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Kiva128 · 2004-12-11, 17:06

Hey, remember me!

Well after months and months of working on it, I've finally finished the 1st chapter of my manga!!! So to those who've been waiting (and probably forgot about it. hehe), the wait is over!

Also, I've made a bunch of major changes since I last showed you guys. For example, I've made the page sizes identical to those of a standard inane-quality release. And the second one is, I went back and redid the 'fake comic tones' so they look MUCH better than the standard gray color I had before.

Well, enough talk, here's the url:

http://www.wholesaleautocentre.com/Kiva128Manga.zip

So anyones, I hope you guys like it. It's been a long journey for me considering I started way back last october.

Once again, thank you for your support!

I can't believe It's finally done!!! *parties like it's 1899*

EDIT: I've update the url. I would like to thank ptfff for very generously helping out and donating some bandwith. It's much better than the last one

Thanks man!

Animizzle · 2004-12-11, 17:16

Well, I have to say you did a fabulous job. The story went a bit past me at first read. But I can see you put a lot of work in it.

thumbs up laddie

Kiva128 · 2004-12-11, 17:18

Quote:

Originally Posted by Animizzle

Well, I have to say you did a fabulous job. The story went a bit past me at first read. But I can see you put a lot of work in it.

thumbs up laddie

Yeah, it's hard to develop a story in 23 pages which is why I want to continue it (because I think it's pretty cool).

Thanks for reading.

Kayess · 2004-12-11, 18:50

Is there a reason that the one ninja looks alot like Kakashi? Is there some sort of story significance to it.. or just how it is? I am just wondering.. it seems like a good start so far.. so keep it coming.

Skorpa · 2004-12-11, 18:54

nice work =) the story is pretty cool. liked the jutsu where the big stone pilar came up from the ground.

Kiva128 · 2004-12-11, 19:00

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kayess

Is there a reason that the one ninja looks alot like Kakashi? Is there some sort of story significance to it.. or just how it is? I am just wondering.. it seems like a good start so far.. so keep it coming.

Ah that's just how it is. It's really just the mask that gives him that kakashi look. The hair is similar but not too similar. Oh well, I thought he looked different enough.

Glad you guys liked it.

nh1 · 2004-12-11, 19:06

I don't know what to say about a main character who kills those who seem like good guys without flinching, is apparentely not human, is somewhat sharing body with a demon and fits somewhere into the Naruto story, which we somewhat can relate to. I really liked what you had made on your own (that which only took place in the Naruto universe and not the Naruto story) and I'm quite curious about next chapter.

Great work!

sOnJoOL · 2004-12-11, 19:15

wow.
this is my first reading of a doujin thats almost original.
if you want my humble thoughts go on to the spoiler

Spoiler:

o and one question, what equipment did u use to make this?
like tools. because i want to make one too.

Captain_Dope · 2004-12-11, 19:22

You did an incredible good job! How long did you spend doing it? I loved the earth spike technique. The only thing that I did not like was the size of the Stone village, it looked very very small, don't forget that the Rock country is one of the 5 most powerful villages. I can't wait to see the second chapter, any idea when we will see it?

Oh and I will give you some rep for this.

coash · 2004-12-11, 19:25

a download ticket wtf...

Kiva128 · 2004-12-11, 19:32

Quote:

Originally Posted by Captain_Dope

You did an incredible good job! How long did you spend doing it? I loved the earth spike technique. The only thing that I did not like was the size of the Stone village, it looked very very small, don't forget that the Rock country is one of the 5 most powerful villages. I can't wait to see the second chapter, any idea when we will see it?

Oh and I will give you some rep for this.

Ah right. I forgot to mention that this isn't the main rock village. It's just a town on the border between earth country and lightning country. My bad. ^_^;;

Quote:

a download ticket wtf...

Believe me, I'm not happy about it either. If you know of a better host, please tell me.

AkatsukisApprentice · 2004-12-11, 19:33

This is amazing, I wasn't expecting such a good quality work from you...you have really amazed me with the quality... kudos to you!!!

I will go through it in more detail later on (I just skimmed through it quickly because of a guest waiting for me), I have to go and tend to some guest right now. Though I was wondering did you make the read of the manga right to left (like japanese manga) or left to right?

Kiva128 · 2004-12-11, 19:41

Quote:

Originally Posted by AkatsukisApprentice

This is amazing, I wasn't expecting such a good quality work from you...you have really amazed me with the quality... kudos to you!!!

I will go through it in more detail later on (I just skimmed through it quickly because of a guest waiting for me), I have to go and tend to some guest right now. Though I was wondering did you make the read of the manga right to left (like japanese manga) or left to right?

Right to left, can't beat the japanese way. =]

London Stud · 2004-12-11, 19:54

great stuff!

whens the next chapter?

FireBorn · 2004-12-11, 19:55

Very nice! Kind of predictable, but it was still a great read.

Komataguri · 2004-12-11, 19:58

Rather nice. Nice indeed.

abazou · 2004-12-11, 20:04

Nice art, keep up the good work.

Prince of Chronics · 2004-12-11, 20:22

I just read this... not too bad at all... pretty good actually.... though I don't really like how that guy looks so much like Kakashi... but nevertheless, the art was solid and the jutsus were pretty cool.... keep up the good work!

socomberetta · 2004-12-11, 20:44

This is pretty good.

I like Hiro's demon counterpart. It reminds me of the alien in Alien, and for some strange reason, it reminds me a little of Picollo...Hopefully you'll have it face off against Naruto or Gaara in his fully transformed state.

