2014-03-23, 07:50 | Link #51103 | ||
Fear the Spear
Join Date: Oct 2013
Location: Osaka Castle
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--- BTT, what are the requirements for an IS pilot to qualify for the Mondo Grosso? I'm sure the committee has their standards, eh?
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2014-03-23, 07:56 | Link #51104 | |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 18
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2014-03-23, 08:40 | Link #51107 |
That one guy
Join Date: Nov 2011
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subtle context clues. So he's in a hospital, and for some reason terrified of Chifuyu or someone who looks like Chifuyu or should be Chifuyu or isn't. Something's wrong with him and he wants to die. Why? A monster is too vague. Why is he a monster? No need to outright say it. Having yellow fluid as his blood? Makes no sense to me. Part IS? Clone? Designer baby? Ramp up the mystery by building up to something. It feels kind of like you're running the scene flat and then just spike the drama at the end.
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2014-03-23, 09:14 | Link #51109 |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 18
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Have you guys read my Infinitus Potentia?
Gosh! Basically, an alien run its spear through Ichika heart. The reasons why he want to sucide: - As a firm Shinto follower, he considers himself an abomination - actually, his distaste for technology is what caused the rift between him and his sister. - He scares of the mysterious Unknown, which is the female version of this world Chifuyu. I'm building an Ichika who never has suffered a real defeat in battle suddenly fall. Very easily. |
2014-03-23, 09:16 | Link #51110 |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 18
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The background: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/1008545...nitus-Potentia
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2014-03-23, 09:23 | Link #51112 |
L'anticipation du pouvoir
Join Date: Jun 2013
Location: Nowhere and everywhere
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You're a sadist who loves yaoi... Me too. Let's start a club! Edit: Don't pay attention to this, I'm really, truly tired.... Btw, for Infinite Potentia, I think it'd be better if Ichika doesn't have a hero-syndrome, if you see what I mean. I read so many fanfic with the MC who has it. In the end, the MC doesn't have a personnality anymore. He is just a copy and paste of major hero.
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2014-03-23, 09:37 | Link #51113 |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
Age: 18
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Well.. He is not a man driven by ideal, after all. Just want to keep the world same as before.
Not to mention you can play hero when fighting on three sides: the Alien, opposite human foes, and girls ready to wage a war for him. And demino, meaning? Am I that suck? And not a pony. |
2014-03-23, 09:48 | Link #51114 |
That one guy
Join Date: Nov 2011
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I just don't work the premise. Kind of not my thing I guess. I don't read muv-luv nor have I seen gunbuster for a reason. Hell I barely survived Yukikaze and Fafner... though I may be a masochist because I'm overjoyed of Fafner having more releases. BUT STILL! I'm not really into the whole xeno-alien thingamajig.
Pony because you're using Amuro's unicorn emblem. |
2014-03-23, 10:16 | Link #51118 | |
Tenshi's Defense Squadron
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: Fighting against those who oppress the system
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Gn particles is like the ultimate mary sue device. It's a source of power, propulsion, acts as a catalyst for human evolution, allows people to communicate telepathically and it allows for some mechs to quantimise (w.e, can't spell)
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2014-03-23, 10:20 | Link #51119 |
That one guy
Join Date: Nov 2011
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GN particles is bastardized higg's boson. It can do pretty much everything GN particles do apparently. Except spur human evolution.
GN particles aren't power source. It's gamma radiation being generated in along with the GN particles. Propulsion, well I guess it can act like a gas. But mostly it causes magnetic field interference that screws with how matter interacts with gravity. Quantization is bull... That's a whole different animal. |
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