Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion (second reincarnation)

[Comartemis]

Awesome! Nice to have you onboard, Keroko!

Alright, now there are two distinct paths in the timeline that I've considered taking. The first is the one I've already mentioned, where Nanoha gets pushed back a few years and takes place before Negima canon while StrikerS takes place during Negima canon.

The other, more recent idea I've had, is to completely merge everything up to the Magic World arc into Classic and the S1-S2 timeskip, with Nanoha, Suzuka, and Arisa all being some of the younger members of class 2-A/3-A. The timelines fit together almost perfectly, with most of the major events of both Nanoha and Negima taking place in spring-summer of 2005. I still need to work the details out on how to merge the two timelines together and how they affect each other, but I think if I pull this off I'll be able to make something really awesome out of Classic and A's.

[Keroko]

Hmm, for the second idea it would probably be better if we let the first two seasons run their course, and change course after that. The easiest move would be having the gang go from Seishou Elementary to Mahora, instead of the school they went to canonicaly after A's.

[Comartemis]

Better idea; Mahora is an elevator school with multiple grade levels in the same school; Nanoha and company can attend elementary school there right from the start, then graduate into 2-A/3-A after A's. Simply having Classic and A's occur as normal largely cuts out all need for Alex to show up early on, and I'd like to keep him a part of the action from the start like I had originally planned.

Incidentally, Kero, do you have a profile written up for the Negima version of Keroko?

[Keroko]

However, inserting all the cast to Mahora from the start creates trouble to let the Jewel Seed/Yami no Sho case happen, as Fate would have been pwned by the mage population from the start, and the Lieze twins would have a lot more trouble with the aditional crew popping up. Even Eva would want to stop a doomsday device, and that is not mentioning the rest of the school's mages, including AAA+ ranked Takamichi.

Heck, it would seriously screw over any chance at contact with the TSAB, and would need so much rewriting that its no longer a fusion fic, but a simple 'let's insert Nanoha characters into the Negima world' fic.

And no profile yet, I'll have to rewrite a thing or two before she's fit for comacanon anyway, as the current draft has the Barrier of the Saint King. Obviously a no-go.

[Comartemis]

Hmmm.... well if we screw around with the timelines and put Nanoha a year or two before Negima again, most of the mages wouldn't be present to screw around with Fate and the Book of Darkness. Eva still has the Infernus Scholasticus curse to deal with, so the only powers she really has while under the curse are her martial arts and her strings. Of course if we're doing this two years before Negima canon instead of ten years, then Chao is around and Chachamaru's probably at least in her development stage. Takamichi is still a problem, but not an insurmountable one.

I figure Eva at full power to be at least SS-rank, if not an outright SSS with a magic specialization similar to Hayate, namely ice and dark magic. Jack Rakan and the Ala Rubra would be mainly S-ranks and higher, and Fate Averruncus would be, without question, SS-rank at minimum. Negi at the start of the series would be something like a high B-rank, approaching AA-rank during Mahorafest and S+ after his training with Rakan.

[Keroko]

'most of the mages wouldn't be present?' Of course they would be. Heck, the most powerfull of them at that point in time are present, them being all the school teachers. Fate doesn't stand a chance against an army of mages like that, and even the Wolkies would not be able to gather cores that easilly. No, letting the first two seasons run their course and 'kerokanon' Alex into them is a lot easier then this idea. It lays down the ground base of the world and allows for an easier fusion, rather then a forced insertion with lots of illogical points.

[Comartemis]

*Ponders and paces*

Yes, I'd forgotten most of the teachers were mages, not just Takamichi. That does create a few rather large problems. Further, there's the differences between the magic systems that need to be worked out. Western Magic seems to place a larger degree of importance on incantations than Mid or Belkan magic does, so maybe the difference is as simple as more power in all areas in exchange for longer casting times?

...hmmm...

When you say "Kerokanon Alex into them", what exactly do you mean?

[Keroko]

Character insert him into the first two seasons the same way I did Keroko.

Now, the magic systems is easilly solved. Chrono did say there were 891 documented classes of magic, however, note that nearly all spells in Negima are elemental based, even in the Mid system, elemental spells require an incantation if one lacks an ellemental conversion abillity.

