Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Gx Hero]

All too possible since certain section are unorganized such as the Belkan section. Then agian they can fit whole library buildings in the infinite library so there could be a hidden area with the original data stored.

[Van Silverlight]

I'm still thinking a scenario where it is possible to make both Reinforce Eins and Zwei exist.

Let say,the heroes succeed at halting the automatic defense program from dominating Eins but cannot completely remove it.To absolutely remove it, they need to create another separate program to dive into Eins complex program data and destroy the ADP from inside...

Of course, we need to stop Eins from voluntarily sacrifice herself first.

[CrossTYPE]

I made a Nanoha fanfiction with my friend a little while ago that's still in progress, but it has a few chapters available for reading.

Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha PANZER
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/1023062...-Nanoha-PANZER

[Tiresias]

Originally Posted by CrossTYPE

Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha PANZER

1. Let's start from the synopsis

When her father becomes the victim of an incident involving a Lost Logia and when her childhood friend goes missing

You used "when" twice in the same sentence. The second one is unneeded.

2. The prologue is not really necessary.

Mid-Childa is a world home to a technologically advanced civilization where several of its residents are trained in the arts of magic. People trained in the arts of magic are known as mages. This planet is where the main office of the Time-Space Administration Bureau(TSAB) is located.

This part doesn't really gives new info to readers, most of them aware of basic Nanohaverse background.

One day, two members of the TSAB, Shiro Mayuzumi and Tsugumi Kirisaki gave birth to little girl named Miyu etc etc etc Now that she has finished Middle School, her next goal… is to join the TSAB...

Infodumping this long description of the character's background in the very beginning just makes people want to skip it. Instead, weave it into the story itself, preferable dialogues. For example, have someone ask the character to tell about herself, such as Nanoha doing a background verification before testing.

3. Unlike with canon characters, readers have no visual reference when reading about Original Characters, so you have to put that. There was a long description of her barrier-jacket, but not the person herself. Is she tall or short? What's the color of her hair and skin? You don't need to give a detailed description (saying she's 165.83 cm tall, weighing 45,13 kg, with three sizes of xx/yy/zz is overkill), just some general features so that the reader's imagination knows where to start.

4.

the girl with a heart so bright that it could rival the sun's light.

This sentence rang my Mary Sue alarm, made worse by the fact that it's the omniscient narrator that said this. At least when it's in-story characters that said this there's possibility of them being biased.

Also, maybe I'm reading this wrong, but her career progression stinks of nepotism.

5. There's a bit too much ellipsis ("..."). You don't have to pepper every pause in speech with them.

Well that's all that came to me for now.

[FlameSparkZ]

Originally Posted by Van Silverlight

So, if "somehow" The Infinity Library has the scraps of BOD clean data, we can use that to return BOD data to its previous state or at least halt the Automatic Defense Program from controlling Reinforce

Originally Posted by Gx Hero

All too possible since certain section are unorganized such as the Belkan section. Then again they can fit whole library buildings in the infinite library so there could be a hidden area with the original data stored.

Just when you thought you knew how big the Infinity Library was...they show it's even bigger

Originally Posted by Van Silverlight

I'm still thinking a scenario where it is possible to make both Reinforce Eins and Zwei exist.

Let say,the heroes succeed at halting the automatic defense program from dominating Eins but cannot completely remove it.To absolutely remove it, they need to create another separate program to dive into Eins complex program data and destroy the ADP from inside...

Of course, we need to stop Eins from voluntarily sacrifice herself first.

You might need to take into account the events of GoD, if you want...since it's technically an alternate reality/continuum

As for my fic...every time I catch up with the events in ViVid manga, I end up having to rewrite plot points due to new information being provided.

All because my goal is to make it as accurate as I can, but still have some flexibility

[Gx Hero]

Creating a scenario for Reinforce eins and Zwei, simple side effect of destroying the Defense program is that Zwei is created. Spin it however you want but that is a possibility.

Like after the program is purified Zwei appears from the book, or if you want to go extreme she emerges from Hayate's, or Reinforce Eins Linker Core.


Keep in mind that other things may be sealed inside the Tome of the night sky, for example unlimited darkness, Yuri and the materials were sealed inside, who is to say something else isn't.

Also in Gears of Destiny Reinforce is still going to die, the sound stage confirms this.

[FlameSparkZ]

Originally Posted by Gx Hero

Keep in mind that other things may be sealed inside the Tome of the night sky, for example unlimited darkness, Yuri and the materials were sealed inside, who is to say something else isn't.

Let's hope not

Originally Posted by Gx Hero

Also in Gears of Destiny Reinforce is still going to die, the sound stage confirms this.

Yeah, Eins dying is pretty much set in stone. That's why there's fanfics

[Alastoryagami]

Originally Posted by FlameSparkZ

Yeah, Eins dying is pretty much set in stone. That's why there's fanfics

That's why there is Nanoha Innocent!

[Van Silverlight]

You guys know what?

Eins is like Shaun Been...

A character exist to be killed in every good story

[Twi]

Originally Posted by Van Silverlight

You guys know what?

Eins is like Shaun Been...

A character exist to be killed in every good story

Except Jupiter Ascending... but you said a good story, so...

[Van Silverlight]

Originally Posted by Twi

Except Jupiter Ascending... but you said a good story, so...

Honest Trailer voice: They can't even killed shaun been right!

[Twi]

Scrya Chronicles 3 is out here and here.

[Gx Hero]

Moczo just finished his fanfiction infinity

[Twi]

Merciful Buddha, Power Games has updated!

[Gx Hero]

I realize that people have been posting less frequently on this thread. however I wanted to remind people that I have a page that has links to fanfictions on my site just click the link below.


I had remembered that their were not too many fanfictions were lutecia was not a an assassin cia or whatever you want to call it.

I was wondering if re working of force were lutecia encounters him and they have an adventure together instead of what happens. Using of course pre vivid personality.

[Akiyoshi]

I wonder if Lutecia's drastic personality change in ViVid was kind of a major blow to fanfiction writers at the time.

[Gx Hero]

It made no sense since in sound stage she was the same not overly energetic. I could see 4 years changing her personality, but a single year from sound stage x to vivid no.

Also I was thinking about possible THoma fanfiction and thought what if he met the materials, no Lily just an adventure, maybe where he is still infected with the eclipse but an adventure with the materials.

Also Wouldn't Einhart x thoma fanfiction be a good idea?

[vic-vic]

Originally Posted by Gx Hero

It made no sense since in sound stage she was the same not overly energetic. I could see 4 years changing her personality, but a single year from sound stage x to vivid no.

Also I was thinking about possible THoma fanfiction and thought what if he met the materials, no Lily just an adventure, maybe where he is still infected with the eclipse but an adventure with the materials.

Also Wouldn't Einhart x thoma fanfiction be a good idea?

I think ThomaxEinhartxSieglinde would be even more awesome. Trio of adventurers!

[Gx Hero]

Probably, I just feel bad for Thoma since the main cast of Nanoha was sorta taken over as the main character of Thoma's story, in Force.

[vic-vic]

We still at the beginning of his story. Let's just wait and see - Thoma will shine