by ninryu

I doubt it is even possible for her to write a happy ending.

Originally Posted by Tiresias

It's cute how people here are currently seeing "DOOM!" everywhere just because of a one-shot, even moreso when one remembers that from the looks of it DC's trying her best to suppress her true nature and give HxV a happy ending

Besides, some of her stories did end happily. Just look at this one!

*snickers at the choice of fic*

I do write happy endings! Well, if I consider them happy from my perspective (a suffering character gets to die peacefully...or someone sacrifices their life to save someone else and is happy about it.....), those count, right????

*hears cricket sounds*

Originally Posted by Eagle8819

...I would actually try making the train speed up more.

My partner in crime!

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

I figure that's why "Prerogative of the Brave" chapters take so much time for her to write. It's so unnatural for her to write things that are funny and which lead towards a successful love confession!

Tell me about it! I start outlining detailed scenes, and after a while go "Wait, Vivio is supposed to succeed in doing X.....so, er, that last half-page has to go!"

[Craxuan]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

I do write happy endings! Well, if I consider them happy from my perspective (a suffering character gets to die peacefully...or someone sacrifices their life to save someone else and is happy about it.....), those count, right????

They really do count... After reading Narcissu just now, I can only say that. They really, really do...

[GonzoTheAnimeFan]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Spoiler for Blood That Flows - Peak - Four PT3:

Nove blinked as she, Sein, Dieci, Tre and Quattro appeared on a hill just to the outside of a small farming village. "So..."

"See what you can find out." Tre said as she wrapped her gray, hooded traveler's cloak around her body more. She had to admit, Due was right, this cloak was kind of nice, since it kept the high winds from pushing their hair against their faces.

Dieci adjusted the bandaged package against her back. "Nove and I can search the village below."

Tre nodded and looked at the mountain. "Sein and I will check out those mountains there." The blue-green-haired cyborg perked up at that. "Quattro?"

"Might as well go with Nove and Dieci." Quattro shrugged as Tre nodded, grabbed Sein and flew off into the distance. "Ugh... Those two..." Really, feeling raw excitement from Sein was not the feelings she expected to feel. What was Sein going to do on that trip anyway? Fondle Tre worse than usual?

(---)

Sein fought the urge to sneeze as her hands were phased through Tre's outfit and rubbing the taller cyborg's back. 'Where did that come from?'

Tre just rolled her eyes as she flew the two of them to the mountain. If Sein was grabbing more than just her back, she would have let the girl go.

Even if Sein's fingers working her back muscles did feel nice.

(---)

Nove looked at Dieci as the two walked through town. "So, any idea what we should ask?"

Dieci shook her head and looked at Nove's feet. "Roller blades?" She didn't train too much with Nove, as she was more long-range bombardment rather than close-range and thus Tre didn't train her much.

Nove shrugged at her. "If Tre-nee trained you more, you'd know that my roller blades help me move on my Airliner more."

"Ah." Dieci nodded at her sister. "You know that I'm more long-range support than close-range combat. I could stand to sit in on some of your training though."

"I guess so. But, I've seen your shots. Weren't you complaining about them being too powerful to the doctor the other day?" Nove looked at Dieci, who grimaced at that.

"Yes. I'm worried that I won't be able to keep my shots contained anymore soon."

Nove nodded and the two turned a corner in the village, only for Dieci to nearly run a small boy over. "Dieci, you okay?"

"I'm fine." She nodded as Nove helped her stand up fully. "Are you okay?" She knelt down to help the boy up and inspected him. "You're not hurt, are you?" Cinque had taken her time to drill politeness into each of her sisters and when knocking someone over when not fighting them without making sure that they were okay was both rude and mean.

"I'm okay." The child smiled as he stood up. "You're pretty, lady!"

Dieci's eyes widened and she felt her face heating up from that statement. "I, uh, thank you, huh?" She blinked as the boy gave her a flower.

"Mama says that you should always give a nice person a flower." He smiled brightly before running off and waving to the two.

Nove fought it, she really did, but she couldn't help the small grin that came to her face. "Looks like you made a friend."

"He called me pretty..." Dieci looked at Nove, her face completely red. "What am I supposed to say?"

Nove sweat-dropped. "Uh... I have no clue, it's not like we're called pretty by random people all the time." It was probably the only time that Nove wished that Cinque had taught them more with how to deal with people.

Then again, Cinque didn't seem to know very much either, but she was trying her best.

"Come on." Nove shook her head as they walked into town. "Let's see if anyone says anything."

"About what?" Dieci asked as she readjusted her cannon.

"I don't know, anything weird. Couldn't hurt, right?" Nove looked back and Dieci and grimaced slightly. She didn't dislike her family, they were interesting, even if she didn't spend much time with Uno, who was busy with Jail a lot, or Quattro, who was more interested in Lutecia, but they were her family and she enjoyed them.

