Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Jimmy C]

Originally Posted by Striker117

It is 6 years after the JS incident and scientific and technological advancement has allowed the TSAB to explore further than ever before. However some complications arose with a neighboring empire and a conflict ensued which quickly escalated into a galactic war. The new enemy was far more technologically advanced as magic users were a rarity among them, this made them superiors in outer atmospheric battles but the TSAB had the upper hand in atmospheric battles. Not much is known about the enemy as the conferences broke down soon after discovering them, it appears they wish to be the supreme power in the galaxy and will do whatever it takes to achieve their goal.

3 years after the wars start it appeared no side would be yielding anytime soon as territory was lost and retaken in and endless cycle. Neither side was any closer to the others capital so apart from military recruitment and rising prices all seems well in the central provinces of TSAB space. Far from the battlefields 3 girls unknown to each other decide to do their part and sign up for the TSAB not knowing that one decision would change their lives more than they could ever imagine.

I've also toyed with pitting the TSAB against an aggressive transdimensional empire. I don't know what details you have planned, but perhaps I can still offer some tips.
From what I can currently see, the TSAB is screwed. Being tech-based, everyone has access to firepower that could match an A-rank mage in destructiveness, if not more. Considering how everyone in every season of Nanoha complains about the lack of capable mages, Bureau forces could be outnumbered 100 to 1 by this empire. And all one hundred of them would be able to command A-rank firepower unlike the 1 mage who would typically be below A-rank.
Next, you've portrayed this empire as desiring to be the supreme power in the galaxy, that means they remember the lessons of war that the TSAB has deliberately forgotten. Which means they will have superior tactics and strategy.
Third, is the Bureau is the only significant adversary this empire currently has? If they are, then this empire can concentrate its forces on destroying the Bureau fleet. That would reduce the Bureau's force-project significantly.
Finally, I look forward to seeing how you care to explain the Bureau's superiority in atmospheric combat. Based on our own, I'd say any civilization with advanced space combat technology should have developed equally advanced air combat technology as well. If you are thinking that a flying mage can be untrackable by anti-air systems, I'm sure our more mil-minded members can shake that notion from you. In fact, I do believe we discussed the possibility of an aerial mage evading a heat-seeking missle a few months ago, the outcome didn't look good for the mage.
I look forward to seeing how you'll deal with these issues.

[Striker117]

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

I've also toyed with pitting the TSAB against an aggressive transdimensional empire. I don't know what details you have planned, but perhaps I can still offer some tips.
From what I can currently see, the TSAB is screwed. Being tech-based, everyone has access to firepower that could match an A-rank mage in destructiveness, if not more. Considering how everyone in every season of Nanoha complains about the lack of capable mages, Bureau forces could be outnumbered 100 to 1 by this empire. And all one hundred of them would be able to command A-rank firepower unlike the 1 mage who would typically be below A-rank.
Next, you've portrayed this empire as desiring to be the supreme power in the galaxy, that means they remember the lessons of war that the TSAB has deliberately forgotten. Which means they will have superior tactics and strategy.
Third, is the Bureau is the only significant adversary this empire currently has? If they are, then this empire can concentrate its forces on destroying the Bureau fleet. That would reduce the Bureau's force-project significantly.
Finally, I look forward to seeing how you care to explain the Bureau's superiority in atmospheric combat. Based on our own, I'd say any civilization with advanced space combat technology should have developed equally advanced air combat technology as well. If you are thinking that a flying mage can be untrackable by anti-air systems, I'm sure our more mil-minded members can shake that notion from you. In fact, I do believe we discussed the possibility of an aerial mage evading a heat-seeking missle a few months ago, the outcome didn't look good for the mage.
I look forward to seeing how you'll deal with these issues.

I can answer two of your questions straight up.
First: The TSAB's atmospheric superiority comes from the fact the enemies in my story use plasma based weaponry, so magic shields and barrier jackets work well in defense. As for missile attacks, in most cases in our world you can't really shake a heat-seeker anyway and usually have to have allies intercept or use decoys. My theory is that if a mage concentrates some magical energy and super heats or overloads it whatever you prefer it over their own body-temp and dumps it in the missiles path then the missile may or may not change target.

Second: As i wrote somewhere in the start of the first chapter "Humans with magical power have almost tripled in number and power" indicating that TSAB forces are also getting a considerable boost to thier forces.

To tell the truth some of the other stuff i'm undecided on, i've thought of many possible outcomes and im weighing the pros and cons of them to see which way ill go but they will be addressed eventually you'll just have to wait and see.

Hope that answers some questions for you.

[Knight of L-sama]

Writing update~

I don't know if I forgot to mention it, so I is mentioning again.

