Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Dark Knight Gafgar]

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

It's supposed to MENACE with spikes.

This is an Ash bracelet. All craftsmanship is of the highest quality. It menaces with spikes of Soap. It menaces with spikes of Ferret Leather. On the item is an engraving of Cheese in Horse tallow.

[Tempy]

Originally Posted by Dark Knight Gafgar

This is an Ash bracelet. All craftsmanship is of the highest quality. It menaces with spikes of Soap. It menaces with spikes of Ferret Leather. On the item is an engraving of Cheese in Horse tallow.

That's better. Though how dorfs (or Vivio, in this case) make spikes with leather, is still a mystery to me.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Dark Knight Gafgar

Spoiler for I, Dark Knight Gafgar, am a soulless monster:

Night had fallen, now, hours after the funeral, and the cemetery was deserted and lifeless. The mourners had long ago returned to their homes, leaving the fresh grave behind, letting the body and spirit of Vivio Takamachi have her final rest.

Or that had been the plan, at least.

The clock struck midnight, and the graveyard turned darker as an errant cloud covered up the light of the moon above. There was a scratching sound, a low grumble...

And then a pale, clawed hand burst forth from the grave, reaching into the sky above.

Elsewhere in the graveyard things were much the same, as the bodies of the dead rose up from their graves and walked. Or, to be more accurate, dug themselves slowly out of their graves, stumbled to their feet muttering curses about the modern durability of the average casket, yawned, and searched futilely for coffee. One pair of the newly awakened lurched their way towards a small building at the cemetery entrance, where they groaned with delight at the discovery of blessed caffeine and a sleeping graveyard attendant to snack on. The sound attracted several more of their fellow zethren, who shambled forward waving mugs and sporks. Agonized screams and loud slurping shortly began to emanate from the structure.

One of the living dead, an animate skeleton in the tattered remains of a TSAB Enforcer uniform, had begun shambling his way out of the cemetery when he passed the fresh grave and the hand clawing futilely at air above. The skeletal enforcer cocked his skull to the side, a little flap of flesh dangling from one temple, then slowly knelt down towards the grave below.

"Zdagh?" he queried, despite the obvious visual absence of vocal cords.

"...Zahah." an embarrassed grumble came from the grave below.

Rasping air through his jaw in what might have been a chuckle, the skeleton began clawing at the fresh, unpacked dirt below, excavating his trapped unliving comrade. Presently he was joined by two other, more intact zethren, and shortly they were helping the pale form of Vivio Takamachi - who would have been blushing in embarrassment if her blood had been flowing enough for her to do so - to her feet.

"Zangz." she muttered, looking down.

"Nah brabram." the skeleton waved a claw dismissively as the other two zambahz inclined their heads, one of which fell off, leaving it's owner feeling about blindly in an attempt to reclaim it. Flailing an arm towards the building by the cemetery entrance, the skeleton cocked his head to the side once again. "Harmanbargarz?"

"Nah." Vivio replied, shambling off in the opposite direction. "Gannah zah mah mama."

"Bah-bah zahn!"

Vivio returned the skeleton's parting wave, then lurched off down the street as, behind her, the horde groaned with the realization that the coffee had run out and began arguing with one another as to the location of the nearest shopping mall.

As far as Vivio was concerned, she could eat once she got home.

Failed for one simple reason.

Spoiler for Failure:

There was no thriller dance. T_T

[SulliMike23]

I still need Keroko's permission to use Syn so I can post what I got written down here.

[Tempy]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Failed for one simple reason.

Spoiler for Failure:

There was no thriller dance. T_T

That's for when Vivio comes home and turns Fate into a zombie too. THEN they dance.

[Dark Knight Gafgar]

Originally Posted by Satashi

Failed for one simple reason.

Spoiler for Failure:

There was no thriller dance. T_T

They hadn't even gotten to a mall yet, give them time.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

That's for when Vivio comes home and turns Fate into a zombie too. THEN they dance.

Nanoha gets left out of the zombie fun?

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by SulliMike23

I still need Keroko's permission to use Syn so I can post what I got written down here.

She normally says Syn is open to everyone... I wanna read it now. Can anyone get a hold of Kero-chan? We need youuuuuuuuuu

[Dark Knight Gafgar]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Nanoha gets left out of the zombie fun?

Of course not, but some meals need to be enjoyed with the rest of the family...

