Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[FieryAeon]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

S&W: *lying in smoking crater*

Such a lovely sce-

*Mai >>> S&W*

Mai: Urusai.

... ureshii.

S&W, ever tactless, brave to a fault.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Yes, she needs mana replenishment... lots of it

*RUNS*

From all angles! *runs like hell*

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Yup, out of all the Gundams Exia was, and still is my fave since day one

Kokoro Tomoyo!

Originally Posted by LoweGear

The Seto No Hanayome Iincho

Oh...I'm too used to thinking of the shoutacon one whenever I hear Iincho.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Spoiler for Why not both?:

Unfortunately the only one of its kind I found... they seem to like Chao in her plugsuit more

*runs*

*clicks and save quickly* I shall remember this kind deed! *cries tears of joy*

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Yep

Having Soma along would be a bonus

*runs*

The old man and his loli girl.

Originally Posted by Kagerou

lol @ pun.

Originally Posted by Kagerou

mmm, Delicious Etna- *SHOT*

Rozalin is more delicious- *speared by tsun-tsun mode Etna*

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by Kagerou

The cloaked figures... if you need a comparison, then I have one word: SEELE.

Aaaah

I agree with those points. I will contend that Nanoha isn't inept at melee, but we've had that discussion many times now.

To compare using Star Wars of all things: Hayate is the B-cup, Nanoha is the X-cup, and Fate is the A-cup.

FIXED

...

...

*Diabolic Emission >>> Lowe*

Originally Posted by USB500

The end of all? Or the beginning of a new chapter? You decide.

TEARS OF THE NORTHERN WIND
EPILOGUE

Spoiler for part 1:

// 23 February, MC 0076. Public Cemetery, Kiev. 14:00 hours //

It was a cold and snowy day. There was a strange, and yet benevolent, sense of serenity that was enveloping the mausoleum complex. Thick piles of snows were gradually building up, covering most of the land in white, cold blanket that no one wanted to cover their body and soul with. Ravens could be seen perching upon branches of leafless trees, observing the area as if they were the guardians of the deceased.

And he was there, alone, standing in front of the stone slab. He did not bulge, having been stationary for the past one hour, and as he looked down at the plaque there was a low-sounding sigh coming out of his lips.

“…”

He knelt into the snowy ground. Slowly he put the flowers onto the stone slab, swiping some of the snows off with his gloved hands. A faint grin was carved upon his face as he glanced into the name of the deceased, and as softly as he could he traced his finger along the name.

“Looks like this will be my final visit…” He put a locket next to the flowers and positioned it so it stayed aligned with the slab. He, then, turned to another tomb next to it and put what looked like a 50-calibre bullet on the slab. He stood up and looked down at both the tombs.

“Farewell, Yuu, Grandpa Lancelot…” he whispered. “And I’m sorry…”

He turned around and found himself staring into a pair of eyes he had known for very long. He was surprised, as so did the person with the eyeglasses.

Finally, after they were speechless for so long, the spectacled person opened her mouth.

“It’s… been a long time, Hikki…” half-heartedly Claes spoke.

“You surprised me,” he uttered. “What brought you here?”

“I… I mean… we have unfinished errands at Kiev to settle first before we go back to Italy,” she replied. “You’ve… changed since we last met.”

He could only nod. “A lot, to be straight.” He noticed the same flowers she was carrying. “You don’t have to tell me. Go on. I’ll wait here.”

“Thanks.” She approached the gravestones and put the flowers between them, resting the bouquet firmly on the snow. He stood next to her and watched as she murmured something in low breath.

“How are things at your side?”

“Nothing much had changed since,” Claes uttered. “Everyone’s busy with their own works. We still have plans for our summer picnic, though. When things have gone back to normal, this year we’re going to Switzerland.”

“Good for you,” he answered.

“How about you?” Claes asked.

“Me?” He threw his sight into the snowy sky. “You won’t believe what had happened for the past three months. But if I had to tell you something, I just got a new job.”

“I’m glad to hear that,” Claes replied.

Later, as the former friends walked down the path that led to the gate, Claes explained how the Bougainvillea Brigade had undergone internal restructuring following his resignation, and how the Ukrainian special operation unit was re-established as a youth training organization. “No longer we have to conceal our presence behind the black curtain and fear our existence will be forgotten, Madam Natalya said to us,” she spoke. “She felt it was time to move forward and embrace the future instead of being tied to the past.”

“Sounds like something I’d tell my friends,” he shrugged.

“So what are you going to do after this?” Claes asked.

“I’ll meet my family; been missing them very much. Wonder how they’re doing here,” he answered. There was a moment of silence as he looked back into the sky and said “strange, isn’t it?”

“Excuse me?”

He halted. Kneeling down to take a pile of snow in his hand, he clenched it and let it melt. “Sometimes ago, we were fighting as an enemy determined to finish off each other. Now, we’re here, reunited as two friends who had been separated for a very long time. Don’t you think it’s strange, when both of us never bear grudge against each other?”

“I never look at you as my enemy,” she said and put her hand on his shoulder as a sign of assurance. “Even when I… had to do it, I just wanted to see you as a friend in need.”

“You weren’t angry at me, were you?”

She merely smiled. “I will never be angry at you for the rest of my life, Hikki,” she answered. “I have long forgiven you, in fact.”

He could only smile as he held the hand in return. “Thanks, Claes. I really appreciate your sincerity,” he said. “Say, I remembered a café we used to hang around. What do you say if we go there and have quick afternoon tea?”

“WAII!!!!”

His attention was disturbed when a pair of arms seized his neck, followed by a rough tackle that pinned him into the snow. “What the hell?!” he barked and gasped when Iriya choked him.

“You’re back!!” the energetic girl exclaimed and tightened her arms. “You didn’t tell me you’d come by!!”

“But I’m on a quick visit!” he cried out.

“Quick visit or not, you aren’t going anywhere else until I say so,” Iriya retorted, even as all the members of the Bougainvillea Brigade and the Section Two were coming to welcome his return. “Where you were planning to go? I know! It’s the Cherry Blossom Café, right? Come on, everyone! Let’s have a welcome party to our sibling in soul!”

“Let go off me first, Iriya-nee!” Hikki screamed.

“Welcome back, Hikki,” Triela greeted with a smile (standing around her, Petrushka, Beatrice, Luke, Rico and Henrietta smiled). The ‘siblings in soul’ also smiled, with Mariel and Elsa the happiest among the children.

“So, Iriya, what’s the plan?” Triela asked.

“The plan is to bash our sibling in soul as much as we want to until we drop!” happily Iriya declared and proceeded to shove his face into the snow. He quickly fled his former adoptive sister’s armlock and tossed snowballs at the young woman. “That is not fair!!”

“Go ahead. Make my day,” he said and flung more snowballs at Iriya; she dodged, and the snowballs hot Triela. The annoyed pigtailed girl cried foul at him and counterattacked with snowball barrage; one of the projectiles hit Claes, and the surprised spectacled girl was caught by the ex-gunslinger boy as she fell onto the ground. The girls cooed at the suddenly romantic scene and began rooting for the unlikely couple.

“Hey! He gets to take Claes-chan in his arms while I don’t? This is blasphemy!” Iriya growled and threw as much snowballs at the boy as she could. Both he and Claes were hit, and their reaction was to return fire at the ‘sister in soul’. Soon all of them were caught in a free-for-all snowball fight, as each of them tried outsmarting each other.

(Not far from the cemetery, the Aces quartet were just watching at the Gale Whistler, not wanting to disturb his reunion with his ‘siblings in soul’. “That looks like fun, though,” Fate commented, “tossing and dodging flying snowballs.”

“Nah, just let him have the fun,” Nanoha said. “We’re just accompanying him here, right?”

“Come on, guys!” Hayate exclaimed and seized Keroko’s arms. “I just saw a Lolita shop at downtown. Who’s coming with me?”)

Spoiler for part II:

// 28 February, MC 0076. Boot Camp, Mid-Childa //

Three months had passed. Now he was a part of the small but significant community of Time-Space Administrative Bureau, a Tactical Instructor for the bureau’s new generation of mages and knights.

He threw his sight over the horizon The glorious ray of the morning sun was enveloping the empty boot camp as he came into the place. Alone as he had always been, he was setting up his Devices for today’s lesson. “Widuri, let’s go.”

“(Yes, Hikki-sama. Set Up.)”

It took him seconds, and he was switching into his Barrier Jacket, and it was coincidentally timed with his students’ arrival. His reaction was a faked disappointment at their “lack of time awareness”. “All of you are late! Give me some twenty now!” he barked.

“Sensei! But we just arrived a minute ago!” one of the students protested.

“No buts!” he replied and pointed to the student’s face. “Who do you think you are? You are the new generation of pioneering warriors! Reluctance in accepting your new destiny only results in despair and the loss of hope for the future! Give me seven laps and don’t stop until you’re done!”

Later, as the disgruntled students began their running course around the boot camp, Nanoha arrived with Fate, Hayate and Keroko, and the four of them could only laugh at his alleged strictness towards his students. “Where did you learn to be that strict?” Nanoha asked.

The Gale Whistler turned to the quartet. “Oh, it’s you. Good morning, ladies,” he spoke.

“Don’t ladies in front of us, you know,” Hayate reminded and wagged a finger at him.

“Hello? Excuse me, Ms. Hayate,” he replied. “Are you suggesting me not to go formal with everyone of you?”

Hayate batted an eyebrow. “Oh, really? Then explain what’s with that reaction when Nanoha gave you that chocolate on Valentine’s Day,” she suggested (Nanoha blushed at the mention, and frantically begged Hayate to stop revealing the story but was ignored in the process). “Don’t say that the whole bureau didn’t know what you were doing.”

“Wha-what the hell was that for?!” he screamed. “I regarded that as a present, nothing more and nothing less!”

“No!” along came Widuri’s voice as she materialized from thin air and seized his arm. “If anything, I shall be the first to give him presents!”

“Then explain why you were very, VERY reluctant to proceed when I told you to do so,” Hayate insisted, shaking her head in disbelief. “I can’t believe it. You’re his Servant, and yet you’re not doing what a Servant should do.”

“W-what was that supposed to mean, Hayate-sama!?” Widuri replied in horror.

Again Hayate wagged her finger. “Tsk, tsk, tsk. Denial Widuri is denial. And the same goes to her Goshujin-sama,” she said and threw a wink to the horrified Gale Whistler. “What do you guys say if we hold a Hikki’s Week next Saturday?”

“Hayate-chan, stop!” Nanoha pleaded. “He’s still new! There’s no reason to… bully him!” (Fate and Keroko nodded to agree). “Besides he’s not someone we don’t know. He’s our friend, right?” She turned to him and bowed repeated in apologetic manners. “Even though we’ve known you for just three months, don’t take our manners very seriously. We just want to make sure you’re okay with your new life.”

He was about to answer when his students called him aloud from the track. He turned at his students to see them collapsing at the track after finishing the lap. “We’re done! Now what?” they asked.

“Lucky for you not to have someone else as your instructor,” he said as he approached the young people with Widuri. “You’re done? Good. Take five, then we’ll start our day. Okay?”

Nanoha, Fate, Hayate and Keroko watched in interest. A wide smile was carved upon their face at a new thought that was popping inside his head. “He didn’t answer that question, Nanoha-chan,” Fate complained.

“It doesn’t matter,” Nanoha replied and laughed when he showed his antics as a Tactical Instructor. “I’m sure he’s happy living with us.”

“True, true,” Keroko agreed. “Though I’m wondering if he can still cope with his twisted past.”

“He will,” Nanoha answered. “He will.”

“All these talks are making me itchy for action. Come on! Who wants to join Hikki?” Hayate suggested and joined up with the new TSAB officer. Fate and Keroko followed her lead, leaving Nanoha behind with Raising Heart hanging over her neck.

