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wavehawk · 2012-01-11, 06:35

@DBox Made even funnier by the faxct that Ichika's obliviousness keeps him from realizing these guys are trying to have him killed...

(GLOMPS Yachi)

HasuMasu · 2012-01-11, 06:37

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(GLOMPS Yachi)

Chris Hansen: "Sir, please have a seat..."

Yachiyo · 2012-01-11, 06:38

I'm 75% complete in chapter 5, and it's 4.5k words now ._.

Now I'm really out of ideas.

Anyone could help me revise this thing XD

Spoiler for EiR:

Would greatly appreciate if anyone can xD

wavehawk · 2012-01-11, 06:39

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Originally Posted by Yachiyo

I'm 75% complete in chapter 5, and it's 4.5k words now ._.

Now I'm really out of ideas.

- Don't look at me, I'm struggling myself.

@Box: Have you ever seen any older anime like Shuffle? Imagine the guys are like the fanclubs in that show--only a lot LESS effective....

HasuMasu · 2012-01-11, 06:43

I get the concept, and I admit that it's something I've thought about as well...damn plot bunnies.

Eratas123 · 2012-01-11, 06:44

Shuffle was epic

Anyway, what do you need help with Yachi?

Yachiyo · 2012-01-11, 06:46

I edited my post above, I just need a little revising in that part

Eratas123 · 2012-01-11, 06:54

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I edited my post above, I just need a little revising in that part

I don't know about revising action scenes much

I do better on plot, story, and information analysis.

Yachiyo · 2012-01-11, 06:57

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I don't know about revising action scenes much

I do better on plot, story, and information analysis.

Oki. I also need a next scene about this. If you want to add something, I can send to you the document ^_^.

Eratas123 · 2012-01-11, 06:58

Just post it here. I'm currently re-writing White Knight and it's a whopping 10,800 words.

ZeroXSEED · 2012-01-11, 07:05

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Pseudo-shift is an ability that would be unique to Silver Gospel. It can go into various next gen shift but only to the immediate next in varying paths. When it engages pseudo-shift. Its shield energy is automatically restored.

However it's not without drawbacks. Since the pseudo-shifts aren't meant to exist, they are only temporary and Silver is restored to its default settings on its next deployment. But even so since they are "shifts" Silver Gospel can't just change out when needed, it needs to shut down first before the shift completely disengages. What's more, returning to the fact they aren't suppose to exist, it takes a lot of energy for the Silver Gospel to activate pseudo-shifts. The effect is that while it's in pseudo-shift, it will continuously lose shield energy at a rapid rate until it is forced to deactivate, much like the Byakushiki and its Reiraku Byakuya.

In mine, ByakuShiki Setsura is an incomplete second Shift. Because normally, Second Shift does not add too much weakness.

This is because ByakuShiki forced itself (herself?) to evolve instead of normal evolution than occur when the I.S. is NOT damaged. (remember I.S. prioritize repair over adjustment and upgrade)

By forcing evolution in damaged state, it's allows near-instant damage recovery, but at the same time, the evolution is not complete.

As the result, ByakuShiki pretty much has inadequate power output.

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Still struggling with writer's block, and all of a sudden I get a stupid idea for you comedy writers out there:

How about a secret society of IS Representative Student fanboys who are constantly trying (AND MISERABLY FAILING) at trying to get rid of Ichika behind the scenes? Basically like the stereotypica cute anime girl fanclubs we see in real life (and in anime), and their wacky Wile E. Coyote/Three Stooges-style misadventures at trying to kill or remove Ichika...

...NO! I am not writing this, dammit, I have too much on my plate at the moment!

The master at work, I see.

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@ Senpai - It'll probably be a bunch of laughs when he goes there

Yes

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Ran might finally get a chance in the race

As if.

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Is Dan still scared of Ren? Gen pretty much shits his pants when she shows up

By the way, Irish's parents really aren't that bad.

More like respect her, the same as how he shown his care for Ran and gratitude for Gen, by acting submissive. But unlike other two, Ren knew Dan hold himself back and took the blame in anything if he feels like it.

