Nanoha Fanfic Discussion

[Dark Wing]

Originally Posted by Satashi

I post them all under "SNL a digital short" on fanfiction.net. I'm just lazy updating it hehe



Here's some advice from someone who makes a TON of spelling erros: Use Open Office, you can download it for free from fanfiction.net . Unlike Microsoft word, you can have multiple spell corrections for a single word. AKA, you can have Nanha,Nanaha,Nanoa, and the likes all auto correct to "Nanoha", while Microsoft word will only allow one of them to do it. So once you set it to auto correct your common typos you won't have to spellcheck but like 1 minute before it's ready to go. It doens't have a grammar check tho >.<

And I was kidding about your siggy :P tho, the Vivio one kicks major butt

Hmmm...thanks for the advise Satashi. I'll keep that in mind.

I'm glad I thought I may have upset you.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Dark Wing

Hmmm...thanks for the advise Satashi. I'll keep that in mind.

I'm glad I thought I may have upset you.

lol, no no no. Not at all silly <3

[USB500]

Originally Posted by Satashi

[Edit] @USB-chan: Funny Chasing a kitty always = funny

Hehe, thanks

[Satashi]

Sorry for delay D: I'll have part 4 of Vivio high school days out in an hour or two @_@

[USB500]

Reposted from OC thread, but this time Blogged for convenience.

Gun, Bullet & Soul
A short story on one of my OC's. Nothing much to say here.

[Satashi]

Wow, this place is dead! Wake up everyone!

~**~

Spoiler for Vivio: High School Days prt. 4:

“Dance?” Subaru pondered while rubbing Tia's back as she straddled her waist. “When is it?”

“Iceday.”

“That's two days from now!” The blue haired girl yelped out. “Why on earth did they wait this long to ask you out, and how come you are asking for lessons now instead of a few weeks ago!?” She watched Vivio's face turn several shades of red.

“Idiot,” Tia sent her mentally making Subaru look down at her. “This close to the do or die deadline, the guy is either really shy or she asked him out instead! She's embarrassed!”

“Anyway,” Subaru went on, waving her hands. “We can teach you. I know how to lead and Tia can follow so together we will be able to work something out.” The teenager hugged her tightly, catching her off guard and making them all fall over onto a yelping Tia. “Yeah, you're Nanoha's girl all right...”

~**~

“This isn't fair!” Nanoha pouted as she quickly checked her duffel bag. “My little girl's first dance and I can't see her off!” She looked at her daughter, clad in a lovely silk white dress that hugged her body. Covering her chest completely yet firmly, it ran along her stomach and hips with a long slit up the side to allow her to walk. Matching white shoes graced her feet and satin fingerless gloves curved along her arms up a little past her elbows. “You look so pretty!”

“Thank you, Nanoha-mama.” She inspected herself in the full body mirror on the wall next to their bathroom. “Oh no!”

“What is it?”

“I have a pimple!” Vivio leaned forward and looked terrified at the small blemish on her forehead. “Not now! Not now!”

“Relax, no one will notice.” Nanoha put her hands on her daughter's shoulders. “You look so much better with your hair pulled back like that.”

“Think so?” Vivio turned around to inspect her hair. It was, for once, in something not completely simple. Fate had taken her to get it done professionally instead of letting Shamal trim it up for her. Now her normally ankle length hair was just to her knees thanks to the many ringlet curls she sported.

“People would be stepping on it if you didn't get it up some.” Nanoha confirmed for her. “Ohhh, look at the time! I have to go, be good sweetie, and be back at ten! You'll be grounded if you're not. Do you have your cell phone?” Nanoha looked up at Fate when she was being pushed toward the door. “Fate, you'll make sure she's back on time right? And you'll talk to the boy right?”

“Yes, yes.” Fate opened the door for Nanoha. “I'll grill him good, he will be so scared he won't even be able to look at her without fear of us hunting him down for his head. And I'll call her at nine thirty to make sure she's home by ten. Now go, they're all waiting on you. I'll take pictures.”

“You're the best, Fate.” Nanoha kissed her cheek and hurried out, calling a final goodbye towards Vivio.

“Fate-mama!” Vivio looked up at her, worried. “Ten!? The dance isn't over until midnight!”

“Then be home before one in the morning okay?” The blond took her hand and lead Vivio back towards the mirror. “Sit down, we don't have much time left.”

“Huh? What?”

Fate sat down her make up kit and turned Vivio to look at her. “Relax, I did Nanoha's makeup for years. You have a little red spot here we need to cover up, and a faint hint of lipstick will be nice...” She trailed off as she started touching her up.

Vivio closed her eyes and allowed her to. “But Nanoha-mama doesn't let me wear makeup...”

“What Nanoha-mama doesn't know won't hurt her now will it?” She giggled softly. “I think a light gloss will be best for your lips, they're cute as they are...”

~**~

Caro leaned against the pillar closest to the entrance to the mess hall and looked around at the people entering and leaving. After shifting her long ponytail she glanced at her watch and realized that Vivio's date only had ten minutes left before he was late. Her eyes started scanning again and spotted a well dressed civilian looking around nervously. With a smile she walked over to him and waved, catching his attention. “Hello, are you lost?” She was in her official section six brown uniform and she could tell he was torn between awkwardly saluting her or acting like normal. “Can I help you find something?”