She giggled. “I think he needs every bit of our help,” she said and clenched the Device core. “Raising Heart, ikuyo.”

“[Yes, Master. Barrier Jacket Set Up.]”

// THE END //

Well, this is it. Now that Tears of Northern Wind has come to its end, I can now begin my OC rebuilding starting with some of the key characters for the upcoming stories (I'll use Kha's character rebuilding setup as basis).

And fret not, for there is always the DVD Special following. Guaranteed to contain less censorship and more fanservice.

*runs*

And Tears of the Northern Wind ends on a very good note with a touching reuinion and a mock battle, good end

Though I'd like to see what Hayate got out of that Lolita shop, and DVD Special please

*runs*

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

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S&W, ever tactless, brave to a fault.

As always

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

From all angles! *runs like hell*

And All Positions!

*Runs Faster*

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

Kokoro Tomoyo!

See how for the past year I haven't changed my Avi to anything but Exia? That's how much I like the thing

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

*clicks and save quickly* I shall remember this kind deed! *cries tears of joy*

Glad to have been of service

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I FINALLY FOUND IT!!!!!!

Slightly relevant for the next part of Mayura's profile later...

Spoiler for Kamen Rider Fate:

Originally Posted by Tangowr

Kamen Rider...Fate?
http://img86.imageshack.us/img86/1339/0202wv7.jpg
http://img509.imageshack.us/img509/3301/0303cy8.jpg
http://img86.imageshack.us/img86/3354/0404gj0.jpg
http://img212.imageshack.us/img212/8239/0505wu6.jpg
http://img211.imageshack.us/img211/1948/0606qg7.jpg
http://img98.imageshack.us/img98/6013/0909do9.jpg

Signum
http://img509.imageshack.us/img509/3408/13439062ni8.jpg

Cast OFF
http://img509.imageshack.us/img509/1769/120coh7.jpg

...
http://img212.imageshack.us/img212/8513/130dbx0.jpg
http://img214.imageshack.us/img214/1840/140eyf4.jpg

The problem with clothe under the armor..
http://img509.imageshack.us/img509/5316/150fbz3.jpg

Chrono immediately tries to make the armor mandatory uniform, with Zafira passing it.
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[USB500]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

And Tears of the Northern Wind ends on a very good note with a touching reunion and a mock battle, good end

Though I'd like to see what Hayate got out of that Lolita shop, and DVD Special please

*runs*

Ah, it would be a part of her plan to conquer the world have a cosplay party. In before Desu Lamia Signum.

But as always, details will be revealed through our DVD Special.

*runs*

Originally Posted by LoweGear

I FINALLY FOUND IT!!!!!!

Slightly relevant for the next part of Mayura's profile later...

Spoiler for Kamen Rider Fate:

*snip*

*cue Let's Go!! Rider Kick*

*cries blood* I APPROVE OF SUCH CLOTHES-RIPPING TRANSFORMATION!!!!

Naked Fate & Signum >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> USB500

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Okay, tentative, but I did a little research to line up some things while working on Roland.

Spoiler for Maj. General William Roland:

Maj. General William Roland


(Note, Roland wearing 'personal' clothing rather than TSAB Uniform.)

"William Roland"
CALLSIGN: Steamroller
RANK: Major General (Two Star)
POSITION: TSAB Base Commander, Abenobashi Airforce Base, head of BEST FORCE.
AGE: 37
MAGE CLASS: B

Spoiler for History:

Will STEAMROLLER Rolland hails from Non-Administrated World 97, Earth.
Before his introduction to the TSA, he was already a military man in his early twenties. Operating in the United States Army First Cavalry Division stationed out of Fort Hood Texas.

As a tank Commander of Second Brigade (Blackjack Brigade), First Batallion, Fifth Cavalry Regiment, the BLACK KNIGHTS, he was deployed to Iraq in (Earth Time) October 1990 as part of Operation Desert Shield/Desert Storm

On 20 February 1991, the brigade launched the first ground strike into Iraq with "Operation Knight Strike". Shortly after this, Roland's first encounter with the TSAB was recorded.

Unrelated to Roland up until this point, an unidentified Iraqi commander of the Republican Guard had somehow managed to obtain a hazzardous Lost Logia Artifact, and had been detected by TSA intelligence some time prior as a potential threat. During 'Knight Strike', the Tank Unit Roland was part of encountered this commander and was engaged. Realizing the Republican Guard commander was indeed using the Lost Logia as a weapon, the TSAB cruiser on station decided to intervene.

TSA Enforcer units deployed a barrier under containment orders just as the engagement began, preventing the panicked communications from getting when the unit was 'engaged by an unidentified weapon.' Several tanks took damage or were destroyed in the crossfire before Enforcers could arrive to assist. However, even the enforcers took some casualties during the intervention, due to the powerful nature of the artifact.

Roland was noted, not only for providing immediate medical attention to the injured Enforcers, but despite having a damaged tank, sunk a shot directly into the position of the Iraqi commander, neutralizing him.
Details noted that Roland had teamed up with one of the Enforcers to act as eyes for him while he took this shot.

Enforcers recovered the artifact from the dead commander, and held a field debrief instructing all those present never to speak about what they encountered since Earth was not prepared for this. All pressent agreed, citing that nobody would actually believe them, and fabricated that the whole thing was a messy friendly fire incident. The Enforcers departed and the barrier dropped.

Two years later, after Roland's discharge from the US Army, he was contacted again by TSAB Enforcers and requested to join for his commendable performance. Sensing a whole new 'universe' of oppertunity, he accepted.

Roland was a shock to the TSA's Beauraucratic System. He both understood how Beauracracy worked, and how to function in a unit, or in charge of a unit in combat far more than other Mages his rank.
Determined to either see him fail and be swept under the matt, or see him set a new example for the TSA Ground Forces, Regius threw demanding assignments at Roland...

Despite having nothing even ressembling magic, his performance was deemed quite productive. Able to manage, instruct, lead, and follow, he flew up the ranks, only occaisionally roadblocked by Regius' steadfast Iron will, wanting Roland to perform above and beyond what was expected of other ground forces.
When Roland finally made the rank of General, Regius gave him a new assignment.

As head of the offshore TSA Test and Disposal Facility at McGreggor Archipelligo, and the old Mid-Childan airbase there, he was to attempt to clean up its act.
William Rolland managed to aquire a second star after successfully cleaning up the facility's act in two years, earning the Respect of Regius for time and again, successfully rising to the challenges the old General threw at him.

Spoiler for Personality:

Maj. General William Roland is a laid back, but serious man.
Having long been associated in a system of military, believes that certain aspects of understanding and preparing for warfare should never be loosened, no matter the mood of the population.

He has often called many of the TSAB's higher ranking officers, including Regius himself, Armchair Commanders, after the fact the most, if not all of them have never seen, let alone participated in REAL full scale war. He shares a belief with few that the TSAB is paranoid in its doctrine, and that if someone doesn't at least keep their finger on that pulse, that they would be utterly blinded and inevitably unprepared for a time when the TSAB would have to aknowledge and prepare to defend itself at full scale.

He concerns himself with safety and security measures with redundancies and a doctrine of spreading out vulnerabilities while overlapping strengths. He takes exsquisite pleasure in occaisionally drilling lower ranking TSA personelle in the methods and doctrines of Earth styled non-magical combat... drilling in tactics that translate across the board, intent on making even the lowest ranked mages under his command capable of lasting more than five seconds in a protacted fight against unsavory odds.

Abilities:

SHOOT-MOVE-COMMUNICATE-KILL: (S.M.C.K. or 'Smack')
Roland has and can operate as command for an entire unit. Capable of giving extremely clear orders on where to go, how fast to go, what to do, and how to do it, in a tone that motivates those recieving the orders to do it right, as fast as they can.

SMOKED MEAT:
When feeling insulted, and having the authority over the person who did the insulting, Roland will not hesitate to order the person into an excersize position, and procede to instruct a reprisal excersize routine on that individual until it is obvious they are physically in pain. Often citing lines such as 'Where the brain fails, the body must take up the slack' and 'Mind or Body, whichever one it is, one of them WILL be strong.' He calls this punishment a 'smoking'(Which may or may not refer to the cloud of steam resulting from evaporating sweat from a victim caught in cool or cold weather.)

OLD DOG:
Roland is a SOLDIER, and a Veteran one at that with actual experience. He has learned to effectively move and fight without magic, and is capable of a decent level of direct hand to hand combat when cornered.



PHYSICAL PROFILE ATTRIBUTES 2.8 (D+)
Strength 4
Stamina 3
Speed 3
Reflexes 2 (Down due to Age)
Dexterity 2 (Down due to Age.)

MENTAL PROFILE ATTRIBUTES 5 (A-)
Intelligence 6
Wisdom 6
Judgement 6
Decision Time 7
Creativity 5

MAGIC PROFILE ATTRIBUTES 0 (F)
Magic Capacity 0
Recovery 0
Max Discharge 0

COMBAT PROFILE ATTRIBUTES 4.4 (B)
Magical Attack 0
Magical Defense 0
Battle Option Variability 0
Melee Attack 5
Melee Defense 5
Stress Management 8
Skill 8

BEHAVIOR PROFILE ATTRIBUTES 6 (AA-)
Compassion 4
Loyalty 5
Submission (To Authority) 6
Confidence 7
Charisma 8

BONUS: +.5 Overall rank for High Level Leadership Quality

OVERALL: 3.64 + .5 = 4.14 (B-)
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NOTES: (First Cav.)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/1st_Cav...t_organization

This is tentative, I'll probably need to clean it up somewhat.
But he has to have a decent history to earn the position and rank he has.

[arkhangelsk]

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

I'm having a hard time with the current fights I'm writing; which are the Aurion vs. Hayate mock battle and the Grandis vs. Signum real battle...

Is it too late to comment on this? This looks fun. I am taking a masochistic attitude already to 7Arcs' treatment of Hayate...

Ultimately, the thread decides, and I see that most people are desperately trying to forget the canon in every way possible, so it is going to pass, but for what its worth, here's my more canonically-based take.

Range Attack:
Hayate is almost an all-out range attacker. As opposed to her usual nukes in most engagements, she uses Bloody Dagger and at times, Tesla's Blitzschlag in attacking one-to-one. I'm seriously considering giving her a slightly bigger spell for smaller engagements... but I can only think of Divine Buster (absorbed skill); but it doesn't seem to fit her style at all! I think I should make a new spell... And no, I don't think she would need an eternity just to cast something as simple as Photon Lancers or Divine Shooters if ever. Just a bit slower would do. (around 155% casting time compares to original users)

Quite frankly, this is entirely the wrong approach for Hayate. "Range attack" should be separated as Hectometric and Decametric.

Hayate actually has a precious near Ownership over the Hectometric range covering into the Kilometric. I'm not sure how much h3xx went into the OCs but if we just take canon combat (which this thread is supposed to align to), people that can even SHOOT to the hectometric ranges are rare (never mind actually hitting). It was considered an impossible shot to shoot to ~100m (Ep5 A's). The only other character who undisputedly shot to hectometrics was Dieci (and she's a borg shooting at a helo). Hayate, on the other hand, has that as a regular battle zone.

Without Reinforce, she'll probably lack long-range sensors that will support attacks to the kilometric depth, but a hectometric shoot by eye is still possible (teach her how to use a stadiametric rangefinder so she knows whether to detonate the rounds at 500 or 600m). SO when possible, she should in fact stay at range where her opponent can't even reply and use her huge magical reserve to area bombard her opponent into submission.

Frankly, the best way for Hayate to cover her decametric butt within the bounds of known abilities, IMO, is simply to eliminate easy access to the decametric - the "Wall of Steel" approach. Raise a shield, then Fire Hraesvelgr or Diabolic Emission at her own position. That won't win simulated fights, but in a RL situation will buy time for others to come and pick her chestnuts out of the fire.