[Tempy]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Nanoha gets left out of the zombie fun?

Naw. She's the one everyone's chasing. First Fate gets munched, then Yuuno, Hayate, the Wolkenritter, Chrono, Amy, their kids, the Numbers, the Forwards, Lutecia, and others.

All slowly coming in to chomp on her...

Then Nanoha wakes up to everyone crowding around her, looking at her with worry. She had fainted during a small party, and she was having a nightmare.

As Nanoha goes with the others to get a drink, we see Vivio look that the screen and grin evilly.

Originally Posted by Satashi

She normally says Syn is open to everyone... I wanna read it now. Can anyone get a hold of Kero-chan? We need youuuuuuuuuu

It's very late where Keroko is. But yeah, usually Keroko says his OCs are free for anyone to use.

[SulliMike23]

Oh...well why didn't anyone say so!

Spoiler:

"Mama?" Vivio's voice interrupted Nanoha's thoughts.

She looked to her adopted daughter, now 16 years old and looking like her Saint Kaiser form every day. "Yes, what is it Vivio?"

"Can I talk to you?" Vivio asked almost timidly.

Nanoha nodded and motioned the girl to sit next to her on hers and Fate's bed. "What's on your mind?"

Vivio looked hesitant but she decided to speak anyway. "Have you ever...had feelings for someone besides Fate-mama?"

The question took Nanoha by surprise; she knew that Vivio was dating her childhood friend Syn, but to hear that she was starting to have feelings for someone else really stunned her. But she didn’t want to ask Vivio who it was just yet. For now, she would have to do the motherly thing and answer her daughter’s question.

“Yes,” She nodded a little reluctantly. “Yes, I have, actually.” She then sighed and looked a little reminiscent. “For a while, I did have a slight crush on Yuuno-kun when he was in his human form.” Nanoha then smiled. “But as my relationship with Fate grew, that’s all it ever was; a childhood crush.”

“Did Yuuno-san know this?” Vivio then asked her interest piqued.

Nanoha nodded again before looking at her daughter with an inquisitive look. “Just out of curiosity, why do you ask?”

Vivio got tense yet again and reluctantly answered her mother. “Well, there’s a new girl in school and she’s really pretty, she actually asked me out.” Vivio then looked a little downcast. “But, I love Syn so much that I don’t want to break her heart and I don’t want it to look like that…”

“That you’re cheating on her?” Nanoha asked with understanding in her voice receiving a nod as her answer. “Did you say that you were already with someone?”

Vivio shook her head. “No, she just said that I don’t have to say yes and that I don’t have to answer her right away.” Vivio then held her head in her hands. “I don’t know what to do. Besides Syn, no one has ever been open to me like that.”

Nanoha smiled at her and then she took Vivio in her arm and kissed her temple. “Just tell her that you’re already dating Syn and she’ll understand.”

“But I don’t want to break her heart either.” Vivio said, tears welling up at the corners of her eyes.

“You can still be friends with this girl.” Nanoha suggested. “If she’s lonely you and Syn can be her friends.” Vivio sniffled and looked at her. “Trust me, being friends with someone that likes you that way isn’t a bad thing.” She then wiped Vivio’s eyes. “Just being her friend can still make her happy, even if she doesn’t want that kind of relationship with you.”

“Really?”

Nanoha nodded and the two hugged one another.

“Thanks Mama.”

“You’re welcome Vivio.”

[Alavon]

Originally Posted by SulliMike23

Oh...well why didn't anyone say so!

Spoiler:

"Mama?" Vivio's voice interrupted Nanoha's thoughts.

She looked to her adopted daughter, now 16 years old and looking like her Saint Kaiser form every day. "Yes, what is it Vivio?"

"Can I talk to you?" Vivio asked almost timidly.

Nanoha nodded and motioned the girl to sit next to her on hers and Fate's bed. "What's on your mind?"

Vivio looked hesitant but she decided to speak anyway. "Have you ever...had feelings for someone besides Fate-mama?"

The question took Nanoha by surprise; she knew that Vivio was dating her childhood friend Syn, but to hear that she was starting to have feelings for someone else really stunned her. But she didn’t want to ask Vivio who it was just yet. For now, she would have to do the motherly thing and answer her daughter’s question.