“I'm, um,” The male reached back and scratched his black hair. He was in khaki pants and a dress shirt, clashing madly with everyone in uniform around him. “Looking for Vivio Harlaown, ma'am.”

“Are you Rin-san by any chance?”

“Yes ma'am?”

“I'm Caro Ru Mondial,” she addressed herself with a little salute. “Vivio is my sister.”

“Ah!” Rin saluted her back. “Rin Ferrari. Nice to meet you.” He realized he was saluting with the wrong hand so swapped it, making Caro laugh.

“Caro-chan stop making the poor boy nervous!” Lutecia joined them and shook Rin's hand. “Please forgive Caro-chan, she takes pleasure in teasing people.”

The pink haired girl gasped at Lutecia. “I do not!”

“I'm Lutecia Mondial, I'll lead you to Vivio's room.”

“Thank you.” He grinned at the two girls as they ushered him over to an elevator. “So, you two sisters?”

Caro covered a small laugh. “She's my wife.”

“Oh! I'm sorry,” Rin panicked. “You two don't look a day over eighteen...”

“I'm twenty-five,” Lutecia told him with a smile. “Thank you for the compliment. Caro stop teasing the boy.”

“Sorry,” The summoned stuck her tongue out at the girl she shared Elio with. “I guess I have a little more of Mommy in me than I thought.” The doors opened and they nodded towards Rin. “First door on the left. Have fun with my sister tonight.” They both waved at him as the doors closed.

Swallowing, Rin walked over to the door and knocked on it. A few moments later he was greeted by Vivio's smiling face. “Hey,” He breathed out, clearly nervous. “Wow... you look... great!” Not being able to help it, he laughed at his own weak attempt to compliment her.

“Thank you, you do as well,” Vivio looked to her side where Fate was leaning against the wall so she wouldn't be seen. “Come in, I'll introduce you to Fate-mama.” Stepping back, she allowed the boy into the house while smiling at Fate's surprised look. “Rin-kun, this is Fate T. Harlaown, SS ranked Ace of Ace Enforcer. She leads the special group G.U.”

“G.U., huh?” Rin shook Fate's hand with a clearly impressed look. “I've heard that name so many times, everyone there is Triple-A ranked or have special abilities! I have to admit I read a lot of military magazines so I've been really impressed. Wow, I didn't know Vivio-san was your daughter. Now I see where she gets her good looks from.”

Fate blushed darkly at the praise. “Why thank you, Rin-san.” Bowing lightly, she smiled. “But Nanoha trained them all, I just lead.”

“Fate-mama, don't be so modest.” Vivio gave her a small peace sign behind Rin's back.

“Well,” Fate tried to keep from saying too much in case she accidentally embarrassed her daughter like she normally did. “Have fun, and be back before the time we discussed okay?”

“Yes ma'am.”

“Very nice meeting you,” Rin bowed at her once more time before smiling at Vivio and walking out the door with her.

Fate closed the door and smiled happily, pleased she was introduced. Truth be told she had overheard Vivio telling Jazz earlier that she wanted to avoid that at all cost. Although the news had hurt her feelings she understood. After all, Fate had a very long history of making Vivio want to crawl into a place and hide when she opened her mouth. She meant good, but still...

A monitor appeared in front of her the next moment, revealing Nanoha. “Fate! Did Vivio leave yet? He wasn't late was he?”

“No,” Fate smiled. “He was two minutes early.”

“Did you get him good?”

“Yes I did, he was shaking when he left. He won't lay a finger on her. There's no way he'll break curfew. I bet Vivio will be exhausted after a night of dancing so I'll call you when she gets back okay? N o need to bug her about her night before she has a chance to dream about it and sleep.”

“But!”

“No buts,” Fate poked the monitor, on top of Nanoha's nose. “I'll let you know when she gets back so just let me handle this, 'kay?”

“...Okay. If you scared him that much, I'm not worried.”

Fate smiled.

[FlareKnight]

Just goes to show you Satashi that without you this board seems to die off . Great chapter though, it was fun to read through.

Good thing Fate was smart about the whole thing. That guy was so nervous if she had actually done anything close to what Nanoha wanted....he may have died on the spot . Nice work of balancing everyone out. Caro gets teasing, Lutecia handles her. Nanoha wants to scare the guy to death, Fate....gets creative.

Can't wait to read some more of the story since it's fun to follow. Like the Rin guy though. While for good reason a bit nervous seems like a nice guy so hope things go just fine. At least he's good at compliments . Next up is the dance...should be interesting to see what happens there.

[krisslanza]

Hahahahaha, Fate lying to your wife like that ;P
But it was cute. I didn't know Caro and Lutecia got married... I need to read your 6th Division stuff again don't I?

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by FlareKnight

Just goes to show you Satashi that without you this board seems to die off . Great chapter though, it was fun to read through.

