2011-10-21, 23:23 | Link #3801 | |
Senior Member
Join Date: Sep 2011
|
Quote:
Right now I'm trying to write Ran's part. Any suggestions on things I can improve with my writing style? |
|
2011-10-22, 01:54 | Link #3806 |
I am no one
Join Date: Apr 2010
Location: Inside your head
|
Of topic, but I'm addicted again to Homeworld series right now, so there's no draft...
Anyway, anyone having ANY idea how real armed forces works? Especially the logistic and budget. I'm in need of help. EDIT: I always thought Max is cake eater... and I was right.
__________________
|
2011-10-22, 02:17 | Link #3810 |
Titans Test Team Pilot
Join Date: Feb 2008
Location: The Elysium
|
Everytime I read the 1st day scenes of Eratas' SWC fic.
This plays in my mind Also, Chapter 6 is slowly progressing. Intro-ing the Silver Gospel amidst the drone shenanigans is quite puzzling.
__________________
|
2011-10-22, 02:29 | Link #3811 | |
Senior Member
Join Date: Sep 2011
|
Quote:
EDIT: Wait, Is the Silverio Gospel in your fic a drone or piloted by Natasha? |
|
2011-10-22, 02:44 | Link #3812 | |
Titans Test Team Pilot
Join Date: Feb 2008
Location: The Elysium
|
Quote:
Here's part of the conversation the characters had in the early parts of Chapter 6: Spoiler for scene:
__________________
|
|
2011-10-22, 03:20 | Link #3814 |
Senior Member
Join Date: Sep 2011
|
@ Meister and Zero - Okay, here's Irish's. Read and review.
Side note - He'll be less of a prick in this chapter, it's because he tends to get along well enough with Tatenashi later. Spoiler:
Writers block is annoying. Last edited by Eratas123; 2011-10-22 at 04:49. |
2011-10-22, 04:48 | Link #3815 |
Just another Idiot
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Delusion world
|
@StratoSpear
If somehow Inami is able to keep up with Silver Gospel's speed without special equalizer, it is time to review Minerva. Minerva should not be more powerful than 4th Gen Akatsubaki (being a new unit which nobody in the world has data on and I think it haven't reach it's full potential).
__________________
|
2011-10-22, 04:59 | Link #3816 | |
Titans Test Team Pilot
Join Date: Feb 2008
Location: The Elysium
|
Quote:
Spoiler for scene:
As it is now, even with the Vanguard unit equipped, the Minerva can barely match the Byakushiki's speed, let alone the Akatsubaki. As for firepower, the Silver Gospel will be the first genuine IS that the Minerva will face. While the Minerva is equipped with barrier-penetration weapons, its defenses aren't as strong as a typical 3rd Gen IS. We'll have to see how it goes
__________________
|
|
2011-10-22, 05:04 | Link #3817 | |
Senior Member
Join Date: Sep 2011
|
Quote:
|
|
2011-10-22, 05:20 | Link #3818 | |
Titans Test Team Pilot
Join Date: Feb 2008
Location: The Elysium
|
Quote:
And he held back, which is why the Uchiganes overpowered him so easily. (He doesn't really wanna hurt the girls either but that's just a minor factor) Hard to know how he'll fair in a real combat against genuine IS units. As I said before, the Silver Gospel will be Minerva's first real IS opponent. Granted, most of Minerva's arsenal are built for superior barrier penetration/attenuation. However, under continuous direct fire, the Minerva's barrier can only last half as long as a 3rd Gen IS energy barrier defense. (This is portrayed in Chapter 2, where the Minerva sustained physical armor damage after tanking a barrage of laser fire from a berserking drone unit) ...And I have yet to factor in the ambiguous 'Karin' system that the Minerva acquired in Chapter 5.
__________________
|
|
Tags |
fanfic ideas, fanfiction, ff.net, harem, is fanfic, warning fanfic spoilers, wincest |
Thread Tools | |
|
|