“Yes,” She nodded a little reluctantly. “Yes, I have, actually.” She then sighed and looked a little reminiscent. “For a while, I did have a slight crush on Yuuno-kun when he was in his human form.” Nanoha then smiled. “But as my relationship with Fate grew, that’s all it ever was; a childhood crush.”

“Did Yuuno-san know this?” Vivio then asked her interest piqued.

Nanoha nodded again before looking at her daughter with an inquisitive look. “Just out of curiosity, why do you ask?”

Vivio got tense yet again and reluctantly answered her mother. “Well, there’s a new girl in school and she’s really pretty, she actually asked me out.” Vivio then looked a little downcast. “But, I love Syn so much that I don’t want to break her heart and I don’t want it to look like that…”

“That you’re cheating on her?” Nanoha asked with understanding in her voice receiving a nod as her answer. “Did you say that you were already with someone?”

Vivio shook her head. “No, she just said that I don’t have to say yes and that I don’t have to answer her right away.” Vivio then held her head in her hands. “I don’t know what to do. Besides Syn, no one has ever been open to me like that.”

Nanoha smiled at her and then she took Vivio in her arm and kissed her temple. “Just tell her that you’re already dating Syn and she’ll understand.”

“But I don’t want to break her heart either.” Vivio said, tears welling up at the corners of her eyes.

“You can still be friends with this girl.” Nanoha suggested. “If she’s lonely you and Syn can be her friends.” Vivio sniffled and looked at her. “Trust me, being friends with someone that likes you that way isn’t a bad thing.” She then wiped Vivio’s eyes. “Just being her friend can still make her happy, even if she doesn’t want that kind of relationship with you.”

“Really?”

Nanoha nodded and the two hugged one another.

“Thanks Mama.”

“You’re welcome Vivio.”

*applauds and whistles*

Better than mine.

[Rika23onROOF]

Originally Posted by synaesthetic

holyshitvampiresuzukatotallyinterestednow.

I really like how you wrote the same scene from before, just from Suzuka's perspective.

Not trying to be offensive or anything but your syntax and grammar needs some work. Perhaps you need someone to proof your work? I'd be willing, since I have copious amounts of free time. ^^;

do you really have the time synaesthetic-senpai? because i'm really not good with those things and I'm really afraid you'll find it annoying if you keep reading them. (T/////T)

but if you really don't mind helping me, then that'll be great(^///////^)

so how does this work? should I just keep posting it or something else?

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Naw. She's the one everyone's chasing. First Fate gets munched, then Yuuno, Hayate, the Wolkenritter, Chrono, Amy, their kids, the Numbers, the Forwards, Lutecia, and others.

All slowly coming in to chomp on her...

Then Nanoha wakes up to everyone crowding around her, looking at her with worry. She had fainted during a small party, and she was having a nightmare.

As Nanoha goes with the others to get a drink, we see Vivio look that the screen and grin evilly.

In the sequel Nanoha wakes up to find the zombie army is clamoring onto her lawn. She then employs the power of plants to get the zombies off her lawn.
Because we don't want zombies on our lawn.

but then they make peace and a music video

Spoiler for Zombies:

[Tempy]

I know that type; cool, dark and dead. Like Fate.

[TheShinySword]

She wants to bite all the hair off of Nanoha's head.

... that's not romantic Dx

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

In the sequel Nanoha wakes up to find the zombie army is clamoring onto her lawn. She then employs the power of plants to get the zombies off her lawn.
Because we don't want zombies on our lawn.

but then they make peace and a music video

Spoiler for Zombies:

CURSE YOU SHINY!!!!!!!!!!!

You beat me to it T_T I was going to do that after I got done eating >.<!!!!!!!

[SulliMike23]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

In the sequel Nanoha wakes up to find the zombie army is clamoring onto her lawn. She then employs the power of plants to get the zombies off her lawn.
Because we don't want zombies on our lawn.

but then they make peace and a music video

Spoiler for Zombies:

Oookaay...that was a little weird.

[Dark Knight Gafgar]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

She wants to bite all the hair off of Nanoha's head.

... that's not romantic Dx

Sure it is.

[Tempy]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

She wants to bite all the hair off of Nanoha's head.

... that's not romantic Dx

She likes the taste of brains but we don't like zombies.

Isn't it sad, Zombie Fate?

You used to be a Enforcer.

Barrier Jacket protected your head.

You used to have Bardiche.

You are the undead~!

(And then Nanoha was the zombies)