Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[Tormenk]

Originally Posted by Anita

Kha has a self-deluded habit of kneeling in front of a little corner in the Lourve...

The idea of such an intergalactic journey is win. We need more Khophia fluff!

Depending on what the secret is, we may then have to ask ourselves this question...

Turns suddenly to Saber and sneers in her face.

...who exactly are you, Sankt Kaiser.

Hmm. I misread that as hugging his knees in a corner of the Lourve.

And Anita's a villian now?

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

~How deep can you dig?~
~How much effort can you give?~
~How much passion can you show?~
~For the one and only OC Thread?~

About 80 pages...

BACKLOG... BREAKER.

Hail the mightiest backlog breaker in Cadia history!

Cause and effect, crack can also give rise to more genius that may give rise to more crack.

Writing here makes one feel more alive indeed. Such is the charm of OC.

Concurred.

If it's with regards to OC, yes. I am VERY passionate.

Certainly proven by this Giga Backlog Breaker.

Hayate's... honest... reaction...? O.O

...

Uhm...

How should I say this...

I'm n-not sure...

>.>

<.<

>_<

*RUNS LIKE HELL!!!*

(What do you think?)

We want to hear it from her spokesman.

What can I say? This rabu-rabu-tsun-tsun-dere-dere interactions are the BLOODY BEST!!!

Why am I included in an couple's affairs? >_<

He’s quite frightening, alright…
The incredibly stoic and efficient Akabane of the group, Jac is indeed a force to be feared…

His movement spells are quite frighteningly helpful in ending several lives in the span of a few seconds…

Nice.

Thanks.

The berserking beserker with a small sister-complex is still as violent as ever.

*is mauled violently with oversized sword*



Anyway, He seems to has the least noticeable change. Jag’s attitude is still there. As well as his extremely powerful rane of spells.

Where did you get that idea from?! Jag's no sis-con at all!

*sics Jag on Aaron again*

As for the character changes, I was kinda uninspired while revamping the first two profiles so they did come out abit bland. I did try to steer him away from the berserker outline and change the addiction of drugs to usage instead, and to make him a character who's defined by his desire to survive. Guess it didn't work out too well in the end.

GAURON!!!!



Anyway, Gen remains the fiercest of your OC's up to now.
His track record is dark but interesting. And oddly similar to something I have in mind for the future. His spells are quick and effective. Devastating as well. As for devices, they have always been a high point of interest for me. Especially Avatar. Good work! BTW, can he still be another one of Aurion's unlawful contacts?

Well didn't change too much about him so it was expected. Something for GenerationS perhaps? Don't worry I won't try to elbow into your plans but I'm quite curious about the 'similarity in future'. I'm up for a good device discussion, provided I have the time. As for being an unlawful contact, that door's always opened.

YUUNO=MAKUBEX?!?!?!
DOES NOT COMPUTE YET IT SOMEWHAT COMPUTES!!!

And that's why crack is so wonderful. Computing when it shouldn't be able to.

But please don’t get carried away…>.>

Official Hayaurion is not my intention…<.<

(Actually, from what can be seen in IRC, it can be surmised that Goose shall not accept any other pairing for Hayate if it regards my OC’s…. >_____<)

Hence why you should display the awesomeness of HayatexGrandis to make us switch camps.

Though the Hayaurion camp is firmly entrenched with long time popular support. Not that I'm one. =3

That device-disabling spell is scary…

Anyway, you can never go wrong with an extremely feisty sniper with a temper as fiery as her sniping is accurate. Lotsa tsun-tsun-tsun-tsun-TSUN is shown.

Now where’s the dere-dere-dere-dere-DERE side…? >.>

*is shot three times on the head*

Actually that's a recycled spell that appears in almost every spell list of my OCs. I'm of the opinion denying mages of their devices is a good way to go.

As for the dere-dere-dere side, Jas really isn't much of an tsundere so that will be hard to come by. I'll touch on her Hyper Happy mode instead when I can.

Her future road is pretty tough though. Then again, I'm a mean creator. The more I favor an character, the nastier I'm to them.

All things aside, Jec is MOE~!
Her development as a child is rather unconventional, but she came out as an overall likeable person.

The protectiveness of the Price over her is one interesting detail as well. And of course, her spells are naturally powerful. Though Mercurius is still quite surprising for a device.

Moe was unexpected when I didn't provide an actual image to stand on.

As for the reason why the Prize favors her so much, Jec stands as an keystone in their future plans, as well as her device. (Have fun guessing. ) I can safely say her future is the next clearly developed, and somehow tying into Nanoha and Vivio in different ways. =3

I'm going ;_; at the thought of it though.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

[Ackbar]IT'S A TRAP!!![/Ackbar]


In any case, Uomo is indeed rebuilt quite well. The new pic is convincingly TRAPtastic.

And I must agree with Tormenk. The part about looks like a girl but has no qualms dressing up as a guy had me, “Huh?! Whut?!”

Of all the details, I want to know the part about how he sought interactions with Subaru and Ginga. His fighting style is quite fitting. And I guess I’ll have to familiarize myself with some of the references later. ()

Good work.

Don't remind me. I still go at his pic after so long.

Looking forward to his entrance Keroko. =3

The second read is no less interesting from the first. Heck, it’s even more interesting than the first!
Just like you said, she is much more balanced now compared to the previous version. But it also just sank in now just how dangerous and incredibly experienced she is…

Just like what I said in the first time I commented her. Her style is quite similar to Aurion, but she had a motherload of mana, moar dangerous spells, moar experience, and a genuine sadistic personality!

She’s truly a force to be reckoned with. Her abilities right now are already way dangerous. I couldn’t imagine how dangerous she could be if she got the Tome and the Mastema…

She still looks quite ravishing though.

*RUNS*

Good job.

I realized the original was a tad messed up so I figured why not change somethings while cleaning up?

And that's because C.C. is a wonderful image basis to draw on.

Just finished the Negima manga. As said by Lowe a long time ago, Katrina and Evangeline share so many similarities it's pure >_<. Speaking of which where's Aniki. :/

Wrong. Balmung is no melee spell.
It does THIS!!!

Spoiler for Balmung:

And believe me, swinging it around is no mean feat. Hardly something you’d use in fighting melee.

*me runs from Negima manga readers*

Holy ****.

WHEN I BREAK BACKLOG, I BEGIN AND END AT CLIMAX!!!!


Ah~...

I've never felt this alive for quite a while! I just love this place!

And of course, "Longest Backlog Breaker in History, GETTO~!!!"

No competition here. Aaron's Backlog Breakers are always fun to read.

Originally Posted by Tk3997

Hmm looks like it's time for a Backlog Breaker, Breaker... say that three times fast.

Tongue tied.

Is all that I am to you people just VitaXFelix?!

And O'Neil.

What? That's all? Yeah cause I took half an hour to plow through replying Aaron's breaker so I'm shortchanging Tk in return.

Edit: Oh yeah. Page claim for Aaron. XDD

[Mirificus]

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Blame 7arcs for not providing a better solo pic.=_=
IN any case, I did get another pic. Official at that. I’ll add it too.:3

These are the best official pictures of Hayate in her barrier jacket that of which I'm aware.

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[Comartemis]

Holy shi--!

*Is blown away by backlog breaker*

Kinda like Jail, no?

No, Jail's just an insane genius. Kane's a freakin' insane genius.

The fact that various canon sources talk about a Royal Bloodline, AKA more then one generation of rulers, pretty much debunks that.

Mmm... alright, but do you have suggestions on how to fix this without disposing of the entire first third of the timeline or making Vivian less pseudodivine?

[Wild Goose]

Just a progress update:

Almost done with Sunset Encounter and the Episode 3 scene rewrite. Will be done when done.

Next project title is confirmed as BelkaRed vs AbareHunter.

[XenahortCharybdis]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Right. Here's a quick timeline I worked out for the rise and fall of Belka and the Sankt Kaiser in my version of fanon. This is mostly for the benefit of an IRC conversation, but if you've got comments, let me hear 'em.

Also keep in mind that the early events in this timeline may have been embellished somewhat by the Saint Church.

Spoiler for A "Brief" History of Belka, the Sankt Kaiser, and Khaine:

Belka in its’ early history is a war-torn wasteland divided by warlords who do battle endlessly for reasons even they can’t remember

Imperial Year 0000: A young child wanders out of the wastes and politely asks two warlords and their forces to stop fighting. When the warlords ignore her, the child—who calls herself Vivian—displays shocking amounts of power and skill, subduing both warlords and their forces without taking a single life. Vivian’s appearance is identical to Vivio; she’s about 5 or so here.

As per universal (Belkan) standards of combat, the warlords expect to die—at the hands of an infant, no less!—only to be spared and chastised for being needlessly violent. Vivian displays wisdom far beyond her years when she gets the two warlords to sit down and talk things out, then gains her first followers when the two reach a peaceful accord.

Similar events take place all across Belka over the next few years as Vivian travels around preaching a simple philosophy of love and kindness. Word of Vivian’s accomplishments races through the peasant population, which quickly elevates her to a godlike position (she’s more Christ-like than godlike). The Saint Church is formed on the basis of Vivian’s teachings.