Spoiler for Negima spoilers:

And yes, longer incantation seems to equal more power, Camo even says so during the Negi/Chao fight "Chao's spell is more powerfull, but Negi's incantation is faster" or something along those lines.

[Comartemis]

Character insert him into the first two seasons the same way I did Keroko.

...that's kinda what I'd been doing right from the start, Kero. The problem is that I was planning on using Eva to balance the scales in S1 and force the Lieze twins to take action more often in A's to keep him from tipping the scales in favor of Nanoha and company both times.

[Keroko]

S1 is easilly solved, if you check the anime its Nanoha's wish to fight with Fate. just let Alex but heads with Arf, let him support Yuuno. A's is harder, concidering its very easy to break up the duel theme (that was my biggest stumbleblock prior to Tesla's creation) but throwing in the Liezes to occupy him sounds like a plan too.

[Kha]

*smells the acrid waft of burnt posts*

...god what is with this warzone?!

*surveys the damage and sighs*

What to do... Satte...

*stretches, takes a deep breath, and...*



Comar, I hope you don't mind me saying that finally the Negiha timeline is starting to make sense. I was opposed to the idea at first because it was rather jarring to canon, in that several aspect of Negimagic directly contravened (lol-timetravel just being one of them) the Nanohexes. And with emphasis of story being different, a different group of administration, a greater world I still haven't had a grasp yet (I'm 100 chapters behind I reckon. ), daemons that don't kill 'em all... I needed a lot more than bone-jarring theories to be sold.

The latest round of discussions seemed to have ironed out some of the major kinks, though frankly I'm still skeptical of having the Negiverse on Earth itself. It was a problem that prevented me from expanding a possible link between Library Island and the Infinite Library, as it was possible that the Infinite Library was infinite because it could've had space-slips joining every library out there. Not only just Library Island, stuff like Fushigi Yuugi, The Neverending Story, Read Or Die, all can be accessed theoretically by stretching this theory to its limits. However, all of them have too many unique rules making them hard to incorporate directly.

My $0.02:

Let's leave the other worlds out for now. Focus on one thing at a time, and fix Negiha. From my 40K experience, I found it better to look at the Nanoverse, see where could the elements of the world that inspired you can come in, then make the other world fit into the Nanoverse. And be humble yet stubborn about it.

Oh and avoid using me as a shield. I took flak for supposedly causing you to "careen out of control" by allowing a crossover to take place, when I only later realized that actual crossovers that smell more of the other universe than Nanoha was actually not welcome even in AU. I spent too much time battling pairing-created AUs to notice.

Though you made me realize how much headache I must've caused when I first started out randomly inserting ideas into fanon itself. I guess I was lucky I did that at a time where OC was still the Wild Wild West. I do hope 5th Ed will fix this and not cause more trouble like the real 40K 5th ed.

And I would like to thank Dkellis for looking at things so rationally. I hope you don't mind me saying, but I still believe some of what you think is erm... overly robotic... () But if you hadn't forced me to take a step back and see what the hell is going on (and register Comar's apology about that phrase), I wonder would I be able to make this post and be slightly swayed.


Comar, you still have more selling to do if you want to convince fully on this. Once you have the major issues cleared up, get banging. At least this is the tactic I'm using Rebuilt.

And for the parting shot, Negima Keroko is around? Should I throw Kouya (the Negima Cleric, though not as thought out as Kha) in as well?

Your call Comar.

And don't let me interrupt the current flow of thought.

[tshouryuu]

Comar, just my $0.02, but don't expect others to help you patch up your holes. Most people are a selfish very practical bunch. For example, if I can patch your holes, what's stopping me from creating my own similar canon with problems fixed if I'm incline to do so? Think about it a little.

People will only offer help, suggestions, patches etc... only if they are truly interested in what you're doing. Else they will point out to you where are all the problems and its up to you to fix them. This is, in my opinion, called helping and what you except is what I would label as spoon feeding (I can't think of a more polite word).

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Even in my creepy chapter, I need to remember some humor.

Spoiler for Crash protests doing something that's NOT his job.:

-snip-

Heheheh...

"He's older then you, you know."

"So is Vita. Doesn't make any difference to me."