Melee Attack:
She's not good. She is NOT good in melee. And it'll stay that way. BUT. It's only in comparison to the likes of Signum and the others. She did say that she was no good. But frankly, I am not buying it wholely. So does she mean that she lacks so much skill that a kid civilian who just happens to know how to use a staff beat her?! HECK NO!!! I've been thinking about it a lot. And I've theorized that she is actually good, if only to be compared to normal people who don't fight in battles instead of Knights who are specialists. So she should already have knowledge to begin with, plus a year of improving upon it with Tesla's help. Is it fine if she actually does better than higher-ranked grunts at staff-fighting?

Theorizing will require the use of at least one canon observation for a base. Since you didn't propose any and I don't remember any, wouldn't fantasizing be more appropriate? They were pretty final with the whole Lose to Carol thing (and no, I don't think she was joking at all given the context - I must wonder what "facial expressions" the pro-joke crowd expected for a non-joke response. Rein is sighing in utter despair, and Teana is desperate to leave because she obviously touched a sore spot). They didn't just restrict it to melee, just one on one (which includes melee).

However, I will grant that given 2 years of work, she could improve to adequacy, but see below.

Physical Defense/Stamina:
She's rather fragile physically, since that's to be expected from her role. Not to mention completely lazing out of her physical training ([sarcasm]Um, hello? Do you even so much as STRETCH in the morning?! Push-ups?![/sarcasm] I know she's the Butaichou there, as well as being limite to A; [which, for all it's worth, held no value other than to write her out effectively off all save two battles {the last one being a lovely chock of vidclips showing Hayate floating around and nothing more}], but c'mon!) in StrikerS while everyone else sans Shamal (nurse/doctor) and Zafira (butler dog) were into so much training every single day for an entire year! But she's still in better shape than most normal people. (You just don't jump down from the top of a vehicle like it was nothing, like shown in StrikerS ep. 2) I'd give her some stamina as well; hopefully within reasonable bounds. I do hope it's fine if I said she's physically tougher than Shamal.

I suppose that's OK, but you might look at it from another angle. It might actually have been less of a character assassination for Hayate to have neglected her melee skills for so long if her body isn't really up to practicing the body moves required for melee. Maybe we don't see her exercising because she gets exhausted within 5 minutes of exercise.

Magical Defense:
Here's the clincher in my story. No matter how much you say you lack in skill and dificulty in processing magic, having a crapload of mana while having weak magical defenses = DOES NOT COMPUTE! Does she really have a hard time tapping into her power so much that she would need an incantation for casting a simple shield?! I sure as hell don't think so and I'm totally not buying it until canon states otherwise. So in my story, her natural magical defenses are very good and hard to crack; at least requiring A-ranked (think Thunder Smasher of loli-Fate without cartridges) or above attack power to so much as properly hurt her minimally. Is it fine?

Actually, it does compute. The canon actually suggests that magical defenses are really more about Proper Construction than Raw Power, which is why Yunno has great shields despite being an A-rank. Since Hayate has problems with magical precision and speed, it is entirely possible that even with lots of power, she cannot construct it into an adequate architecture. You don't need an excess of material to make a strong bridge - you need good design and good construction, otherwise, you have a pile of concrete.

Losing to Caro actually does require severe difficulties in Hayate's magical defense.

Tactical Ability:
Okay... She should be at least smart enough to last against even someone like Tesla for a while. I do hope nobody finds any problems with this. She actually sees thru a number of Aurion's battle plans in the fly.

You are really fighting the canon now... if we blow away all her single combat weaknesses to an emphasis on becoming a Commander, and StrikerS is the result, what is your basis for saying she's going to improve to Good/Excellent in just two extra years.

Speed and Agility:
I'll give her good speed, but not good agility. So flying in a linear path should be no problem while high-speed maneuvering is not good enough so she should compensate with her defenses.

Good speed is fine, but I suggest poor acceleration (which is related to agility) and a slow-ramp up (consider a steam boiler plant versus a gas turbine plant).

Spellcasting:
I gave her Tiara, so she now has an access to some spells by voice command ala-Reinforce. It's fine, right? Tiara's AI is passive, not unlike the original YnS so there should be no RH or Bardiche-like auto-saves for Hayate. Her spellcasting should be marginally better now as well, but she won't compare too well against Aurion since he can cast spells FAST.

I suggest you beef up Tiara. Hayate is locked thanks to canon, but Tiara is your creation. Blame every improvement you want to make in spellcasting and decametric combat on Tiara's "improved magic control".

Originally Posted by Erio

I dont see any problems with this, and in fact I agree with most of what you have here. The thing is, this is just a mock battle - I dont see what's so important about it. In the real battlefield, Hayate shouldnt need to actually fight (especially in close combat, since she is not particularly good at it, and she knows it) if she properly commands her unit, unless absolutely necessary, or her Knights are not with her. What I'm trying to say is, arent you thinking too much about this? She is supposed to be a ranged support, not a melee aggressor, after all. It is what makes her Hayate and not Nanoha.

As I have said before, Hayate CHOSE to be support and to become a Lt. Colonel to lead troops into battle instead of fighting the battles herself. She had the potential to choose whatever path she wanted - to become an Enforcer like Fate, or to become an "Aggressor" like Nanoha - but she chose otherwise. You can give Hayate quite a lot of character development without making her go into the battlefield - and I actually may have a scenario coming with a little of that.

Emphasis is one thing. Not beating Caro is another. Second, a good officer is prepared for all eventualities (such as the enemy having brains of their own, or an unfavorable tactical situation). Third, the ultimate shaft is that she isn't even that good of a commander.

Originally Posted by Erio

But Nanoha is VERY different from Hayate. She is a frontline aggressor and constantly takes part of missions, unlike Hayate, who most of the time sits back and commands her unit, only few times actually leaving HQ for the battle field (when she is needed), as we have seen in StrikerS. Since Aaron's scenarios take place 2 years after StrikerS, then Hayate must be worse than before (as in very rusty), given her position as a Lt. Colonel.

And just to make it clear, my favorite ace is Hayate. While Aaron feels the need to develop her further (something that I also want), I feel the need to make sure she stays as Hayate. One of the reasons why Hayate is my favorite Ace, and I would dare say favorite character, is that she actually has weaknesses. Probably you guys wont feel the same as me, but I feel that Nanoha and Fate are way too perfect. They are both good at everything, they dont make any mistakes, all their decisions are correct, and stuff. They are just 19 years old, and yet there is not much room for character development in regards to their combat abilities, and even power, since they have already reached almost unreachable ranks by TSAB standards (S+ and above). There is just room for developments such as how to become a mother and crap ... at 19 years old ... Not saying that those developments are automatically crap, just that a 19 year old girl should be doing other stuff.

Well, that became a small rant, sorry about that. And for the record, the above was not directed at Keroko - dont want to cause any trouble.

While Aaron made a superb defense here, I'll still like to object to the idea that adult Nanoha and Fate were portrayed as "flawless". When you consider their jobs, all three of them arguably failed miserably. Hayate's failures as a commander are too rehashed in episode threads to recount here (just search for posters "arkhangelsk" or "Mirificus" in those threads and you'll immediately be on a Hayate-bashing discussion)

How much progress did Fate make as an Investigator? None visible. Verossa might make a one line note of Fate and Nakajima's investigation, but from the screen, you might as well conclude that Verossa solved in 5 mintues what Fate couldn't solve for half a year.

Nanoha as a trainer ... well, she was forced to shoot Teana. Ironically, Teana was arguably the best-developed of the four. The rest of them grew in combat skills, but psychologically and tactically they are still... sigh. They don't even have discipline.

In decisions, what about that near-tragic decision to split up inside the Cradle. If what happened could actually be called a success, Hayate is a great commander.

Fate has horrible moral-psychological preparation for combat, as proved when Scarlietti nearly broke her. Only a lame lovey scene saved her from defeat. Pathetic if you ask me.

The difference is that Nanoha and Fate actually had strengths and 7Arcs doesn't seem so intent to make it look like they aren't even trying.

[Jimmy C]

ATC, it's been mentioned repeatedly that Earth is Non-Administratred World 97. This is canon.

[Kha]

Erio: BREAKING ALL BACKLOG WITH OUR HELD HANDS!
Caro: THE SCREAMS OF SCRIN ECHOING THROUGHOUT THE GALAXY!

Both: THE UNISON OF BLACK & WHITE!

VOLTAI-AMPERE!

ORETACHI O DARE DA TO OMOETTE YAGARU?!

Originally Posted by Nightengale

This was funny. Really. Tomoyo = Keroko is one funny thought, simply because it brings up the question who's Sunohara.

<-- *ships Sunomoyo in the anime. Really, Kyoto Animation should've somehow, someway change aspects of Tomoyo's route, Mei's route and Sunohara's route combined and replace Tomoya with Sunohara in Tomoyo's route, rather than that cop-out.*

I'll take Okazaki Tomoya divided by 2 as well, like KimiKiss.

Same here!

As for Keroko's Sunohara, remember those times Keroko'd just bash Kha up for saying the wrong things?

Originally Posted by Nightengale

-_- -__- -___- -____- -______-

It was fine... until the lulz mecha part. That was seriously crack. I can almost accept if you say Voltaire has some sort of jewel on his head in which Caro is required to offer her conscious by floating unconscious there, Voltaire's strength and will obeying her mental link, but actually piloting is...

[Joker]"Why the loong face?" [/Joker]



No actually, I was thinking of a proper one.

This is in reply to everyone who've given great feedback about Eva-Voltaire:

That plug like cockpit and sentai plug suit was to see the limit of mechanization I can go actually, since I feel that it's proper, and that Caro isn't piloting Voltaire, but rather acting like a Pokemon Trainer commanding her Pokemon, but from inside the Pokemon and sometimes fighting along with it like G-Gundam.

Never mind, I'll patch the visuals proper later. We can always fix these things in the DVD right...? ... ... ...



And I didn't want to use the MKR design because that was for later, when Caro used Dragon Soul Summon to bring out Shin-Voltaire, as I feel that would've been a more fitting tribute, not using it on a lesser version of the Dragon Lord.

Shin-Gattai would also then be the another time the kids see each other naked. But I guess they're used to it by then yeah?

*RUNS*

Originally Posted by USB500

The mention of RyuOhKi, Gun x Sword (cue music) and TEH HEALTH DRINK makes me go and

So does this mean Kusuha Caro only needs to use her tonic to win the battle? .

Vice agrees.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Keroko-chan: *a dark aura apears around Keroko* Then I'll have to re-eductate you.

Arcas: O-oi, wait, wait!

*the camera pans out as Keroko-chan advances on Arcas, while at the same time, many Air Force mages feel a chill run down their spine*

Wes: ... Did you feel that?

Tycho: Yes, like a single voice crying out in terror, before suddenly stopping.

The Air Force mages prayed for the poor soul that had just insulted instructor Takamachi Keroko's teachings.

(Bad move Arcas, Keroko takes neglecting her teachings much more violently then Nanoha. )

...

Scratch that, Arcas = Sunohara.

*RUNS*

Originally Posted by Keroko

You mean Tesla and Griffith gaming? Or Tesla dreaming of Keroko-tan?

I think both.

Originally Posted by Keroko

When I started this, I thought 'wow, this profile is surprisingly devoid of crack'

Then I came to the mecha part, and realized I jinxed it.

Remember that firm line I drew? You just stepped over it. Voltaire is a summoned creature, not a mecha. Hell, even Nighty's jewel thing sounds better then going 'lol, mecha'

...and I was looking for it. :3

Patch in a while!

Originally Posted by Keroko

Pray do tell we are not talking about F/SN mana replenishing methods, are we?