SC2 is up on FF.net up to the third chapter. The ff.net version includes revisions done between when I posted each chapter here and when I posted them on ff.net (so they're a fair bit cleaner, IMO)

Artist!Fate is also similarly edited and posted on ff.net (tho not as edited as SC2)

Linkage:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4504284/...agical_What_If
and
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4502974/...ION_POINT_Fate

[bows... and then runs]

Edit:
@Striker-117 Mikazuki strikes me as a cross between Syn (blue-red heterochromatic smart ass?) and Fate (whose white cape I believe may partially be a sign of her rank rather than being a signature Fate-symbol). She has her own history though, so I reserve judgment beyond that.

Spoiler for More on that:

This line:
Mikazuki hates pants and other than her training uniform wouldn't be caught dead in them.

... Reminded me of Strike Witches, in which all the MCs call panties "pants" and rarely if ever wear anything besides that. (from the torso down at least; they wear shirts and shoes of course) [/advertising]

On the Ch. 1 itself...
I never understood the writer's desire to start with extensive descriptions of what the person is wearing. I understand that what they wear can describe indirectly what kind of person they are, but it's still a very slow way to start any story. =_= (<~skims/skips descriptive paragraphs more often than not)

Also, you may have overused the term "mockingly". It's a not-oft used adverb, so it stands out (to me at least).

A 3-way bunking? *imagines bunk tower* o.o and it's like they lumped all the heterochromatics together in one room? Hmm... Things are going to be tight...

Ooh, and that reminds me, SC2 has it's own storyline separate from SC1 (I'm seriously beginning to doubt that it even qualifies as a sequel) that involves "a neighboring galaxy". I don't believe it's hostile though, so it may not be the same as Strikers-117's world. Ah.. time will tell.

[Evangelion Xgouki]

Originally Posted by Striker117

I can answer two of your questions straight up.
First: The TSAB's atmospheric superiority comes from the fact the enemies in my story use plasma based weaponry, so magic shields and barrier jackets work well in defense.

I'm not sure how this relates specifically to plasma-based weapons. The barriers/shields used by mages already can defend against physical as well as magic assaults (as explained in the manga). How well they can defend would depend on the incoming attack and the abilities of the mage. Like a Rank D mage could defend against normal normal gunt weapons but they can't put enough into their barriers to defend against an artillery-type attack while someone who specializes in defenses like Yuuno could block the attack.

Originally Posted by Striker117

As for missile attacks, in most cases in our world you can't really shake a heat-seeker anyway and usually have to have allies intercept or use decoys. My theory is that if a mage concentrates some magical energy and super heats or overloads it whatever you prefer it over their own body-temp and dumps it in the missiles path then the missile may or may not change target.

That seems a bit difficult to fathom. Heat seeking missiles are able to work against aircraft and vehicles because they generate a lot of heat from their engines and anti-heat seeking missiles systems used decoys that generate MORE heat than the vehicle/aircraft. To have a missile track a normal person's heat signature would be dealing with a narrow heat spectrum that can be generated by a lot of other things. Sometimes the normal air can be hotter than a person. If they tried to target a mage and they were over a civilian area, things like stoves, fires, car engines, or even asphault in the afternoon sun would be hotter and attract the missile's attention.

[Vivio Testarossa]

Originally Posted by Laith

Last one I promise

Spoiler for moar:

“You better leave,” the stranger in front of Signum said “She will let you escape. Not like the others that are coming”

“But don’t worry, Princess of the ice, we won´t kill him. We just want to play for a while”

"I have no need to explain myself to a wolf and a little kid. Get out of my sight"

From the Past

10-10-08

Spoiler for ...:

Let me guess the "Wolf" is Zafira, right?

[Jimmy C]

Originally Posted by Striker117

The TSAB's atmospheric superiority comes from the fact the enemies in my story use plasma based weaponry, so magic shields and barrier jackets work well in defense.

That could work. But you have the war lasting 3 years already. If this empire hasn't figured out they need to switch anti-air weapons to kill aerial mages yet, I'm really disappointed. Still, that's only half the problem. How is an aerial mage an effective anti-fighter platform? Simply being more manuverable is not enough. Does the mage have attacks that can take out fighters at long-range? That being 20km or more. That would be short for an AA missle, but long for what we've seen of mages.

My theory is that if a mage concentrates some magical energy and super heats or overloads it whatever you prefer it over their own body-temp and dumps it in the missiles path then the missile may or may not change target.

That's not the problem. The real problem are the speed and reaction times shown by Bureau mages in aerial combat. They're simply not suited for dodging supersonic AA missles. And a proximity blast will ruin a mage's day as badly as a direct hit.

As i wrote somewhere in the start of the first chapter "Humans with magical power have almost tripled in number and power" indicating that TSAB forces are also getting a considerable boost to thier forces.