Hayate owns. XD

Originally Posted by Kha

As for the rest, AYE for favor!!!

*wonders if Keroko hears him from this thread*

I hear.

Originally Posted by PhoenixFlare

All right, I manage to finish the next chapter today, and it's passed all betas (sorta ), so I'm going to post it now. Here goes the Bluecheesium of the Day!

Mahou Shoujo Lyrical Nanoha GuardianS

Yee gods, how do you manage to turn out the Bluecheesium bombs time and time again?

I loved it. TeslaXGriffith, YuunoXNanoha with a great touch of drama, definetely among my favourite chapters.

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Macross Frontier is crack I tell you! CRACK!!

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What happens when Nanoha has two people fighting for her attention?

Spoiler for Your Attention Please:

"Nanoha!"

The brunette turns around, finding her Fate jogging down the hall to catch up with her. "Ah, Fate-chan."

"Ne, what are you doing tonight, Nanoha?"

"Tonight?" she questions. "Um, nothing much I think..."

That brought a smile to the blond's face. "Great! Do you want to go out for dinner tonight?"

"Mmm...that sounds ni-"

"Nanoha-chan!"

Before she can finish her sentence, she feels someone hugging her from behind. She quickly regains her balance to find Hayate smile at her. "Hayate-chan?"

"Do you want to go out shopping after we get off?"

"Um, well..."

"Hey!" That got the attention of the pair, "I asked her first, Hayate."

The short-haired girl released her hold and stepped forward. "Ah, but she hasn't given you an answer yet, has she?"

"She was going to before you so abruptly interrupted!" Fate firmly states.

"Then she hasn't committed yet, ne Nanoha-chan?"

By now Nanoha was a bit confused, if not slightly embarrassed by the entire situation. It was bad enough that they were a floor above the main lobby and everyone below could see and hear them. "Er..."

Hoping to end it in her favor, Hayate latches onto the reluctant girl's arm and grins. "C'mon, Nanoha-chan~ It'll be fun!"

Fate's eye twitched as she watched. It had taken her a good portion of the day to find this restaurant and she wasn't about to give up so easily. The gears turned as she tried to find a way to come out on top. Then she noticed the song that was coming from the lobby's speakers. A smirk came to her lips as a plan started to form.

Let me know what you want, I would give you!
How fantastic to be with you. My love!

Nanoha and Hayate both turned to Fate as she started to sing. It was so sudden and out of the blue that neither knew what to think as they watched Fate pretend to hold a microphone as she made her way towards the brunette.

Darlin' chikadzuite fujuu?

With a shove, Hayate suddenly found herself separated from Nanoha and Fate having pinned the brunette against the railing. Her surprised changed to irritation as she noticed the blond's hand caressing the girl's side.

NO YOU, NO LIFE nantsutte mou zettai!

Nanoha didn't know what to do. She had no place to go as Fate teasing waved a finger in front of her face as she sang. By now they were extremely close, which was not helping her trying to control her heated cheeks.

need your heart & need your love
OH YES!! SWEET de KISS!

This was definitely not helping Hayate's situation. She wasn't going to lose this. Seeing only one way to get Nanoha's attention, she began to sing.

nokkacchatteru koi demo GO!

That got both of their attention. Fate was especially surprised that Hayate started singing.

mou ikkai nante nai kara Exciting
Wonderful! Charming you!

It was not fates turn to watch as Hayate grabbed Nanoha's attention away from her. Her look of surprise turned stern as she heard Nanoha whisper Hayate's name.

GET shitai kara rarara
We'll sing around the world

There was no way fate was going to let Hayate steal the show. This was her idea to begin with and she wasn't going to be step down, stepping in during the musical break of the song. Seeing what Fate was going, Hayate was quick to get in before her.

3. Hey, I count down.

Hayate forms a triangle with her thumbs and index fingers, centering her gaze through them on Nanoha who was quite red by now. Then Fate stepped in.

2. Are you ready?

She raised her hand and waves two fingers at Nanoha who was backed against the railing, Fate to her left and Hayate to her right. She was desperately trying to figure out what brought this about as the two girls suddenly began to sing together

1. mou matenai yo
0. ai, narashite!