Oh of course not! We gotta think of the children! It'll just be... rather intriguing, inneudo-ish but perfectl SFW. I've done that before in a CCS fic, and now I'm applying it, polished and improved, to the Nanohaverse.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Sunomoyo... now that I think about it, that is somethingI'd like to see.

So do I! Seriously, the guy deserves it!

<--- first hand experience.

Originally Posted by Erio

Sounds good to me. Does Artei look differently now, though?

He's still the same grown up Nagi dai Artai.

Btw, there's been another change last night. I gave Kha and Fate more time to develop their ship, therefore making the previous mini-series before Nanoha/Cente Gravia more like real harem anime.

That means, it's all free game, even Nanoha and Keroko included, until they turn 16 and Nanoha/Cente Gravia goes into full swing.

Originally Posted by Erio

"Cente Gravia"... How do you come up with these names...

Who will be Sophia's love interest now?

Bad Latin.

Kha all the way, even into StrikerS, and because of Teana, a lot more open too. :3

Originally Posted by Erio

Who cares? Erio doesnt have to have Kha's blood for his hair to change to white. It would serve as an interesting WTF-ANOTHER-KHA scenario.

And so you thought about Shaman King as well, huh? Nice. The stuff about Shamans sure is crackish though. At least it can be an excuse for how he is able to get along so well with Fried and Garyuu... and maybe other dragons...

...
...
...

[Crack]

Erio's Summon Creature is Ampere, the White Tiger Queen.

Caro can invoke just Voltaire's spirit like a Magic Knight so that he becomes her armor and sword.

Erio, invoking Ampere, would then turn his hair white, apart from changing Barrier Jacket to Knight Armor.

[/Crack]

Good point there! I always knew Erio was good with creatures, like a Shaman of elemental spirits is! I almost got run over by crack of Erio doing a Hao by summoning the Spirit of Fire, but I think Spirit of Thunder, however h4xx, would fit him better.



*RUNS*

Originally Posted by tshouryuu

I see a few references like gun x sword, FMA, Haruhi and megaman battle network i think. Like the rest, I thought the amount of crack would be low until I reached the limit break part... Why oh why must you turn Voltaire into a mecha and an Evangelion at that? :facepalm: Couldn't you use something else like the Mashin (Rune Gods) from Magic Knight Rayearth? Even though those are also mecha, its at least isn't a science-type mecha.

THe LIMIT BREAK has always been cracky, just to keep the trend.

And we have a winner! You hit the jackpot with the Mashin; I wanted to use them for a later arc after StrikerS.

Originally Posted by Estavali

• Regarding Kha's idea with Voltaire, I second tshouryuu's idea of altering him after MKR's Mashin. It's in line with the Mahou Shoujo concept, and still allows you to play with mecha ideas (somewhat). Maybe you can even consider how Wataru "pilots" Ryujinmaru in Majin Eiyuden as well. Of course, the choice is still yours.

I know.

Originally Posted by Estavali

Ah... Since I'm here:

Spoiler for Random WIP stuff:

Unlimited Blade Works - Utopia

The greatest masterpiece of Weyland Highwind, Aerith's greatest Weaponmaster, a semi-sentient Reality Marble that strives eternally to create the ultimate sword. Contained within it all the resources and means to achieve such a goal, as well as Weyland's own beliefs, his dreams and his regrets, it was said that Weyland used his own life as a sacrifice to activate his final work. An eternal dream, an ambitious attempt to cheat the limits of time, in search for the highest level of perfection in the art of weapon crafting.

The Keyblades are the only paths to this fiery Paradise, and all these are guarded by the one manifestation of Weyland's ideals as a Weaponmaster. A snow-maned maiden with eyes of the purest flame, wielding his creation with the accumalated skill of all humanity in her small hands. She is the soul of his blades, her frame slender yet tough as steel, with fiery blood coursing through her veins. Undaunted by life nor fearing death, silently bearing the pain of her creator's dreams and sins. Yet, would those hands ever grasp anything but death and emptiness?

So she prayed.... to be led to the True Paradise.


And finally.... after long years of sleepless nights....

Her prayers were answered.

"My life is Unlimited Blade Works. And where I stand, Utopia unfolds."

KO-ARCHER!!!

OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG...

Originally Posted by Estavali

• @Folks that like Archer-ko: We can't have Archer without his imouto, no? Wonder what Kha's reaction will be .

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Archer-ko? Kha's imouto?

Originally Posted by FieryAeon

Now that I think of it, why didn't Kha port her over?

[QUOTE=LoweGear;1410416]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

ARCHER-KO!!!!!! KAKKOI!!!

Good thing I held back when I did; now Kha's real imouto can appear under someone else's creation!

In case no one did, this was the secret clause I prepared:

Spoiler for Spoiler! Spoiler!:

Ko-Archer is Number 7, Settie, of the Cinque-gen Sentokijin. When the culling of Renault occured, she was pregnant with Tou's second child and even though she was a sentokijin, hormones still messed with her enough to cause her downfall.

That was the meaning behind her last words, "I've not been a good mother..." It refered to Kha, but it also was a double message that Tou picked up: She failed to protect their unborn child.

However, Jail managed to save the embryo that would become Settie, and watched her grow slowly in a tank, learning how does the Alhazredian cyborg systems replicate and hopefully discover the secret behind creating the perfect cyborg like Kia.

Later in StrikerS, Sette, upon discovering that she was going to be replaced by Settie, broke the tube and almost killed Settie if Tre hadn't intervened. That delayed Settie's return and there might have been permanent damage, so Jail abandoned plans to replace Sette on basis that "Settie's ruthlessness could've never equalled Sette's".

Number 7 is also the sentokijin with Slaughter Arms. Fitting for Ko-Archer, ne?

Even though Ko-Archer appears, I guess she isn't Kha's imouto, ne?

Originally Posted by Keroko

Fate's main weakness seems to be defense. We hardly ever see her tanking full blows, and if she does its mostly back support.

Originally Posted by Keroko

It started out as an ambitious idea of Kha to rewrite the enitre StrikerS story into something that could be concidered a good season, rather then a good season, but filled with a lot of plotholes/scripterrors etc. etc. Somewhere along the line though... it seems it turned into one giant crackfest.

In hindsight, we should have seen that coming from the start...

Hey have some faith. It's only crack at the character level. My plots, apart from inneudoes, have always been very original...

Originally Posted by Fuyu no Sora

So that's just Kha being Kha and turning anything he sets his sight on into crack, huh?

Ok, I get it now. Thanks Keroko-kun

Te- OI! MATTE!

She's gone off with the wrong impression... T_T

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Neither am I. Though...

In retrospect, WHAT THE HECK DID I JUST TYPE THIS EARLY MORNING?!?!?!

Oh my God! This is too embarrassing!

*hides head in ground ala-ostritch*

It was tiredness! I was just temporarily loosened by the force of Income Taxation...>.> beforehand! My screws were just loosened! I'm inooccceeeeeeennnntttt!!!!!!!!!! T_T

Aaron is swimming in a river in Egypt.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

And do I see a certain bear around here back after so long?

*Yuuno sneezes for the umpteenth time*

Yuuno: I'm started to be really bothered by this bug.

Arf: You know, it's a 97th superstition that when you sneeze, someone is talking bad about you.

Yuuno:

Originally Posted by LoweGear

S&W: *lying in smoking crater*

Such a lovely sce-

*Mai >>> S&W*

Mai: Urusai.

... ureshii.

Taiyo: Ano... What did that last bit mean?

<--- Can't speak his mother tongue.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

That it does

"People call this, the GRAHAM SPECIAL!!!"

Graham should come back and show the Aces who's the real deal. After all, having retired means he's no longer tied to a desk!

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Whiffy indeed

I thought Caro'd be tame compared to your other Rebuilds until PLUG SUIT CARO FTW!!!!

*ehem*

Nice refs there, although the Winry and GunxSword ref caught me off guard

Although I agree, even I find the thought of Caro piloting Voltaire as a mech strange

Slight nit though... couldn't you have found a BETTER IMAGE of Asuka in a plugsuit?

*runs*

I'm working more on the Rockbell Arm and the other things she can do with it, but that'll be later when Kha recalls his time helping one Alphonse Elric.

Yeah it's supposed to be changed. The patch will show.

Thank you.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Spoiler for Why not both?:

Unfortunately the only one of its kind I found... they seem to like Chao in her plugsuit more

*runs*

Karin: Wang Liu Mei and... Who's that?
"Wang":

Originally Posted by LoweGear

I SHALL SET ASIDE REASON WITH MY RECKLESSNESS!!!

Although hell no... as you can see, he's still alive isn't he?

Turing: You forget, I'm immortal

In the Nanohaverse, the little girls are really dangerous, and the old men really never die.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Ah, you mean something like this?

Spoiler for MOERO RESCUE TAMASHII!!!!:

Sou. And including Erio and Lutecia they are the Summon-rangers.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

True <_<

Asagi: But did you know, many of the the female sentais were played by MALE stunt actors? Like Yuuichi Hachisuka who plays 10 female rangers including MagiMother and BoukenYellow

Why that tone remind me of Nagi doing her end of episode DID YOU KNOW?

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Choushinsei then?

Spoiler for Have a Dolcross:

Erio & Caro: Voltai-Ampere is not enough! We need Dolcross power, now!

Lutecia: Hakutenoh, Zord Soul Summon! MODE CHANGE!

All 3: SYMMETRICAL DOCKING!!!

SUMMONER MEGAZORD!

*runs very very fast*

Originally Posted by LoweGear

*Kha wakes up in boat*

Kha: Not again...

Mai: ...

You're coming with me.

We're going to Hell.

Kha: Looks like the frequent flyer miles earned me a spot in the boat this time...

Originally Posted by LoweGear

BOTH, though more on the former

Tesla and Griffith make a cute cou-

*radio static*

Lowe? Lowe! Come in!

...

Did Keroko-tan get a Throne?

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Yes, we need more girls in mini-skirted cheongsams

*runs faster*

"Your Command is my Wish."

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

ATC, it's been mentioned repeatedly that Earth is Non-Administratred World 97. This is canon.

How the hell do I keep getting it backwards?

*Haruhi DAMMIT!*

EDIT: Fixed.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

FIXED

...

...

*Diabolic Emission >>> Lowe*

Fate... A-Cup...

...
...
...

Hehe...

I guess I've been a submissive boke for too long...

Time to show you my variation of Unlimited Saber Works...

TASTE THY HOT BLOOD!

*LoweGear is sent flying*

[Kagerou]

Originally Posted by arkhangelsk

I
The difference is that Nanoha and Fate actually had strengths and 7Arcs doesn't seem so intent to make it look like they aren't even trying.

In regards to the whole thing, I really only have to say this: The reason that these things seem ridiculous to us is because we at least have a clue when it comes to stuff like this. 7arcs doesn't know shit about shit when it comes to tactics and whatnot; they only did what they thought was right, which, as people like me and you can see, is utter crap.

For the splitting up thing, if it were me... I think I'd allow it, but not solo. That'll get you killed. I mean, I know the ship is big, but bring some reinforcements! Squads of 4-6 each covering both ends IMO, would have been about right.

[AdmiralTigerclaw]

O_o?


*Kills channel feed*

In regards to the whole thing, I really only have to say this: The reason that these things seem ridiculous to us is because we at least have a clue when it comes to stuff like this. 7arcs doesn't know shit about shit when it comes to tactics and whatnot; they only did what they thought was right, which, as people like me and you can see, is utter crap.

If only we could storm the Island Nation and give them pointers...

For the splitting up thing, if it were me... I think I'd allow it, but not solo. That'll get you killed. I mean, I know the ship is big, but bring some reinforcements! Squads of 4-6 each covering both ends IMO, would have been about right.

You mean?! *GASP!*

Bring in RED SHIRTS?!

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by USB500

Ah, it would be a part of her plan to conquer the world have a cosplay party. In before Desu Lamia Signum.