I admit, I missed that line. But a threefold increase isn't enough. The empire still outnumbers the Bureau. Non-mages are virtually useless in the Bureau's combat doctorine. The empire can use anyone who can be trained to point and shoot a weapon. That's virtually their entire population. And they can deploy newer more effective anti-mage weapons while the Bureau's mages will always be limited by their LC power levels. Lastly, the empire doesn't follow the Bureau's regulations, so those fancy laws you mentioned only restrict the Bureau's ability to respond to the empire's developments.

To tell the truth some of the other stuff i'm undecided on, i've thought of many possible outcomes and im weighing the pros and cons of them to see which way ill go but they will be addressed eventually you'll just have to wait and see.

I urge you to think carefully about this. If you throw the Bureau against a tech-based empire bent on galactic domination, you need very good answers as to why it hasn't overrun the Bureau yet. But if you make the empire less effective, you'll have to explain why the Bureau hasn't overrun them either.
I'll be awaiting future developments from you.

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Sometimes the normal air can be hotter than a person. If they tried to target a mage and they were over a civilian area, things like stoves, fires, car engines, or even asphault in the afternoon sun would be hotter and attract the missile's attention.

You're thinking of early-generation heat-seekers. Newer models can track heat pattern signatures, not simply go after the hottest signals. The military already has heat sensors that can identify people, what would a more advanced civilisation have?

[Keroko]

A point to concider Jimmy: In SSX track 6 Erio goes around blocking bullets. So mages very much have the reaction time to deal with supersonic weaponry, the anime just doesn't always show that speed.

[Vivio Testarossa]

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

That could work. But you have the war lasting 3 years already. If this empire hasn't figured out they need to switch anti-air weapons to kill aerial mages yet, I'm really disappointed. Still, that's only half the problem. How is an aerial mage an effective anti-fighter platform? Simply being more manuverable is not enough. Does the mage have attacks that can take out fighters at long-range? That being 20km or more. That would be short for an AA missle, but long for what we've seen of mages.

I doubt mages would be used alone without backup of some sort, maybe ships?

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

That's not the problem. The real problem are the speed and reaction times shown by Bureau mages in aerial combat. They're simply not suited for dodging supersonic AA missles. And a proximity blast will ruin a mage's day as badly as a direct hit.

Maybe mages have AT Fields?

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

I admit, I missed that line. But a threefold increase isn't enough. The empire still outnumbers the Bureau. Non-mages are virtually useless in the Bureau's combat doctorine. The empire can use anyone who can be trained to point and shoot a weapon. That's virtually their entire population. And they can deploy newer more effective anti-mage weapons while the Bureau's mages will always be limited by their LC power levels. Lastly, the empire doesn't follow the Bureau's regulations, so those fancy laws you mentioned only restrict the Bureau's ability to respond to the empire's developments.

A greater number of individuals don't mean "The empire" is more powerful take Star Wars for example. The above also assumes all people in the empire agree with them and there are no factions that want to side with the TSAB.

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

I urge you to think carefully about this. If you throw the Bureau against a tech-based empire bent on galactic domination, you need very good answers as to why it hasn't overrun the Bureau yet. But if you make the empire less effective, you'll have to explain why the Bureau hasn't overrun them either.
I'll be awaiting future developments from you.

Maybe the villains are arrogant, and figure the the TSAB cabal isn't worth destroying...

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

You're thinking of early-generation heat-seekers. Newer models can track heat pattern signatures, not simply go after the hottest signals. The military already has heat sensors that can identify people, what would a more advanced civilisation have?

Even still, the missiles can't phase through matter... so if the target there "tracking " is inside a building the missile would just hit the building...

[Evangelion Xgouki]

Originally Posted by Vivio Testarossa

Maybe mages have AT Fields?

That still wouldn't matter as the AT Field isn't a reflexive defense. The user needs to consciously manifest the field into existence in a similar manner to how mages produce a barrier. Plus a normal mage would not be able to generate an AT Field without, in a sense, killing themselves.

Originally Posted by Vivio Testarossa

Even still, the missiles can't phase through matter... so if the target there "tracking " is inside a building the missile would just hit the building...

Delayed detonation. There are numerous missiles and bombs that are designed to penetrate structures and then detonate once they are inside. Not to mention the yield of the explosive could end up taking out the wall and sending small and large pieces of debris into the targets or destroy the entire building, killing the targets anyway.

[Satashi]

@Thread: Maybe you guys should take that to the "Magic and Technology" thread since it seems to be more a discussion about that than application in fanfics. (course I could be wrong, and fi so, please continue here )

[edit] yeah, needs to go to the other thread lol

[Jimmy C]

Originally Posted by Keroko

In SSX track 6 Erio goes around blocking bullets. So mages very much have the reaction time to deal with supersonic weaponry, the anime just doesn't always show that speed.

It's nice of them to settle the shields vs bullets debate. Was the shield up before the shots were fired?

Originally Posted by vivio testarossa

I doubt mages would be used alone without backup of some sort, maybe ships?