Both girls went back to back in front of Nanoha as they sang, bodies rocking to the beat of the song. They flashed Nanoha a smile as they moved, with Fate blowing her a kiss.

What 'bout my star?
What 'bout my star?

Not missing a beat, the girls parted and extended their arms towards Nanoha.

What 'bout my star?
What 'bout my star?

The scene was not overlooked by the people below. By now everyone was staring up at the group. Some were wondering what was going on while others were enjoying the singing.

What 'bout my star?

"Hey, aren't those the three Aces?"

"That's Cpt. Takamachi, isn't it?"

What 'bout my star?

"Oh wow, I didn't know Cpt. Harlaown could sing so well!"

"Un, and Cpt. Yagami is pretty good, too."

What 'bout my star?

The song ended, leaving the two girls locked on the now extremely embarassed Nanoha.

"So, Nanoha," began Fate.

"What shall it be?" finished Hayate.

Nanoha looked at the two and silently pleaded to whoever was listening to save her. Sadly her prayers went unanswered, leaving her alone to answer their question.

I saw the youtube of that (still have to watch Macross itself), but the scene is awesome. HayaNanoFate is so rare in fandom, strangely enough.

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Though when I think of Atlantis, I think of another sunken city.

Ph'nglui mglw'nafh Cthulhu R'lyeh wgah'nagl fhtagn.

Cthulu mythos. Gotta love it. :3

Originally Posted by Kha

Comar, I hope you don't mind me saying that finally the Negiha timeline is starting to make sense. I was opposed to the idea at first because it was rather jarring to canon, in that several aspect of Negimagic directly contravened (lol-timetravel just being one of them) the Nanohexes. And with emphasis of story being different, a different group of administration, a greater world I still haven't had a grasp yet (I'm 100 chapters behind I reckon. ), daemons that don't kill 'em all... I needed a lot more than bone-jarring theories to be sold.

You should catch up, its worth it.

Spoiler for Negima spoilers:

Timetravel is actually concidered 'impossible' in Negima canon as well. Chao just has the advantage of coming from the future, where technollogy is several centuries (if not milenia, we don't know just how far from the future Chao is) more advanced. Plus, she needed the magic of the World Tree, which is arguably a Lost Logia level magic source.

Originally Posted by Kha

The latest round of discussions seemed to have ironed out some of the major kinks, though frankly I'm still skeptical of having the Negiverse on Earth itself. It was a problem that prevented me from expanding a possible link between Library Island and the Infinite Library, as it was possible that the Infinite Library was infinite because it could've had space-slips joining every library out there. Not only just Library Island, stuff like Fushigi Yuugi, The Neverending Story, Read Or Die, all can be accessed theoretically by stretching this theory to its limits. However, all of them have too many unique rules making them hard to incorporate directly.

Library Island was stated to have been man-made, though.

Originally Posted by Kha

And for the parting shot, Negima Keroko is around? Should I throw Kouya (the Negima Cleric, though not as thought out as Kha) in as well?

I'm currently attempting to fix her so she can remain as she is, yet contradict as less Nanohaverse canon as possible.

Originally Posted by tshouryuu

Comar, just my $0.02, but don't expect others to help you patch up your holes. Most people are a selfish very practical bunch. For example, if I can patch your holes, what's stopping me from creating my own similar canon with problems fixed if I'm incline to do so? Think about it a little.

'cause its more fun creating something together then go and play on your own. I could have ignored Comacanon and keep playing in my own Negimaverse sandbox, but this is much more fun.

Originally Posted by tshouryuu

People will only offer help, suggestions, patches etc... only if they are truly interested in what you're doing. Else they will point out to you where are all the problems and its up to you to fix them. This is, in my opinion, called helping and what you except is what I would label as spoon feeding (I can't think of a more polite word).

Hmm, I myself am not to fond of that. Sure, I may point out a flaw or two without a viable solution, but more often then not I attempt to help fix the effort if I think I have the solution. If everyone keeps saying 'this is wrong' then that can drive people away because they don't know what they should do to satisfy the critics. You don't have to spoonfeed them, but simply saying 'you should look at this and this more closely, try that source' helps milions more then simply saying 'no, thats wrong according to this' and leave it at that.