But as always, details will be revealed through our DVD Special.

*runs*

We shall be waiting

*runs*

Originally Posted by USB500

*cue Let's Go!! Rider Kick*

*cries blood* I APPROVE OF SUCH CLOTHES-RIPPING TRANSFORMATION!!!!

Naked Fate & Signum >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> USB500

Chrono's recommendation should be approved by Senate

*RUNS*

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

Okay, tentative, but I did a little research to line up some things while working on Roland.

Spoiler for Maj. General William Roland:

Maj. General William Roland


(Note, Roland wearing 'personal' clothing rather than TSAB Uniform.)

"William Roland"
CALLSIGN: Steamroller
RANK: Major General (Two Star)
POSITION: TSAB Base Commander, Abenobashi Airforce Base, head of BEST FORCE.
AGE: 37
MAGE CLASS: B

Spoiler for History:

Will STEAMROLLER Rolland hails from Non-Administrated World 97, Earth.
Before his introduction to the TSA, he was already a military man in his early twenties. Operating in the United States Army First Cavalry Division stationed out of Fort Hood Texas.

As a tank Commander of Second Brigade (Blackjack Brigade), First Batallion, Fifth Cavalry Regiment, the BLACK KNIGHTS, he was deployed to Iraq in (Earth Time) October 1990 as part of Operation Desert Shield/Desert Storm

On 20 February 1991, the brigade launched the first ground strike into Iraq with "Operation Knight Strike". Shortly after this, Roland's first encounter with the TSAB was recorded.

Unrelated to Roland up until this point, an unidentified Iraqi commander of the Republican Guard had somehow managed to obtain a hazzardous Lost Logia Artifact, and had been detected by TSA intelligence some time prior as a potential threat. During 'Knight Strike', the Tank Unit Roland was part of encountered this commander and was engaged. Realizing the Republican Guard commander was indeed using the Lost Logia as a weapon, the TSAB cruiser on station decided to intervene.

TSA Enforcer units deployed a barrier under containment orders just as the engagement began, preventing the panicked communications from getting when the unit was 'engaged by an unidentified weapon.' Several tanks took damage or were destroyed in the crossfire before Enforcers could arrive to assist. However, even the enforcers took some casualties during the intervention, due to the powerful nature of the artifact.

Roland was noted, not only for providing immediate medical attention to the injured Enforcers, but despite having a damaged tank, sunk a shot directly into the position of the Iraqi commander, neutralizing him.
Details noted that Roland had teamed up with one of the Enforcers to act as eyes for him while he took this shot.

Enforcers recovered the artifact from the dead commander, and held a field debrief instructing all those present never to speak about what they encountered since Earth was not prepared for this. All pressent agreed, citing that nobody would actually believe them, and fabricated that the whole thing was a messy friendly fire incident. The Enforcers departed and the barrier dropped.

Two years later, after Roland's discharge from the US Army, he was contacted again by TSAB Enforcers and requested to join for his commendable performance. Sensing a whole new 'universe' of oppertunity, he accepted.

Roland was a shock to the TSA's Beauraucratic System. He both understood how Beauracracy worked, and how to function in a unit, or in charge of a unit in combat far more than other Mages his rank.
Determined to either see him fail and be swept under the matt, or see him set a new example for the TSA Ground Forces, Regius threw demanding assignments at Roland...

Despite having nothing even ressembling magic, his performance was deemed quite productive. Able to manage, instruct, lead, and follow, he flew up the ranks, only occaisionally roadblocked by Regius' steadfast Iron will, wanting Roland to perform above and beyond what was expected of other ground forces.
When Roland finally made the rank of General, Regius gave him a new assignment.

As head of the offshore TSA Test and Disposal Facility at McGreggor Archipelligo, and the old Mid-Childan airbase there, he was to attempt to clean up its act.
William Rolland managed to aquire a second star after successfully cleaning up the facility's act in two years, earning the Respect of Regius for time and again, successfully rising to the challenges the old General threw at him.

Spoiler for Personality:

Maj. General William Roland is a laid back, but serious man.
Having long been associated in a system of military, believes that certain aspects of understanding and preparing for warfare should never be loosened, no matter the mood of the population.

He has often called many of the TSAB's higher ranking officers, including Regius himself, Armchair Commanders, after the fact the most, if not all of them have never seen, let alone participated in REAL full scale war. He shares a belief with few that the TSAB is paranoid in its doctrine, and that if someone doesn't at least keep their finger on that pulse, that they would be utterly blinded and inevitably unprepared for a time when the TSAB would have to aknowledge and prepare to defend itself at full scale.

He concerns himself with safety and security measures with redundancies and a doctrine of spreading out vulnerabilities while overlapping strengths. He takes exsquisite pleasure in occaisionally drilling lower ranking TSA personelle in the methods and doctrines of Earth styled non-magical combat... drilling in tactics that translate across the board, intent on making even the lowest ranked mages under his command capable of lasting more than five seconds in a protacted fight against unsavory odds.

Abilities:

SHOOT-MOVE-COMMUNICATE-KILL: (S.M.C.K. or 'Smack')
Roland has and can operate as command for an entire unit. Capable of giving extremely clear orders on where to go, how fast to go, what to do, and how to do it, in a tone that motivates those recieving the orders to do it right, as fast as they can.

SMOKED MEAT:
When feeling insulted, and having the authority over the person who did the insulting, Roland will not hesitate to order the person into an excersize position, and procede to instruct a reprisal excersize routine on that individual until it is obvious they are physically in pain. Often citing lines such as 'Where the brain fails, the body must take up the slack' and 'Mind or Body, whichever one it is, one of them WILL be strong.' He calls this punishment a 'smoking'(Which may or may not refer to the cloud of steam resulting from evaporating sweat from a victim caught in cool or cold weather.)

OLD DOG:
Roland is a SOLDIER, and a Veteran one at that with actual experience. He has learned to effectively move and fight without magic, and is capable of a decent level of direct hand to hand combat when cornered.



PHYSICAL PROFILE ATTRIBUTES 2.8 (D+)
Strength 4
Stamina 3
Speed 3
Reflexes 2 (Down due to Age)
Dexterity 2 (Down due to Age.)

MENTAL PROFILE ATTRIBUTES 5 (A-)
Intelligence 6
Wisdom 6
Judgement 6
Decision Time 7
Creativity 5

MAGIC PROFILE ATTRIBUTES 0 (F)
Magic Capacity 0
Recovery 0
Max Discharge 0

COMBAT PROFILE ATTRIBUTES 4.4 (B)
Magical Attack 0
Magical Defense 0
Battle Option Variability 0
Melee Attack 5
Melee Defense 5
Stress Management 8
Skill 8

BEHAVIOR PROFILE ATTRIBUTES 6 (AA-)
Compassion 4
Loyalty 5
Submission (To Authority) 6
Confidence 7
Charisma 8

BONUS: +.5 Overall rank for High Level Leadership Quality

OVERALL: 3.64 + .5 = 4.14 (B-)
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NOTES: (First Cav.)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/1st_Cav...t_organization

This is tentative, I'll probably need to clean it up somewhat.
But he has to have a decent history to earn the position and rank he has.

...

...



John Wayne?!?!?!?!?

Originally Posted by Kha

Erio: BREAKING ALL BACKLOG WITH OUR HELD HANDS!
Caro: THE SCREAMS OF SCRIN ECHOING THROUGHOUT THE GALAXY!

Both: THE UNISON OF BLACK & WHITE!

VOLTAI-AMPERE!

ORETACHI O DARE DA TO OMOETTE YAGARU?!

ELECTRIFYING

Originally Posted by Kha

In case no one did, this was the secret clause I prepared:

Spoiler for Spoiler! Spoiler!:

Ko-Archer is Number 7, Settie, of the Cinque-gen Sentokijin. When the culling of Renault occured, she was pregnant with Tou's second child and even though she was a sentokijin, hormones still messed with her enough to cause her downfall.

That was the meaning behind her last words, "I've not been a good mother..." It refered to Kha, but it also was a double message that Tou picked up: She failed to protect their unborn child.

However, Jail managed to save the embryo that would become Settie, and watched her grow slowly in a tank, learning how does the Alhazredian cyborg systems replicate and hopefully discover the secret behind creating the perfect cyborg like Kia.

Later in StrikerS, Sette, upon discovering that she was going to be replaced by Settie, broke the tube and almost killed Settie if Tre hadn't intervened. That delayed Settie's return and there might have been permanent damage, so Jail abandoned plans to replace Sette on basis that "Settie's ruthlessness could've never equalled Sette's".

Number 7 is also the sentokijin with Slaughter Arms. Fitting for Ko-Archer, ne?

Even though Ko-Archer appears, I guess she isn't Kha's imouto, ne?

Oh my head...

Originally Posted by Kha

*Yuuno sneezes for the umpteenth time*

Yuuno: I'm started to be really bothered by this bug.

Arf: You know, it's a 97th superstition that when you sneeze, someone is talking bad about you.

Yuuno:

Originally Posted by Kha

Taiyo: Ano... What did that last bit mean?

<--- Can't speak his mother tongue.

It mean's she's glad

Mai: ...

*watches Emili and Naomi*

... suteki...

Graham should come back and show the Aces who's the real deal. After all, having retired means he's no longer tied to a desk!

And he'll show them the power of a Being that Surpasses Asura!!!

Originally Posted by Kha

I'm working more on the Rockbell Arm and the other things she can do with it, but that'll be later when Kha recalls his time helping one Alphonse Elric.

Alphonse? HERE?

Originally Posted by Kha

Karin: Wang Liu Mei and... Who's that?
"Wang":

Originally Posted by Kha

In the Nanohaverse, the little girls are really dangerous, and the old men really never die.

Regius: Speak for yourself

Originally Posted by Kha

Sou. And including Erio and Lutecia they are the Summon-rangers.

Asagi: Tsukaima Sentai Shoukangers?

Originally Posted by Kha

Erio & Caro: Voltai-Ampere is not enough! We need Dolcross power, now!

Lutecia: Hakutenoh, Zord Soul Summon! MODE CHANGE!

All 3: SYMMETRICAL DOCKING!!!

SUMMONER MEGAZORD!

*runs very very fast*

Originally Posted by Kha

Lowe? Lowe! Come in!

...

Did Keroko-tan get a Throne?

I think she did

Originally Posted by Kha

"Your Command is my Wish."

Originally Posted by Kha

Fate... A-Cup...

...
...
...

Hehe...

I guess I've been a submissive boke for too long...

Time to show you my variation of Unlimited Saber Works...

TASTE THY HOT BLOOD!

*LoweGear is sent flying*

Now that's a fiiiiiiiiiirst....

*dissapears into night sky*

[Kha]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Chrono's recommendation should be approved by Senate

*RUNS*

If that's the case, that means the Brains did something right for once.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

ELECTRIFYING

It was Voltaire's fault.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Oh my head...

"Drink more electrolytes. Battery water is a good start."

Originally Posted by LoweGear

It mean's she's glad

Mai: ...

*watches Emili and Naomi*

... suteki...

Gwen... Emili... Naomi... In a room.

Very very dangerous.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

And he'll show them the power of a Being that Surpasses Asura!!!

As long we don't mind an old man taking 10G turns I'm game for bringing him in as part of the Field Fighters. They fight AMFs see.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Alphonse? HERE?

One of the many transdimensional characters that we'll never see and that Kha has stolen from.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Regius: Speak for yourself

I forgot, when they do die, it's more epic.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Asagi: Tsukaima Sentai Shoukangers?

Caro, Erio, Lutecia:

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Now that's a fiiiiiiiiiirst....