As for Irish, his dad is.

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So a scar on pale skin will look more noticeable just because the shape is more evident?

If protruding scar yes, line-shaped scar tend not too visible on such skin.

Yachiyo · 2012-01-11, 07:06

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Just post it here. I'm currently re-writing White Knight and it's a whopping 10,800 words.

You want me to post the whole document? Nah, nevermind about that.

I think I'll just come up with a new idea and explanations ^_^

Eratas123 · 2012-01-11, 07:13

@ Yachi - Just the part you need help with.

@ Senpai - Why not? She stands a chance with Ichika just as much as anyone. His obliviousness and density applies to everyone.

Does this not affect how they treat Ichika? Dan only got involved because he was Ichika's friend? Also, his dad is a reflection of both Irish and his remaining parent.

Don't scars become jagged?

Side note - The feminism Doujin was released online

I suggest you read it since it's non-hentai yet very funny. Reminds me of the Campy Ichika fic you were planning

Yachiyo · 2012-01-11, 07:15

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@ Yachi - Just the part you need help with.

@ Senpai - Why not? She stands a chance with Ichika just as much as anyone. His obliviousness and density applies to everyone.

Does this not affect how they treat Ichika? Dan only got involved because he was Ichika's friend? Also, his dad is a reflection of both Irish and his remaining parent.

Don't scars become jagged?

Side note - The feminism Doujin was released online

I suggest you read it since it's non-hentai yet very funny. Reminds me of the Campy Ichika fic you were planning

Yep. Anyways I got a new idea, so I'll come back here when I need help. Be right back!

ZeroXSEED · 2012-01-11, 07:27

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@ Senpai - Why not? She stands a chance with Ichika just as much as anyone. His obliviousness and density applies to everyone.

But the fact that he doesn't see her often, means he doesn't see her charm often (not that she's fanservice material to begin with), though arguably, sometimes the rarer the better.

Also, secondary character, with even less convincing reason than Cecilia.

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Does this not affect how they treat Ichika?

No

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Dan only got involved because he was Ichika's friend?

You mean in the fight? Ichika come to his darkside is part his own resolve, part Dan's persuasion. This is the reason Dan act submissive after the realization.

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Also, his dad is a reflection of both Irish and his remaining parent.

Huh? You mean an imaginary/symbolic figure or something?

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Don't scars become jagged?

Scar indeed usually become jagged due to deepness.

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Side note - The feminism Doujin was released online

I suggest you read it since it's non-hentai yet very funny. Reminds me of the Campy Ichika fic you were planning

When I get my hands on faster Internet.

Eratas123 · 2012-01-11, 07:35

@ Senpai - Maya stands a chance and he barely even talks to her. At least Ran already knew him for a few years, so she's got the time advantage

So his family still treats him like the unfavorite child most of the time like canon? Man, life stinks for him.

I meant the way he acts is reflected later. Irish's mother remarks when she saw him fight that his brutality when fighting reminds her of her late husband. Likewise, her way of justifying herself is similar in how he placed no blae on himself no matter what happened.

What happens if you kick a stab wound?

Side note - Here's a page link I found online: http://www.fakku.net/viewonline.php?...&page=1#page=4

ZeroXSEED · 2012-01-11, 07:44

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@ Senpai - Maya stands a chance and he barely even talks to her. At least Ran already knew him for a few years, so she's got the time advantage

From certain point of view, yes.

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So his family still treats him like the unfavorite child most of the time like canon? Man, life stinks for him.

There's a time where GEN of all people spoil him, Dan went to a breakdown and lock himself.

Oh, and Ren treat them equally, through sometimes siding with Dan when Dan is not at fault.

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I meant the way he acts is reflected later. Irish's mother remarks when she saw him fight that his brutality when fighting reminds her of her late husband. Likewise, her way of justifying herself is similar in how he placed no blae on himself no matter what happened.

Hmm...

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What happens if you kick a stab wound?

It'll burst out blood and causing a shock so huge the person can instantly fell down into disorientation, critical state or dead depends on the severeness of the stab wound and the power of the kick.

