Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[PhoenixG]

Originally Posted by Kha

We thought Belka was Midchilda, as the Cradle was found on planet, thereinby rendering Saint X and my "Planet Belk" idea null and void.

Now this piece of evidence opens this possibility:

Belka came from another planet, running away from said threats. However, the ship was badly damaged from the escape, and the occupants bailed out in lifeboats over Midchilda. The Cradle then crashed, burying itself several strata underground.

The only problem here is the crash site:

A crash can't possibly end up several strata underground (as seen in canon) without disturbing the top layers around it, unless it landed in a giant Cradle-sized cave at the exact moment and angle. Something I don't think a captain wanting to save his passengers would want to aim his dying ship at.

A crash of something that big at reentry velocity would cover all of Midchilda in a dust cloud for centuries, causing mass extinction. This is something that puzzled me since the days of the UC colony drops. So how big does something have to be to kick up the eternal duststorm supposedly responsible for MEEs?

Anime shows that the Cradle must've been buried for ages, but then Wiki says it might've been just another Exodar. Which one is true?

How about crashing in a sea? It should reduce the after effect.

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by PhoenixG

How about crashing in a sea? It should reduce the after effect.

The Cradle never crashed anywhere near a sea though

[FlameSparkZ]

Ok, some backlog busting...

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

P.S -

@Tormenk

Images like this,

Spoiler:

Well...Lelouch won...good for him

Originally Posted by Kha

EDIT: Just as we were getting comfortable with the crack fort each of us may be building, from DestinyS to Rebuilt, Tsuzuki may really have decided to strike Forth.

"Every body now. On 2. 1, 2..."

"H0LY 5HYT"

Looks like its time to organize another round of hop-skotch. I'd say Tsuzuki'd do something similar to whatever I had planned for the MageWarrior series and screw it up like StrikerS.

BUT let's see if der Kleriker continues to prove why "I Am Legend" in surviving the next onslaught.

Otherwise, that MTV of Jay Chou's "Wo Bu Pei" is gonna come in handy for "The Breakup of Tessalgar Square"...

Let's wait a bit longer before we jump the gun, ok?

Originally Posted by selkirk

Sounds fishy to me, but anyway...


Supposedly about anti-terror warfare.
New characters:
Amano Asuka - 18 years old. Special forces (army) Major. (whoa rank inflation )
Hokuto Kusanagi - 16 years old. Army Captain.　ヒュームリット(?) (Combat Cyborg) Modern Belka. The daughter of the Kusanagi couple in the Dominators, her upbringing was complicated.

Nanoha is an Air Force Major.
強化人間エクステンデッド(後述)
Enhanced humans "Extended" (detailed below) - Magic Rank Air AA
...not gonna read the rest, but it includes some characters with such choice terms as "big-breasted, rough-mouthed", and some Kansai-ben speaking childish face character.
Other characters like "sick" character: Beretta (like Asakura Ryouko), Hokuto (silent type like Nagato Yuki, Tabitha)

New unit called the Dominators. A lot of choice words are just in the greyed out areas, and I don't want to try and identify blobs. Anyway, it's where Asuka et al are. They go up against Nanoha, and Hayate, predicting the political fallout, reassembles the old Riot 6 members in secret.



Just some random translations from what I could see easily.

Yep, very fishy...

Originally Posted by Kha

I must admit "strike Forth" sounds quite like a title that they'd do, but that's just me. What my primary concern (and objection) is of a "NO, YOU GUYS SCREWED STRIKERS, SO DON'T KILL THE FRANCHISE BEYOND THE DAMAGE ALREADY DONE!!!" kinda mood.

For me, I'm not so concerned about timelines -I have too many, killing some off might do me good -, but it does slow things down for the Kerokanon. Nonetheless, I'll just switch back to the main timeline, progress from there via Ion-Canon Hopskotch, then switch back to Kerokanon end of next year.

It's really simple, with my persistent half-hatching habit persisting persistently.

Looks like that Epilogue of StrikerS for the main timeline needs to be banged out pronto. Everyone, start cracking! So far, only Master FlameZ and Keroko, who doesn't really exist in the timeline, has done so!

RE Unwanted Sequel: I wished they'd take a leaf from Gundam and get both action and plot mostly right, while making it a 50 epi blockbuster because they can, should and must have to do the Nanohaverse right.

Now I've no idea what's going on... As expected, there's gonna be political fallout from 912... Just in time too, when Celestial Being's deep factional divide is beginning to surface...

*hides the Thrones*



But...

Amano Asuka sounds like Amuro + Asuka's lovechild. >_>

And Hotuko Kusanagi, a Modern Belka Sentokijin? Did I just hear MAKOTO Kusanagi?! Or let me guess... SOMEBODY at 7Arcs after reading this thread all StrikerS decided to let us have a clear signal for once, and made the Nighty Jail+Tre offspring become reality.

Yeap, definitely fanficcy... And yes MOAR characters. Let's play with them! :3

*goes to work on Hotuko*

And back to the current issue...

Originally Posted by LoweGear

The Cradle never crashed anywhere near a sea though

Maybe it didn't actually crash, but appeared to...emergency landing?

[dkellis]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

The Cradle never crashed anywhere near a sea though

In fact, the Cradle rose from underneath a sizeable layer of earth, upon which had grown a respectable forest.

300 years is a long time, but not, I think, that long. At least, not without some outside intervention.

Which also brings up the question of why it got abandoned in the first place. No more power source or something?

[PhoenixG]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

The Cradle never crashed anywhere near a sea though

Maybe it was a sea, but due the crash it vaporised all the water

[Kha]

Originally Posted by selkirk

Actually, the bit about the 300 years says that because of the evidence of Vivio's genetic parentage, it appears that Ancient Belka still existed at least 300 years ago. People on Midchilda must have really short memories...

Hmm, first post in here I think...

Either that, or a systemic wipe from collective memory as they hated the Belka for the war. I used this as a basis for the Belka marginalization concepts as well as portaryals of racism in my works. Or so I think.

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

SO.... How's things without me?

Perfectly fine thankyou. Been good for my internets

"A Preview without a Name"

Spoiler:

*snip*

Interesting stuff. Can't say anything about the story/plot since it was excellent. There was one point at which using the past tense would have sounded better(I'm sure there's a few more, just that I can't be bothered reading it through thoroughly... )

I can say one thing though... If that was Graham at the end I am going to ask you politely to reconsider his rank of admiral...

Originally Posted by Keroko

I'm going to be tweaking her age somewhere in the 40ish soon (long live the law of conservation of beauty), but in 66 she should be an admiral already.

You shouldn't have. Thanks anyway, but she didn't have to be so old...

Originally Posted by Tormenk

Spoiler for crack:

"This..impossible..it can't possibly be true..!"

"It's been verified by our own sources as well. The Tome of the Night Sky has been destroyed not one week ago."

"That means.."

"Our means to locate the Motherland through the Tome is now lost."

Muted silence followed the statement from the young man.

"To fail the grand task passed from generations down at our hands is most unimaginable.."

"There remains a single mean. The mistress survived the Tome's destruction. The mistress, Yagami Hayate, played a hand in the destruction of the Tome's defense program before it was deleted. "

"Footage from the battle has shown her in Unison with the avatar of the Tome itself. The possibility of the mistress retaining the secrets and knowledge within the pages of the Night Sky is slight but nonetheless there. If we can get to her, it might just provide a way out."

"Then we should get to this immediately. I'll- "

"No. For now, we scheme. There is no need to rush since she is alive and well."

"For what purpose? Surely nothing could brook a delay in our goals. Centuries this mission has been carried out and-"

"A few more years, even decades would be worth the wait to ensure nothing goes wrong, to not waste the centuries of waiting and effort. We shall make the mistress part of us to facilitate the process."

"Can you be so sure? The current mistress broke the curse laid on the Tome by the Great Betrayer so long ago by sheer willpower! Who do- "

"You think I am? I'm disappointed, so many years we have been together and you still fail to recognize my talent. I'm hurt by your words, Carim. "

"I apologize for my thoughtlessness. For all intends, what do you have in mind Rossa?"

"That is fairly simple. We shall welcome her, embrace her and give her all the support she needs and demands. Elevate her status while bringing her ever closer to the bindings that shall be silently be cast over her. When the time comes, she cannot and shall not decline. Of course, I shall personally see to this."

Sky-blue eyes matched the calm smile as Verossa Acous proclaimed his next declaration.

"To reach the homeland of our past ascendants, Yagami Hayate is already my tool to bring that into reality."

Well I guess it works in a weird round about way..........

Tweaking the story line to have Carim be the major sponsor behind RF6 would be one way to have Hayate indebeted to her while not deviating too far from canon as Carim is already one of the major backers along with Chrono and a few others that I can't remember from ep 11 or so of Strikers..

Although I am literally a hands width away from yelling out DOES NOT COMPUTE

By all means continue...... Just as long as it doesn't get too weird..

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

After many fierce battles against Laziness and Procrastination, as well as beating my head to get the scenes right, I am glad to FINALLY present to you,

A Day at the Amusement Park, a GenerationS side story

Spoiler for A Day at the Amusement Park:

*snip*

1) Since when does Nanoha call Yuuno Ferret?
2)

when she scolded me and wanted to it for herself to help…’

wanted to it???? Errr, I'm not even sure what it's supposed to be but it sounds wrong..

The two things that jumped out at me as I read through it. Other than that, a nice feeling XD.

Good job

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Also... WHAT THE FUCK, OVER?!

Kagerou makes Nanoha angsty and emo, and plans to bring her out of it, and the complaints pile on.

YOU GUYS ARE GOING TO FUCK OVER HAYATE AND GET NO COMMENTS?! WHERE ARE THE FUCKING HAXBUSTERs?! WHAT THE FUCK IS THE DOUBLE STANDARD?! ARK I'M LOOKING AT YOU!

*angry*

It's not the plan I'm angry at. It's the double standards. This is something that's going to permanantly fuck over Hayate and people are gleeful about it. Kagerou was going to have just a temporary mindfuck and both of us get jumped on.

*sighs* Ah, well. That's life.

Well if TK doesn't react the same way to the crack as to Kagerou's suggestion then by all means rant away.

I don't think I actually commented on that plan, but you have to admit that at the beginning the flak that it got was due to a lack of detail in the suggestion (how she would be getting to such a point that genki nanoha becomes emo nanoha..) Once you had laid out the framework as to how it actually happened I didn't really have a major problem with it.

Plus as you've no doubt noticed Ark's only a guest to the thread, only commenting on things that catch his eye among the things that fly around in here. If you really want him to comment on it, you'll have a better chance by pm so he actually knows it's there.. For all that we know, he never saw the thing.

All I can say to you and Kagerou is to not give a damm about us/the thread and just write it. Who knows, the naysayers might actually like the thing.

[Estavali]

Originally Posted by Kha

Either that, or a systemic wipe from collective memory as they hated the Belka for the war. I used this as a basis for the Belka marginalization concepts as well as portaryals of racism in my works. Or so I think.

I would ask how anything less than 300 years can be considered ancient. For me, ancient = at least 1000 years.

Unless they are refering to how long the civilisation has been around, hmmm.

[SpaceBrotha]

Originally Posted by dkellis

In fact, the Cradle rose from underneath a sizeable layer of earth, upon which had grown a respectable forest.

300 years is a long time, but not, I think, that long. At least, not without some outside intervention.

Which also brings up the question of why it got abandoned in the first place. No more power source or something?

The king probably died, and the refugees buried the cradle because they couldn't use it any further (i can picture the king staying behind on belka, ordering the ship to carry refugees to safety)...
...Or the king ordered the cradle to be buried since it was an instrument of war, also a lost logia... And i think the belkans were quite fed up with both war and lost logias

Originally Posted by Kha

Either that, or a systemic wipe from collective memory as they hated the Belka for the war. I used this as a basis for the Belka marginalization concepts as well as portaryals of racism in my works. Or so I think.

No one said that the war that destroyed belka didn't affect anyone else, perhaps other civilizations were also severely affected by the war (innocent bystanders, collateral damage), hence only little information would be left of ancient belka...

[Tormenk]

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

After many fierce battles against Laziness and Procrastination, as well as beating my head to get the scenes right, I am glad to FINALLY present to you,

A Day at the Amusement Park, a GenerationS side story

Spoiler for A Day at the Amusement Park:

In the nearly clear, blue sky above the sun shined its warming rays as it passed its apex. The rays of warmth heated the surrounding air of the city below bursting with activity. Men and women milled around inside and out going about their daily business. Some sought out the refuge of the tall, air conditioned buildings. Others took advantage of the warm weather and spent the day out to take in some fresh air. The local amusement park was especially busy with the pleasant weather. Groups of friends gathered and milled about. Families of all sizes and relations wandered the park led on by smiling, eager children. There were also some mixes of the two groups enjoying a day at the park.

“Waaa~!”

One Vivio Takamachi took in the amazing sights around her with a mix of curiosity and wonder. Her mismatched eyes darted from ride of ride, from display to display as she almost skipped in joy on one of the many concrete paths. If she was able to have her own way, she would be running about from attraction to attraction. However her escorts on either side of her for the day preferred a more casual pace at the moment.

“Vivio, what would you like to ride first?” asked the young lady holding onto her hand on her left.

“Everything!” replied the young girl with a bright smile.

The young man on her right chuckled at her enthusiasm.

“Well, I don’t think we can ride them all at once, Vivio.”

That caused Vivio to pause her current train of thought and ponder for a moment. She placed a finger from her free hand on her chin as her eyes wandered upwards in what appeared to be deep thought. A short moment passed before she excitedly pointed at the Merry-Go-Round.

“That one Nanoha-mama!”

“Alright. Let’s go!” exclaimed Nanoha Takamachi, the famed Ace of Aces (as well as infamous White Devil) of the TSAB, as she smiled down at her adopted daughter.

The heterochromatic girl giggled in excitement as she sprinted towards the selected ride, dragging her mother along side her hand in hand. From the rear, head librarian of the TSAB Infinity Library Yuuno Scrya couldn’t hold back the wide smile as he watched the two run off.

“Yuuno-kun~! Hurry up!” called back Nanoha as she tried to keep up with her daughter.

“Coming,” he called back, breaking into a jog to catch up to the pair.

With the large crowds that day, the majority of the rides were fairly busy. Lines at the more popular attractions had several hour waits as people continued to pile into the robed-off areas. The Merry-Go-Round was no exception as the pair stood in line. Nanoha glanced around her to find her friend sitting down on one of the nearby benches positioned around the ride area.

“Eh? What are you doing over there, Yuuno-kun?”

The blonde-haired young man lifted the camera that was resting around his neck and gestured to it, “You two go on. It’d be harder to get good pictures if I was right next to you.”

“Mou…are you sure?” remarked the brunette with a slight frown.

“I’m sure, Nanoha,” he replied with a laugh, “Besides, the signs say they only allow one adult to be standing per child and she is your daughter.”

“Oh, fine. You had better get some good pictures then, you silly ferret.”

“I will, I promise.”

A tug on her arm brought Nanoha’s attention to the girl besides her as she knelt down to answer some question she had. From the bench, Yuuno leaned back and watched the mother-daughter pair with a smile. He had known the famous mage for over a decade now. In a way, all of this was his fault.

‘No that wasn’t right,’ he corrected himself, ‘I was the catalyst that started a journey and an adventure.’

The line moved at a fairly quick pace due to the large capacity of the Merry-Go-Round and its rather short duration compared to most other rides. Based on his estimates, they would only have to wait another two sets of people before it would be their turn. He sets the camera down on his lap and allows his mind to wander while he waits.

‘Nanoha…a very close and dear friend to me that I’ve known since the beginning of, well, all of this. We’ve been through thick and thin together in those two Lost Logia incidents. It’s still rather odd how it all turned out back then,’ he chuckles, ‘To think that she would be the one to pick up where I failed and push forward to collect the remaining Jewel Seeds. And out of her own resolve to help me, too. At first I felt guilty for throwing all this on her shoulders, but when she scolded me and wanted to it for herself to help…’

His eyes blink as he straightens up and scan over the line looking for where they were. They were now closer to the front, but still at least one set of people away. It looked like Vivio was asking her mother some questions to which Nanoha was happily replying if the bright smile on her face was any sign. The sight of mother and daughter smiling was too much as a smile crept up on Yuuno’s lips.

‘Yes, I think it was then that I began treating Nanoha more as a friend rather than a partner. Back then I was still young and naïve, but now I think about it that was probably when I started to fall for that girl whose smile and determination could surpass extraordinary odds.’

The large group of people exiting the ride brought him back to reality. Picking up the camera, he scans the circular ride for the pair. Even with the mass of people wandering looking for an open spot he manages to pick out the brunette and her rather unique off-centered ponytail on the outer ring of the ride. He watches as she helps Vivio up onto the ornate horse. The little girl smiles and giggles as she grips the pole running through the seat. Behind her Nanoha rests one hand protectively on her waist, just in case.

Yuuno hefts the camera up and peers through the viewfinder as the bell in the center rings announcing the start of the ride. The platform begins its slow rotation with music pouring from the numerous speakers in the ceiling. He centers and snaps a few shots of Vivio as she smiles even brighter with the horse slowly bobbing up and down. They pass out of view for a moment, allowing him to set the camera down to rest his arms before coming back around. This time he zooms out to get a few shots of the pair passing by smiling happily.

As he snaps the last photo for the rotation, Yuuno’s mind wanders a bit to the older woman in the photo. Having known her since she was nine, he’s had the opportunity to watch as she developed and matured over the years. From that little, energetic girl she had grown to be a stunning woman with an incredible track record with the TSAB, her career practically set for her.

‘Her figure had also filled out quite nicely, too. Not to mention how great she looks in that skirt…’
He quickly coughs, trying to clear that train of thought from his mind. It was well known throughout the TSAB of the three Aces from the Non-Administered world and their spectacular feats from the young age of nine with no prior knowledge of magic or formal training (with the exception of Fate). Over the past few years their stunning beauty and continuing single status also became fairly well known. Many men, from recruits to high-ranking officers, tried their hand at attempting to court one of the famed Aces only to be turned down. Some had compared the chances to dating one of them to taking them on one-on-one with no limiters and no attack restrictions. This comparison had also kept many from even trying in the first place, yet some still tried their luck now and then.

Setting the camera down on his lap, Yuuno recalls what Hayate had told him before they left for the park.

“Can we talk for a bit, Yuuno-kun?” Hayate spoke audibly, winking in Nanoha’s direction.

“Uh… Sure…” Yuuno glanced at Nanoha.

Nanoha paused in confusion, but then shrugged and said, “Alright. Don’t be late, Yuuno-kun~!” before running off after Vivio.

Hayate dragged him around a bit before settling behind a wall. She stood up straightly with her hands akimbo, a confident smile on her face.

Yuuno pushed up his glasses nervously, “What did you want to talk about, Hayate?”

“So you’ve finally made a first move, huh, Yuuno-kun?”

“But…” Yuuno sighed, “Like we said, it’s just a-Wha?!” he jolted as Hayate’s finger was pointed directly at his nose.

“Whatever it is, you must do your best so as not to disappoint Nanoha-chan,” Hayate warned him with one eye closed, her other hand rose to form an encouraging fist, “Okay?”

‘The first move, huh?’ he mentally sighs.

While the others had never said anything about it, Hayate had been the one to confront him about the ‘status’ between Nanoha and himself. As much as tried to deny any romantic interest in the girl, he knew that it was a lie and he was also lying to himself. He had given her a lot of space when she first started her TSAB career so she could find her calling. The atrocious lack of organization in the Infinity Library had also kept him quite busy at the same time. Now, however she’s an instructor for the new TSAB recruits and plans on remaining such as her refusals of promotions after the Cradle Incident have shown. Not to mention that she has a daughter to look after.

‘Perhaps now would be the best time to give into Hayate’s urgings…,’ he ponders.

The lack of music and rise in voices breaks his train of thought. He instinctively stands and looks around for the pair from the crowded ride’s exit. A slender hand waving above the sea of heads catches his eye. Moments later the trio is reunited by the bench with Vivio giggling happily between the two adults.

“Mama! Mama! Let’s go on another one!” she urges while tugging on Nanoha’s arm.

Nanoha nods, taking a moment to look around at the sea of people around the park.

“Alright. Which one do you want to ride?”

The young girl grins and takes off running down one of the paths. With her hand still locked with her daughters, Nanoha had no choice but to keep up behind the excited bundle of energy the best she could. Behind them Yuuno couldn’t help but laugh as he watched the ‘great’ Ace of Aces being dragged along by a little girl. It definitely was quite an unusual sight.

As the daylight slowly faded away, the trio would ride several more of the attractions, with Vivio promptly dragging them off to the next one with an excited look on her face. Now the sun was nearing the end of its journey across the sky for that day. A spectrum of reds and yellows replaced the lively blue sky. Many groups had already left the park for the day to either make their way home or find a place to eat. The slowly thinning crowds and dimming sky was not lost to the two adults.

“It’s starting to get late, Nanoha. We should probably start heading out soon before we get stuck in the rush out.”

The brunette nods in agreement, “That would be a good idea. Come on, Vivio. Let’s head home.”

Vivio, however, had other ideas.

“No! I don’t want to…,” she complained.

Both adults sighed softly, having realized that this was probably the reaction they would get from the girl. Nanoha knelt before Vivio and placed her hands on her shoulders.

“Vivio, it’s starting to get late. We can always come back another time. Plus Fate-mama is waiting at home for us.”

The little girl crossed her arms over her chest and pouted, puffing her cheeks out as she shook her head to stand by her original decision. As Nanoha tried to reason with her daughter, Yuuno couldn’t help but grin as she watched the little girl whose mannerisms reminded him so much of her mother.

“How about this Vivio,” he starts as he squats down next to Nanoha, “We’ll do one more ride. Any ride you want, okay?”

“Mou, Yuuno-kun. Are you sure?”

Before the librarian could respond, Vivio points her finger at a ride behind them.

“That one!”

Yuuno and Nanoha both rise and turn to look at what the girl was pointing at. Two pairs of eyes fell upon the large Ferris Wheel towering near the end of the park. With the sunlight slowly beginning to wane the giant wheel was lit up all over by bright lights, slowly spinning its passengers around in enclosed passenger pods. Finding herself unable to come up with any opposition to the proposed agreement, Nanoha straightens up and smiles.

“Alright. One more ride.”

Vivio lets out a cheer and grabs the adults’ hands as she excitedly makes her way to the ride. At the same time the pair wonders where she gets all this energy of hers from.

A short time later the trio finds themselves slowly rising from the ground in one of the silver pods. At one end of the pod Vivio kneels on the plastic seat with her hands pressed against the window. Green and red eyes gaze out over the brightly lit park rides and buildings slowly sinking as the wheel turns with curiosity and fascination. On the other end Nanoha and Yuuno sit next to each other and watch over the young girl.

‘Oh boy…I guess it’s now or never,’ he tells himself.

“Nanoha?”

The brunette turns her attention to the blonde boy, “Hm? What is it Yuuno-kun?”

“Erm…ah, Vivio has quite a family, huh?” he blurts out in nervousness.

“Yea, she does doesn’t she?” she says leaning back against the seat, “Fate-chan and I take care of her most of the time. Sometimes Hayate and her Knights watch her watch her when we’re busy with Bureau stuff. Now that I think about it, I think Vita-chan looks to her like an older sister although I doubt she’ll ever admit it.”

Nanoha giggles as she glances over at Vivio, “Maybe I should tell Vivio to start calling her ‘Nee-chan’ from now on.”

That got a chuckle from the young man, especially with the scene of the powerful Iron Knight blushing in embarrassment and stuttering denials floating around his mind.

“Yes, that would be interesting to see.”

“All the Forwards have some attachment to her before RF6 was disbanded. Even Chrono-kun can’t deny that he’s fond of Vivio with how he grins every time she calls him ‘Uncle Chrono.’”

“She does have that effect on people.”

Straightening himself up, Yuuno takes a deep breath to gather what courage he can.

“Ah, what would you say about me Nanoha?”

“Oh, you’ve also been a huge help. I feel kinda bad sometimes when I keep having to ask you to watch her,” she replies in a bit of embarrassment.

“Don’t worry about. I don’t mind at all, especially with all that’s been going on lately everyone’s been pretty busy. Although…”

“Although…?” she questions as she turns to look at him curiously.

He knew that there was no turning back now.

“I-I want to be there for you and Vivio, Nanoha. To be there when you need help,” he pauses as she stares back with her blue orbs waiting for him to continue, “What I mean to say is you, Vivio…would you…”

“Mama look!”

Both adults nearly fall out of their seat in surprise as Vivio jumps between them and points at the window she had come from. Nanoha is the first to recover from the slight scare.

“Look at what Vivio?”

As the young girl excitedly leads her mother over to the other window, Yuuno takes a moment to calm down. He leans back on the seat and watches Vivio excitedly point out different things outside to her smiling mother.

‘I guess now just wasn’t the right time, huh?’ he muses.

Although he was disappointed, he was also a bit glad that Vivio did what she did. He had known Nanoha for a long time and couldn’t deny that he liked her. There were probably others that could see it, but Hayate had always been the most open about encouraging him to ‘make his move’ as she would say.

Yet he was also worried about what would happen when he actually did ask her to go out with him. He knew what he felt, but he never could really tell how she felt towards him. She never really gave any signs of liking him, yet she also never gave any signs of not being against it either. If it meant ruining the friendship they had he didn’t want to risk it, but at the same time he won’t know until he tries.

“Mama, over there! So pretty~”

Yuuno smiles as he continues to watch the pair. There was no use to rush things. Sometimes it was better to just stand back and wait for the right moment. If it was meant to be he’ll wait for that moment. Until then he’ll be there for her as he was back then, watching her and protecting her in anyway he could.

I knew you were the right person for the job. Great moments throughout and reflections from Yuuno about his past with Nanoha. The reminder that even as a great mage, Nanoha's still a young woman with a future in front of her. Vivio and Yuuno does share the spotlight equally here and it's just well done.

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Well...here's a little piece of crack involving Lyrical Mages. Please, please, don't kill me, anyone. This is just for fun.

Spoiler for Lyrical! Magical! Crack-ical!:

The madness was spreading.

Under the direction of the Loli Lyrical Mage, the Lyrical Orchestra marched forward, spreading madness in their path. Civillians laughed, screamed, danced, stripped, cried and the screams of their madness echoed throughout the city streets. Ground Forces fell before the onslaught of magical sound, unable to adapt or improvise a defence.

There were only three men still standing, three men who against the odds were holding onto their sanity. The Lyrical Mage laughed and signaled her Orchestra. "Soon, you too will join them in their madness, as we take over the world!"

The only reason the three men were still sane.... was because it was debatable whether they had ever had their sanity.

"We won't back down! This is the golden path of battle that all great men travel! How dare you do this to our people! How dare you tear down all that we have worked so hard to build?!" thundered Franz Jaeger, propping himself up with his Armed Sword Device, his aura flaring with his hot blood. "To me, my brothers!"

"That's right! Even if the infinit universe were to go against us-" began Smith.

"Our burning blood will break through Fate!" finished Wesson.

"WHO THE FUCK DO YOU THINK WE ARE?!" thundered the hot blood brothers.

(Far, far away, all the significant females in their lives facepalmed.)

"Smith...Wesson.... we can't really go on like this," said Franz. "But if we're going to die, let's die like men! Let's show her how real men die!"

"There won't be any dying today."

"R-ratsel?! Zengar?!"

Ratsel, aka Elzam von Bernstein, merely smirked. "You there! We have come do deliver justice! I, the riddle chef, Ratsel! And my friend and comrade!"

"I am Zengar, Zengar Zombolt, the Sword that Cleaves Evil!"

"Oho?!" laughed the Lyrical Flutist. "Then we'll just have to throw evil at you!"

The Lyrical Orchestra thundred, and summoned into being massive creatures of myth, legend, and some really really perverted tentacle porn. The creatures charged towards the five men... but surprisingly, neither Zengar or Ratsel seemed to be worried.

"Tomoyo, ima koso warewa no chikara miseru toki!"

"Sou chin!"

"That won't w-" began Franz, before his voice died off, as Zengar and Ratsel performed their ultimate attack. The sheer awesome badass whirlwind of blades and the Zankantou destroyed all the monsters in one attack, and the Lyrical Orchestra faltered as their summons were destroyed.

The hot blood brothers wept tears of manly joy, fists clenched, all as one screaming "WHO DO YOU THINK THEY ARE?!"

Ratsel and Zengar fell back, as the Lyrical Orchestra regrouped, and the sunglasses-wearing knight shook his head. "We won't be able to defeat them quickly with standard attacks. We'll have to beat them at their own game. We'll use a song more awesome than anything they have! Ingram! Get here!"

"I'm here," grumbled Ingram Plissken, setting up his keyboard, as Ivanovich arrived and plugged in a guitar amp, testing his guitar and giving a thumbs up to Ratsel, while Erick and Alpha Squad unloaded a truckfull of massive speakers, quickly setting up the impromptu stage and mikes. More and more people were congregating, and Franz shed tears of manly joy as he recognised all the hot bloods of Outer Cadia and the TSAB assembling to do battle with the Lyrical Orchestra. Even Glen was there!

"Alright! Now, based on my educated calculations, this song will be the best ever, with enough awesome to defeat the Lyrical Orchestra! Which is good, because we're running out of the window of opportunity that Trombe has given us. Zengar! You're up!"

"I'm ready," said Zengar, as the strains of Trombe!, Ratsel's theme, faded off... and Zengar began his song.

Will be continued when I get back.

But I think you know Zengar's song.

Hotbloodness and crack mixed together for a great recipe.

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

I'm sure she meant some other forms of entertainment...

Hey, won't it be funny if second two reveals that she's not really his blood sister ? That would be SOOOOO "Days of our lives" ...

...Not that I watch it or anything.

I'll leave the spoilers at the CG thread.

And it'll only be after awhile LONGER would I start to advertise on FF thread.

Hurry lest you get taken away by the men in green.

Jokes aside I'm waiting for the sem break to get started on things as well. Unless you intended for earlier times.

Denied.

Aw. Lone Wolf?

I'm thinking Mocking Bird strangely. Doesn't have any connection to Graham's favor with ill-luck and tragedy though.

You mean Lelouch isn't going to do her?

*shrugs* I figure he's too much of a sis-con. Though it's been said the romance was pushed to R2 to establish the story in season 1.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

...

You're kidding me right?!?!?!?!

Hayate's world just became much, much darker, when two of her closest friends turn out to be using her?

The foreshadowing about the Saint Church had been promising but in any case, yes I have been all along.

That was a screenshot I lifted from one of the A's episodes (6 or 7 IIRC), when first appears and talks to Nanoha and Fate, and how similar his situation was with Nanoha's.

Hmm. Barring future events, the possibility of Nanoha walking down Graham's path has been cut off with StrikerS. Interesting nonetheless.

Yep, Jail is really popular with these kinds of people isn't he? At the least, I'm not getting villainous vibes out of them just yet

He is the only surviving antagonist from 3 seasons of befriending.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

I recall Lowe posted the flashback of him back in the days which made him look somewhere between 10 to 15 at best, even with Chrono's growth deficiency, since I recall he looked like a younger 14 year old Chrono.

So wouldn't that make him 70+ by StrikerS? 26 would be accurate if it was 30 years before A's in stead of StS.

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

I keep thinking of Ryouji Kaji...

All-rounded pimp.

I swear if this thing is real it had BETTER have Vivio...
And more HAYATE!!!!!

Even if not real, the possibilities of who reappearing in the possible S4 among the current cast up to StS is rather murky. Anything goes but Nanoha and Fate are prominent figures at least, for obvious reasons.

Wha...what is this?

Crack gone bad.

Originally Posted by SpaceBrotha

The point would be to make every single one of those true, instead of being a figment of her imagination as in higurashi...
...because her going on a rampage to kill her friends in delusional rage, although epic, would be a really short story.

Edit: Though, her going on a rampage to kill those who betrayed her in manic rage, although even more epic, would still be rather short...

I would send this to the refinery..

..if not for all the cannons and artillery aiming for my head for starting this fire.

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Wanna up the ente?

Play games with her. Make it so that HALF of those things are true, while the other half are made up.

In the end, she won't know what is true anymore.

Absorbed for other future purposes.

Originally Posted by Kha

As for earlier, looks like I shouldn't be wanting an Usoda so much...

Well not to worry. Getting carried away will happen from time to time.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

What's this, crack flying around that's going to screw over Hayate even more?

Feh, I'd rather continue reviewing for my exams. Fix it for me, ne, everyone? I'd love to give my loud reactions, but I'm completely not in the mood. I'm not in the best of moods right now due to annoyingly difficult 1st exams during this semester. Also taking into account my 0% progress in GenerationS which is also disheartening.

My comments? The idea is unique though quite morbid. And like Kha, I agree that nobody here would like that to happen. Wait till Tk sees this, it'll be grinded to pieces.

Oh, and of course, I don't like the idea one bit, naturally.

Now with that out of the way...

BTW, Evenagelion, that fic was BLOODY EXCELLENT!!! It certainly did a lot to improve my mood. Thanks a lot, buddy.

LOL, mood swing!

Ja ne.

Seeing this was due to the crack I had thrown in here, I do like to apologize for the unnecessary worry. Sorry Aaron.

Originally Posted by Estavali

Here's what is Nanohawiki has to say about Ancient Belka:

古代ベルカ †
古代ベルカ式魔法発祥の地であり、闇の書やヴォルケンリッターの故郷とも言える次元世界。
そこは、聖王と呼ばれる王が治めていたが、ロストロギアの暴走で滅びたとも言われる。また、少 数ながら難民 としてミッドに逃れた人もいるらしい。
聖王の遺伝子を持ったヴィヴィオが「遺伝子的に古代ベルカ時代、約300年前の人物が母親」と 言われていた 事から、少なくとも約300年前には古代ベルカは残っていた模様。

Basically, Ancient Belka was destroyed 300 yrs before StrikerS due to Lost Logia rampage (how, which and why isn't stated). Only a handful of survivors managed to escape to Mid after its destruction, perhaps (or rather most likely) via the Cradle. Nanohaverse's Elendil and folk, perhaps?

So the Belkans was destroyed by Lost Logias as predicted, though by usage or rampage still remains unknown. And that Belkans had their planet brings in more wonderings. Hopefully at least established histories remain intact.

Originally Posted by selkirk

Actually, the bit about the 300 years says that because of the evidence of Vivio's genetic parentage, it appears that Ancient Belka still existed at least 300 years ago. People on Midchilda must have really short memories...

Hmm, first post in here I think...

Kha's got the idea fine but aside from short memories, wouldn't the tech available to them at least let them record something? It does smell of greater hands at work to keep the information secret, something like the brains or their predecessors might have done.

[SpaceBrotha]

Originally Posted by Tormenk

I would send this to the refinery..

..if not for all the cannons and artillery aiming for my head for starting this fire.

Well i might have fanned the flames for this one, but it's your fic, go ahead and write it...
...who knows, it might turn out to be rather epic.

[Tormenk]

Originally Posted by Liingo

Well I guess it works in a weird round about way..........

Tweaking the story line to have Carim be the major sponsor behind RF6 would be one way to have Hayate indebeted to her while not deviating too far from canon as Carim is already one of the major backers along with Chrono and a few others that I can't remember from ep 11 or so of Strikers..

Although I am literally a hands width away from yelling out DOES NOT COMPUTE

Originally Posted by SpaceBrotha

Well i might have fanned the flames for this one, but it's your fic, go ahead and write it...
...who knows, it might turn out to be rather epic.

It was intended as one-shot crack and shot down pretty quickly after so to say there's a continuation at all, which I shall make it clear there will be none, is a pretty moot point.

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by Tormenk

It was intended as one-shot crack and shot down pretty quickly after so to say there's a continuation at all, which I shall make it clear there will be none, is a pretty moot point.

Hahaha, well it's your choice after all.

Nothing new for the OC thread, but I whipped up the start to a new fic idea that struck me today with just CC's. It's in the FF thread if anyone's interested, not much point posting it here since it's not really relevant.

Oh and Aaron, you might want to stay away from this one.... the idea that I had isn't the most pleasant for Hayate..

[Aaron008R]

Will post normally tomorrow.

@Tormenk: LOL don't apologize. I should be the one to for scoffing like that. Sorry.

@Liingo: Read it and is interested.

Will be back...

[Reiji Tabibito]

Originally Posted by Keroko

And your point is...?

It's ULTRA CREEPY!!

I mean, come on, the only thing creepier than that would be Chaos...

Originally Posted by Keroko

Yup, doesn't lessen the humor, though. Especially since Mamet really becomes their 'daughter.'

Reminds me of a story my fiancee told me a while back - she was babysitting some little girl, and they went to a park, and a bunch of old ladies gave her dirty looks...because both she and the girl had blue eyes.

Originally Posted by Keroko

Oh hush, its not even official, and the so-called news is way to fanficy to be official.

I STILL don't like it...my DOOM SENSE is going off all over the place.

And JUST because something is fanficcy DOESN'T mean it'll stay out of the world...Tokyo Mew Mew a la Mode anyone?

Originally Posted by Kha

Kha's harem family:

CC
Fate
Cinque
Sein
Otto
Nove
Dieci
Wendi
Deed
Teana
Hayate
Carim
Nanoha

OC
Sakura AKA Saber Vivio
Sak-chan
Tohkiha Ringo AKA Sophia Alexei
Chao Lingshen AKA Wang Liu Mei
Caren H. Garcia
Kia
Keroko (depends on timeline)
Mai Enna
CC
Minerva
Chachamaru
Chachazero
Trieze (I think she's one of the Cinque-gen )
Unrevealed Numbers 14-20 (apparently there was no blast to kill these unactivated Cinque-gen in canon)

That's 33 ladies folks... Negi...

"There, I come for you!"

*runs really fast from panda snipers*

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Spoiler for Lyrical! Magical! Crack-ical!:

The madness was spreading.

Under the direction of the Loli Lyrical Mage, the Lyrical Orchestra marched forward, spreading madness in their path. Civillians laughed, screamed, danced, stripped, cried and the screams of their madness echoed throughout the city streets. Ground Forces fell before the onslaught of magical sound, unable to adapt or improvise a defence.

There were only three men still standing, three men who against the odds were holding onto their sanity. The Lyrical Mage laughed and signaled her Orchestra. "Soon, you too will join them in their madness, as we take over the world!"

The only reason the three men were still sane.... was because it was debatable whether they had ever had their sanity.

"We won't back down! This is the golden path of battle that all great men travel! How dare you do this to our people! How dare you tear down all that we have worked so hard to build?!" thundered Franz Jaeger, propping himself up with his Armed Sword Device, his aura flaring with his hot blood. "To me, my brothers!"

"That's right! Even if the infinit universe were to go against us-" began Smith.

"Our burning blood will break through Fate!" finished Wesson.

"WHO THE FUCK DO YOU THINK WE ARE?!" thundered the hot blood brothers.

(Far, far away, all the significant females in their lives facepalmed.)

"Smith...Wesson.... we can't really go on like this," said Franz. "But if we're going to die, let's die like men! Let's show her how real men die!"

"There won't be any dying today."

"R-ratsel?! Zengar?!"

Ratsel, aka Elzam von Bernstein, merely smirked. "You there! We have come do deliver justice! I, the riddle chef, Ratsel! And my friend and comrade!"

"I am Zengar, Zengar Zombolt, the Sword that Cleaves Evil!"

"Oho?!" laughed the Lyrical Flutist. "Then we'll just have to throw evil at you!"

The Lyrical Orchestra thundred, and summoned into being massive creatures of myth, legend, and some really really perverted tentacle porn. The creatures charged towards the five men... but surprisingly, neither Zengar or Ratsel seemed to be worried.

"Tomoyo, ima koso warewa no chikara miseru toki!"

"Sou chin!"

"That won't w-" began Franz, before his voice died off, as Zengar and Ratsel performed their ultimate attack. The sheer awesome badass whirlwind of blades and the Zankantou destroyed all the monsters in one attack, and the Lyrical Orchestra faltered as their summons were destroyed.

The hot blood brothers wept tears of manly joy, fists clenched, all as one screaming "WHO DO YOU THINK THEY ARE?!"

Ratsel and Zengar fell back, as the Lyrical Orchestra regrouped, and the sunglasses-wearing knight shook his head. "We won't be able to defeat them quickly with standard attacks. We'll have to beat them at their own game. We'll use a song more awesome than anything they have! Ingram! Get here!"

"I'm here," grumbled Ingram Plissken, setting up his keyboard, as Ivanovich arrived and plugged in a guitar amp, testing his guitar and giving a thumbs up to Ratsel, while Erick and Alpha Squad unloaded a truckfull of massive speakers, quickly setting up the impromptu stage and mikes. More and more people were congregating, and Franz shed tears of manly joy as he recognised all the hot bloods of Outer Cadia and the TSAB assembling to do battle with the Lyrical Orchestra. Even Glen was there!

"Alright! Now, based on my educated calculations, this song will be the best ever, with enough awesome to defeat the Lyrical Orchestra! Which is good, because we're running out of the window of opportunity that Trombe has given us. Zengar! You're up!"

"I'm ready," said Zengar, as the strains of Trombe!, Ratsel's theme, faded off... and Zengar began his song.

Will be continued when I get back.

But I think you know Zengar's song.

Spoiler for AGAIN!:

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

[Reiji]BUT IT'S JUST WRONG! WHY CAN'T YOU PEOPLE SEE THAT?!?!
[/Reiji]

THANK you!

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

I'm sure she meant some other forms of entertainment...

Like WHAT? JUGGLING?

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Hey, won't it be funny if second two reveals that she's not really his blood sister ? That would be SOOOOO "Days of our lives" ...

...Not that I watch it or anything.

You lost whatever masculinity you had with me when you invoked...THAT NAME...

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Well, I didn't completely mean what I said

Of course not! Because only a total moron would stand by what they said!

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

You mean Lelouch isn't going to do her?

"Ara? He is not doing CC? What's wrong with you? You have to perform better!"

Originally Posted by LoweGear

[Akari] SUTEKI [/Akari]

[Aika]Wonderful isn't allowed during practice!![/Aika]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Spoiler for Finishing Move! Flawless Victory! Super Lyrical Taisen!:

Although she would never have admitted it to Franz, Smith or Wesson, the loli Lyrical Mage was shocked by the appearance of Zengar and Ratsel, especially Ratsel. What manner of magic did he have, that his music would override her orchestra? Even now, the hot bloods gathering on the impromptu stage behind Zengar were walking tall and standing firm, unyielding to the pressure of her orchestra.

Ingram finished the stage checks, Ivanovich strummed the last of his warmup guitar riffs, and Ratsel finished passing out songsheets to everyone. The strains of Trombe! faded off, and Zengar stepped to the mike, and sang:

Da da da! Da da da! Daizengar!
Da Da Da! Da da da! Daizengar!

Ikare! Hagane no bushin yo!
Atsui tamashii sono kihaku!
Seigi no tsurugi zankantou...
Subete no aku no tatsu tame ni!
Ima koso tenkai da!
Ware wa aku o tatsu tsurugi
Ware ni tatenu mono na wa nai

Da da da! Da da da! Daizengar!
Da da da! Da da da da! Daizengar!

The effect was unbelievable. You could actually see the waves of lyrical magic been blown back by the sheer awesome of Zengar's song, backed up by Ingram on the keyboard, Ivanovich and his guitar, and the male choir of hot bloods. The orchestra faltered, losing their rhythm, as Zengar stepped up for chorus:

Kore ga waga tachisuji
Todoku, unyou no hayasama de
Ittou ryoudan! CHESUTOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
Nekettsu! Hichu! Tepekki! Shinnen!
Tanjou! Muteki no Aku o Tatsu Tsurugi!
Warera no bushin!

Da! Da! Da! Da! Daizengar!

The loli Lyrical Mage gritted her teeth, blowing on her flute, summoning more massive spellbeast summons, sending them charging towards zengar and the choir, the orchestra of Doom regaining their nerve as Zengar stopped singing. "FIGHT! WE STILL HAVE A CHANCE!" she yelled.

"Alright, it's my turn now!" smiled Ratsel.

Hashire, tatsumaki no anauma!
Shiroi tategami, kuroki body!
Tomo ni tatakau, waga tomo yo
Higeki no kako o nori koete
Ima koso kakenukero!
Noroe, waga mi no fuun o
Ware o, habamu mono wa inai

Da da da! Da da da! Daitrombe!
Da da da! Da da da da! Daitrombe!
Warera no chikara, miseru zo
Ima da, Jinma Ittai da!
Ikki tousen! TATSUMAKI ZANKANTOOOOOUUUUUUUUU!!!!
Kasoku! Chokugeki! Totsugeki! Shuchu!
Tanjou! Shinsoku no hageshii tatsumaki
Senjou o kakero!

Da! Da! Da! Da! Daitrombe!

Ingram and Ivanovich went wild on a keyboard and guitar duel, as the awesome hot blooded words smashed into the summoned beast, their music reaching a crescendo, and then dying off suddenly, as Zengar and Ratsel dueted:

Da da da! Da da da! Daizengar!
Da da da! Da da da da! Daitrombe!
Da da da! Da da da! Daizengar!
Da da da! Da da da da! Daitrombe!

And then, out of nowhere, the song gained strenght, th choir joining their hotblooded voices with the two knights, manly tears running down their voices as their hearts filled with pride to be standing beside two REAL MEN. Franz yelled, Smith howled, Wesson sang, and Erick's tears poured down and down, as everyone joined their voices into the last portion of the chorus:

Konjou! Doryoku! Kiai! Youjou!
Tanjou! Seigi no Aku o Tatsu Tsurugi
Hagane no shugojin!

DA DA DA DA DAIZENGAR!!!

* * * * *

When the dust finally settled, the Orchestra of Doom would flee with their tails behind their legs, and word would go out towards all lyrical mages attempting to use their powers for evil. A message simple, yet profound.

"Ware wa Zengar Zombolt, Aku wo tatsu tsurugi nari! Waga Zankantou ni tatenu mono nashi!"

Oh God...here come the CHESTOs again...

Spoiler for ONE MORE TIME!:

[Erio]

Originally Posted by Kha

EDIT: Just as we were getting comfortable with the crack fort each of us may be building, from DestinyS to Rebuilt, Tsuzuki may really have decided to strike Forth.

"Every body now. On 2. 1, 2..."

"H0LY 5HYT"

Looks like its time to organize another round of hop-skotch. I'd say Tsuzuki'd do something similar to whatever I had planned for the MageWarrior series and screw it up like StrikerS.

BUT let's see if der Kleriker continues to prove why "I Am Legend" in surviving the next onslaught.

Otherwise, that MTV of Jay Chou's "Wo Bu Pei" is gonna come in handy for "The Breakup of Tessalgar Square"...

Fishy as it may be, sounds like fun to me. I hope its true, just to see how it turns out.

And given selkirk's translation, apparently our "Extended Relic Weapons" will be officially succeeded... ...without the Relics, of course.

Originally Posted by Evangelion Xgouki

After many fierce battles against Laziness and Procrastination, as well as beating my head to get the scenes right, I am glad to FINALLY present to you,

A Day at the Amusement Park, a GenerationS side story

Spoiler for A Day at the Amusement Park:

In the nearly clear, blue sky above the sun shined its warming rays as it passed its apex. The rays of warmth heated the surrounding air of the city below bursting with activity. Men and women milled around inside and out going about their daily business. Some sought out the refuge of the tall, air conditioned buildings. Others took advantage of the warm weather and spent the day out to take in some fresh air. The local amusement park was especially busy with the pleasant weather. Groups of friends gathered and milled about. Families of all sizes and relations wandered the park led on by smiling, eager children. There were also some mixes of the two groups enjoying a day at the park.

“Waaa~!”

One Vivio Takamachi took in the amazing sights around her with a mix of curiosity and wonder. Her mismatched eyes darted from ride of ride, from display to display as she almost skipped in joy on one of the many concrete paths. If she was able to have her own way, she would be running about from attraction to attraction. However her escorts on either side of her for the day preferred a more casual pace at the moment.

“Vivio, what would you like to ride first?” asked the young lady holding onto her hand on her left.

“Everything!” replied the young girl with a bright smile.

The young man on her right chuckled at her enthusiasm.

“Well, I don’t think we can ride them all at once, Vivio.”

That caused Vivio to pause her current train of thought and ponder for a moment. She placed a finger from her free hand on her chin as her eyes wandered upwards in what appeared to be deep thought. A short moment passed before she excitedly pointed at the Merry-Go-Round.

“That one Nanoha-mama!”

“Alright. Let’s go!” exclaimed Nanoha Takamachi, the famed Ace of Aces (as well as infamous White Devil) of the TSAB, as she smiled down at her adopted daughter.

The heterochromatic girl giggled in excitement as she sprinted towards the selected ride, dragging her mother along side her hand in hand. From the rear, head librarian of the TSAB Infinity Library Yuuno Scrya couldn’t hold back the wide smile as he watched the two run off.

“Yuuno-kun~! Hurry up!” called back Nanoha as she tried to keep up with her daughter.

“Coming,” he called back, breaking into a jog to catch up to the pair.

With the large crowds that day, the majority of the rides were fairly busy. Lines at the more popular attractions had several hour waits as people continued to pile into the robed-off areas. The Merry-Go-Round was no exception as the pair stood in line. Nanoha glanced around her to find her friend sitting down on one of the nearby benches positioned around the ride area.

“Eh? What are you doing over there, Yuuno-kun?”

The blonde-haired young man lifted the camera that was resting around his neck and gestured to it, “You two go on. It’d be harder to get good pictures if I was right next to you.”

“Mou…are you sure?” remarked the brunette with a slight frown.

“I’m sure, Nanoha,” he replied with a laugh, “Besides, the signs say they only allow one adult to be standing per child and she is your daughter.”

“Oh, fine. You had better get some good pictures then, you silly ferret.”

“I will, I promise.”

A tug on her arm brought Nanoha’s attention to the girl besides her as she knelt down to answer some question she had. From the bench, Yuuno leaned back and watched the mother-daughter pair with a smile. He had known the famous mage for over a decade now. In a way, all of this was his fault.

‘No that wasn’t right,’ he corrected himself, ‘I was the catalyst that started a journey and an adventure.’

The line moved at a fairly quick pace due to the large capacity of the Merry-Go-Round and its rather short duration compared to most other rides. Based on his estimates, they would only have to wait another two sets of people before it would be their turn. He sets the camera down on his lap and allows his mind to wander while he waits.

‘Nanoha…a very close and dear friend to me that I’ve known since the beginning of, well, all of this. We’ve been through thick and thin together in those two Lost Logia incidents. It’s still rather odd how it all turned out back then,’ he chuckles, ‘To think that she would be the one to pick up where I failed and push forward to collect the remaining Jewel Seeds. And out of her own resolve to help me, too. At first I felt guilty for throwing all this on her shoulders, but when she scolded me and wanted to it for herself to help…’

His eyes blink as he straightens up and scan over the line looking for where they were. They were now closer to the front, but still at least one set of people away. It looked like Vivio was asking her mother some questions to which Nanoha was happily replying if the bright smile on her face was any sign. The sight of mother and daughter smiling was too much as a smile crept up on Yuuno’s lips.

‘Yes, I think it was then that I began treating Nanoha more as a friend rather than a partner. Back then I was still young and naïve, but now I think about it that was probably when I started to fall for that girl whose smile and determination could surpass extraordinary odds.’

The large group of people exiting the ride brought him back to reality. Picking up the camera, he scans the circular ride for the pair. Even with the mass of people wandering looking for an open spot he manages to pick out the brunette and her rather unique off-centered ponytail on the outer ring of the ride. He watches as she helps Vivio up onto the ornate horse. The little girl smiles and giggles as she grips the pole running through the seat. Behind her Nanoha rests one hand protectively on her waist, just in case.

Yuuno hefts the camera up and peers through the viewfinder as the bell in the center rings announcing the start of the ride. The platform begins its slow rotation with music pouring from the numerous speakers in the ceiling. He centers and snaps a few shots of Vivio as she smiles even brighter with the horse slowly bobbing up and down. They pass out of view for a moment, allowing him to set the camera down to rest his arms before coming back around. This time he zooms out to get a few shots of the pair passing by smiling happily.

As he snaps the last photo for the rotation, Yuuno’s mind wanders a bit to the older woman in the photo. Having known her since she was nine, he’s had the opportunity to watch as she developed and matured over the years. From that little, energetic girl she had grown to be a stunning woman with an incredible track record with the TSAB, her career practically set for her.

‘Her figure had also filled out quite nicely, too. Not to mention how great she looks in that skirt…’
He quickly coughs, trying to clear that train of thought from his mind. It was well known throughout the TSAB of the three Aces from the Non-Administered world and their spectacular feats from the young age of nine with no prior knowledge of magic or formal training (with the exception of Fate). Over the past few years their stunning beauty and continuing single status also became fairly well known. Many men, from recruits to high-ranking officers, tried their hand at attempting to court one of the famed Aces only to be turned down. Some had compared the chances to dating one of them to taking them on one-on-one with no limiters and no attack restrictions. This comparison had also kept many from even trying in the first place, yet some still tried their luck now and then.

Setting the camera down on his lap, Yuuno recalls what Hayate had told him before they left for the park.

“Can we talk for a bit, Yuuno-kun?” Hayate spoke audibly, winking in Nanoha’s direction.

“Uh… Sure…” Yuuno glanced at Nanoha.

Nanoha paused in confusion, but then shrugged and said, “Alright. Don’t be late, Yuuno-kun~!” before running off after Vivio.

Hayate dragged him around a bit before settling behind a wall. She stood up straightly with her hands akimbo, a confident smile on her face.

Yuuno pushed up his glasses nervously, “What did you want to talk about, Hayate?”

“So you’ve finally made a first move, huh, Yuuno-kun?”

“But…” Yuuno sighed, “Like we said, it’s just a-Wha?!” he jolted as Hayate’s finger was pointed directly at his nose.

“Whatever it is, you must do your best so as not to disappoint Nanoha-chan,” Hayate warned him with one eye closed, her other hand rose to form an encouraging fist, “Okay?”

‘The first move, huh?’ he mentally sighs.

While the others had never said anything about it, Hayate had been the one to confront him about the ‘status’ between Nanoha and himself. As much as tried to deny any romantic interest in the girl, he knew that it was a lie and he was also lying to himself. He had given her a lot of space when she first started her TSAB career so she could find her calling. The atrocious lack of organization in the Infinity Library had also kept him quite busy at the same time. Now, however she’s an instructor for the new TSAB recruits and plans on remaining such as her refusals of promotions after the Cradle Incident have shown. Not to mention that she has a daughter to look after.

‘Perhaps now would be the best time to give into Hayate’s urgings…,’ he ponders.

The lack of music and rise in voices breaks his train of thought. He instinctively stands and looks around for the pair from the crowded ride’s exit. A slender hand waving above the sea of heads catches his eye. Moments later the trio is reunited by the bench with Vivio giggling happily between the two adults.

“Mama! Mama! Let’s go on another one!” she urges while tugging on Nanoha’s arm.

Nanoha nods, taking a moment to look around at the sea of people around the park.

“Alright. Which one do you want to ride?”

The young girl grins and takes off running down one of the paths. With her hand still locked with her daughters, Nanoha had no choice but to keep up behind the excited bundle of energy the best she could. Behind them Yuuno couldn’t help but laugh as he watched the ‘great’ Ace of Aces being dragged along by a little girl. It definitely was quite an unusual sight.

As the daylight slowly faded away, the trio would ride several more of the attractions, with Vivio promptly dragging them off to the next one with an excited look on her face. Now the sun was nearing the end of its journey across the sky for that day. A spectrum of reds and yellows replaced the lively blue sky. Many groups had already left the park for the day to either make their way home or find a place to eat. The slowly thinning crowds and dimming sky was not lost to the two adults.

“It’s starting to get late, Nanoha. We should probably start heading out soon before we get stuck in the rush out.”

The brunette nods in agreement, “That would be a good idea. Come on, Vivio. Let’s head home.”

Vivio, however, had other ideas.

“No! I don’t want to…,” she complained.

Both adults sighed softly, having realized that this was probably the reaction they would get from the girl. Nanoha knelt before Vivio and placed her hands on her shoulders.

“Vivio, it’s starting to get late. We can always come back another time. Plus Fate-mama is waiting at home for us.”

The little girl crossed her arms over her chest and pouted, puffing her cheeks out as she shook her head to stand by her original decision. As Nanoha tried to reason with her daughter, Yuuno couldn’t help but grin as she watched the little girl whose mannerisms reminded him so much of her mother.

“How about this Vivio,” he starts as he squats down next to Nanoha, “We’ll do one more ride. Any ride you want, okay?”

“Mou, Yuuno-kun. Are you sure?”

Before the librarian could respond, Vivio points her finger at a ride behind them.

“That one!”

Yuuno and Nanoha both rise and turn to look at what the girl was pointing at. Two pairs of eyes fell upon the large Ferris Wheel towering near the end of the park. With the sunlight slowly beginning to wane the giant wheel was lit up all over by bright lights, slowly spinning its passengers around in enclosed passenger pods. Finding herself unable to come up with any opposition to the proposed agreement, Nanoha straightens up and smiles.

“Alright. One more ride.”

Vivio lets out a cheer and grabs the adults’ hands as she excitedly makes her way to the ride. At the same time the pair wonders where she gets all this energy of hers from.

A short time later the trio finds themselves slowly rising from the ground in one of the silver pods. At one end of the pod Vivio kneels on the plastic seat with her hands pressed against the window. Green and red eyes gaze out over the brightly lit park rides and buildings slowly sinking as the wheel turns with curiosity and fascination. On the other end Nanoha and Yuuno sit next to each other and watch over the young girl.

‘Oh boy…I guess it’s now or never,’ he tells himself.

“Nanoha?”

The brunette turns her attention to the blonde boy, “Hm? What is it Yuuno-kun?”

“Erm…ah, Vivio has quite a family, huh?” he blurts out in nervousness.

“Yea, she does doesn’t she?” she says leaning back against the seat, “Fate-chan and I take care of her most of the time. Sometimes Hayate and her Knights watch her watch her when we’re busy with Bureau stuff. Now that I think about it, I think Vita-chan looks to her like an older sister although I doubt she’ll ever admit it.”

Nanoha giggles as she glances over at Vivio, “Maybe I should tell Vivio to start calling her ‘Nee-chan’ from now on.”

That got a chuckle from the young man, especially with the scene of the powerful Iron Knight blushing in embarrassment and stuttering denials floating around his mind.

“Yes, that would be interesting to see.”

“All the Forwards have some attachment to her before RF6 was disbanded. Even Chrono-kun can’t deny that he’s fond of Vivio with how he grins every time she calls him ‘Uncle Chrono.’”

“She does have that effect on people.”

Straightening himself up, Yuuno takes a deep breath to gather what courage he can.

“Ah, what would you say about me Nanoha?”

“Oh, you’ve also been a huge help. I feel kinda bad sometimes when I keep having to ask you to watch her,” she replies in a bit of embarrassment.

“Don’t worry about. I don’t mind at all, especially with all that’s been going on lately everyone’s been pretty busy. Although…”

“Although…?” she questions as she turns to look at him curiously.

He knew that there was no turning back now.

“I-I want to be there for you and Vivio, Nanoha. To be there when you need help,” he pauses as she stares back with her blue orbs waiting for him to continue, “What I mean to say is you, Vivio…would you…”

“Mama look!”

Both adults nearly fall out of their seat in surprise as Vivio jumps between them and points at the window she had come from. Nanoha is the first to recover from the slight scare.

“Look at what Vivio?”

As the young girl excitedly leads her mother over to the other window, Yuuno takes a moment to calm down. He leans back on the seat and watches Vivio excitedly point out different things outside to her smiling mother.

‘I guess now just wasn’t the right time, huh?’ he muses.

Although he was disappointed, he was also a bit glad that Vivio did what she did. He had known Nanoha for a long time and couldn’t deny that he liked her. There were probably others that could see it, but Hayate had always been the most open about encouraging him to ‘make his move’ as she would say.

Yet he was also worried about what would happen when he actually did ask her to go out with him. He knew what he felt, but he never could really tell how she felt towards him. She never really gave any signs of liking him, yet she also never gave any signs of not being against it either. If it meant ruining the friendship they had he didn’t want to risk it, but at the same time he won’t know until he tries.

“Mama, over there! So pretty~”

Yuuno smiles as he continues to watch the pair. There was no use to rush things. Sometimes it was better to just stand back and wait for the right moment. If it was meant to be he’ll wait for that moment. Until then he’ll be there for her as he was back then, watching her and protecting her in anyway he could.

Nice, very nice...even though it was hard to stand thinking about Vivio...

But since the piece was good, I was able to.

[Wild Goose]

Originally Posted by Kha

Since its your timeline, you have full access to all my characters, from Allison to Zwei Linda. Even kill them off if you need/want to.

Yes even Kha. At least we'll know which timeline Kluize der Archer could've been summonned from

I'm afraid I'll actually have to give Kha & co. supporting/cameo/minor roles in this... simply because I'm not familliar with them

I will say this though: Kha's appearence in DT will be brief. But the effects are not insignificant....

....let's just say that it kills all NxF and leave it at that.

Whoa, whoa, whoa...

I was just commenting how this would've fit right into a discontinued timeline, so no worries man, we're just toying with the idea. No one's gonna let this happen to Hayate, I'm sure of it. I certainly can't reconcile the woman who watched over Kha and Caren when they grew up after losing their parents, and the man that taught Kha how to be a good tracker and a even better skirt-caretaker, with that dark image first proposed by Tormenk. It would bend the timelines too much to it's completely OOC.

But you got to admit the possibility exists... That's what we're playing with.

I assure you, as I played out this crack plotline for the Nanoha Must Die timeline, I intended for Kha to be paired with Hayate or Lutecia in that timeline, so at the very least 1 person won't betray her. I'm sure she has the touch that turned Kha from a killing machine into the Cleric everyone knows as she always had in all the other timelines. That touch would be lost if she herself gives into the betrayals, for it were the Aces who taught him that Hope can light up even the darkest days. I would've properly time it such that Kha'd come for Hayate when she needed him to, whatever the case.

As for earlier, looks like I shouldn't be wanting an Usoda so much...

To be honest, I don't like betrayals or bad things happening to cute girls. And really, what I was highly annoyed about was, as I said, the ruckus over emo Nanoha while there was such enthusiastic glee over fucking over Hayatechan permanantly. (Because of all the aces, she's the best for cuddling. Except maybe loli Nanoha.)

Anyway, let's just agree to drop the matter.

(From the writer standpoint, I understand COMPLETELY the possibilities. Just saying that for the record.)

Regards the Cradle, my take on it:

Al-Hazard spanned all over the place. Belkans found the Cradle, rebuilt it, refitted the OS to speak Belkan, and used it in a first strike on Mid. (Presumably.) However, things went wrong and the Cradle made a controlled crash landing (lol oxymoron) and was then hidden by the Belkans in preparation for incase shit hit the fan an eventually was forgotten.

Senario 2: fleeing from some sorta fuckup, te Cradle deposits Belkan refugees in what later becomes the Belkan SAR. Once done, the command crew crash land the Cradle into a promising location, and then hide it with eath and stuff; the idea is that should the refugees be opressed the Cradle will rise. Belkans are not opressed by Mids, the cradle is left alone and forgotten.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Estavali

I would ask how anything less than 300 years can be considered ancient. For me, ancient = at least 1000 years.

Unless they are refering to how long the civilisation has been around, hmmm.

I thought it refered to the latter point. I've always envisioned the Ancient Belka to have existed much longer than the Midchilda, who were, I assumed, a recent melting pot of different races. Kinda like what America is now.

Makes sense after taking into account New Belka being part of Midchilda society, and then with the now vanished Old English Brittanica race made by USB, plus the various protocultures of European-descent X and I have been throwing around.

Originally Posted by SpaceBrotha

The king probably died, and the refugees buried the cradle because they couldn't use it any further.

(i can picture the king staying behind on belka, ordering the ship to carry refugees to safety)...

[C2F]DING! We have a winner![/C2F]



This was exactly what I thought of Vivio's last stand during the "Planet Belk" days. Returning to a piece of the drawing board on Seven Swords, plus making a few adjustments for new data:

"Lost logia rampage" could be stemming from a crucial event where a Lost Logia was activated. I'm sure the cocoon of a Necron Star God, according to Lowe's brilliant work in that area, looks like a mighty weapon of war, something the vanquished Alhazredians called the "Eye of God". Activating that brought the Wanderer (an OC-created Star God for CrosyS) into the Nanohaverse for the first time. Only then did the AB realize that the Pariah gene, and the many Monoliths scattered throughout Megiddo, were all part of a long-coming plan by the Wanderer and his kind.

The Belka fought back, using whatever arsenal they had, even invoking Hammerdown Policy of nuking whole planets to pieces just to stop the Necronic advance. That alone when done in enough excess, especially if the Pariahs played up the Ancient Belka's tendencies to go overboard in purification, would be enough to swear everyone off conventionals.

And so the war drags out... And Seven Swords progresses...

In the end, the Belka won, at great cost. Having lured Wanderer to Capitalis Belka, Vivio and the last of the truely badass cleric-knights stood against the crush of the Pariah and their Necron allies as the Imperial Guard evacuated any civilian stragglers into the Cradle. The potent trap was laid at their feet, with themselves as bait.

The Cradle was to do Vivio's last command, to make a blind warp towards a refuge planet, then teleport its precious cargo to safety. She chose Midchilda, the home planet of the Lord she could not have, the world her family had fought for generations, and yet was the world she died fighting for.

While we shall leave the details of that last stand to another time, what happened on Midchilda was:

Cradle made the warp jump successfully, but ended up several strata underground, with the brunt of its armor and shields taking the sudden impact of teleporting into bedrock. It then performed its second command with the last of its mana reserves, and teleported all refugees packed into the transport chamber onto the desert surface. After that, self-protection systems, including signal camoflage, kicked in and the Cradle sealed itself into history.

As such, not only does no one know where the Cradle is exactly, the Cradle thus ended up several soil strata below ground!

A perfectly elegant answer, if I do say so myself. The only problem then arises from whether Capitalis Belka was on another planet in the first place.

Originally Posted by SpaceBrotha

...Or the king ordered the cradle to be buried since it was an instrument of war, also a lost logia... And i think the belkans were quite fed up with both war and lost logias

Possible.

Originally Posted by SpaceBrotha

No one said that the war that destroyed belka didn't affect anyone else, perhaps other civilizations were also severely affected by the war (innocent bystanders, collateral damage), hence only little information would be left of ancient belka...

Originally Posted by Tormenk

I would send this to the refinery..

..if not for all the cannons and artillery aiming for my head for starting this fire.

It's a perfectly alternative take on the events, and yeah there IS some backing for this crack, like Lingo mentioned, albeit the Wolkies and Kha didn't really have that convincing impact since we know so much about them already. I'd say Tk should grind us for trying to do that to the Cloudritters.

Originally Posted by SpaceBrotha

So the Belkans was destroyed by Lost Logias as predicted, though by usage or rampage still remains unknown. And that Belkans had their planet brings in more wonderings. Hopefully at least established histories remain intact.

Mine is still ok, I think.

Originally Posted by SpaceBrotha

Kha's got the idea fine but aside from short memories, wouldn't the tech available to them at least let them record something? It does smell of greater hands at work to keep the information secret, something like the brains or their predecessors might have done.

See above for why that could not have been so. I'm sure refugees don't have assets with them.

As for other evacuees, those who had Ancient Belka skills either died out over the years, or were erased from the face of the world having been picked up by Celestial Being.

Originally Posted by Erio

Fishy as it may be, sounds like fun to me. I hope its true, just to see how it turns out.

And given selkirk's translation, apparently our "Extended Relic Weapons" will be officially succeeded... ...without the Relics, of course.

Wut? I need them to have Relics on top of drugs! A very crucial point to stop Nanoha from just bwahahaBREAKHAAA-ing Vivio comes from it!

Let's just quote from Tales of the Past here:

"Destroying such a magical artefact will release a lot of arcane energy at once."
~Jaina Proudmoore

Let's just say Kha found that out the hard way while fighting Clotho... So if it were Vivio...

[dkellis]

Question, since I know no German:

Would it be a safe assumption that there have been no significant linguistic shifts in the Belka language from the time of Ancient Belka to present day? I'm basing this on the "Belka" German spoken by the automated systems on the Cradle.

[Evangelion Xgouki]

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Nice, nice! I quite like it, and it's lol how Yuuno's declaration is interrupted by Vivio.

Don't kids seem to have the BEST timing?

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

Well...here's a little piece of crack involving Lyrical Mages. Please, please, don't kill me, anyone. This is just for fun.

Spoiler for Lyrical! Magical! Crack-ical!:

*snip*

Will be continued when I get back.

But I think you know Zengar's song.

ZOMG! T3H crack! T3H Hot blooded-ness!!

Originally Posted by Kha

Aw, that's so sweet... Vivio's really has that effect on ppl, as I quote.

The classic silent sentinel... It's like a more mature and open "Syaoran" type. It's rather refreshing to read. Throw it into the FF thread as well, let them enjoy it too!

Hmm...now that you mention it, it does sound like a TRC Syaoran type .

Originally Posted by LoweGear

...
Only one word to describe this piece:

[Akari] SUTEKI [/Akari]

Yuuno, you'll get your chance someday!!!!

One day...
I just didn't want to put in any definite pairings since it IS Aaron's story. It's just a little WAFF on the side

Originally Posted by USB500

Oh, my. This is so sweet I immediately suffered from cuteness diabetes. indeed, it was a story worth telling.

Don't worry, Yuuno! You can do it!

Hmmm...maybe I should have put more points into the cuteness factor...

Originally Posted by Wild Goose

In a big rush, so can't reply much, but thanks to all supporters!

Now, finishing move!

Spoiler for Finishing Move! Flawless Victory! Super Lyrical Taisen!:

*snip*

Oh man, I can't help but think of that scene in Reeath when they tried to beat the Eleven-teenth Angel

Gendo: Why is everyone looking at...me? YYEESSS~! Pika-CHU. Our only hope is to take it down with the power...of song.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Also, there's a fundamental difference between Tormenk's concept and Kagerou's: Tormenk's was a one-shot crack, and we're just toying around with the idea, whereas Kagerou's is a serious attempt at bringing angst as part of Nanoha's character.

I'll leave you to duke it out later, just my two cents

I tried writing angst before where Nanoha died...but it ended up being heart-warming and WAFFy in the end...

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

BTW, Evenagelion, that fic was BLOODY EXCELLENT!!! It certainly did a lot to improve my mood. Thanks a lot, buddy.

Glad to be of service . Let me know what you want to do with the little WAFF fic . Don't really have any plans to post it on FF.net really. Though you probably should add a link to it in your profile in the Fanfic Thread.

Originally Posted by Tormenk

I knew you were the right person for the job. Great moments throughout and reflections from Yuuno about his past with Nanoha. The reminder that even as a great mage, Nanoha's still a young woman with a future in front of her. Vivio and Yuuno does share the spotlight equally here and it's just well done.

Well, I didn't want to leave those two out of it . Plus Vivio's just too CUTE not to write some scenes with her

Originally Posted by Erio

Nice, very nice...even though it was hard to stand thinking about Vivio...

But since the piece was good, I was able to.

Guess my writing's decent then, huh?