*dissapears into night sky*

Yes... By progressing through Fate Stay Night at unlimited amounts of times within a sec, uncovering more and more of the hidden pictures, the sheer dere-Saka moegaton yields will blow your mind, rendering you completely devoid of fighting will! Your innate desires will consume you! And then you shall DIE as despair sets in! HAHAHAHAHA...!


~~~New Intelligence Data Updated~~~


I made some changes to Caro's problematic Limiter Break using what I dreamed of originally, and from the suggestions made. Here's the sample:

Spoiler for Limiter Break:

LIMITER BREAK: Princess of Voltaire

A mark of a great summoner is the closeness he/she is to her chosen guardian, and the best summoner and summons fight side-by-side as one unit.

After summoning Voltaire, Caro gattai’s with Voltaire, jettisoning her Barrier Jacket completely and materializing on a special saddle within an undetermined location inside Voltaire, assumably in a closed reality within Voltaire's gem on his head. A better example of this saddle in action can be found within this ancient video of Midget and her friends using summon creatures when they were younger.

(I was forced to bring that design forward. Thanks to Nighty for the head gem idea, and of course Midget. )

This gives Caro the ability to share knowledge and boosts with Voltaire and at the same time allow Voltaire to protect Caro, allowing him to focus fully on the prey. And he needed to, as Lutecia did the same.

As the pilot of Voltaire, Caro can help Voltaire with whatever tricks she picked up from watching Kha and Erio practice, allowing her to wrestle Lutecia’s summons to the ground twice. They also gain access to several new skills:


Rastaban Beam - Energy beams are launched from the eyes, after Caro stammers the spell “Ra-ra-ra RASTABAN BEAMUU!!!”

Laevanteinn– Voltaire summons his blade from his tail by yelling, “Howl, Laevanteinn!”, then charges to attack.

Fire Breath – Voltaire blasts the enemy with a column of fire similar to a Divine Buster.

Scale Fire – Voltaire unleashes his scales like shurikens in all directions. They then catch fire and speed towards targets under his control.


Caro knows that Voltaire has a companion spirit, Ampere the White Tiger Queen, and after growing to trust Erio, she and Voltaire agree to choose Erio as Ampere’s bearer. However, the boy has to win the capricious spirit’s favor before she agrees to be in contract to Erio.

Voltaire noted that, at the end of his battle as he was returning to his astral plane, he commented that Caro had grown much stronger than when she first called him to make a contract, and someday, he hopes that she can use Dragon Soul Summon on bigger things. This makes her recall that Voltaire had another form, which the Elder called Shin-Voltaire, and she promised to the vanishing creature that she’ll strive to attain that, so he could once again “Voltaire can dance his dance in the sky.”

Later, when Erio proved his worth to Ampere, Erio, Caro, Ampere and Voltaire can gattai into a powerful, summon creature that no living person has seen, and that the Lu-Lushe villagers call by only one word out of sheer reverence:

Jin.

Is this better?

[dkellis]

I'm generally up for plugging my own story, linked in my sig: Lyrical Babel. It's still a working title, since I can't come up with anything catchier.

Problem is that I'm just about two-thirds of the way through Chapter 3, and it's getting even more talky. It's pretty much a pure infodump, with the first half being a meeting between the 37th and Verossa, and the second half an explanation of that meeting. I need to get that information out, but I don't know how else to do it without too much filler.

-

Personally, my reasons for not replying to works are just as follows:

Chiefly, I'm used to giving actual detailed feedback. This means that every single word will be scrutinized, and I'll point out every spelling or grammatical error. I'll point out trivial plot holes, argue about writing styles, and generally take the whole thing very seriously. (Mind you, I also make suggestions for improvement; if I can't personally think of a way to improve something, even if I don't like it, I leave it be.)

That approach does not seem suited for this thread.

I usually keep my opinions to myself, because even though I'd be overjoyed if someone did the same to me, I don't know if anyone else here will be as welcoming of having their hard work ripped to shreds. And if they happen to be having a Bad Day, I don't want to be the one they take it out on.

In addition, I'm pretty much the opposite of a military nut, in that I don't personally feel comfortable with the whole military direction the Nanoha-verse took with StrikerS, and I don't like the inherent implication of all the weapons and tactics, that they are meant for war. It may be justified defense, but it's conflict all the same. Conflict in which people get hurt, when everything is solved at the negotiating table anyway. The only times they aren't are wars of genocide, which is far too heavy for me to read about.

It's a personal thing.

And finally, I've mentioned before many times, starting from my very first post in this thread (which I hijacked and changed anyway), but in a lot of the works I'm seeing, there seems to be an inherent understanding that we know what significance certain references hold.

I have nothing against references, but I do have something against calling them references when they're actually crossovers. If you have to tell someone "go Google/Wikipedia it", then it's a crossover. If you have to copy-and-paste most of it from Wikipedia yourself, then it's a crossover.

Crossovers require knowledge of both (or more) series. I'm here because I expected MSLN stories with original characters, rather than MSLN/some mecha series I've never watched stories. I'll read the former, but will feel completely lost with the latter.

There's a quick rule of thumb I've come up with to see whether something is a crossover:

One of the first things I've learned to do when posting fanfiction on a site (ie after I've already written the thing) is to add a "disclaimer", saying that the characters and setting are not my property, but are instead the property of Mainframe Entertainment (ReBoot) or CLAMP (Card Captor Sakura) or Seven Arcs (MSLN) or whatever. It's legally dubious, and does not actually protect us from a determined anti-fanfic creator, but at least it shows willing.

So. If the disclaimer for your story goes something like "MSLN and its characters and settings are property of Seven Arcs" and ends thereabouts, it's not a crossover. If, however, you have to add more "property of" clauses, then it's a crossover.

-

Actual replies time.

Originally Posted by tshouryuu

I really hope you are not asking me for the meaning cos I can't really explain it that well. I'll try to explain their "views". These extremists advocate stricter laws, usage of lost logia, using hostile force to bring in the non-administrative worlds etc. They think that the TSAB itself has become weak in part due to the actions of the three admirals and it has become nothing but an over glorified police force and an ineffective one at that often citing the events in MSLN S1 and S2 and how ineffective most of the time the TSAB forces are. So ineffective that they have to rely on children to fight their battles for them. They believe that more should be done to strengthen the TSAB so that any threats can be more effectively taken care of. They fully support people like Regius who they think did the correct thing and think that it was a terrible shame that he got murdered.

Mostly I wanted to know why "left-wing", since, at least in the modern interpretation, what you described is not very left-wing, but is usually seen to be right-wing (not due to definitions, but because of politicians who identify as right-wing). Now, historically (not very old history, too) some politicians (in various countries) who are technically "left-wing" have expressed similar sentiments, so it's not incorrect as such, but you're either going to have to explain what sort of "left-wing" you mean, or avoid loaded political terms altogether.

It's a semantics thing. Your description there is enough for me.

Edit: Looks like this idea is rather useless now since a few people think that an external organization is a better choice. Back to the drawing board I guess....

An external organization is "better", in my view, mostly because it requires less dancing around potential plot holes. An internal rogue faction could work, but it has all the problems of answering why they haven't gotten caught or even suspected yet, and how they got that far without someone accidentally revealing some secret.

The problem with a conspiracy is that the members all need to be completely dedicated to their cause, since it takes just one traitor to blow the whole thing. Yes, the traitor may not survive their treachery, but by then it's too late. Therefore, the conspiracy needs to have as many of the following as possible: high-ranking (and thus "above suspicion") conspirators, fanatical devotees to the cause, and as few members as possible. The more people who are involved, the more likely a secret will get out.

As for the plan, well, after they subjugate the non-administered worlds, who's going to govern them and stop them from rebelling? How are they going to go about the conquest in the first place? Taking just Earth as an example, we have the much-dreaded projectile weapons, and we also have nukes, as well as military leaders short-sighted enough to want to use them. So before they take over the non-administered world, they're going to need all the resources of the TSAB and at least some non-aggression from the TSAB's allies like Saint Church. Which means some sort of building up period, since, yanno, they'll just have finished a civil war.

This is why I postulated a leader, who is charismatic enough to create those fanatics, and convince the high-ranking personnel that it would all work out, despite the obvious illegality and immense impracticality of the whole thing.

But since that leader needs to go about creating this conspiracy in the first place, they're obviously not charismatic enough to just take over the TSAB by words rather than by conflict.

This, incidentally, could work anyway, as evidenced by the coup d'etats in our own Earth history. But the end results of the coups tend not to be stable enough to go looking for trouble elsewhere, as opposed to keeping the peace at home.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Fate's main weakness seems to be defense. We hardly ever see her tanking full blows, and if she does its mostly back support.

Random side-note:

In City of Heroes, one of my characters is a Super Reflexes character, which relies on "defense", in this case meaning "dodging attacks" (the other damage mitigation techniques are Damage Resistance, a la "Your blows are as nothing to me", and Health Regeneration, a la Wolverine). In other words, her main source of survival is Not Getting Hit. And she really does it very well.

The problem is when the opponents get lucky. There's always a 5% chance to hit, and if those one-in-twenty chances are strung together, then she's doomed.

I see Fate as something like that: if she's good and lucky, the opponent will never hit her, and she can engage in melee all she wants. But one very lucky hit, especially in Sonic Form, and she's down.

See also: Ninja Blink-tanks in FFXI, which, in roleplay terms, kind of operates under the same principle. And then there's the Dexterity stat in D&D, especially coupled with a feat or two preventing flat-footed attacks: "A god-stat by any other name..."

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

But I earned a sort of honor on Spacebattles. I have been described as one, that when I win, I win HARD, and when I fail, I fail hard. I have no centerpoint.

EPIC People.
"When you win, it's an epic win, when you fail, it's an epic fail... but either way, it's still EPIC!"

I'm still shaking my head over "Months have nothing to do with Lunar cycles."

Fail hard indeed.

[USB500]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

It mean's she's glad

Mai: ...

*watches Emili and Naomi*

... suteki...

Originally Posted by Kha

Gwen... Emili... Naomi... In a room.

Very very dangerous.

I'd like to see this.

*hides the camera and runs*

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Originally Posted by Kha

I made some changes to Caro's problematic Limiter Break using what I dreamed of originally, and from the suggestions made. Here's the sample:

Spoiler for Limiter Break:

LIMITER BREAK: Princess of Voltaire

A mark of a great summoner is the closeness he/she is to her chosen guardian, and the best summoner and summons fight side-by-side as one unit.

After summoning Voltaire, Caro gattai’s with Voltaire, jettisoning her Barrier Jacket completely and materializing on a special saddle within an undetermined location inside Voltaire, assumably in a closed reality within Voltaire's gem on his head. A better example of this saddle in action can be found within this ancient video of Midget and her friends using summon creatures when they were younger.

(I was forced to bring that design forward. Thanks to Nighty for the head gem idea, and of course Midget. )

This gives Caro the ability to share knowledge and boosts with Voltaire and at the same time allow Voltaire to protect Caro, allowing him to focus fully on the prey. And he needed to, as Lutecia did the same.

As the pilot of Voltaire, Caro can help Voltaire with whatever tricks she picked up from watching Kha and Erio practice, allowing her to wrestle Lutecia’s summons to the ground twice. They also gain access to several new skills:


Rastaban Beam - Energy beams are launched from the eyes, after Caro stammers the spell “Ra-ra-ra RASTABAN BEAMUU!!!”

Laevanteinn– Voltaire summons his blade from his tail by yelling, “Howl, Laevanteinn!”, then charges to attack.

Fire Breath – Voltaire blasts the enemy with a column of fire similar to a Divine Buster.

Scale Fire – Voltaire unleashes his scales like shurikens in all directions. They then catch fire and speed towards targets under his control.


Caro knows that Voltaire has a companion spirit, Ampere the White Tiger Queen, and after growing to trust Erio, she and Voltaire agree to choose Erio as Ampere’s bearer. However, the boy has to win the capricious spirit’s favor before she agrees to be in contract to Erio.

Voltaire noted that, at the end of his battle as he was returning to his astral plane, he commented that Caro had grown much stronger than when she first called him to make a contract, and someday, he hopes that she can use Dragon Soul Summon on bigger things. This makes her recall that Voltaire had another form, which the Elder called Shin-Voltaire, and she promised to the vanishing creature that she’ll strive to attain that, so he could once again “Voltaire can dance his dance in the sky.”

Later, when Erio proved his worth to Ampere, Erio, Caro, Ampere and Voltaire can gattai into a powerful, summon creature that no living person has seen, and that the Lu-Lushe villagers call by only one word out of sheer reverence:

Jin.

Is this better?

Let me see.....

I just noticed that Ampere is Koryuoh to Erio as Voltaire is Ryukooh is to Caro. And the gattai scene kind of reminds me of this very old animated series

Well, other than that, I can see that it's a bit more organized and less "chaotic" this time.

[LoweGear]

More of 'Honest Heart' Mayura Labatt's profile, this time with the 4th update in her profile:

Spells and Abilities

Spoiler for length:

Offensive Spells:

Mayura’s skillset is very similar to Asagi’s as a fellow alumni of Class 0061-Q, including in the use of Impulse Spells and auxiliary spells.

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“You won’t….”

“Copypasta time!”

“Oh boy…”

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Force -

In martial combat, one requires physical strength and power to deliver the energy required for impact. The most basic spell for many Neo-Belkan practitioners, and also the easiest to learn, is the “Force” spell, which is a basic spell to externally enhance the wielder’s physical strength. This is achieved using a combination of external levitation (and in some cases, Midchilda-style Barrel Rings), which provide additional aid and support on a mage’s arms or legs. This grants a mage extra physical power in lifting heavy weapons, or further enhancing the power behind a strike.

Blast –

Another basic Neo-Belkan spell, “Blast” is a “static kinetic energy” spell applied at a weapon’s impact point, which multiplies the kinetic energy behind a physical blow without the requirement of adding extra momentum or mass. In combat this significantly improves the damage potential of a normally kinetically weak blow, like a punch.

Although the advantages are considerable, the Blast spell creates significant kinetic energy backlash at the item it is used on, whether a weapon or the mage itself. For this reason, application of this spell is most ideal on sturdy, blunt and dense objects with a large surface area on the impact point, like mallets, clubs and hammers, to better absorb and dissipate the backlash. Impact dissipation spells can also be applied to further reduce the backlash’s negative effects.

Sword –

The third of the basic spells, “Sword” is a “focus energy” spell, which enhances a cutting blade or piercing head by reinforcing the material integrity of the cutting area, and also by absorbing kinetic energy on impact and focusing it on the cutting edge. A blade enhanced by this spell can cut through extra-hard and reinforced objects with minimal effort, and this spell can be further enhanced by Force for improved results.

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“Trust me, there’s still new content here…”

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While Asagi specializes in the Sword spell, Mayura’s proficiency is in the Blast Spell, casting it to enhance the power of her kicks and punches, and in combination with Force Impulse spell her power is increased dramatically. This power is shockingly displayed in demonstration routines, with Mayura having been known create a “squash-head” effect through 10 inches of military-grade steel armor plate, where the powerful concussive impact from Mayura’s fist causes a large spalling of metal to rip and eject itself on the other side, and she has been known to pulverize up to 15-inches of solid concrete.

It is noted that Mayura requires her Gekichanger to perform these feats of power, using its Recoil Return ability to prevent her hand form taking too much damage. Even then Mayura takes great care in overpowering her Blast Impulse-enhanced attacks to minimize strain on her body.