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Side note - Here's a page link I found online: http://www.fakku.net/viewonline.php?...&page=1#page=4

Fakku? My sister certainly won't like it...

EDIT: oh wait I have soft copy of it from blitz :|

Eratas123 · 2012-01-11, 07:51

@ Senpai - I'm betting right now that Ran's school will be just like ISA when it comes to students.

Does Ran still beat up her brother here? I doubt she can kick or scare him considering what he's already done at this point.

It's also a bit symbolic. By killing one monster, she created another to take his place. This even shows an odd bit of generation xerox since his sisters are just like her mom was. Now they're fighting each other

So stabbing someone in the leg and kicking them will?

Side note - It's the only site that has it

It's non-hentai. don't worry.

Saint X · 2012-01-11, 07:53

I'll just leave this quick snippethere

Spoiler for Maria vs Elena : A Typical Day:

*goes back to killing more internet tanks and planes*

Eratas123 · 2012-01-11, 07:57

Reminds me of a married couple

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wavehawk Some say I'm the Reverse Join Date: Jul 2006	@DBox Made even funnier by the faxct that Ichika's obliviousness keeps him from realizing these guys are trying to have him killed... (GLOMPS Yachi) __________________ "We haven't been properly introduced..."

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Yachiyo ~`Seito Kaichō`~ Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: ~`Afterlife`~	I'm 75% complete in chapter 5, and it's 4.5k words now ._. Now I'm really out of ideas. Anyone could help me revise this thing XD Spoiler for EiR: (Normal POV) Laura quickly dived in the middle and released a chronofield that made everyone stop their movements. “Guys, finish them off!” Laura shouted as she was holding the field as long as she can. “Take them down!” Ichika also shouted with Aden. But before everything else, all of them we’re pushed back again and slammed to the wall. “GWAAAAAAHHHHHH!” “Nice plan you have there, but controlling time doesn’t work in this place.” Athana said as she floats above. “Guys, are you alright?” Ichika asked his friends that were totally slammed to the wall; he’s the only one that didn’t get an impact. “Sort of. Ahm.” Tatenashi replied as she stood up. “I don’t think we can do this anymore.” Ichika looked around his friends. All of them are bruised and there armors were dented already, while the enemy didn’t get even a scratch. “Ichika-san~, you’re our only hope now. We can only give you a little support.” Cecilia said to him. “Don’t worry, 3 of them will be out of this in a moment. Just look at them” “Huh? What are you saying?” Rin asked in confusion. Ichika smirked and suddenly 3 of their enemies undeployed there IS. “What the…” One of the Blood Crusade member said as her IS suddenly undeployed. “Ichika, don’t tell me you used your…” Aden stopped. “Can’t be helped.” “But, you do already know the side effects once you did that.” Aden continued. “Yeah I know it. But I already know a solution for it.” “What’re you talking about guys?” Houki asked in confusion with the conversation of the two guys. “Ichika used his One-Off Ancestral ability of Kaluva, the Wide Area Agony Rune. This rune ability corrupts the IS of his opponents, draining its shield energy and shuts it down.” Aden explained. “Houki-san, can you use your [Kenran Butou] for us?” “Errmm, I’ll try.” “Help others, don’t worry about us.” Aden said. Later, Athana went forward to us and saying: “Are you people ready for your death?” “Not a chance in hell.” Ichika replied to her smirking and went in front of her. “You’re a tough guy, Ichika-kun. So accept our special gift to you and your friends.” She said and backed off to her companions. Ichika released [Yukihira Nigata] and prepared for incoming attack. “A gift, well thank you for that” Ichika smiled. “Don’t do this Ichika.” Houki pleased. “Ichika, we can still go back…” Rin said. “Ichika…” Charlotte murmured. “Don’t worry guys. I still have plans for me and Charlotte” Ichika looked back to them and smiled. “Say your prayers, Orimura Ichika.” Athana said and fired multiple chasing missiles. “Think back first.” Ichika said as he started and kept on dodging the missiles. “You won’t be able to hold it for long.” Athana said as she fired a laser towards him. “Oh shit!” BOOM BOOM BOOM BOOM BOOM “ICHIKAAAAAAAAAA!” Charlotte shouted with tears on her eyes. “Being a hero is a stupidity.” Athana remarked. “You…” Aden tightened his grip with his spear. “What will you people do now?” she asked again. “…” “The battle still continues” a familiar voice hissed out. The huge smoke disappeared and Ichika is floating in mid-air, but his suit changed. “Fitting complete” a voice from his suit spoke. “Third shift success” “About time…” Ichika murmured as he held [Yukihira Nigata] tightly. Ichika suddenly disappeared and appeared again in one of the Blood Crusade and quickly hit it hard and made it undeploy her IS. “Wha..~” “Yeah!” Ichika said and did the same thing to the others with a huge smirk in his face. (Tatenashi’s group status) “Woah, that was a sudden change of personality.” Tatenashi said as she saw what Ichika’s doing. “I think that was one of the side-effects of Ichika’s One-off Ancestral Ability.” Aden said. “One-off Ancestral Abilities really changes one’s personality instantly, makes the person reveal his true self. But it’s only temporary as long as he himself would be able to stay on his senses.” “I see, wait, how you knew everything about this?” Rin asked him. Would greatly appreciate if anyone can xD __________________