The similarties between Hiro and Kakashi are a little disconcerting, but its not that big of a deal, since he's the Full Metal Shinobi. *rimshot*

ReggieM · 2004-12-11, 20:46

Nice work! I've been checking out some amateur comics on various websites lately and none of them have been as good as yours! I particularly liked the last splash page with Hiro/Demon. Very well done. You've inspired me to try my hand at manga/comics as well - something I've always wanted to do...

2004-12-11, 17:06	Link #1
Kiva128 Kairin-chan's #1 Fan Artist Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Canada	Thanks for your patience, everyone! I'm finally done! Hey, remember me! Well after months and months of working on it, I've finally finished the 1st chapter of my manga!!! So to those who've been waiting (and probably forgot about it. hehe), the wait is over! Also, I've made a bunch of major changes since I last showed you guys. For example, I've made the page sizes identical to those of a standard inane-quality release. And the second one is, I went back and redid the 'fake comic tones' so they look MUCH better than the standard gray color I had before. Well, enough talk, here's the url: http://www.wholesaleautocentre.com/Kiva128Manga.zip So anyones, I hope you guys like it. It's been a long journey for me considering I started way back last october. Once again, thank you for your support! I can't believe It's finally done!!! parties like it's 1899 EDIT: I've update the url. I would like to thank ptfff for very generously helping out and donating some bandwith. It's much better than the last one Thanks man! __________________ My New Site http://www.azuremidnight.com Summer Kairin Drawing! http://forums.animesuki.com/showthre...44#post3086844 Last edited by Kiva128; 2004-12-12 at 11:47.

2004-12-11, 17:16	Link #2
Animizzle Cool as a Cucumber Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Holland	Well, I have to say you did a fabulous job. The story went a bit past me at first read. But I can see you put a lot of work in it. thumbs up laddie __________________ hm....

2004-12-11, 19:06	Link #7
nh1 KAWAIII-III!!!! >^_^ > Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Magical land! (Magica-ru land!)	I don't know what to say about a main character who kills those who seem like good guys without flinching, is apparentely not human, is somewhat sharing body with a demon and fits somewhere into the Naruto story, which we somewhat can relate to. I really liked what you had made on your own (that which only took place in the Naruto universe and not the Naruto story) and I'm quite curious about next chapter. Great work! __________________

2004-12-11, 19:15	Link #8
sOnJoOL Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2004	wow. this is my first reading of a doujin thats almost original. if you want my humble thoughts go on to the spoiler Spoiler: First of all, great job. i dont know how much patience it took to complete it. i think the story is pretty cool, how it shows the stuff in another team's view. the only thing not so hot about it, is that the drawings could do better... but with the other good things supporting it, it gets looked over. ^^ anyway, nice job. o and one question, what equipment did u use to make this? like tools. because i want to make one too.

2004-12-11, 20:04	Link #17
abazou Uchiha Avenger Join Date: Apr 2004	Nice art, keep up the good work. __________________ http://abazou.deviantart.com/

2004-12-11, 18:50	Link #4
Kayess Guy From Canada Join Date: Jan 2004 Age: 38	Is there a reason that the one ninja looks alot like Kakashi? Is there some sort of story significance to it.. or just how it is? I am just wondering.. it seems like a good start so far.. so keep it coming.

2004-12-11, 18:54	Link #5
Skorpa Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Sweden	nice work =) the story is pretty cool. liked the jutsu where the big stone pilar came up from the ground.

2004-12-11, 19:22	Link #9
Captain_Dope Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Age: 40	You did an incredible good job! How long did you spend doing it? I loved the earth spike technique. The only thing that I did not like was the size of the Stone village, it looked very very small, don't forget that the Rock country is one of the 5 most powerful villages. I can't wait to see the second chapter, any idea when we will see it? Oh and I will give you some rep for this.

2004-12-11, 19:25	Link #10
coash Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2004	a download ticket wtf...

2004-12-11, 19:33	Link #12
AkatsukisApprentice Akatsuki's Apprentice Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: london, UK	This is amazing, I wasn't expecting such a good quality work from you...you have really amazed me with the quality... kudos to you!!! I will go through it in more detail later on (I just skimmed through it quickly because of a guest waiting for me), I have to go and tend to some guest right now. Though I was wondering did you make the read of the manga right to left (like japanese manga) or left to right?

2004-12-11, 19:54	Link #14
London Stud Junior Member Join Date: Sep 2004	great stuff! whens the next chapter?

2004-12-11, 19:55	Link #15
FireBorn Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2004	Very nice! Kind of predictable, but it was still a great read.

2004-12-11, 19:58	Link #16
Komataguri Reverend K-Rist Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: America's Wang. Age: 40	Rather nice. Nice indeed.

2004-12-11, 20:22	Link #18
Prince of Chronics One Piece fan Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Toronto, Canada	I just read this... not too bad at all... pretty good actually.... though I don't really like how that guy looks so much like Kakashi... but nevertheless, the art was solid and the jutsus were pretty cool.... keep up the good work! __________________ MyAnimeList page

2004-12-11, 20:44	Link #19
socomberetta Dreaming of you. Join Date: Mar 2004	This is pretty good. I like Hiro's demon counterpart. It reminds me of the alien in Alien, and for some strange reason, it reminds me a little of Picollo...Hopefully you'll have it face off against Naruto or Gaara in his fully transformed state. The similarties between Hiro and Kakashi are a little disconcerting, but its not that big of a deal, since he's the Full Metal Shinobi. rimshot

2004-12-11, 20:46	Link #20
ReggieM Junior Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Vancouver, BC, Canada	Nice work! I've been checking out some amateur comics on various websites lately and none of them have been as good as yours! I particularly liked the last splash page with Hiro/Demon. Very well done. You've inspired me to try my hand at manga/comics as well - something I've always wanted to do...