Mayura is also proficient with the Sword Impulse spell, using it on her only bladed weapon, the Super GekiClaw, though with less efficiency than with her other impulse spells.

Kageki Impulse -

Asides from these three basic spells, Mayura has also created her own “Impulse” spell, using her experiences in being taught Midchilda-style magic during her early academy days. While it was discovered that she could cast powerful A+ rank Buster spells in the league of Divine Busters, she could not mold them coherently enough to be shot at long distance. Instead of being discouraged, Mayura persisted and discovered that she can alter the Buster spells to her own needs and adapted them to melee combat, thus creating what is now known as the ‘Kageki’ Impulse spell.

This spell is essentially a collection magic spell, where Mayura gathers charged leftover mana from the air through her fists or legs and condenses them into a highly-compressed state. This compressed mana is then explosively unleashed through a punch or kick, dealing devastating damage against most types of heavy magical and physical armor. And as a collection spell, Mayura can charge this spell beyond the maximum output and capacity of her own linker core, powering up Kageki Impulse to AAA+ rank power.

While this spell is the most powerful that Mayura wields, this spell is rarely used at full power for various reasons, primarily the taxing mana cost on Mayura’s linker core, and the long charging time required to prepare the spell. Though Mayura can significantly reduce mana cost and charging time through judicious use of cartridges, this puts even greater strain on her linker core and body, at times causing her lingering pain afterwards. There is also the massive explosive backlash, which is several times that of a fully charged Blast Impulse spell, and is far more than Recoil Return can take. Mayura has seriously injured herself several times in the use of this spell, and thus uses it only as a final weapon.

Geki Impulse –

While incredibly powerful the Kageki Impulse spell is far too powerful and dangerous to be used often, and its tedious preparation means it’s impractical in most high-speed close combat, and thus the Geki Impulse spell was created. The Geki spell has a much faster charging time than the Kageki variant, drawing mana directly from Mayura’s linker core instead of external collection. This improves speed and reliability at the cost of power, and the Geki spell is shown to be no more powerful than a charged Blast Impulse spell. Nonetheless the enhanced magical damage from this spell has been beneficial in many circumstances, and is used in place of Blast Impulse when fighting magical opponents, non-corporeal entities or incredibly strong physical enemies.

Jacket Purge –

While Mayura can switch between Barrier Jacket forms seamlessly, she can also use her jacket form changes for offensive purposes, by explosively detonating her barrier jacket in a burst of magical energy that can knock back surrounding enemies. Mayura typically performs Jacket Purge when changing into Noble Eagle form from Adventure and Roaring Dragon forms, as the latter two are much heavier, thus dealing more magical damage when detonated.

Interestingly enough, Mayura’s command for this spell is “Cast Off”, with the appropriate "Change Noble Eagle" voice response from her Accelullar ala Kamen Rider Kabuto.

Mayura rarely performs Jacket Purges from Noble Eagle form into her two other forms, but when she does her command changes to "Hyper Cast Off".

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“See?”

“I get it.”

“Now it’s back for some spaghetti…”

*sighs*

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Buster Shot – Power: C
Range: C
Accuracy:B

Standard mana shooter spell, common amongst all Mid-childa style and Neo-Belkan style mages.
Like Asagi, Mayura’s proficiency with this spell is dismal, having only C-rank damage, and thus used only for non-magical enemies and distractions.

Defensive Spells:

Triangle Shield –
Defense: B+

Standard Neo-Belka shield spell, used to deflect ranged attacks.

Protection –
Defense: B+

Standard barrier spell, used to defend against melee attacks and weapons.

Auxilliary Spells:

Sonic Move –
Proficiency: A

Standard Neo-Belka mobility spell which enhances the mage’s movement speed and agility in short one-second bursts, typically used in attack or evasion. While Sonic Move can be sustained for far longer periods, it puts gradually increased strain on the body the longer it is used, thus it is advised not to use this move for longer than 5 seconds at a time.

Mayura’s personal command for engaging this spell is “Hyper Clock Up”.

Sonic Drive –
Proficiency: A

A slower variant of Sonic Move, permanently active whenever Mayura engages Noble Eagle form. While 60% slower than its base spell, Sonic Drive can be sustained for several minutes at a time, and is less stressful on the caster’s body.

Boost Jump –
Proficiency: AAA
Range: - AA

Mobility spell, used to boost a mage’s jumping power. As Mayura can’t fly, this is her primary method of reaching tall places up to 75 meters high.

Reinforcement –
Proficiency: AA

This basic Neo-Belkan spell is a matter enhancement ability, used to improve the tensile strength, rigidity and overall durability of any solid item that the caster touches. The effect persists for as long as the object is in contact with the person’s hands during the duration of the spell. Mayura uses this spell to strengthen her weapons during extreme combat, though she does not sustain reinforcement for more than a few seconds to conserve on her magical stamina.

Extension –
Proficiency: S

Extension is an energy-matter conversion spell which increases the length of a staff weapon’s shaft. The extra length enhances the weapon’s reach, and also increases the power of vertical and horizontal strikes. Using this spell, Mayura can extend the length of her staff weapons to 20 meters, and with the Reinforcement spell she can maintain their stiffness and rigidity even at maximum length.

Soul Advent – Infinity Effects Studio
Proficiency: SSS

Of all the spells common to the Belkarangers, none is more bizarre and more unique than the Infinity Effects Studio, aka Soul Advent. Created by Julie Liu Ming, aka BelkaBlue, Soul Advent is a sophisticated magical program suite that specializes in real-time holographic illusion creation and manipulation, using image templates controlled by their primary device AI’s to minimize mana usage. With this program the Belkarangers can instantly materialize all manner of holographic special effects, from adding sparks to weapon impacts to colorful fireworks to massive fiery explosions and even complete animated logos out of nowhere merely by thought alone, useful for enhancing the group’s SUPER SENTAI TAMASHII image. While not terribly useful in combat, they have been used as distractions for various plans and split-second counters.

Each of the Belkarangers operate this program from their primary devices, in Mayura’s case her Gekichangers, and requires no further vocal incantations or passwords to activate.

[USB500]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

More of 'Honest Heart' Mayura Labatt's profile, this time with the 4th update in her profile:

Spells

Spoiler for length:

Offensive Spells:

Mayura’s skillset is very similar to Asagi’s as a fellow alumni of Class 0061-Q, including in the use of Impulse Spells and auxiliary spells.

-----

“You won’t….”

“Copypasta time!”

“Oh boy…”

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Force -

In martial combat, one requires physical strength and power to deliver the energy required for impact. The most basic spell for many Neo-Belkan practitioners, and also the easiest to learn, is the “Force” spell, which is a basic spell to externally enhance the wielder’s physical strength. This is achieved using a combination of external levitation (and in some cases, Midchilda-style Barrel Rings), which provide additional aid and support on a mage’s arms or legs. This grants a mage extra physical power in lifting heavy weapons, or further enhancing the power behind a strike.

Blast –

Another basic Neo-Belkan spell, “Blast” is a “static kinetic energy” spell applied at a weapon’s impact point, which multiplies the kinetic energy behind a physical blow without the requirement of adding extra momentum or mass. In combat this significantly improves the damage potential of a normally kinetically weak blow, like a punch.

Although the advantages are considerable, the Blast spell creates significant kinetic energy backlash at the item it is used on, whether a weapon or the mage itself. For this reason, application of this spell is most ideal on sturdy, blunt and dense objects with a large surface area on the impact point, like mallets, clubs and hammers, to better absorb and dissipate the backlash. Impact dissipation spells can also be applied to further reduce the backlash’s negative effects.

Sword –

The third of the basic spells, “Sword” is a “focus energy” spell, which enhances a cutting blade or piercing head by reinforcing the material integrity of the cutting area, and also by absorbing kinetic energy on impact and focusing it on the cutting edge. A blade enhanced by this spell can cut through extra-hard and reinforced objects with minimal effort, and this spell can be further enhanced by Force for improved results.

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“Trust me, there’s still new content here…”

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While Asagi specializes in the Sword spell, Mayura’s proficiency is in the Blast Spell, casting it to enhance the power of her kicks and punches, and in combination with Force Impulse spell her power is increased dramatically. This power is shockingly displayed in demonstration routines, with Mayura having been known create a “squash-head” effect through 10 inches of military-grade steel armor plate, where the powerful concussive impact from Mayura’s fist causes a large spalling of metal to rip and eject itself on the other side, and she has been known to pulverize up to 15-inches of solid concrete.

It is noted that Mayura requires her Gekichanger to perform these feats of power, using its Recoil Return ability to prevent her hand form taking too much damage. Even then Mayura takes great care in overpowering her Blast Impulse-enhanced attacks to minimize strain on her body.

Mayura is also proficient with the Sword Impulse spell, using it on her only bladed weapon, the Super GekiClaw, though with less efficiency than with her other impulse spells.

Kageki Impulse -

Asides from these three basic spells, Mayura has also created her own “Impulse” spell, using her experiences in being taught Midchilda-style magic during her early academy days. While it was discovered that she could cast powerful A+ rank Buster spells in the league of Divine Busters, she could not mold them coherently enough to be shot at long distance. Instead of being discouraged, Mayura persisted and discovered that she can alter the Buster spells to her own needs and adapted them to melee combat, thus creating what is now known as the ‘Kageki’ Impulse spell.

This spell is essentially a collection magic spell, where Mayura gathers charged leftover mana from the air through her fists or legs and condenses them into a highly-compressed state. This compressed mana is then explosively unleashed through a punch or kick, dealing devastating damage against most types of heavy magical and physical armor. And as a collection spell, Mayura can charge this spell beyond the maximum output and capacity of her own linker core, powering up Kageki Impulse to AAA+ rank power.

While this spell is the most powerful that Mayura wields, this spell is rarely used at full power for various reasons, primarily the taxing mana cost on Mayura’s linker core, and the long charging time required to prepare the spell. Though Mayura can significantly reduce mana cost and charging time through judicious use of cartridges, this puts even greater strain on her linker core and body, at times causing her lingering pain afterwards. There is also the massive explosive backlash, which is several times that of a fully charged Blast Impulse spell, and is far more than Recoil Return can take. Mayura has seriously injured herself several times in the use of this spell, and thus uses it only as a final weapon.

Geki Impulse –

While incredibly powerful the Kageki Impulse spell is far too powerful and dangerous to be used often, and its tedious preparation means it’s impractical in most high-speed close combat, and thus the Geki Impulse spell was created. The Geki spell has a much faster charging time than the Kageki variant, drawing mana directly from Mayura’s linker core instead of external collection. This improves speed and reliability at the cost of power, and the Geki spell is shown to be no more powerful than a charged Blast Impulse spell. Nonetheless the enhanced magical damage from this spell has been beneficial in many circumstances, and is used in place of Blast Impulse when fighting magical opponents, non-corporeal entities or incredibly strong physical enemies.

Jacket Purge –

While Mayura can switch between Barrier Jacket forms seamlessly, she can also use her jacket form changes for offensive purposes, by explosively detonating her barrier jacket in a burst of magical energy that can knock back surrounding enemies. Mayura typically performs Jacket Purge when changing into Noble Eagle form from Adventure and Roaring Dragon forms, as the latter two are much heavier, thus dealing more magical damage when detonated.

Interestingly enough, Mayura’s command for this spell is “Cast Off”, with the appropriate "Change Noble Eagle" voice response from her Accelullar ala Kamen Rider Kabuto.

Mayura rarely performs Jacket Purges from Noble Eagle form into her two other forms, but when she does her command changes to "Hyper Cast Off".

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“See?”

“I get it.”

“Now it’s back for some spaghetti…”

*sighs*

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Buster Shot – Power: C
Range: C
Accuracy:B

Standard mana shooter spell, common amongst all Mid-childa style and Neo-Belkan style mages.
Like Asagi, Mayura’s proficiency with this spell is dismal, having only C-rank damage, and thus used only for non-magical enemies and distractions.

Defensive Spells:

Triangle Shield –
Defense: B+

Standard Neo-Belka shield spell, used to deflect ranged attacks.

Protection –
Defense: B+

Standard barrier spell, used to defend against melee attacks and weapons.

Auxilliary Spells:

Sonic Move –
Proficiency: A

Standard Neo-Belka mobility spell which enhances the mage’s movement speed and agility in short one-second bursts, typically used in attack or evasion. While Sonic Move can be sustained for far longer periods, it puts gradually increased strain on the body the longer it is used, thus it is advised not to use this move for longer than 5 seconds at a time.

Mayura’s personal command for engaging this spell is “Hyper Clock Up”.

Sonic Drive –
Proficiency: A

A slower variant of Sonic Move, permanently active whenever Mayura engages Noble Eagle form. While 60% slower than its base spell, Sonic Drive can be sustained for several minutes at a time, and is less stressful on the caster’s body.

Boost Jump –
Proficiency: AAA
Range: - AA

Mobility spell, used to boost a mage’s jumping power. As Mayura can’t fly, this is her primary method of reaching tall places up to 75 meters high.

Reinforcement –
Proficiency: AA

This basic Neo-Belkan spell is a matter enhancement ability, used to improve the tensile strength, rigidity and overall durability of any solid item that the caster touches. The effect persists for as long as the object is in contact with the person’s hands during the duration of the spell. Mayura uses this spell to strengthen her weapons during extreme combat, though she does not sustain reinforcement for more than a few seconds to conserve on her magical stamina.

Extension –
Proficiency: S

Extension is an energy-matter conversion spell which increases the length of a staff weapon’s shaft. The extra length enhances the weapon’s reach, and also increases the power of vertical and horizontal strikes. Using this spell, Mayura can extend the length of her staff weapons to 20 meters, and with the Reinforcement spell she can maintain their stiffness and rigidity even at maximum length.

Soul Advent – Infinity Effects Studio
Proficiency: SSS

Of all the spells common to the Belkarangers, none is more bizarre and more unique than the Infinity Effects Studio, aka Soul Advent. Created by Julie Liu Ming, aka BelkaBlue, Soul Advent is a sophisticated magical program suite that specializes in real-time holographic illusion creation and manipulation, using image templates controlled by their primary device AI’s to minimize mana usage. With this program the Belkarangers can instantly materialize all manner of holographic special effects, from adding sparks to weapon impacts to colorful fireworks to massive fiery explosions and even complete animated logos out of nowhere merely by thought alone, useful for enhancing the group’s SUPER SENTAI TAMASHII image. While not terribly useful in combat, they have been used as distractions for various plans and split-second counters.

Each of the Belkarangers operate this program from their primary devices, in Mayura’s case her Gekichangers, and requires no further vocal incantations or passwords to activate.

Awesome as always. I can see that Mayura's very careful in not overusing her power for her own benefit.

I have to give credits to Infinity Effect Studio for originality in name.

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by Kha

If that's the case, that means the Brains did something right for once.

But unfortunately they didn't

Originally Posted by Kha

"Drink more electrolytes. Battery water is a good start."

Or PowerThirst

Originally Posted by Kha

Gwen... Emili... Naomi... In a room.

Very very dangerous.

...



Yes, very... DANGEROUS indeed

*runs*

Originally Posted by Kha

As long we don't mind an old man taking 10G turns I'm game for bringing him in as part of the Field Fighters. They fight AMFs see.

Anti-AMF Investigation Unit?

Originally Posted by Kha

One of the many transdimensional characters that we'll never see and that Kha has stolen from.

If Alphonse is here... where's shor- I mean Ed?

Originally Posted by Kha

Yes... By progressing through Fate Stay Night at unlimited amounts of times within a sec, uncovering more and more of the hidden pictures, the sheer dere-Saka moegaton yields will blow your mind, rendering you completely devoid of fighting will! Your innate desires will consume you! And then you shall DIE as despair sets in! HAHAHAHAHA...!

Originally Posted by Kha