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HasuMasu Senior Member Artist Join Date: Apr 2011 Location: The Middle Way	I get the concept, and I admit that it's something I've thought about as well...damn plot bunnies. __________________

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Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Shuffle was epic Anyway, what do you need help with Yachi? __________________

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Yachiyo ~`Seito Kaichō`~ Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: ~`Afterlife`~	I edited my post above, I just need a little revising in that part __________________

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Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Just post it here. I'm currently re-writing White Knight and it's a whopping 10,800 words. __________________

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Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Yachi - Just the part you need help with. @ Senpai - Why not? She stands a chance with Ichika just as much as anyone. His obliviousness and density applies to everyone. Does this not affect how they treat Ichika? Dan only got involved because he was Ichika's friend? Also, his dad is a reflection of both Irish and his remaining parent. Don't scars become jagged? Side note - The feminism Doujin was released online I suggest you read it since it's non-hentai yet very funny. Reminds me of the Campy Ichika fic you were planning __________________

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Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Senpai - Maya stands a chance and he barely even talks to her. At least Ran already knew him for a few years, so she's got the time advantage So his family still treats him like the unfavorite child most of the time like canon? Man, life stinks for him. I meant the way he acts is reflected later. Irish's mother remarks when she saw him fight that his brutality when fighting reminds her of her late husband. Likewise, her way of justifying herself is similar in how he placed no blae on himself no matter what happened. What happens if you kick a stab wound? Side note - Here's a page link I found online: http://www.fakku.net/viewonline.php?...&page=1#page=4 __________________

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Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	@ Senpai - I'm betting right now that Ran's school will be just like ISA when it comes to students. Does Ran still beat up her brother here? I doubt she can kick or scare him considering what he's already done at this point. It's also a bit symbolic. By killing one monster, she created another to take his place. This even shows an odd bit of generation xerox since his sisters are just like her mom was. Now they're fighting each other So stabbing someone in the leg and kicking them will? Side note - It's the only site that has it It's non-hentai. don't worry. __________________

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Saint X VxR Productions IT Support Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Philippines	I'll just leave this quick snippethere Spoiler for Maria vs Elena : A Typical Day: Best of buds, no... not yet. One of them is Tsundere for the other though... Art by FlameSparkZ Elena: And there you go again with that expression! You have been a Major major eyesore for me since that final selection match! Long winded monologue in Tagalog ensues Maria: ... Elena: Hey, are you even listening to me?! It's not i'm going at you like this for your sake or something- darn it listen or face me darn it! Maria: ... Elena: Hmph! You'll see one day when i defeat you fair and square! Elena Leaves Maria: sigh Why can't she just stop? goes back to killing more internet tanks and planes

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Eratas123 Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2011	Reminds me of a married couple __________________