Largely through Vivian’s influence, the Belkan warlords unite into something akin to a ruling council. One day Vivian walks in on one of their meetings by chance, and is all but begged to lead Belka into prosperity. Vivian accepts, and reluctantly takes the title Sankt Kaiser; the Emperor of Belka.

Vivian rules for many generations, seeming to age at a tenth the rate of normal beings, which the church takes to be another sign of her divinity (actually it’s just her linker core pumping out so much energy that it’s saturating her body and slowing her cellular decay and thus her body’s aging processes), and under her guidance Belka grows and thrives.

Imperial Year 0258: A teenaged Vivian gives birth to a son, who she names Horus (yeah 40K fans, you know where this is headed).

Horus fails to live up to his mother’s image; he’s just like everyone else, and becomes jealous of Vivian for her power, ageless beauty, and control of the Belkan throne. Unsatisfied with his lot in life, Horus departs Belka, seeking power in other dimensions.

Imperial Year 0277: Horus stumbles upon an ancient prison suspended in dimension space. A relic of Al Hazard, this prison contains the spirits of a malevolent being known only as Khaine, and a decidedly more benign being known as Xerross. Both are Forerunners, survivors of Al Hazard.

Khaine and Xerross were imprisoned for the creation and use of a weapon of mass destruction, namely a ship which Belka will come to call the Saint's Cradle. Khaine is the one responsible for the Cradle's creation and usage, where Xerross was merely a bemused accomplice with nothing better to do. The prison that holds them is meant to maintain their spiritual essences unto eternity, preventing them from dying completely and forcing them to exist in formless torment for eternity, similar to Weil's punishment in the Mega Man Zero games. The problem is that the so-called torment hasn't worked quite as well as the Forerunners thought it would; Khaine and Xerross are bored out of their frickin' minds, but otherwise mostly sane.

Khaine promises to grant Horus unimaginable power in exchange for his freedom. Horus accepts, breaks open Khaine's and Xerross's prison (which is designed to keep things in, not out), and Khaine’s spirit possesses him, leaving Xerross behind. Xerross isn't all that pleased about this, but even with the prison broken open, he can only travel so far without his spirit dissipating, so he stays where he is.

As one of the last surviving mages of Al Hazard, Khaine possesses power beyond anything the Nanohaverse has ever seen or ever will see again. Using Horus as his vessel, Khaine returns to Belka and uses powerful spells to bend large portions of the populace to his will, raising a massive army to assist him in his conquest of Belka. Calling themselves “The Brotherhood of NOD”, Khaine and his followers wage war upon Vivian and her loyalist forces.

In a climactic battle at the war’s end, Khaine and Vivian clash in one-on-one combat in Vivian’s throne room. The two are extremely evenly-matched, but eventually Vivian emerges triumphant, sealing a large portion of Khaine's power and slaying Horus, freeing him from Khaine’s grip. Khaine is forced to return to his prison to recouperate from the battle, while Vivian passes away from grievous wounds suffered in battle.

Imperial Year 0285: Vivian’s chosen successor (selected prior to her death, just in case) takes up Vivian’s throne, becoming the first (non-Sankt) Kaiser.

As the years stretch into decades, centuries, and millennia, Vivian’s teachings fade into memory, her tenets followed only by followers of the Saint Church. The Empire begins to expand outwards through military force in Imperial Year 1490.

At some point during this expansion period, Khaine recovers enough of his strength to begin attempting to draw mortals towards his prison through a beckoning psychic call.

Imperial Year 2067: Weil Clearwater, a Belkan psychic known for his precognitive powers, is lured to Khaine’s prison by Khaine's psychic call and is possessed by him. This time, however, Xerross is decidedly pissed-off enough at being left behind, and starts his own call, luring another powerful psychic to his prison within a few years of Khaine's departure.

Even with Khaine's powers sealed, Xerross is no match for Khaine and so doesn't bother to try to oppose him openly. Instead, he watches and waits, throwing monkey wrenches into Khaine's plans at opportune times.

Khaine’s powers remain crippled by his battle with Vivian, but Weil’s powers of precognition serve Khaine well. He settles into a waiting game, sowing the seeds of Belka’s demise by feeding faulty information and advice to the latest Kaiser.

Despite warnings from the rest of the Clearwater line, at Khaine’s advice the Kaiser begins experimenting with an exceptionally dangerous Lost Logia called the Book of Darkness. The book is activated by the Kaiser’s experiments, consuming several of his most loyal bodyguards (The Wolkenritter) and using the Kaiser’s power to go berserk, wiping out the Imperial City as well as the rest of the continent it was formerly based on. Khaine and several noble families (the Clearwaters and several close allies of theirs) have already gotten the hell out of Dodge, but virtually the entire Imperial government goes up in smoke all at once.

While the Clearwater, Isard, and Sachara lines take refuge on Mid-Childa, the Belkan Empire begins to come apart at the seams. Virtually every world in the Empire splits apart from the Belkan Imperium; some form alliances with other worlds, some strike off on their own, and some declare all-out war on what’s left of Belka. The ensuing interdimensional crisis threatens to rip apart the very fabric of space-time as Lost Logia are weaponized and used on multiple sides of the conflict… just as Khaine predicted.

Khaine's forces strike seemingly at random over the next few years, hitting targets on numerous planets, detonating Lost Logia, and generally causing vast amounts of chaos and destruction. Eventually, the Brotherhood comes under fire from an alliance of worlds lead by Mid-Childa. Khaine abandons his followers; they've served their purpose for the time being.

The bureau is formed, and history proceeds as normal. The Clearwater, Sachara, and Isard lines return to Belka and begin to help the war's survivors piece their planet back together. They become the ruling families of Belka, with strong ties to Mid-Childa and the TSAB.

During this time (MC 000 to MC 076), Xerross travels around the multiverse, continuing to throw monkey wrenches into Khaine's plans at random intervals while simultaneously making himself useful to the Bureau by tracking down Lost Logia. He appears and disappears at random, never letting anyone get a clear idea of his intentions. At times he aids the bureau, at others he aids their enemies. Basically he acts like Xelloss from Slayers NEXT.

In preparation for the next phase of his plan, Khaine begins to gather a new flock of followers to his banner across numerous worlds, using resentment of the TSAB to bind his followers together. When Jail Scagglietti creates Vivio, Khaine kicks his operations into high gear, staging a coup de'tat on Belka and assassinating most of the Clearwater/Sachara/Isard lines, save for the young scions, Ciel, Rico, and Iris, who escape Khaine's execution squads and flee the planet.

Just as Khaine is becoming enough of a threat that the TSAB is taking notice of him, Jail makes his move on Bureau headquarters, crippling bureau forces and preventing them from doing anything for a while after the end of the JS Incident.

Khaine's ultimate goal is to secure the body of Vivian's clone--Vivio--to use as his next host; the power of the Saint King is the only thing that can completely break the seal on Khaine's power. If Khaine is successful in possessing Vivio, not only will he have his own powers restored, he will also have all the power of the Sankt Kaiser at his disposal, and nothing and no-one will be able to stop him.

Just prior to the beginning of the story, Khaine's forces launch all-out assaults on the TSAB's holdings in the outer rim worlds. The beleaguered bureau is forced to dispatch their best fighters to the front lines during this brief offensive... leaving Vivio open for kidnapping as Nanoha, Fate, Hayate and the Wolkenritter are forced to the frontlines. Khaine's stealth units successfully kidnap Vivio and transport her off-planet.

Luckily, the ship that was meant to transport Vivio to Khaine's stronghold is intercepted by a group of contract mages working for Xerross; the Divine Phantasms, made up of Rico, Iris, Ciel, Zero, Rei, and several others. Vivio is returned to Nanoha and Fate as Khaine's prolonged assault peters out and the Brotherhood goes into hiding... for the moment.

And that's right about where the storyline I have in mind begins, just prior to Vivio's rescue. Following the initial storyline "Reunion", the Divine Phantasms are hired by Fate and the Enforcers for a long-term assignment; taking down Khaine's strongholds on several Non-Administered worlds while the bulk of bureau forces deal with Khaine's forces in the field.

I swear, what was all that about not too much reference that you promised me and Shou? And then, you go and turn this into some semi-refined Khrack?

Right, not too many references...not too many...

But since I have dedicated myself to being your caretaker, and if necessary your undertaker, here goes nothing:

Complaint 1:

A prison that keeps things in and not out...quite a pathetic prison, especially for two hyper-powered beings.

Complaint 2:

There seem to be, disturbingly, only 2 Kaisers. This has been touched on before, but I'll provide you a solution as well: Make Khaine's thing a more gradual process, with minor sparks here and there but no flame. After all, all conflicts seem to be puzzles and putty in the hands of characters like Kane (I know it's based on him, that's obvious. He's called Khaine, but he's really Kane with a lot more power.)

Complaint 3:

Somehow I'm not sure if Vivio has as much output as Vivian. Ergo, I'm not sure if Vivio can output enough power to unseal Khaine like Vivian could (need for details. WAY more.)

Complaint 4:

Couldn't you have been a wee bit more original? I prefer referencing more subtly, and not so much of direct grab and stash. It irritates me a little, although with time I have become tolerant enough for it not to bother me too much, although my preference is still the indirect one. Anagrams, roles?

