2013-04-08, 05:33 | Link #37741 | ||
Resident Tentacle Monster
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Well if you really want to know about Shirou... Spoiler for Information about the backstory of Fate/Stay Nanoha Emiya Shirou:
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2013-04-08, 05:41 | Link #37742 | ||
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You could do that quite easily. It'd just require both of them to have a parent that carries both the blonde hair gene and an eye color that had a sufficient enough lack of melanin. Precia herself is already borderline there. Red eyes aren't actually red: They're a complete lack of coloring (melanin) that doesn't hide the blood in the irises. Purple eyes like Precia's are caused by there being just enough blue to mix with that without overpowering it. For Alicia and in turn Fate to have red eyes, the genes Precia and Shirou passed onto her would need to completely strip that melanin back out. What you should be a bit more concerned about, in my opinion, is the Shirou/Precia backstory.
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2013-04-08, 05:57 | Link #37743 | ||
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As for the backstory, care to elaborate? [grabs a pen and notebook] |
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2013-04-08, 06:28 | Link #37747 | |
The Interstellar Medium
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I rejoice in the suffering of characters and Everyone Can Die promises. Killing off my favorite character(s) in a horrible (and well-written) way often causes me to praise the work in question because it had the "courage" to do it (due to too many sugary and "good" ends in media I think). If they aren't even rewarded for their suffering, it's twice the pain and glory. What I would like to suggest for you, though it's up to you if you want to go through with it, is to try and read and watch works that has that which you don't like, in this case that fear of yours. By doing that, yes you'll torture yourself kinda, but your own writing will be better off if you pick good examples. Avoiding those works might work against you. In my case, this would be romance and well-done drama works, a weak point in my writing. But that's my approach. Every writer has his own and if you're comfortable with what you're doing, do that. And welcome. Excuse my ramblings.
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2013-04-08, 06:46 | Link #37749 | ||
Resident Tentacle Monster
Join Date: Apr 2013
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Anyway I've got that part figured out Spoiler for More Backstory for Fate/Stay Nanoha Shirou:
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While I do appreciate the advice... my imagination tends to spring up some nasty scenarios on me from time to time. Ones that make my blood run cold, I prefer not to give it Extra food. It's bad as it is. |
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2013-04-08, 06:58 | Link #37751 | |
Dark Energy
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Ooookay, let's backup for a second, because I can see a much more serious problem at hand. You need to be very careful not to make Shirou a god mode sue here. A device, UBW, Agito, wrecking criminal syndicates more efficiently than the TSAB, even the TSAB is afraid of him, and dropping him into season one of Nanoha to boot? That's asking for a story without any drama or conflict, because Shirou could just solve everything by himself in one chapter.
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2013-04-08, 07:03 | Link #37754 | |
Resident Tentacle Monster
Join Date: Apr 2013
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He has to stay under the radar PARTICULARLY now that he has a family. Imagine what would the criminals and bad guys do if they learnt that he has a family. A soft target they can strike at. I made Shirou a God Mode Sue... and then made him Incapable of using his power. One wrong move, one slip up, one rumour about him being on Earth and all hell will break loose around him hurting all the people he cares about. What is the point of having power to take on Crime Syndicates if a single surprise attack can kill your entire family. |
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2013-04-08, 07:08 | Link #37756 | |
The Interstellar Medium
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I myself currently have 2 chapters (6000+7000) being beta'd now, and they have been for close to two weeks or more. The importance of this cannot be overstated. Which reminds me: If someone want beta/editor help, I'm still available.
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2013-04-08, 07:12 | Link #37757 | |
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As for the beta... what's your stand on shipping? Have to get that out of the way first, less I offend you or something. |
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2013-04-08, 07:18 | Link #37758 | ||
Dark Energy
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2013-04-08, 07:18 | Link #37759 | ||
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2013-04-08, 07:22 | Link #37760 | |
The Unpronounceable
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I'm planning to have them hook up at the end, I think, since I have no idea where to go after that. Thank you for your advice. I'll take it to heart. @Northern. Ah, okay. Thanks for answering. (Hopefully I won't offend you somehow. I can be really insensitive sometime, or so they say). |
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