If only the Bureau thought that way. Look at all 3 season of Nanoha, how often do we see the Bureau use anything heavier than a mage in any kind of fighting? Twice, and both times only against boss-level enemies. Granted, given three years, they might realise the need for something heavier than a mage to kill fighters.
However, if the Bureau lacks space superiority, it cannot deploy its ships in the atmosphere to support aerial mages. The empire's superior spaceships can target and attack them from orbit although they can't localize individual mages from that distance. And don't tell me "maybe they lack the range". If a space combat system can't traverse less than 100km of atmosphere to damage a ship, this empire doesn't have much space superiority.

Maybe mages have AT Fields?

We already know there are limits to even an AAA-rank mage's ability to deploy a protective shield. This empire had better be working on a way to overcome the mages' shields if it doesn't already have one.

A greater number of individuals don't mean "The empire" is more powerful take Star Wars for example.

That's not a good analogy. Everytime a Rebel base was located by the Empire, all they could do was flee. They won by hiding and striking from within the Empire. The Bureau doesn't have that option against this empire.
Striker117 is implying that the empire is at a virtual stalemate with the Bureau. I don't see this being a possibility if Bureau mages can mow down the empire's troops with impuity. Therefore the empire has to be at least as good at killing Bureau mages as the Bureau is at stopping them.

The above also assumes all people in the empire agree with them and there are no factions that want to side with the TSAB.

Perhaps, perhaps not. It doesn't change the fact that the empire can and probably has mobilised more people to fight the Bureau than the Bureau can against it.
And if any factions want to side with the Bureau, will they play by its anti-tech weapons rules? Will the Bureau allow them not to? Do they realise what a compromise on that level will mean for their ban?

Maybe the villains are arrogant, and figure the the TSAB cabal isn't worth destroying...

If the empire thought so little of the Bureau, that's a weakness the Bureau can exploit, why haven't they?

Even still, the missiles can't phase through matter... so if the target there "tracking " is inside a building the missile would just hit the building...

Ever heard of the tandem-charge warhead? This warhead has 2 charges. Both can be set to blow at impact to create a large hole to enter a building. Or the second can be delayed slightly to detonate inside the building, bringing the whole thing down. Other than that, there are such things as bunker buster missles, you know.
Granted, those don't sound like the standard loadout for an AA mission. But if the mage wants to go to ground instead, keep her supressed until ground attack assets can be called in.

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

It's nice of them to settle the shields vs bullets debate. Was the shield up before the shots were fired?

There was no specific sound of any defensive spell activating, so Erio either deflected the shots with Strada or they bounced off his Barrier Jacket.

The guy then frightengly blabbers something that sounds like "the gun.... didn't work... this kid... is a mage?" The translation is questionable, I'm not sure on the word he uses to describe what happened with his gun, but he does sound awefully scared that he's facing a mage, even though he has a gun.

[Evangelion Xgouki]

Saw a pic in the image thread that got the gears turning (or crack flowing ). This thread needs more Hayate fics anyway .

Spoiler for Experimental Mishap:

It was mid-afternoon in the outskirts of Cranagan. Beyond the reaches of the city and its residences laid one of the TSAB's Research and Development facilities. Here scientists toiled to upgrade the Bureau's current magitech as well as explore new and theoretical concepts that could benefit mages and possibly society itself.

"Are you sure you wish to go through with this, mistress?"

The pink-haired knight kept pace with Hayate as they walked down one of the many hallways in the reinforced structure. Scientists and mages milled about around them, most taking no notice to the pair as it was not unusual for high-ranking officials to visit the facility or even other mages to help in the testing of their creations.

"As I've told you before Signum, I'm perfectly alright with this. All it is is a simple test and I'm more than willing to give them a hand."

Signum frowned slightly, not completely agreeing with this course of action. They had been contacted several days ago by the head of one of the projects to assists in their upcoming test. Apparently with the emergence of the Cradle and the 'rumors' of experiments on the blood of the Sankt Kaiser by Jail sparked an interest in ancient Belkan magic and technology.

"I still worry for your safety."

"I know Signum. But I'm not a little girl anymore, you know? I can handle myself just fine."

"Of course, mistress."

Soon the pair met up with the project head. The middle-aged scientist greeted them and went over the details about the project they were about to help out on. As Hayate was one of the only ancient Belka magic practitioners with offensive spells, they had used her information when starting the project. To be more specific, her petrification spell Mistilteinn. As far as they knew, no one else in the TSAB had a spell with similar abilities. The worry came from what would happen should they come upon hostiles who were able to use a similar spell against them. As of recent there had been no significant research into this type of matter-manipulation magic and thus no way to counter-act it which is where this project comes in. The scientists had been working on a way to try and reverse the effects of a petrification-type spell for the past several months. While each spell was different, if they were successful it would provide the basis for the creation of a counter-spell should the need arise.

They were led outside to one of the testing ranges where they had set up the equipment for the experiment. So far they had only been able to work off of what data they had from the TSAB records. Thus it was going to be a two-stage test. The first part would involve a direct attack of Mistilteinn on their testing apparatus for data collection on the spell. The data would then be used to fine-tune a second device which, in theory, would be able to resist the petrification of Mistilteinn.

"Alright, we got the clear to begin the experiment!"

Last-minute adjustments were made to the first machine before the scientists retreated to the safety bunker per regulations. Signum, although reluctant, joined them which left Hayate out in the middle of the testing field. Various monitors and recording devices flared to life as well as the external speakers.

"We are ready to begin here, Lt. Colonel."

Warning lights switched on around the field as well as a warning siren, announcing the initiation of the test. Hayate manifested her armor in response and hovered several meters above the testing field. Her Belkan array appeared beneath her as she began the spell.

"Approach form the beyond, mistletoe branches, and become spears of the sliver moon! Pierce it! Stone spears, Misteltein!"

Shimmering spears of magic impaled the machine below and turned it to stone. Back at the bunker, data poured in as the scientists scurried about to process the new information as much as possible. The lights around the field were shut down and some of the scientists emerged along with Signum to the once operational machine.

"How was that?"

"Perfect! The data we collected will be a huge help. We just need a moment to make some adjustments and then we can start the second phase."

As the scientists worked to switch the testing devices, Signum tried once again to persuade the young Lt. Colonel to rethink this due to the danger but was unable to change her mind.

"You worry too much, Signum. It'll be alright."

A half-hour later the second apparatus was set up and calibrated with the new data. From the bunker the scientists watched over their screens and out at the machine itself. Once again the sirens and warning lights came to life as Hayate took to the sky.

"Approach form the beyond, mistletoe branches, and become spears of the sliver moon! Pierce it! Stone spears, Misteltein!"

The attack hit true, impaling the new target like the first. However, it was different this time.

"Showing a 56% resistance to material manipulation!"

"Power flow remains constant. No anomalies in the system."

"Material alteration detected on 27.96% of the overall material...and dropping!"

Most of the talk was lost to the knight in the bunker. However a small smile was on her lips as she watched the Mistress of the Night Sky land and wave at her from the field.

"We've got a power spike!"

That did not sound good.

"Altered material is fluctuating between 20 and 23.4%. Power draw is rapidly increasing!"

"Send the program kill command!"

"It's not accepting the command! The program is stuck in a loop or something!"

"Damn it! Kill the power! Kill it now!"

Signum bolted for the door only to find it physically and magically sealed shut. Most likely a safety feature of the facility. She swore under her breath and screamed at Hayate to get out through her telecommunic link. Hayate turned and took to the sky but wasn't fast enough as the device detonated, consuming her in the blast.

"HAYATE!!"

Sometime later, Signum was pacing in the halls of the TSAB hospital with the other Wolkenritter. Her trance was broken by someone calling her name.

"Signum! Is Hayate-chan ok?"

Nanoha and Fate ran up to the knights, deeply worried about their friend's condition.

"Shamal is with her right now," slowly replied Vita from the chair next to the door.

Fate glanced at the closed door, "We heard she got caught in an explosion?"

"Ah. We was helping with some experiment when something went wrong with the machine." Signum's fist slammed against the wall, "Damn it, I tried to tell her it wasn't safe. Damn it..."

"It's not your fault, Signum." Nanoha placed a hand on her shoulder. "Hayate wanted to do this and you know how stubborn she can be."

Before anyone could say anymore, Shamal emerged from behind the closed door. Vita was the first to her. "Shamal! How is she? How is Hayate?"

The healing specialist looked around at those present before offering a response. "She's doing fine. A few cuts and bruises, but nothing serious."

A collective sigh of relief came from the group. "I'm glad it wasn't anything serious," remarks Fate.

Shamal's eyes, however, said otherwise. "Well, there is one thing..."

"What is it?" Calmly questioned Zafira, pushing off the wall he was leaning on.

"It's...kind of hard to explain. You-you'll have to see for yourself."

With that she opened the door and gestured for them to follow her inside. The group reluctantly followed her, each worried about what could have happened that Shamal couldn't describe to them. In the room, they all paused at the door in shock at what they were seeing. Nanoha had to rub her eyes to make sure she wasn't seeing things. "Ha-hayate-chan?"

Their friend nervously waves at them from the corner of the hospital bed. "Um, hello everyone."

Before the group sat their friend and mistress looking relatively unharmed...and 9 years old.

[Vivio Testarossa]

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

Saw a pic in the image thread that got the gears turning (or crack flowing ). This thread needs more Hayate fics anyway .

Spoiler for Experimental Mishap:

It was mid-afternoon in the outskirts of Cranagan. Beyond the reaches of the city and its residences laid one of the TSAB's Research and Development facilities. Here scientists toiled to upgrade the Bureau's current magitech as well as explore new and theoretical concepts that could benefit mages and possibly society itself.

"Are you sure you wish to go through with this, mistress?"

The pink-haired knight kept pace with Hayate as they walked down one of the many hallways in the reinforced structure. Scientists and mages milled about around them, most taking no notice to the pair as it was not unusual for high-ranking officials to visit the facility or even other mages to help in the testing of their creations.

"As I've told you before Signum, I'm perfectly alright with this. All it is is a simple test and I'm more than willing to give them a hand."

Signum frowned slightly, not completely agreeing with this course of action. They had been contacted several days ago by the head of one of the projects to assists in their upcoming test. Apparently with the emergence of the Cradle and the 'rumors' of experiments on the blood of the Sankt Kaiser by Jail sparked an interest in ancient Belkan magic and technology.

"I still worry for your safety."

"I know Signum. But I'm not a little girl anymore, you know? I can handle myself just fine."

"Of course, mistress."

Soon the pair met up with the project head. The middle-aged scientist greeted them and went over the details about the project they were about to help out on. As Hayate was one of the only ancient Belka magic practitioners with offensive spells, they had used her information when starting the project. To be more specific, her petrification spell Mistilteinn. As far as they knew, no one else in the TSAB had a spell with similar abilities. The worry came from what would happen should they come upon hostiles who were able to use a similar spell against them. As of recent there had been no significant research into this type of matter-manipulation magic and thus no way to counter-act it which is where this project comes in. The scientists had been working on a way to try and reverse the effects of a petrification-type spell for the past several months. While each spell was different, if they were successful it would provide the basis for the creation of a counter-spell should the need arise.

They were led outside to one of the testing ranges where they had set up the equipment for the experiment. So far they had only been able to work off of what data they had from the TSAB records. Thus it was going to be a two-stage test. The first part would involve a direct attack of Mistilteinn on their testing apparatus for data collection on the spell. The data would then be used to fine-tune a second device which, in theory, would be able to resist the petrification of Mistilteinn.

"Alright, we got the clear to begin the experiment!"

Last-minute adjustments were made to the first machine before the scientists retreated to the safety bunker per regulations. Signum, although reluctant, joined them which left Hayate out in the middle of the testing field. Various monitors and recording devices flared to life as well as the external speakers.

"We are ready to begin here, Lt. Colonel."

Warning lights switched on around the field as well as a warning siren, announcing the initiation of the test. Hayate manifested her armor in response and hovered several meters above the testing field. Her Belkan array appeared beneath her as she began the spell.

"Approach form the beyond, mistletoe branches, and become spears of the sliver moon! Pierce it! Stone spears, Misteltein!"

Shimmering spears of magic impaled the machine below and turned it to stone. Back at the bunker, data poured in as the scientists scurried about to process the new information as much as possible. The lights around the field were shut down and some of the scientists emerged along with Signum to the once operational machine.

"How was that?"

"Perfect! The data we collected will be a huge help. We just need a moment to make some adjustments and then we can start the second phase."

As the scientists worked to switch the testing devices, Signum tried once again to persuade the young Lt. Colonel to rethink this due to the danger but was unable to change her mind.

"You worry too much, Signum. It'll be alright."

A half-hour later the second apparatus was set up and calibrated with the new data. From the bunker the scientists watched over their screens and out at the machine itself. Once again the sirens and warning lights came to life as Hayate took to the sky.

"Approach form the beyond, mistletoe branches, and become spears of the sliver moon! Pierce it! Stone spears, Misteltein!"

The attack hit true, impaling the new target like the first. However, it was different this time.

"Showing a 56% resistance to material manipulation!"

"Power flow remains constant. No anomalies in the system."

"Material alteration detected on 27.96% of the overall material...and dropping!"

Most of the talk was lost to the knight in the bunker. However a small smile was on her lips as she watched the Mistress of the Night Sky land and wave at her from the field.

"We've got a power spike!"

That did not sound good.

"Altered material is fluctuating between 20 and 23.4%. Power draw is rapidly increasing!"

"Send the program kill command!"

"It's not accepting the command! The program is stuck in a loop or something!"

"Damn it! Kill the power! Kill it now!"

Signum bolted for the door only to find it physically and magically sealed shut. Most likely a safety feature of the facility. She swore under her breath and screamed at Hayate to get out through her telecommunic link. Hayate turned and took to the sky but wasn't fast enough as the device detonated, consuming her in the blast.

"HAYATE!!"

Sometime later, Signum was pacing in the halls of the TSAB hospital with the other Wolkenritter. Her trance was broken by someone calling her name.

"Signum! Is Hayate-chan ok?"

Nanoha and Fate ran up to the knights, deeply worried about their friend's condition.

"Shamal is with her right now," slowly replied Vita from the chair next to the door.

Fate glanced at the closed door, "We heard she got caught in an explosion?"

"Ah. We was helping with some experiment when something went wrong with the machine." Signum's fist slammed against the wall, "Damn it, I tried to tell her it wasn't safe. Damn it..."

"It's not your fault, Signum." Nanoha placed a hand on her shoulder. "Hayate wanted to do this and you know how stubborn she can be."

Before anyone could say anymore, Shamal emerged from behind the closed door. Vita was the first to her. "Shamal! How is she? How is Hayate?"

The healing specialist looked around at those present before offering a response. "She's doing fine. A few cuts and bruises, but nothing serious."

A collective sigh of relief came from the group. "I'm glad it wasn't anything serious," remarks Fate.

Shamal's eyes, however, said otherwise. "Well, there is one thing..."

"What is it?" Calmly questioned Zafira, pushing off the wall he was leaning on.

"It's...kind of hard to explain. You-you'll have to see for yourself."

With that she opened the door and gestured for them to follow her inside. The group reluctantly followed her, each worried about what could have happened that Shamal couldn't describe to them. In the room, they all paused at the door in shock at what they were seeing. Nanoha had to rub her eyes to make sure she wasn't seeing things. "Ha-hayate-chan?"

Their friend nervously waves at them from the corner of the hospital bed. "Um, hello everyone."

Before the group sat their friend and mistress looking relatively unharmed...and 9 years old.

Ah how adorable, adult Nanoha + Fate child Hayate... well written story, I do hope for a sequel...

So the spells translated name is old norse for "mistletoe"?

[Laith]

Crossroads

To the place among heavens

…Or the devil´s home.

Spoiler for part 3:

Two figures moved swiftly and silently through the castle. One, a red armored girl with red eyes, was running as if it was nothing. The other, a white armored girl with blue eyes, was trying to keep the pace of the girl running in front of her.

She sure is fast.

Running around the castle to find their destination, Nanoha wondered where they were heading.

There are two possibilities where she might be. There is the tallest tower and the dungeons… I hope she is in the tallest tower. Please Goddess let her be in the tallest tower.

“Here we are,” the valkyrie said. A wooden door was in front of them. Unlike the others, which had the symbol of the Paltina´s royal family, this was just plain wooden door.

And this leads us to… the dungeons. Just my luck.

“Let´s go” the blonde ordered as she started to go downstairs. Unwillingly Nanoha followed her.

The dungeons are always so dirty and full of bones. Why they can´t follow the standard rules for kidnapping princess?

“Are you… sure this is the right way?” Nanoha asked, not letting all of her fear come through her voice.

“Yes,” the red eyed girl said.

“How can… you be so sure of that?” The light that entered through the door was slowly fading as they kept going down.

“I just know,” the red eyed girl replied in her calmed voice.

…How could she know that?

With no lights or torches illuminating their way, the knight tripped with something. With almost no distance between the two girls the knight made the other girl fall to the ground as well. Groaning Nanoha started to rub her head and placed one hand on something metallic.

“Nghh,” the brunette groaned in pain, “my head…”

“Lady Nanoha,” a voice sounded “could you please move?”

Wha…?

“I don’t want to repeat myself, Lady Takamachi,” Her voice started to sound irritated. Knowing that making the valkyrie mad was something that no one dared to, the knight quickly stood up from the blonde´s back.

“S…sorry, Lo…rd Fat…e,” the blue eyed knight said while bowing.

“…Let´s just continue,” the red eyed valkyrie said ignoring the apology of the knight.

I thought she was going to kill me…

Walking through the darkness, Nanoha could feel all the spider webs, the remnants of human beings and unknown things that she didn’t wanted to know.

Why in the dungeons? WHY!?

The sound of footsteps was heard in the middle of the darkness…

Spoiler for Decision 3:

a) The two decided to investigate the noise

b) "I´ll go," the valkyrie said...

C) "I´ll go" the knight said...

Spoiler for R/S:

Yuuno 5
Fate 1

If you have noticed a better grammar thank TSS. I fail at it

Votes end in more or less 19.30 hrs remember Green and Big

[TheShinySword]

I pick C Go Go Power range- I mean Knight... =-=

[ThEJeDI6911]

A I choose youuuuuuu~~~~~!!!!!!!!!!

[Seraph42]

Originally Posted by Laith

Crossroads

To the place among heavens

…Or the devil´s home.

Spoiler for part 3:

Two figures moved swiftly and silently through the castle. One, a red armored girl with red eyes, was running as if it was nothing. The other, a white armored girl with blue eyes, was trying to keep the pace of the girl running in front of her.

She sure is fast.

Running around the castle to find their destination, Nanoha wondered where they were heading.

There are two possibilities where she might be. There is the tallest tower and the dungeons… I hope she is in the tallest tower. Please Goddess let her be in the tallest tower.