Just my € 0,02.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Keroko

You should catch up, its worth it.

Spoiler for Negima spoilers:

Timetravel is actually concidered 'impossible' in Negima canon as well. Chao just has the advantage of coming from the future, where technollogy is several centuries (if not milenia, we don't know just how far from the future Chao is) more advanced. Plus, she needed the magic of the World Tree, which is arguably a Lost Logia level magic source.

I know... Need to find time from studying and leveling.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Library Island was stated to have been man-made, though.

Strange things happen whenever too much magic gather in one spot for too long. :3

Originally Posted by Keroko

I'm currently attempting to fix her so she can remain as she is, yet contradict as less Nanohaverse canon as possible.

If Coma is willing to let Nodoka pick up a stray puppy found within the Library before the events of Negima, I could work on the rest too.

Originally Posted by Keroko

'cause its more fun creating something together then go and play on your own. I could have ignored Comacanon and keep playing in my own Negimaverse sandbox, but this is much more fun.

...me too.

Though I least expected to activate Kouya of Negiverse via a Nanoha OC thread.

[Sheba]

I find myself more pride to figure out things by myself from reading book, wikipedia and internet articles, or watching documentaries. One of the "Eureka" moments that comes during the process of worldbuilding.

[Kha]

Seems rather non-fandomy when you look at that strictly.

And I've done totally in-universe fanwork before, just that never realized the fun of referencing till after first post, so I got ma creds already.

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Kha

I know... Need to find time from studying and leveling.

I've been abandoning leveling in favor of writing and editting lately.

Originally Posted by Kha

Strange things happen whenever too much magic gather in one spot for too long. :3

True, but I'm not sure linking these two libraries is a good idea.

Originally Posted by Kha

If Coma is willing to let Nodoka pick up a stray puppy found within the Library before the events of Negima, I could work on the rest too.

Stray puppy? Is Kouya of the same species as Kotarou?

Originally Posted by Kha

...me too.

Though I least expected to activate Kouya of Negiverse via a Nanoha OC thread.

Negima forum's fault for not having an OC thread. Now we get to play with the best of both worlds.

Originally Posted by Sheba

I find myself more pride to figure out things by myself from reading book, wikipedia and internet articles, or watching documentaries. One of the "Eureka" moments that comes during the process of worldbuilding.

And nothing wrong with that. Everyone has their own things they enjoy, I love to work with existing worlds rather then create them.

[Sheba]

This is one of the fictionnal worlds that made me go

The amount of details poured in there is just stunning, at the point to make me swirl.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Keroko

I've been abandoning leveling in favor of writing and editting lately.

No! I must get my pally to 70, for the Greater Good!

Originally Posted by Keroko

True, but I'm not sure linking these two libraries is a good idea.

Yeah I've been debating it ever since...

Originally Posted by Keroko

Stray puppy? Is Kouya of the same species as Kotarou?

They're wolves. ... ()

Same father, different mother. And ever since Kotarou showed up suddenly at Mahora, it is apparent they hate each other's guts.

...and Shou, before you ask, yes, Kouya has trouble with an Oni Summoner from another class who placed a curse on him involving "Osuwari."

No prizes for guessing her name.

But personality wise, Kouya's a bit more cool-headed.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Negima forum's fault for not having an OC thread. Now we get to play with the best of both worlds.

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Sheba

This is one of the fictionnal worlds that made me go

The amount of details poured in there is just stunning, at the point to make me swirl.

Wow... that's just.... wow. So much detail, beautifull rendered maps, even parchment versions, races seperated into categories... even a list which races can interbreed!

Yes, is the right reaction.

Originally Posted by Kha

They're wolves. ... ()

Same father, different mother. And ever since Kotarou showed up suddenly at Mahora, it is apparent they hate each other's guts.

...and Shou, before you ask, yes, Kouya has trouble with an Oni Summoner from another class who placed a curse on him involving "Osuwari."

No prizes for guessing her name.

But personality wise, Kouya's a bit more cool-headed.

As long as he doesn't look like Inuyasha, I'm cool (I never did like his character design).

As for Keroko, while the profile is still in the works, I can leave you with this:

Spoiler for she still likes black: