2008-03-02, 20:18 | Link #13366 |
The Dang-meister
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Is it safe to assume that you did all of these? Cus they're really cute, however there are some issues about the way they're written, so if you don't mind, these are how they should be written.
First Comic: Fate: But...I have a lot of work to do... Hmm...that's the only thing that was wrong XD Second Comic: Subaru: If we will have kids, how many do you want? Tiana: W-WHY ARE YOU ASKING SOMETHING LIKE THAT?! I had no issues with the 3rd Comic, so those are the three lines that stood out that felt wrong. I took what you had written and just rewrote them so that they were grammatically correct, and it actually looked like proper English. Hope you didn't mind me doing that :3
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2008-03-02, 20:59 | Link #13367 |
Senior Member
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Join Date: Sep 2007
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Not at all Sir ^^ and I don't mind actually ^^
I see... maybe you're right,I shouldn't have wrote the word "Children" in the first place after all (my fault) Thank you so much for the correction Sir ^^ *EDIT* Last edited by Reiya; 2008-03-03 at 10:22. |
2008-03-02, 22:45 | Link #13370 | |
Angeloid Type β - Nymph
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: Canada, Ontario
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2008-03-02, 23:51 | Link #13372 |
台灣人~囧
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W: Well, it's because we don't have dreams~
N: I guess...ah! N: Heey, Cinque-nee~ What's Cinque-nee's dreams? C: Hm? My dream....? C: Hmm, my dream.... C: Well...my dream is to hope that you guys will be raised wonderfully....yeah W/N: As expected from onee-chan! *Ooooooo*
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2008-03-03, 03:48 | Link #13377 | |
nanoha fangirl
Join Date: Oct 2007
Location: Australia
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