Mutter 1:

Somehow given the power of your OCs, that task shouldn't be a problem

Mutter 2:

It wasn't a crippling, really. The TSAB were good to go in a jiffy. In fact, it wasn't too bad for damage. Only Section 6 was whacked badly, and their Navy was still pretty much intact, too. I don't see that as "crippling". That's called "minor skirmish, not much gained in the big picture."

In military terms, the JS attack was of little worth in the big picture. At best, it smarted, but didn't hamstring anyone.

Mutter 3:



Okay, I rest my case.

Go fix it if you like, and even if you don't, rest assured I will be your faithful dream catcher and death avatar for a long time yet.

Yours Sincerely

Xena

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My own brand of madness...is still cookin'.

[Wild Goose]

If anything, the crippling of Bureau forces that takes place happens during the Cradle Ascent - and even then, the GF still has a good number of people deployed as canon fodder, despite how they and RF6 got pwnt in Episodes 16 and 17...

*remembers his cracked AU where the OFM intervened during the Raid on GFHQ*

Nevermind.

[XenahortCharybdis]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

If anything, the crippling of Bureau forces that takes place happens during the Cradle Ascent - and even then, the GF still has a good number of people deployed as canon fodder, despite how they and RF6 got pwnt in Episodes 16 and 17...

*remembers his cracked AU where the OFM intervened during the Raid on GFHQ*

Nevermind.

Just hinging on that a little, even that is not really a crippling. If the main force is still intact (not Einherjah, they're like perimeter defense towers, you know, like the Red Alert 1 ones, aka the ones that never really worked), they have the navy (which kicks ass though it's always a little late), and they still have the air force (which kicks ass till they get overshadowed by one pink beam.)

So that's why I said Jail won the battle, but he lost the war, overall, because he was on the bad side of it anyway, not to mention because he's the BAD GUY. In shows like Nanoha, he's like Rosencrantz and Guilderstern in "(insert their names) are Dead" - already doomed to lose.

Tactically speaking, though, Jail was racing against time as much as the TSAB was, imho. It's the TSAB's deus-ex-machina versus Jail's, and the TSAB has more resources, it's an uphill battle still.

[Wild Goose]

Originally Posted by XenahortCharybdis

Just hinging on that a little, even that is not really a crippling. If the main force is still intact (not Einherjah, they're like perimeter defense towers, you know, like the Red Alert 1 ones, aka the ones that never really worked), they have the navy (which kicks ass though it's always a little late), and they still have the air force (which kicks ass till they get overshadowed by one pink beam.)

So that's why I said Jail won the battle, but he lost the war, overall, because he was on the bad side of it anyway, not to mention because he's the BAD GUY. In shows like Nanoha, he's like Rosencrantz and Guilderstern in "(insert their names) are Dead" - already doomed to lose.

Tactically speaking, though, Jail was racing against time as much as the TSAB was, imho. It's the TSAB's deus-ex-machina versus Jail's, and the TSAB has more resources, it's an uphill battle still.

That's true; I keep forgetting that TSAB means TSAB as a whole, not just GF.

And that's not counting the rest of Cadia as well - who all, sadly, were forced to play limited roles

Ironically, while the presence of the OCs would have ended up in a stronger position for the TSAB in StrikerS, if they were around in A's it'd have ended up in a Bad End. Most of the OCs would have killed the Knights - in self-defence or... aggressive self-defense - and would have Arc'ed Uminari and the book, seeing no alternative...

[XenahortCharybdis]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

That's true; I keep forgetting that TSAB means TSAB as a whole, not just GF.

And that's not counting the rest of Cadia as well - who all, sadly, were forced to play limited roles

Ironically, while the presence of the OCs would have ended up in a stronger position for the TSAB in StrikerS, if they were around in A's it'd have ended up in a Bad End. Most of the OCs would have killed the Knights - in self-defence or... aggressive self-defense - and would have Arc'ed Uminari and the book, seeing no alternative...

Last point...Very true. Very, very true. Things would have gotten wayyy out of hand in both cases. In StrikerS we'd see the TSAB taking out almost 3 times more Drones than in the real story no thanks to the abundance of godly snipers, and we'd have a much better plan, which would result in a more clinical, if faster, and maybe more awesome win. Kudos on that of course goes to our OC tacticians, on-site and off-site ones alike.

While in As, Reinforce Eins might have gotten killed, I swear it. Just get a diversion, and have Chief sneak up under Active Camo... *snaps fingers* you know the drill.

And then...poor Kha, he wouldn't exist like we know him. And one of my OCs would be pretty heartbroken too, if an insane person could be heartbroken

Aggressive Self Defence, you might as well call that a Counterattack, saves you the trouble of thinking up a euphemism

[Comartemis]

they have the navy (which kicks ass though it's always a little late)

Ah yes, the flying plot devices. The first things Kane's forces will obliterate with laughable ease.

*sinister mad scientist laugh*

There seem to be, disturbingly, only 2 Kaisers.

Ah, no there's a line of "mortal" kaisers after Vivian's death. Probably whoever's responsible for getting her knocked up with Horus at first, then a standard imperial bloodline after that.

[XenahortCharybdis]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Ah yes, the flying plot devices. The first things Kane's forces will obliterate with laughable ease.

*sinister mad scientist laugh*

That'll be the day, that'll be the day.

Just a possibly pertinent piece of pie: Don't promise too much h4xx if it'll end up hard to pull off in the end, it's not good for your health, although it's amusing to watch. It takes tactical genius, or godh4xx, to wipe the floor with a whole damn fleet. And I disagree with the term "plot device", that's not entirely doing plot devices any justice: They are the deus-ex-machina, the ultimately senseless stupidity which is a sorry excuse for a plot device, powerful to unknown and unexplored degrees.

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Ah, no there's a line of "mortal" kaisers after Vivian's death. Probably whoever's responsible for getting her knocked up with Horus at first, then a standard imperial bloodline after that.

Ah, where's my undertaker's hat?

*picks it up*

*puts it on*

Xena gains new rare skill: Scary White Eyes

*Xena lolls his eyes, showing the whites as it rains*

TOMBSTONE-

*static and garbled screams. A loud slam is heard, and crunching of bone*

[PhoenixFlare]

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Everything.

Vivio is captured again, this time brought back to the original clone production facility for ..intensive examinations. The Prize does treasure the merits of a successful Artificial Mage and clone of the Saint King, in line of continuing the progress down that road.

Btw, the name came from this guy. You'll see why I picked his name for a good reason.

Ah, I see the ingenuity here, and why they seem so elated at having Vivio back in their facility. Intensive examination, though, does not involve the mass production of an army of Vivios ... does it?

And Shou Tucker or otherwise, it's still DIE, SHOU!

Originally Posted by Kha

*looks to PF and Keroko for advice*

Mm, given certain adjustments here and there in the genetic materials, it's possible to slow down aging, but nothing to the extent suggested by Comartemis (200+ years). And by conserving certain information, it's also possible to create Vivians throughout the timeline.

It's rather impossible, though, given the technology level at that time. This technology also exploits biological limits to their extremes, something which I don't think anyone would want to tamper for their King.

Originally Posted by Anita

Kha has a self-deluded habit of kneeling in front of a little corner in the Lourve...

The idea of such an intergalactic journey is win. We need more Khophia fluff!

Depending on what the secret is, we may then have to ask ourselves this question...

Turns suddenly to Saber and sneers in her face.

...who exactly are you, Sankt Kaiser.

Quick! History is about to be written, and justice to be done! The Sankt Kaiser's identity will finally be lifted from the mists of mysteries!

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

~How deep can you dig?~
~How much effort can you give?~
~How much passion can you show?~
~For the one and only OC Thread?~

About 80 pages...

BACKLOG... BREAKER.

You've set a standard of backlog busting no one's ever done (apart from those who did a tremendous backlog buster of 400+ pages before)!

*gives Aaron Almaria, Hayate, and Hayaurion plushies (:3)*

I will also attempt a stupendous backlog buster ... after this week ends.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

YOU TOLD THEM!!!

=3

Yep, I did.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Hmm. Good to see templar development.
They should have done more of the same for the Numbers in StrikerS!
The dream was rather spectacularly surprising in the end... The visage would have been indeed...

More developments (and shocking truths!) revealed later. Examination is a jealous time-hogger now.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

VIVIO IS WIN!!!



She grew up into quite a feisty yet VERY precocious little rascal!
Her relationship with Leraphiel-neechan is a surprise though.

Nanoha better watch out for more of her daughters antics.

And of course...
'Dense as a rock and straight as a log' was WIN!!!

Kudos to Yuuno for being VERY perceptive.

I'm glad you like it, because I didn't expected her to grow up like this myself. I took a few spoonfuls of ideas learned from classes and observations of current children behaviors to come up with this Vivio.

Leraphiel nee-chan will also be a surprise later.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Pompous leader is pompous.
This feels like some of the big bad bosses I've seen in other series. But I'll be damned if I say that it does not fit here. It sure hell does!!!

Lazarus seems to get shot down as well. But usually in these cases, the leaders like being praised AND shooting 'em down.

Lazarus is pompous towards other Magi, but cannot do so against the BIG boss.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

TEH DETAILS ARE OVERWHELMING!!!@_________@

...

In a good way.

EPIC info chapter with a brain-busting amount of detail to really bust some brains! And looking forward to the revelation of details from Chrono.:3

Good work!

I busted my brains a few times writing that.

Revelation from Chrono imminent! ... In Chapter 11.

Small note on the Pentateuch Archive, in any case (kind of forgotten to explain this):

Spoiler for Pentateuch Archive:

A high-security confidential collection of important data and information locked by five selected personnel/members using five different authentication mechanisms: password (at least 16 characters), retinal scan, voice recognition, thumb print, and DNA verification (the interface can be made to accept several small drops of blood/lock of hair for immediate sequencing). Hence, the name Pentateuch Archive.

Because it's usually meant to seal away highly important data, the sequence of seals are known only to those who participate in the process. Unlocking the Archive would require repeating the same order of persons who locked it, though the authentication mechanisms can be made to accommodate for unforeseen circumstances (such as death of a person, which eliminates thumb print and retinal scan from use), with a minimal requirement of passing three out of five of the mechanisms.

Regardless, the system is sensitive enough to log in attempts to unlock it, and would self-destruct in the case that it was forcefully breached through hacking or inability to fulfill the unlock requirements without required time-frame. A second chance is given in the event that the system was not forcefully opened, possibly by accidental activation, but that was all before the message contained within would be eliminated from the memory forever should another failed attempt ensued.

Nothing much about the storyline except to tell how important the content is.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

I sure tend to get this "As expected from OC's top Hayate fan" comments, huh?

Anyway, thanks a lot!

Well, you are the top Hayate fan.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Waving around is for swiping lots of troublesome large enmies out of the way. But for what speed is available (slow) Balmung is for dropping a big slab of hurt.:3

Anti-army more than anti-personnel, then?

*scribblesscribble* Might be useful later in my fic as well.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Aurion's my OC, so naturally, I can give him as much details as I want.=3
And Hayate's crush on Chrono was very well probable.:3 I wanted to add dimensions to the Nanoha series that 7arcs forsaken, after all...>.>

True, true.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Lyriel is still under development.:3 And as for Grandis...

*chants 'I WILL make GrandisXHayate work!!!' several times*

I wonder if it'll ever remove the deep-seated image of Hayaurion, in any case. But, we can all but try, ne?

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

ZOMG YOU BLEW UP ESCUTCHEON!!!!!

KISAMA!!!!!

(=3)

It's a necessary evil ...

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Ah~...

I've never felt this alive for quite a while! I just love this place!

And of course, "Longest Backlog Breaker in History, GETTO~!!!"

Harumph! I'll see if I can manage it!

(Probably not, I've already busted some along the way ._.)

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Mmm... alright, but do you have suggestions on how to fix this without disposing of the entire first third of the timeline or making Vivian less pseudodivine?

The timeline is going to be a major headache on your part.

You'd notice that, in the period between Weil Clearwater's psychic calling and Vivian's death, there is a gap of 1782 years where the bloodline is no longer of the original Sankt Kaiser, be it Vivian's or Horus's. Even if we were to assume that the selected bloodline is still powerful enough an influence, that bloodline is no longer the true one, and as such cannot have an effect on Cradle activation during the Jail Scaglietti Incident later.

This argument has been around, but a thousand years would have caused serious degradation of Vivian's (or Horus's) genetic structure that even any left intact would be truly a wonder. A clone of Vivio from this historical makeup is therefore not possible in the future, if the blood isolated from the Holy Shroud had undergone a total of 1848 years of decomposition.

You can either fix it by introducing more royal children of Vivian (whoever the consort is, you never mentioned, and no virgin birth, thank you) that somehow one eventually managed to sit at the throne 300 years before the empire collapsed, or make it so that Khaine or Xelloss were nonexistent for the chaos and eventual extinction of bloodline.

On the question of divinity, make her normal. "Actually it’s just her linker core pumping out so much energy that it’s saturating her body and slowing her cellular decay and thus her body’s aging processes" is erroneous at best, since a body that is energy saturated will have a more rapid aging process.

[Comartemis]

That'll be the day, that'll be the day.

Quite so, quite so: It'll be too much fun writing out a bureau warship getting a proton torp right down the pipe while the AeC's charging: instant kablooey!

That oughta teach 'em to put some decent weapons on those flying bathtubs they call ships! Muahahahahahahaha!

*EDIT*
Just realized how much that sounds like a Star Wars reference....

You can either fix it by introducing more royal children of Vivian (whoever the consort is, you never mentioned, and no virgin birth, thank you) that somehow one eventually managed to sit at the throne 300 years before the empire collapsed, or make it so that Khaine or Xelloss were nonexistent for the chaos and eventual extinction of bloodline.

Extra kids works just fine.

[XenahortCharybdis]

Originally Posted by PhoenixFlare

Ah, I see the ingenuity here, and why they seem so elated at having Vivio back in their facility. Intensive examination, though, does not involve the mass production of an army of Vivios ... does it?

And Shou Tucker or otherwise, it's still DIE, SHOU!

Oh, AARON!!!

Here's a new competitor for overreactions here! *waves*

Originally Posted by PhoenixFlare

[/B]Quick! History is about to be written, and justice to be done! The Sankt Kaiser's identity will finally be lifted from the mists of mysteries!

*cough*

If it gets that far without me burying him alive in critique

Though I trust that won't happen, Cadians are VERY resilient.

Originally Posted by PhoenixFlare

[/B] Lazarus is pompous towards other Magi, but cannot do so against the BIG boss.

As expected. I like Big Bosses that are less...stifling, though. Still, I like Lazarus, and his boss. The dynamics is very familiar to me.

Originally Posted by PhoenixFlare

Revelation from Chrono imminent! ... In Chapter 11.

Small note on the Pentateuch Archive, in any case (kind of forgotten to explain this):

Spoiler for Pentateuch Archive:

A high-security confidential collection of important data and information locked by five selected personnel/members using five different authentication mechanisms: password (at least 16 characters), retinal scan, voice recognition, thumb print, and DNA verification (the interface can be made to accept several small drops of blood/lock of hair for immediate sequencing). Hence, the name Pentateuch Archive.

Because it's usually meant to seal away highly important data, the sequence of seals are known only to those who participate in the process. Unlocking the Archive would require repeating the same order of persons who locked it, though the authentication mechanisms can be made to accommodate for unforeseen circumstances (such as death of a person, which eliminates thumb print and retinal scan from use), with a minimal requirement of passing three out of five of the mechanisms.

Regardless, the system is sensitive enough to log in attempts to unlock it, and would self-destruct in the case that it was forcefully breached through hacking or inability to fulfill the unlock requirements without required time-frame. A second chance is given in the event that the system was not forcefully opened, possibly by accidental activation, but that was all before the message contained within would be eliminated from the memory forever should another failed attempt ensued.

Nothing much about the storyline except to tell how important the content is.

Really now, that's nice of you...

*absorbs information*

Originally Posted by PhoenixFlare

I wonder if it'll ever remove the deep-seated image of Hayaurion, in any case. But, we can all but try, ne?

Grandis...X...Hayate?

WHAT THE BLEEDIN' HELL?!!!!

How could I have been so blind to this alternative route...I need to see his profile. Now where is it...

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Quite so, quite so: It'll be too much fun writing out a bureau warship getting a proton torp right down the pipe while the AeC's charging: instant kablooey!

That oughta teach 'em to put some decent weapons on those flying bathtubs they call ships! Muahahahahahahaha!

*EDIT*
Just realized how much that sounds like a Star Wars reference....

*hides plans for the Claudia's destruction*

Ahem. I was talking about wiping a whole fleet, but nevermind, I'll see how things go.

Yes, it sounded like it, although it's more like a line Leonard McCoy would spout when pissed off.

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Extra kids works just fine.

It would work fine for your life plan too

[PhoenixFlare]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Magical energy, PF. I can do whatever I want with this particular energy source since canon doesn't have anything to say about the subject.

Canon would like to prove otherwise.


魔導師の食事 - A mage’s diet
For mages, Mana in the atmosphere is linked together in an organ, the “Linker core”, and stored within their body. For quick replenishment, a balanced diet consisting of sugars, carbohydrates and proteins is essential, as are a variety of vitamins and minerals to maintain a healthy body. Therefore out of necessity, mages undergoing hard training during their early growth period eat a much larger diet compared to an ordinary person. Furthermore, pasta and other noodle-type foods are easily digested, so these types of food, known as ｢Loading Foods」, are loved by many mages, since they allow for quick energy and Mana replenishment.

You'd notice that Mana is generated within the Linker Core, and replenishment comes primarily from food and rest. While Vivian may not be a glutton, Mana is a form of energy that has its source from food, which exemplifies the fact that it's a form of physical energy that can be changed to power normal metabolism (law of energy conservation and the first law of thermodynamics). And such energies are consumed by the cells to do work; the more you have it, the more they work, and eventually they either become resistant or die.

If Vivian has "delayed aging" simply because she's brimming with Mana, Hayate is a potential candidate for such "divine manifestation", because her mana pool is large enough (SS). Yet, Hayate is not, so your argument is invalid.

And really, if Mana can be used to do everything, one wonders why there is no supra-godlike mage characters (SSS+) in entire Mid-childa. It can even be that they perish faster because of too much Mana.

[Wild Goose]

Originally Posted by Comartemis

Quite so, quite so: It'll be too much fun writing out a bureau warship getting a proton torp right down the pipe while the AeC's charging: instant kablooey!

That oughta teach 'em to put some decent weapons on those flying bathtubs they call ships! Muahahahahahahaha!

Indeed.

Magical energy, PF. I can do whatever I want with this particular energy source since canon doesn't have anything to say about the subject.

*Goose enters AbareKillerGoose mode*

Extra kids works just fine.

Perhaps an imouto grieving for Horus-oniichan, saddened by the lost of rabu-rabu.

*casts Alert and Guard and dodges sniper fire*

Originally Posted by XenahortCharybdis

Grandis...X...Hayate?

WHAT THE BLEEDIN' HELL?!!!!

How could I have been so blind to this alternative route...I need to see his profile. Now where is it...

Aaron's been putting it forward, Reiji's been hating on this pairing, and I just ship Hayaurion because it's pseudocest. Well actually I ship Hayaurion for shits and giggles, and it's kinda fun to see Aaron go all swirly. It keeps me from entering AbareKillerGoose Mode.

Epic battle! Burning spirits seeking the maiden's pure heart! The epic of the month!

Aurion vs Grandis, in the battle for Hayate's heart, soul and door!

^_______________^

Originally Posted by PhoenixFlare

Canon would like to prove otherwise.


魔導師の食事 - A mage’s diet
For mages, Mana in the atmosphere is linked together in an organ, the “Linker core”, and stored within their body. For quick replenishment, a balanced diet consisting of sugars, carbohydrates and proteins is essential, as are a variety of vitamins and minerals to maintain a healthy body. Therefore out of necessity, mages undergoing hard training during their early growth period eat a much larger diet compared to an ordinary person. Furthermore, pasta and other noodle-type foods are easily digested, so these types of food, known as ｢Loading Foods」, are loved by many mages, since they allow for quick energy and Mana replenishment.

You'd notice that Mana is generated within the Linker Core, and replenishment comes primarily from food and rest. While Vivian may not be a glutton, Mana is a form of energy that has its source from food, which exemplifies the fact that it's a form of physical energy that can be changed to power normal metabolism (law of energy conservation and the first law of thermodynamics). And such energies are consumed by the cells to do work; the more you have it, the more they work, and eventually they either become resistant or die.

If Vivian has "delayed aging" simply because she's brimming with Mana, Hayate is a potential candidate for such "divine manifestation", because her mana pool is large enough. Yet, Hayate is not.

I would also like to point out that delayed aging means you'd spend a longer time as a loli. Take David Weber's Honorverse. 20-30 year olds stuck in 12 year old loli bodies thanks to delayed aging. (On the other hand it means taht 50-60 year olds can look like in their late 20s so I suppose it balances ). Basically what does that mean?

Nobody takes you seriously until you're at least 35 or 40 People look at you and go, "Meh, just a kid." Are you sure you want Vivian to have that happen to her, Comar?

I'm also personally not keen on the name Vivian because it reminds me of my onee-chan.

[Tk3997]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

That's true; I keep forgetting that TSAB means TSAB as a whole, not just GF.

And that's not counting the rest of Cadia as well - who all, sadly, were forced to play limited roles

Ironically, while the presence of the OCs would have ended up in a stronger position for the TSAB in StrikerS,

Kind of hard not for that the happen given that we'd have been increasing the good guy teams numbers like ten fold and adding a ton of militarily competent characters to the mix... Curbstomp is about the best the other team could hope for. Horribly bloody beam and stabbing induced deaths is more likely.

if they were around in A's it'd have ended up in a Bad End. Most of the OCs would have killed the Knights - in self-defence or... aggressive self-defense -

TK is reminded of General Sherman’s order to his troops to “forage liberally off the land” AKA, “pillage at will”.

and would have Arc'ed Uminari and the book, seeing no alternative...

The knights are totally going to get killed with extreme overkill… The Arc probably doesn’t happen though after all the book can’t be completed with the knights dead can it? Still a bad end though as Hayate probably dies and all the knights are obviously toasted, and the book might well get away and show up again later. That could almost make a decent AU Don't expect me to write or read it though her and the knights are basiclly my favorite characters in the show after all.

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

I would also like to point out that delayed aging means you'd spend a longer time as a loli. Take David Weber's Honorverse. 20-30 year olds stuck in 12 year old loli bodies thanks to delayed aging. (On the other hand it means taht 50-60 year olds can look like in their late 20s so I suppose it balances ). Basically what does that mean?

Nobody takes you seriously until you're at least 35 or 40 People look at you and go, "Meh, just a kid." Are you sure you want Vivian to have that happen to her, Comar?

I'm also personally not keen on the name Vivian because it reminds me of my onee-chan.

That's really more a matter of what kind of technobabble you're using to extend the ages given that all of it is pretty much beyond us we have no idea how anti-aging treatments would work but they come in all sorts of flavors ones that can acutally reverse previous aging, ones that stop it at a set point, ones that slow it down in all stages (the one you said), etc basiclly eternal youth comes in a a whole bunch of flavors.

[Tempy]

Dang. That was quite the epic Backlog Breaker. I come back from work and this is what I see? Glorious.

It's enough to jumpstart my creativity.

But first...

@PhoenixFlare: Thank you muchly for the in depth review. Your suggestions have made an impact on development and I hope the altered versions are better.

Originally Posted by Kha

Funny that you mentioned that, for ever since I heard of the anime from Sheba, then watched the OP in the clubroom, I thought of the same thing.

Hell yeah. You should definitely give the series a watch. I LOVE the ED. Imagine Vivio having to live with Noland acting eerily similar to Kogarashi.

Spoiler for Maid Guy Noland:

It is a fine morning and another day of school. 15 year old Vivio Takamachi has awakened and washed up. As she puts on her school uniform, however, she is horrified to discover that the dress is too small! Drastic measures will be needed. Downstairs, Noland is serving the family a tasty breakfast of omelettes and hash browns.

Vivio: I'm going~! Oh. I won't be eating breakfast from now on...

Fate: Eehh? It'd be better if you did, Vivio-chan...

Noland: Exactly, Master. Even if you gained 1.8 kilograms in three days, you shouldn't worry about it.

Vivio: !!! How did you know? A figure as accurate as 1.8 kilograms... where did you find out...?

Noland: Hmph. I know everything about you, Master. In front of Maid Guy Sight, even if you're wearing clothes, you're actually naked to me. Hmmm...

Vivio: N-Naked? Sight? That means...!

Noland: *eyes are glowing* Hmmm... I am seeing it all, Master! Ah ha! Confirming an increase of volume in your breasts and butt. You are growing perfectly fine. But don't worry, I've prepared a larger size of underwear for you.

Vivio: NOOOOOOO~!! *dashes out of the house*

Noland: Hmmm. My master is so loud this early in the morning.

Nanoha: *White Devil Mode* Noland-san, I have something I need to speak to you about...

Later that night...

Bandaged Noland: Tonight's dinner will be bell peppers and beef!

Vivio tries valiantly to sneak out of the house.

Noland: Master, where are you going?

Vivio: Fatty dishes and peppers... I'm not going eat them! *notices Noland is RIGHT NEXT TO HER* KYAAAH!

*Vivio falls to the ground; Noland towers over her.*

Noland: According to your BMI and structure of bones, you have the potential to grow into an amazing body. Also, you're in puberty. It is not possible to cut your ration on food. No matter what, your weight will increase.

KAPOW! Noland is Flying Dragon Kicked in the head!

Fate: Uuu! You don't have to put it like that, Noland-san! Your words are too harsh!

Noland: *currently embedded in the wall* It will not change things. She must eat her dinner.

Bwahaha.

Oh yes. Kha, have you ever considered a change in uniform for you genderbent form? Like... this one?

Spoiler for Change is Good:

Originally Posted by Keroko

Ahh... that might be a problem. That the Cleric-Knights never had a Primarch I knew, but hey only answer to the Seiou? The Primarch's are second-in-command to the Seiou only, the word of a Primarch is the word of the Seiou, basically. Having an entire unit that doesn't follow the Primarch's orders would be messing with Fall of an Empire.

Hmm. This sounds interesting. I'm really starting to like this idea of the Primarch. If Noland is the favored son of the Sankt Kaiser...

Well damn. Noland really does look like to be the Horus of the Belkan Empire.

I'm... not sure how I could fit this in. Him being 'the' great traitor would mess with my story.

This is where the ambiguity and vagueness of Noland's history comes in handy. As I've said before, the truth could have been changed, warped, or misrepresented by historians writing the matter down. Thanks to this haziness, Noland's history can be easily modified to fit into just about anyone's story.

Thank you everyone who responded about Noland and his spell list.

Alright guys. I present to you all now an updated and modified spell list.

Spoiler for Spell List Ver. 2.0:

Noland Reininger

Unit Statistics:

Letters in paranthesies indicate Lunatic mode
Statistics are assuming that the average person is straight D's

Strength: B (S+)
Endurance: A (S)
Agility: B (A+)
Mana: B (D)
Luck: C (E)

Since Noland is a knight that focuses almost exclusively on close combat, his melee abilities are ludicrously powerful. As a cost, however, his ranged combat is far below par. Unless otherwise noted, offensive spells utilize Noland's personal stats rather than individual spell-based stats.

Interesting to note is that his surname means "Purifier" or "Cleanser."

Spell List:

Layman's version

Spells marked with Passive means they are constantly active and do not require active control. This also means there is a constant drain on his mana and stamina.

Note: These are the known spells that Noland has thus far revealed. More may be released or discovered in the future.

Defensive / Supportive:

Knight Armor -- Cocytus: Plate-style armor that can deflect physical and magic attacks under A class power and reduce the damage inflicted by attacks of higher power. Damages to the armor are immediately sealed up, though the wound underneath remains. The armor itself causes three changes in Noland's body:

1. The physical and mental limitations of the body are lifted, allowing him to use 100% of his muscles rather than the usual 20%.

2. All sensations of pain and exhaustion are numbed completely. Not even the greatest of wounds can be felt.

3. The body is reinforced against damage; the armor will immediately "treat" any injuries such as splinting a broken bone or resetting a dislocated joint. These treatments are haphazard at best and dangerous at worst.

The changes are a great physical strain on Noland's body, however, leading to exhaustion, heavy fatigue, and voracious appetite. A rest period of 48 hours is recommended between "uses."

Knight Armor -- Ancile: An invisible, intangible field surrounds Noland that works in conjunction with the armor as a first line of defense. It is useless against physical attacks, but "shooting" spells are deflected. Shieldbreakers can bypass the field, as can overwhelming firepower, but the field remains active even after being pierced -- it just fills in the hole.

Insanity Sign -- Terror of Death: (Passive) His very presence is fearsome, his battle cries sending shivers even down the most hardened of warriors. The aura of fear is strongest with 50 meters of Noland, gradually weakening as distance increases, affecting anyone within range. Those caught in this spell are immediately subjected to frightening halluncinations of friends and family suffering, decimation of what used to be a happy life, and their own deaths.

Insanity Sign -- Mad Enhancement: (Passive) All physical attributes are increased drastically at the cost of sanity.The greater the synchronization, the greater the attribute increase, but the more difficult it becomes to snap out of it.

Typical Synchronization values and their effects:

87% - The average value. Physical attributes are increased by about 80%. Noland retains shreds of his awareness and is capable of speech and following orders. He cannot, however, make overly complicated thoughts like tactics and strategy. The objective is destruction, and he excels in that task.

90% - Increased value. Attributes rank up to 100%. Noland loses the ability to speak and becomes difficult to control or command. Figures of authority may be ignored or even attacked.

95% - Dangerous Value. Attribute rank up to 200%. Noland begins to have trouble deferentiating friend from foe and may target friendly forces once all enemy forces are annihilated.

100% - Maximum value. Attributes rank up to 300% or greater. Noland loses all sense of self and reason, becoming a pure berserker with an insatiable bloodlust and great desire to kill. Allies and enemies become equal opportunity victims.

400% - The value Noland reached that resulted in the Fall of Belka. It is unknown how to reach this level, but suffice to say you don't want to reach it again.

Offensive / Weapons:

Murder Sign -- Bloody Hands: Swathed in disruptive energies, physical defenses like armor crumple like tin foil against the armored fists and greaves of the Berserker. The hands are cursed to drip the blood of the Saint King eternally as a reminder of his greatest sin. As his primary weapons, he is required to be in melee combat.

Tyrant Sword -- Wraith Blade "Tyrfing": Noland's ultimate weapon. A blade of unidentified energies that extends from his right hand. The blade disintegrates anything it touches and disrupts magic fields. Use of this weapon results in a great physical and mental strain, as it uses Noland's life force to fuel its destructive power -- extended use could very well kill him, as every minute of its use is a day off of his lifespan. As a melee weapon, he is required to be in close quarters.
Power: EX

Restriction Sign -- Chains of Heaven and Hell: Originating from his gauntlets, two chains extend to incredible lengths for purposes of restraint, capture, defense, movement, and even attack. The chains themselves appear invulnerable to attacks below AA class.
Speed: A
Control: A+
Range: C+

Bullet Hell -- Gatling Rave: Long range suppression fire. Staccato burst fire of small explosive “bolts.” Rapid fire, but relatively low power. The sheer volume of fire makes it difficult for opponents to act. Originates from gauntlets.
Power: C+
Speed: S
Range: A

Bullet Hell -- Infernal Devil's Spear: Medium range anti-armor. A two-staged missile-like projectile. It takes the shape of a fiery bullet that first melts through the armor or shield then explodes violently in a burst of scorching power.
Power: AA
Speed: A
Range: C+
Special: Shieldbreaker / Armor Piercing

Cataclysm Sign -- Holocaust: Close range anti-unit. The very air in front of and around Noland ignites and explodes in a ball of searing white-hot flame.
Power: AAA+
Range: D
Special: Area effect.

[Reiji Tabibito]

HELLO CADIA!!!


How's it been?


Commencing Return...

[Radiation Wave Arm: 100%]

Be Blown Away, Backlog!!!

Originally Posted by Kha

Welcome, my brother, to Outer Cadia.

One Vision, One Purpose.

PEACE THROUGH CHEESE!

...I'm not even here three seconds...and I get this...

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

I'm reworking his elemental prowess. The current one now is too convenient (and HAXX). Been working on it recently with tshou and PF. Plenty of progress has been made.:3

Only hint right now that Grandis' elemental affinities will now count as 'artificial'. How I make it work is still in the works...^^;;
The brainstorming of the system is kinda mind-boggling in inception but is well-worth it when I pull it off.:3

...just as a personal point, I really don't care how you make it work, as long as it does work...

...and Grandis still has fire spells for Arcas to copy.

Other than that...

Originally Posted by AdmiralTigerclaw

My god... what if Nanoha had to deal with...

Spoiler for THIS:

UGH.... but... at the same time... LOL.

*FANFARE*

RUBY: T. NANOHAAAA!!!!

NANOHA: O_o

RUBY: Here she is! The one and only winner of the TSAB Magiball Contest!

NANOHA: ~_~;

RUBY: This girl is FUELED BY MAGIC! So start melting guys, 'cause the girl's hotter than hot she's hot HOT HOT!

*Cue the beat.*

Nanoha...and 5th Element...

HMMM....

Fascinating...think of the possibilities...

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Spoiler for Here we go:

An abhorred relic from the distant past. A soul lost to madness. A traitor to king, country, and family.

The Knight of Calamity



Name: Noland Reiniger
Age: Physically, 35
DOB: Unknown
Height: 6' 2” (7’ Lunatic Mode)
Weight: 210 lbs (270 lbs Lunatic Mode)
Eyes: Red (Blind)
Hair: Black
Blood type: O negative

Affiliation: Unknown, possibly Belkan
Position: Unknown
Rank: Unknown
Mage Rank: Unknown (Normal) / S+ (Lunatic Mode)
Magic System: Ancient Belka (presumed)
Magic Color: Crimson
Specialty: Army Decimation
Position: Deep Strike Assaulter
Style: Berserker

Device: Cocytus "The Eyes of Lunacy"

Little is known about the device, and even less known is how it operates. The device is believed to be an early unison device, permanently grafted to the subject's body. In its current state, the device exists as two red orbs that take the place of the subject's eyes. While performance of the device could not be tested, the subject revealed a number of facts. The device AI is incredibly strong, capable of suppressing the persona and taking over the body if the user's willpower is not strong enough. True to Belkan-style magic, the device focuses on enhancing close combat. The gift of insanity the device bestows in turn increases the users attributes to incredible levels, dangerously so. A technician making eye contact with the revealed device is recorded in saying she felt her very grip on reality slip away from her.

The device may well be considered Lost Logia due to its age and potential, but it is too dangerous to be studied safely. It has been sealed away along with its user.

Note: The following information was withdrawn from the Infinity Library concerning the observations made by researchers before the matter was sealed away.

Personality:

The subject's original persona is relatively unknown, as much of it has been subjugated or suppressed from trauma or the device. Two distinct personas have been determined, however, and henceforth will be identified with the terms "Normal Mode" and "Lunatic Mode" for when the device is active.

In his interviews and sessions, the subject was found to be a generally calm and collected individual, showing a intelligent and well-cultured personality. He is polite, thoughtful, and was careful in his selection of responses. His tone was noted to be particularly grim, however, as much of his disposition possessed a pessimistic edge. He mentioned little of family and was often bitter when questioned about his nation. Interestingly, the subject possessed an ironic wit and dark humor in his retorts.

The subject expressed a distinct fear when discussing his device, often hesitant to release information about it. Mood swings and shifts in attitude were noted depending on how deeply interviewers pressed. More than one incident occurred where the subject had to be removed from the room or sedated after a violent scene. Afterwards, however, the subject apologized.

The subject often spoke of "raison d'etre."

In direct contrast, with his device active, the subject gains a confidence that is nigh arrogant. Proud and willful, he believes himself above all others, a god amongst mortals.

History:

All that the subject personally revealed is that he is from the time when ancient Belka still thrived.

What historical records could be found describe a single entity spawned from early experiments with Belkan magic styles. His device is recorded as one of the earliest Belkan devices that focused on close combat, and he was selected to be the test subject. It is unknown why or how the device malfunctioned, or even if it malfunctioned at all, but the device forcibly destroyed the subject's original eyes and replaced them with completely red eyes. The subject was found to be blind afterwards; only able to see when the device is activated. At the same time, his eyes become a baleful red and yellow color with slitted pupils, a most discerning sight to nearly every researcher. At first, the device performed as expected, if a bit inefficient at mana consumption and conversion; the subject was frequently exhausted after using the device, requiring up to weeks of rest before returning to service. The AI was reported to be abnormally strong and forceful, and constantly demanded battle. Changes in the subject's personality and general disposition over time as synchronization between the subject and the device increased; the higher the sync, the more violent he became and the more difficult it was to deactivate.

The final "official" record describes a catastrophic incident where 400% synchronization occurred, resulting in the subject's completely ego collapse and his mind taken over by the primal Id and device AI.

All data thus far points to the subject as this "Daemon Lord" in Belkan apocalyptic stories, and evidence suggests that he is Great Traitor that slew the Saint King.

In MC 040, a stasis pod was discovered on a remote non-administered planet (A901). Despite its archaic design and failing life-support systems, the person within was still alive, and the pod was returned to Mid-Childa for further examination. Considered an archaeological discovery of unparalleled proportions, historians, librarians, and officials alike pushed for the subject's revival and close study. Ignorant of the subject's potential, the stasis pod was transported to research planet 404, where Noland Reiniger was revived from suspended animation.

He was clothed in garments not seen in a long time, archaic in design and material. A historian would later note that the style of his clothing was similar to those worn by ordained Knights of Belka. A black strip of cloth was wrapped around his head, covering his eyes (later, the subject would reveal that the cloth was laced with hexagrammic wards and suppressed the influence of the device's AI).

At first, the subject was understandably distraught and confused. As he was reintroduced into Mid-Childan society, however, his mental state continued to degrade. He continually demanded to be returned to stasis, stating that the longer he remained awake, the looser his grip on his sanity became. Night terrors were reported and his lack of (and refusal to) sleep could not be treated even with medication. Despite his warnings, researchers continued to examine him for weeks. His device was of highest interest to researchers, but due to the invasive nature of the device, little examination could be performed.

Wanting to examine Belkan combat techniques, military officials demanded that a live combat test be performed. The subject showed greatest reluctance for this test, attempting a number of excuses and reasons to avoid confrontation. Not to be denied, however, military officials forcibly pushed the subject into combat exercises.

The subject showed amazing proficiency in close combat, utilizing non-lethal techniques to subdue the soldiers and a noted minimal use of magic. Armed or barehanded, the subject appeared unmatched in close quarters. In ranged combat, the subject frequently attempted to close the distance and assault shooters. During the final fire exercise, an unplanned addition to the combat team detonated: a phosphorous bomb that set the subject ablaze.

The subject collapsed from the trauma as fire suppression teams worked to save his life. Then came the transformation. As the subject convulsed, chitinous plating erupted from under the simple clothing he was given. Black and red armor covered every part of the subject as he screamed, his sanity once again consumed by the lunacy of Cocytus.

A terrible mistake was made. The Knight of Calamity, the Judas of Belka was reborn.

The resulting cataclysmic battle resulted in horrifying losses and near destruction of the research center. An entire military regiment was lost before full retreat and evacuation was called for. Facility lock down was initiated and naval ships prepared to bombard the facility in an attempt to kill the Knight.

Amazingly, scanners and Pathfinder teams reported a reduction in magic reaction within the facility. One brave Pathfinder infiltrated and reported that the Knight had collapsed, once again in his human form. The decision was unanimous to return the subject to suspended animation.

The subject is currently in heavy time lock stasis, device inactive.

Style:

Historical records describe of a mad blaze that razed the cities of Belka, scorched the earth and burned down the very foundations of the society. Observations of the subject in action concluded that these stories were only slight exaggerations. The subject often leaped into the deepest portion of an army, assaulting the soldiers in deadly close combat. He seemed to ignore any attack made upon his person, shrugging off most attacks. Heavier attacks only made him stumble, no pause or hesitation in his charges. No mercy or remorse was shown as he tore through the men, even as they screamed and begged for it.

The danger does not come from his magical power (though considerable and almost choking), but rather the sheer brute force further enhanced by magic and his incredible mobility.

A Berserker in every sense of the word.

OOC Stuff

Theme Music
Normal: Susumu Hirasawa – Forces
Lunatic: Nobuo Uematsu – Howl of the Departed

Alignment: Lawful Neutral (Normal) / Neutral Evil (Lunatic)
Befriendable: You can try.

Interesting...though I could have sworn I've seen that picture somewhere before...

And this looks like it has potential...yet another frozen relic of the Velkan Empire...reminds me of Code Geass: Lost Colors...

Originally Posted by Kha

Anyone who wishes to kill my Knights is free to do so, but I have a few requests:

1. Make it GAR.
2. And include this prayer: "I am the Hammer. I am the sword in Her hand. I am the Gauntlet about Her fist. I am the Bane of Her foes and the woes of the treacherous. I am the End."

Huh...perhaps I could...yeah...WHY NOT!

Thanks Kha!

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Spoiler for Possibility:

Noland: My liege... allow me to serve you once again. I must atone for my grievous sins and transgressions against you and our glorious nation. I have defied gods and demons. I am your shield. I am your sword. I know you. Your past. Your future. As I was once your greatest Knight, let me be your sword and shield once again!

Vivio: Auuu~?

Noland: Then I shall swear once more. Let the earth and heavens know my vow! I am the Hammer. I am the sword in Your hand. I am the Gauntlet about Your fist. I am the Bane of Your foes and the Woes of the Treacherous. I am The End.

Suddenly, Fate and Nanoha gain a rather unsettling new housemate...

Vivio Meido GETTO?!

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Spoiler for The Power of Madness:

Note: This list is incomplete, possessing only those witnessed and recorded in history logs.

Knight Armor – Cocytus: Plate-style armor that almost seems alive. The armor seems to shrug off all forms of attacks under A class power. Damage to the armor is sealed up immediately, and no visible injury seemed to affect him significantly.

Knight Armor – Ancile: The legendary shield of the god of war. This manifests as an invisible field of sorts that deflects beams, missiles, and other forms of bombardment. The shield does not seem effective against melee attacks, but it has expressed stability in defense against bombardment spells up to Buster-type spells.

God Hand – Endless Jihad: (Passive) Highly accelerated metabolism allows for rapid regeneration of wounds and injuries. Given time, even lost limbs can be regenerated. The subject possesses the ability to remain alive even with major organs damaged or destroyed. It is speculated that the accelerated healing is responsible for his apparent lack of aging, or a considerable reduction in lifespan.

Insanity Sign – Mad Enhancement: (Passive) All physical attributes are increased drastically at the cost of sanity. The greater the synchronization, the greater the attribute increase, but the more difficult it becomes to snap out of it.

Insanity Sign – Terror of Death: (Passive) Laced into his aura and voice are subtle hallucinogenic spells that target the sanity and mentality of all those around him. Those caught in the spell are afflicted with debilitating visions of friends and family suffering, unspeakable horrors, and their own deaths.

Restriction Sign – Chains of Heaven and Hell: Originating from his gauntlets, two chains extend to incredible lengths for purposes of restraint, capture, defense, movement, and even attack. The chains themselves appear invulnerable to conventional weaponry.

Murder Sign – Bloody Hands: Swathed in disruptive energies, physical defenses like armor crumple like tin foil against the armored fists and greaves of the Berserker. Strangely, the hands themselves can extend out in a feat of anatomical and physiological manipulation, increasing his reach considerably. The hands are cursed to drip the blood of the Saint King eternally as a reminder of his greatest sin.

Tyrant Sword – Wraith Blade "Tyrfing": The cursed sword of tragedy. A long sword composed of as of yet unidentified energies, this ethereal blade disintegrates any unprotected matter in contact with it. The weapon can split into two short blades.

Reality Defiance – Kronos Shift: Manipulation of time-space allows for him to move at incredible speeds. Its maximum range has yet to be determined.

Bullet Hell – Gatling Rave: Long range suppression fire. Staccato burst fire of small explosive “bolts.” Rapid fire, but relatively low power. The sheer volume of fire makes it difficult for opponents to act. Originates from gauntlets.

Bullet Hell – Infernal Devil's Spear: Medium range anti-armor. A large bullet from hell, this fiery shot melts through heavy armor and shields alike. After piercing the defenses, the bullet explodes violently in a burst of sorcerous energy.

Cataclysm Sign – Holocaust: Close range anti-unit. The very air in front of and around the subject explodes in a firestorm of wild, scorching power. Any unit caught within the attack can be instantly incinerated.

This stuff will probably need the most revision.

You're guessing right...and this isn't a spell list as much as it is an ability list...reminds me of the stuff for the F/SN Servants...

Originally Posted by Anita

We need more Khophia fluff!

Is Sophiarcas fluff acceptable...? I can do that...

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Spoiler for Maid Guy Noland:

It is a fine morning and another day of school. 15 year old Vivio Takamachi has awakened and washed up. As she puts on her school uniform, however, she is horrified to discover that the dress is too small! Drastic measures will be needed. Downstairs, Noland is serving the family a tasty breakfast of omelettes and hash browns.

Vivio: I'm going~! Oh. I won't be eating breakfast from now on...

Fate: Eehh? It'd be better if you did, Vivio-chan...

Noland: Exactly, Master. Even if you gained 1.8 kilograms in three days, you shouldn't worry about it.

Vivio: !!! How did you know? A figure as accurate as 1.8 kilograms... where did you find out...?

Noland: Hmph. I know everything about you, Master. In front of Maid Guy Sight, even if you're wearing clothes, you're actually naked to me. Hmmm...

Vivio: N-Naked? Sight? That means...!

Noland: *eyes are glowing* Hmmm... I am seeing it all, Master! Ah ha! Confirming an increase of volume in your breasts and butt. You are growing perfectly fine. But don't worry, I've prepared a larger size of underwear for you.

Vivio: NOOOOOOO~!! *dashes out of the house*

Noland: Hmmm. My master is so loud this early in the morning.

Nanoha: *White Devil Mode* Noland-san, I have something I need to speak to you about...

Later that night...

Bandaged Noland: Tonight's dinner will be bell peppers and beef!

Vivio tries valiantly to sneak out of the house.

Noland: Master, where are you going?

Vivio: Fatty dishes and peppers... I'm not going eat them! *notices Noland is RIGHT NEXT TO HER* KYAAAH!

*Vivio falls to the ground; Noland towers over her.*

Noland: According to your BMI and structure of bones, you have the potential to grow into an amazing body. Also, you're in puberty. It is not possible to cut your ration on food. No matter what, your weight will increase.

KAPOW! Noland is Flying Dragon Kicked in the head!

Fate: Uuu! You don't have to put it like that, Noland-san! Your words are too harsh!

Noland: *currently embedded in the wall* It will not change things. She must eat her dinner.

<breaks down laughing>

Oh, gods!

My friend, you have just inspired me to give Maid Guy a try...!

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Spoiler for Spell List Ver. 2.0:

Noland Reininger

Unit Statistics:

Letters in paranthesies indicate Lunatic mode
Statistics are assuming that the average person is straight D's

Strength: B (S+)
Endurance: A (S)
Agility: B (A+)
Mana: B (D)
Luck: C (E)

Since Noland is a knight that focuses almost exclusively on close combat, his melee abilities are ludicrously powerful. As a cost, however, his ranged combat is far below par. Unless otherwise noted, offensive spells utilize Noland's personal stats rather than individual spell-based stats.

Interesting to note is that his surname means "Purifier" or "Cleanser."

Spell List:

Layman's version

Spells marked with Passive means they are constantly active and do not require active control. This also means there is a constant drain on his mana and stamina.

Note: These are the known spells that Noland has thus far revealed. More may be released or discovered in the future.

Defensive / Supportive:

Knight Armor -- Cocytus: Plate-style armor that can deflect physical and magic attacks under A class power and reduce the damage inflicted by attacks of higher power. Damages to the armor are immediately sealed up, though the wound underneath remains. The armor itself causes three changes in Noland's body:

1. The physical and mental limitations of the body are lifted, allowing him to use 100% of his muscles rather than the usual 20%.

2. All sensations of pain and exhaustion are numbed completely. Not even the greatest of wounds can be felt.

3. The body is reinforced against damage; the armor will immediately "treat" any injuries such as splinting a broken bone or resetting a dislocated joint. These treatments are haphazard at best and dangerous at worst.

The changes are a great physical strain on Noland's body, however, leading to exhaustion, heavy fatigue, and voracious appetite. A rest period of 48 hours is recommended between "uses."

Knight Armor -- Ancile: An invisible, intangible field surrounds Noland that works in conjunction with the armor as a first line of defense. It is useless against physical attacks, but "shooting" spells are deflected. Shieldbreakers can bypass the field, as can overwhelming firepower, but the field remains active even after being pierced -- it just fills in the hole.

Insanity Sign -- Terror of Death: (Passive) His very presence is fearsome, his battle cries sending shivers even down the most hardened of warriors. The aura of fear is strongest with 50 meters of Noland, gradually weakening as distance increases, affecting anyone within range. Those caught in this spell are immediately subjected to frightening halluncinations of friends and family suffering, decimation of what used to be a happy life, and their own deaths.

Insanity Sign -- Mad Enhancement: (Passive) All physical attributes are increased drastically at the cost of sanity.The greater the synchronization, the greater the attribute increase, but the more difficult it becomes to snap out of it.

Typical Synchronization values and their effects:

87% - The average value. Physical attributes are increased by about 80%. Noland retains shreds of his awareness and is capable of speech and following orders. He cannot, however, make overly complicated thoughts like tactics and strategy. The objective is destruction, and he excels in that task.

90% - Increased value. Attributes rank up to 100%. Noland loses the ability to speak and becomes difficult to control or command. Figures of authority may be ignored or even attacked.

95% - Dangerous Value. Attribute rank up to 200%. Noland begins to have trouble deferentiating friend from foe and may target friendly forces once all enemy forces are annihilated.

100% - Maximum value. Attributes rank up to 300% or greater. Noland loses all sense of self and reason, becoming a pure berserker with an insatiable bloodlust and great desire to kill. Allies and enemies become equal opportunity victims.

400% - The value Noland reached that resulted in the Fall of Belka. It is unknown how to reach this level, but suffice to say you don't want to reach it again.

Offensive / Weapons:

Murder Sign -- Bloody Hands: Swathed in disruptive energies, physical defenses like armor crumple like tin foil against the armored fists and greaves of the Berserker. The hands are cursed to drip the blood of the Saint King eternally as a reminder of his greatest sin. As his primary weapons, he is required to be in melee combat.

Tyrant Sword -- Wraith Blade "Tyrfing": Noland's ultimate weapon. A blade of unidentified energies that extends from his right hand. The blade disintegrates anything it touches and disrupts magic fields. Use of this weapon results in a great physical and mental strain, as it uses Noland's life force to fuel its destructive power -- extended use could very well kill him, as every minute of its use is a day off of his lifespan. As a melee weapon, he is required to be in close quarters.
Power: EX

Restriction Sign -- Chains of Heaven and Hell: Originating from his gauntlets, two chains extend to incredible lengths for purposes of restraint, capture, defense, movement, and even attack. The chains themselves appear invulnerable to attacks below AA class.
Speed: A
Control: A+
Range: C+

Bullet Hell -- Gatling Rave: Long range suppression fire. Staccato burst fire of small explosive “bolts.” Rapid fire, but relatively low power. The sheer volume of fire makes it difficult for opponents to act. Originates from gauntlets.
Power: C+
Speed: S
Range: A

Bullet Hell -- Infernal Devil's Spear: Medium range anti-armor. A two-staged missile-like projectile. It takes the shape of a fiery bullet that first melts through the armor or shield then explodes violently in a burst of scorching power.
Power: AA
Speed: A
Range: C+
Special: Shieldbreaker / Armor Piercing

Cataclysm Sign -- Holocaust: Close range anti-unit. The very air in front of and around Noland ignites and explodes in a ball of searing white-hot flame.
Power: AAA+
Range: D
Special: Area effect.

This is interesting...good work so far from me...keep it up!


NOTE TO ALL CADIANS:

Ep. 4 currently in works - expect within 72 hours, give or take.

[Comartemis]

Originally Posted by PhoenixFlare

Canon would like to prove otherwise.


魔導師の食事 - A mage’s diet
For mages, Mana in the atmosphere is linked together in an organ, the “Linker core”, and stored within their body. For quick replenishment, a balanced diet consisting of sugars, carbohydrates and proteins is essential, as are a variety of vitamins and minerals to maintain a healthy body. Therefore out of necessity, mages undergoing hard training during their early growth period eat a much larger diet compared to an ordinary person. Furthermore, pasta and other noodle-type foods are easily digested, so these types of food, known as ｢Loading Foods」, are loved by many mages, since they allow for quick energy and Mana replenishment.

You'd notice that Mana is generated within the Linker Core, and replenishment comes primarily from food and rest. While Vivian may not be a glutton, Mana is a form of energy that has its source from food, which exemplifies the fact that it's a form of physical energy that can be changed to power normal metabolism (law of energy conservation and the first law of thermodynamics). And such energies are consumed by the cells to do work; the more you have it, the more they work, and eventually they either become resistant or die.

If Vivian has "delayed aging" simply because she's brimming with Mana, Hayate is a potential candidate for such "divine manifestation", because her mana pool is large enough (SS). Yet, Hayate is not, so your argument is invalid.

And really, if Mana can be used to do everything, one wonders why there is no supra-godlike mage characters (SSS+) in entire Mid-childa. It can even be that they perish faster because of too much Mana.

I really need to get my hands on translated copies of all the DVD booklets, there's a wealth of information in these things that I could probably put to good use. Anyone have a compiled index of these things?