Good thing Fate was smart about the whole thing. That guy was so nervous if she had actually done anything close to what Nanoha wanted....he may have died on the spot . Nice work of balancing everyone out. Caro gets teasing, Lutecia handles her. Nanoha wants to scare the guy to death, Fate....gets creative.

Can't wait to read some more of the story since it's fun to follow. Like the Rin guy though. While for good reason a bit nervous seems like a nice guy so hope things go just fine. At least he's good at compliments . Next up is the dance...should be interesting to see what happens there.

I should have dance done tonight maybe ^^

Originally Posted by krisslanza

Hahahahaha, Fate lying to your wife like that ;P
But it was cute. I didn't know Caro and Lutecia got married... I need to read your 6th Division stuff again don't I?

This takes place after Redemption :P So Caro, Elio, and Lutecia are all married to each other. (Notice both girls had Elio's last name).

I messed up ages in this ficcy >< They'll be corrected in the FF.N release.

[krisslanza]

Ahhh I figured Erio was married to both...
My friend said that Caro and Lutecia might be married, and Erio is just their boy toy. XD

[BPHaru]

Originally Posted by krisslanza

But it was cute. I didn't know Caro and Lutecia got married... I need to read your 6th Division stuff again don't I?

As Sa-nyan said, this is based on 6th Division universe, so for sure the whole thing is Caro-Lutecia-Erio married with eachother, based on the alternative end of book II Subaru-Tiana probably are married too, and I don't know about Hayate and Yuuno, maybe they are together, or maybe all remains the same and they are still virgins at 30yo xD

Originally Posted by krisslanza

Hahahahaha, Fate lying to your wife like that ;P

I don’t think lying to your wife is something “cute”, even if it’s for “good reasons”, I don’t liked that comming from fate.

Saludos, Haru

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by krisslanza

Ahhh I figured Erio was married to both...
My friend said that Caro and Lutecia might be married, and Erio is just their boy toy. XD

Lol :P no, no. Actually one of the running gags (not yet implimented) is....

Spoiler for Poor Elio....:

Chrono: So, Elio, you look a little worn out?

Elio: The girls jumped me last night agian.

Chrono: Everytime you complain about that I just wanns hit you. *sighs* Tell me, have you managed to watch yet?

Elio: *rolls eyes* no way. They won't even touch each other during it. Drives me batty. "Caro, ew, you're all sweaty, don't hug me" "You're the one on me, oh gross you're hand's sticky!"

Chrono: *glares* . . . .

Elio:Um... yeah... so... I'm just gonna elave now...

[Fuyu no Sora]

Originally Posted by BPHaru

I don’t think lying to your wife is something “cute”, even if it’s for “good reasons”, I don’t liked that comming from fate.

Saludos, Haru

You're being a party pooper Haru. You're going to tell me that in a real relationship none of the partners say white lies from time to time? Unrealistic that's what that is *shakes head*

[FlareKnight]

No doubt that has to be....one interesting marriage . Good luck for Erio in that situation. Might be with Chrono on this one. Every time he complains you just want to hit him .

Well take as much time as you need Satashi. (I can act all so calm since I've got to work a night shift and wouldn't be able to read it anyways )

I don't think it's a big thing. Come on friends and family stretch the truth and can lie from time to time. Don't have a problem with Fate doing that since Nanoha would go overboard. No one's perfect after all if they were these stories wouldn't be half so interesting.

[BPHaru]

Originally Posted by Fuyu no Sora

Unrealistic that's what that is *shakes head*

Yes, that's true in most of the cases.

Saludos, Haru

[Satashi]

Ah, in every old sit-com show there's always one over protective parent and one 'cool' one. Fate didn't lie to Nanoha to make her mad, more to just be sure Vivio could have fun. A simple white lie that won't hurt anyone and allow her precious little girl to have a fun night.

Besides, Nanoha is WAY over protective ( she loves her little girl :3)

[krisslanza]

Well as long as Vivio comes home with everything... intact she won't end up in trouble

[Fuyu no Sora]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Ah, in every old sit-com show there's always one over protective parent and one 'cool' one. Fate didn't lie to Nanoha to make her mad, more to just be sure Vivio could have fun. A simple white lie that won't hurt anyone and allow her precious little girl to have a fun night.

Besides, Nanoha is WAY over protective ( she loves her little girl :3)

Sou, sou *nods head* Exactly as Satashi-san said ^^

Can you blame her? What parent doesn't love her child? (Don't wanna know the answer OK?)

@krisslanza: Oi, oi. Isn't that exaggerating a bit?

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Fuyu no Sora

Sou, sou *nods head* Exactly as Satashi-san said ^^

Can you blame her? What parent doesn't love her child? (Don't wanna know the answer OK?)

@krisslanza: Oi, oi. Isn't that exaggerating a bit?

not my little Vivio! *hugs Vivio*

Tho a few misunderstandings may be in order for later fics of her teenage life :P

[Fuyu no Sora]

Originally Posted by Satashi

not my little Vivio! *hugs Vivio*

Tho a few misunderstandings may be in order for later fics of her teenage life :P

"Not" what? I think I missed something here

The Master/Mistress of Misunderstandings will grace us with his/her powers? PLEASE DO!! (I'd love to see Nanoha's reaction to that XD!)