“Here we are,” the valkyrie said. A wooden door was in front of them. Unlike the others, which had the symbol of the Paltina´s royal family, this was just plain wooden door.

And this leads us to… the dungeons. Just my luck.

“Let´s go” the blonde ordered as she started to go downstairs. Unwillingly Nanoha followed her.

The dungeons are always so dirty and full of bones. Why they can´t follow the standard rules for kidnapping princess?

“Are you… sure this is the right way?” Nanoha asked, not letting all of her fear come through her voice.

“Yes,” the red eyed girl said.

“How can… you be so sure of that?” The light that entered through the door was slowly fading as they kept going down.

“I just know,” the red eyed girl replied in her calmed voice.

…How could she know that?

With no lights or torches illuminating their way, the knight tripped with something. With almost no distance between the two girls the knight made the other girl fall to the ground as well. Groaning Nanoha started to rub her head and placed one hand on something metallic.

“Nghh,” the brunette groaned in pain, “my head…”

“Lady Nanoha,” a voice sounded “could you please move?”

Wha…?

“I don’t want to repeat myself, Lady Takamachi,” Her voice started to sound irritated. Knowing that making the valkyrie mad was something that no one dared to, the knight quickly stood up from the blonde´s back.

“S…sorry, Lo…rd Fat…e,” the blue eyed knight said while bowing.

“…Let´s just continue,” the red eyed valkyrie said ignoring the apology of the knight.

I thought she was going to kill me…

Walking through the darkness, Nanoha could feel all the spider webs, the remnants of human beings and unknown things that she didn’t wanted to know.

Why in the dungeons? WHY!?

The sound of footsteps was heard in the middle of the darkness…

Spoiler for Decision 3:

a) The two decided to investigate the noise

b) "I´ll go," the valkyrie said...

C) "I´ll go" the knight said...

Spoiler for R/S:

Yuuno 5
Fate 1

If you have noticed a better grammar thank TSS. I fail at it

Votes end in more or less 19.30 hrs remember Green and Big

Go! C, Go!

[Vivio Testarossa]

A for more NanoFate scenes.

Originally Posted by Laith

Spoiler for R/S:

Yuuno 5
Fate 1

I'm surprised on this one... Oh wait... this is AS, not 4chan.

[OrderNorChaos]

Originally Posted by Laith

Crossroads

To the place among heavens

…Or the devil´s home.

Spoiler for part 3:

Two figures moved swiftly and silently through the castle. One, a red armored girl with red eyes, was running as if it was nothing. The other, a white armored girl with blue eyes, was trying to keep the pace of the girl running in front of her.

She sure is fast.

Running around the castle to find their destination, Nanoha wondered where they were heading.

There are two possibilities where she might be. There is the tallest tower and the dungeons… I hope she is in the tallest tower. Please Goddess let her be in the tallest tower.

“Here we are,” the valkyrie said. A wooden door was in front of them. Unlike the others, which had the symbol of the Paltina´s royal family, this was just plain wooden door.

And this leads us to… the dungeons. Just my luck.

“Let´s go” the blonde ordered as she started to go downstairs. Unwillingly Nanoha followed her.

The dungeons are always so dirty and full of bones. Why they can´t follow the standard rules for kidnapping princess?

“Are you… sure this is the right way?” Nanoha asked, not letting all of her fear come through her voice.

“Yes,” the red eyed girl said.

“How can… you be so sure of that?” The light that entered through the door was slowly fading as they kept going down.

“I just know,” the red eyed girl replied in her calmed voice.

…How could she know that?

With no lights or torches illuminating their way, the knight tripped with something. With almost no distance between the two girls the knight made the other girl fall to the ground as well. Groaning Nanoha started to rub her head and placed one hand on something metallic.

“Nghh,” the brunette groaned in pain, “my head…”

“Lady Nanoha,” a voice sounded “could you please move?”

Wha…?

“I don’t want to repeat myself, Lady Takamachi,” Her voice started to sound irritated. Knowing that making the valkyrie mad was something that no one dared to, the knight quickly stood up from the blonde´s back.

“S…sorry, Lo…rd Fat…e,” the blue eyed knight said while bowing.

“…Let´s just continue,” the red eyed valkyrie said ignoring the apology of the knight.

I thought she was going to kill me…

Walking through the darkness, Nanoha could feel all the spider webs, the remnants of human beings and unknown things that she didn’t wanted to know.

Why in the dungeons? WHY!?

The sound of footsteps was heard in the middle of the darkness…

Spoiler for Decision 3:

a) The two decided to investigate the noise

b) "I´ll go," the valkyrie said...

C) "I´ll go" the knight said...

Spoiler for R/S:

Yuuno 5
Fate 1

If you have noticed a better grammar thank TSS. I fail at it

Votes end in more or less 19.30 hrs remember Green and Big

Well, I will select A.