No, what she disliked was how short she was. Sure, she had a nice pair of breasts, something Sein and Wendi commented on whenever they decided to grope her in the baths, and a nice butt, which, again, those two liked to comment on whenever they decided it was time for family fondling. But other than Cinque, Nove had to look up to see anyone in the eyes. She only hoped that at least one of the remaining three sisters were at least her height.

The only solace that Nove took from being short was that Quattro never made comments to her like she did to Tre.

She wasn't sure why Quattro felt the need to make fun of Tre for having large breasts and a big rear end, but Nove was sure Tre didn't appreciate it.

"You okay?" Dieci looked at Nove. "You spaced out for a second there."

"Sorry, just grumbling about how it's not fair that I have to look up to everyone other than Cinque to see their faces."

Dieci giggled softly and hugged Nove from behind. "At least it's you and not Sein or Wendi. I know you won't take advantage of your height like that."

Nove sighed, even as she felt Dieci's breasts push against her head. "Thanks, Dieci."

"Hey! You hear about that new mine that was discovered two days ago?" The two blinked as they over-heard an older man talking to another man as they walked down the street. "I wonder who built it."

"Yeah, I heard about it, heard that there was some big doors blocking the way in."

Dieci let go of Nove and walked over to them. "Excuse me." The men turned to look at her. "What new mine?"

"Heh," the taller of the two, though that was all Dieci could tell, since they looked practically the same, where they brothers? "Well, there was a mine discovered in the mountains just to the South of town. Weird thing is, there's these doors that are blocking the way in."

Dieci nodded to him. "Thank you." She turned to Nove and nodded and the two ran off.

(---)

Quattro raised an eyebrow as she saw Dieci and Nove run, well, Nove was rollerblading, towards her. "Well?"

"Looks like there's a mine to the South here." Nove pointed towards the mountains not too far from the village. "Maybe it's there?"

Quattro nodded and turned towards the mountains before tapping her ear. "Hey, Tre, you there?"

"I think we found a door."

"That's nice, it's probably what we're looking for." Quattro turned to Nove and Dieci and nodded, before grabbing Dieci and the three took off into the air, Nove on her Airliner, as she had no real flight abilities of her own.

(---)

Minutes later...

Sein grinned as she popped through the doors, pulling Tre and Quattro with her. Nove and Dieci had been told to wait outside, to keep people from investigating too much. Just in case this was the place they were looking for. "Do you think the doctor will ever let us go on missions after this one's done?" She turned to Tre, who nodded.

"Very likely. He seems driven to do something." What, Tre wasn't sure, but she had overheard Jail talking to three people, and from what she had seen, which was very little, they looked like brains in jars. Something about creating weapons against those Mazoku he warned them about awhile ago.

Tre wasn't sure if he was talking about her and the rest of her sisters, but, deep down, a part of her ached at the thought of being nothing but a weapon.

Even so, she could ignore it. She had a job to do.

Quattro merely snorted as she walked behind Tre and Sein. 'That foolish doctor, to think he can fight against Mazoku when he can't notice the one under his nose.' Her shoulders shook with amusement as she pulled up a holographic screen in front of her fingertips. "Well, it looks like the doctor was right." She smiled as the two turned to her. "This is one of those sites."

"Good, let's hope that whatever it is he's looking for is here." Tre nodded to Quattro.

"Hmm... How much did he have left to get?" Sein asked as they walked down the hallway.

"Spear and the Heart." Tre answered for her. She turned a corner and her eyes widened as the next step she took nearly sent her flying off the edge. "...Seems shorter than most."

"Looks like this is an abandoned missile silo." Quattro muttered, frowning as her hacking of the computer systems revealed that not only were there none of the "megahs" that she wanted, there were also no missiles stored here anymore. "Let's just see if its worth our time."

"Gimme a second and I'll find out." Sein grinned as Tre grabbed her and the two disappeared into a purple flash.

Quattro narrowed her eyes as she looked at the schematics. 'Seriously, a missile silo in here? When there's no missiles around?' Growling, she slammed an open palm on the holo keyboard. "This is SO aggravating!"

"FOUND IT!" She heard Sein's voice pick up and waited for the two to reappear in front of her.

"Found what?" Quattro blinked at what Sein had in her hand. "A stick?"

"Actually, it was a sword down there." Sein blinked and gaped as the end shifted and changed into a pointed blade. "...This thing can change forms?" She yelped as the blade shot off the stick and went straight for Quattro's head. "EEEK!"

Quattro twisted and fell to the ground as the blade soared right through where her body was a moment ago. "What the hell? Trying to kill me?"

Sein shook her head. "Sorry, didn't mean to."

Tre shook her head and frowned at Sein. "Be careful. If you can't keep it from firing prematurely, you probably shouldn't be squeezing it so hard."

"Tre, Sein, Quattro, I need help! NOW!"

The three blinked as they heard Nove's voice over the comm-link.

"Nove?" Tre tapped her ear piece. "What's wrong?"

"It's Dieci! Calm down, dammit!"

The three blinked as they looked at each other in confusion, before Tre grabbed them, activated her IS and rushed for the doors.

(---)

As they phased through the doors, Quattro could only stare at the scene in front of her. Dieci on her knees crying was something new, but that wasn't what impressed her.

The entire landscape around them was covered in craters, mountains were missing and even the rivers to the distance were gone. "What the hell?"

Nove looked at her. "Right after you three disappeared, this... This army, two of them, showed up and started fighting... And... One of them blew up the village we were in a little bit ago."

"She destroyed everything because of that?" Quattro raised an eyebrow.

"That boy... He... He got killed because of them." Dieci sobbed while Nove rubbed her back and hugged her. "I... I had to... Make them... pay." Dieci suddenly pushed Nove away and grabbed her gun, which had been right at her feet and spun around. "You will all PAY for what you did!"

Before anyone could react, a powerful energy blast was fired. Quattro was the only one who didn't flinch away from the view, and she had to admit, the large onrushing wave of energy was massively impressive. Seeing it carve the land up as the size expanded, the Mazoku-possessed cyborg had to admit, she was impressed.

And partially scared and even a bit excited. 'That power...' Her eyes widened. 'It can't be...' She remembered this power, no wonder it was so familiar to her.

"Dammit, Dieci!" Tre yelled as she punched Dieci in the jaw, causing her to spin and stun her long enough for Tre to punch her berserk sister in the gut, knocking her out. "You'll destroy the planet if you're not careful."

"I think she did." Nove stared at the destruction. Her eyes widened as she saw magma start to bubble up in the distance. "What the hell?!"

Quattro tapped her ear piece twice. "Uno, I think it's time for a pick-up."

Sein looked at Dieci with worry as she picked up her sister's gun. She hoped that Dieci would be okay. She took a look at Nove and frowned slightly as Nove had a scared look on her face, before vowing to talk to Nove about what she saw.

It wouldn't be good for Dieci if her sisters were afraid of her.

A moment later, the five of them completely disappeared from the planet.

Yikes. Dieci on a rampage? And how the hell was a demon inside her...?

QUATTRO!

[Shigan]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

Alcohol? Computer? Mango pudding? For me?

I'm trying to behave for the HxV Files ..........trying.........that counts, right?

*looks up from her stash of cognac and mango pudding she's been stuffing her own face with*

Um... sure! ^^;

You do realize that you don't have to give Prerogative a happy ending of the generic sort filled with fluff and romantic dreams per se xD. You only need to bring them to the point where they decide to give the relationship a shot, you can still stuff them full of insecurities and doubts if you want to lol. They -do- have four years to resolve those between our stories.

[RadiantBeam]

Solution is now up and running on "Shadowfire".

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by Shigan

*looks up from her stash of cognac and mango pudding she's been stuffing her own face with*

Um... sure! ^^;

You do realize that you don't have to give Prerogative a happy ending of the generic sort filled with fluff and romantic dreams per se xD. You only need to bring them to the point where they decide to give the relationship a shot, you can still stuff them full of insecurities and doubts if you want to lol. They -do- have four years to resolve those between our stories.

Friends share!

LOL, I really don't mind writing happy stuff as much as I pretend to be . It's just...trickier , to be sure.

The trouble really is that I'm getting all kinds of bunnies for other Hayate x Vivio fics, some of which take place during these teenage years before and after "Prerogative of the Brave" . Which is making it distracting when I'm trying to write Chapter 5....

[RadiantBeam]

Sometimes I wonder if I mentored you just a little too well, DC.

[sniperk]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Sometimes I wonder if I mentored you just a little too well, DC.

I knew someone was to blame.

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Sometimes I wonder if I mentored you just a little too well, DC.

......I didn't mean to say that my plot bunnies are all tragic!

*twiddles thumbs* I mean....some of them are.....

But not all of them!

Originally Posted by sniperk

I knew someone was to blame.

I had a good teacher, what can I say?

[00-Raiser]

Problem with doing too much tradgey is that it sometimes feels like a cheap way to invoke emotions in the reader. May also seem like the author is trying to be seen as more deep and edgy then it really is *coughmadokacough*. It can be particularly bad if an author thinks things have to end tradgically and will write the fic as such even if the story doesn't call for it. Say, if a fluffy romantic comedy ends with the couple being hit by a truck. Such a development would be completely out of place and inappropriate.