~~~New Intelligence Data Updated~~~


I made some changes to Caro's problematic Limiter Break using what I dreamed of originally, and from the suggestions made. Here's the sample:

Spoiler for Limiter Break:

LIMITER BREAK: Princess of Voltaire

A mark of a great summoner is the closeness he/she is to her chosen guardian, and the best summoner and summons fight side-by-side as one unit.

After summoning Voltaire, Caro gattai’s with Voltaire, jettisoning her Barrier Jacket completely and materializing on a special saddle within an undetermined location inside Voltaire, assumably in a closed reality within Voltaire's gem on his head. A better example of this saddle in action can be found within this ancient video of Midget and her friends using summon creatures when they were younger.

(I was forced to bring that design forward. Thanks to Nighty for the head gem idea, and of course Midget. )

This gives Caro the ability to share knowledge and boosts with Voltaire and at the same time allow Voltaire to protect Caro, allowing him to focus fully on the prey. And he needed to, as Lutecia did the same.

As the pilot of Voltaire, Caro can help Voltaire with whatever tricks she picked up from watching Kha and Erio practice, allowing her to wrestle Lutecia’s summons to the ground twice. They also gain access to several new skills:


Rastaban Beam - Energy beams are launched from the eyes, after Caro stammers the spell “Ra-ra-ra RASTABAN BEAMUU!!!”

Laevanteinn– Voltaire summons his blade from his tail by yelling, “Howl, Laevanteinn!”, then charges to attack.

Fire Breath – Voltaire blasts the enemy with a column of fire similar to a Divine Buster.

Scale Fire – Voltaire unleashes his scales like shurikens in all directions. They then catch fire and speed towards targets under his control.


Caro knows that Voltaire has a companion spirit, Ampere the White Tiger Queen, and after growing to trust Erio, she and Voltaire agree to choose Erio as Ampere’s bearer. However, the boy has to win the capricious spirit’s favor before she agrees to be in contract to Erio.

Voltaire noted that, at the end of his battle as he was returning to his astral plane, he commented that Caro had grown much stronger than when she first called him to make a contract, and someday, he hopes that she can use Dragon Soul Summon on bigger things. This makes her recall that Voltaire had another form, which the Elder called Shin-Voltaire, and she promised to the vanishing creature that she’ll strive to attain that, so he could once again “Voltaire can dance his dance in the sky.”

Later, when Erio proved his worth to Ampere, Erio, Caro, Ampere and Voltaire can gattai into a powerful, summon creature that no living person has seen, and that the Lu-Lushe villagers call by only one word out of sheer reverence:

Jin.

Is this better?

At the very least, Caro's method of controlling Voltaire is not only less robotic, it's also far more classy

Originally Posted by USB500

I'd like to see this.

*hides the camera and runs*

*USB runs into Mai's waiting chainsaw*

Mai: ... yon.

Originally Posted by USB500

Awesome as always. I can see that Mayura's very careful in not overusing her power for her own benefit.

I have to give credits to Infinity Effect Studio for originality in name.

More like not overusing them so she doesn't hurt herself too much

And I did want "Unlimited Effects Works" initially, but felt it was overused Also, the name fits better

[USB500]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Yes, very... DANGEROUS indeed

*runs*

Dangerously Passionate?

*runs*

Originally Posted by LoweGear

*USB runs into Mai's waiting chainsaw*

Mai: ... yon.

USB: OSHI---

Mai >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> USB500

Mai: *takes the camera*
.......

.......

.......

suteki.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

More like not overusing them so she doesn't hurt herself too much

And I did want "Unlimited Effects Works" initially, but felt it was overused Also, the name fits better

Well, Lyrical of Time Rebuild is on the way. It's not going to be easy, though, since most of my OCs's timeline are pretty much after everything in Strikers, A's or the first season. Anyway, stay tuned for updates.

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by USB500

Dangerously Passionate?

*runs*

*runs*

Originally Posted by USB500

USB: OSHI---

Mai >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> USB500

Mai: *takes the camera*
.......

.......

.......

suteki.

Mai: ...

<.<

>.>

*teleports camera somewhere else*

... safe.

Originally Posted by USB500

Well, Lyrical of Time Rebuild is on the way. It's not going to be easy, though, since most of my OCs's timeline are pretty much after everything in Strikers, A's or the first season. Anyway, stay tuned for updates.

DVD Special updates?

*runs faster*