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Old 2011-05-30, 15:57   Link #30981
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I've got an idea for a Justice League Unlimited/Nanoha StrikerS crossover. Members of the Justice League and Enforcers from the Time-Space Administration Bureau both find an orphaned, homeless little girl with amazing magical potential. Both groups want to protect and care for the child, but the TSAB plan to encourage her adolescent enlistment into their government's military. The Justice League, upon finding out about this, decide to do whatever it takes to keep the girl out of the Bureau's hands, though the only thing the Enforcers who found girl know is that menacing, violent strangers just kidnapped someone they planned to protect and raise as a typical adolescent Mid-Childan magical prodigy. With strong writing skills and a firm grasp of the characters' personalities I imagine you could have some fascinating arguing and ruminating being done by the characters. What would Flash, a person who spends time working at an orphanage, have to say about Caro and Erio being allowed and encouraged to put themselves in dangerous situations? (Poor writing, obviously, would make the Bureau out to be baby-eating savages and nothing more complicated, but that's a problem with the execution, not the plot.) I don't see much trouble balancing the different sides' power levels. You can always give the weaker team more numbers to even things up if nothing better seems convincing. I can imagine a few ways the Justice League would find out about what the TSAB plan to do, though I didn't have any one scenario in mind when I put this idea down. Thoughts?
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Old 2011-05-30, 16:26   Link #30982
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The Nanoha cast would win so bad no matter what....
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Old 2011-05-30, 16:37   Link #30983
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Justice League has some overpowered dudes in it, though, not to mention they have ties to the Green Lantern Corp, essentially an interplanetary army.

Assuming this turns into something big like that, which doesn't seem likely given both sides have level-headed people.
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Old 2011-05-30, 16:43   Link #30984
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LOL this had me grinning ear to ear all the way through. Poor Vi - hey you know what? This is fluff territory but you still made your characters suffer

I did, however, do a double take when Vi was moping to Lutecia and Lu offered to help XD

All the best for the final exam!
Hahaha, well, it's me after all! I did want to try and approach the age-gap relationship in a different way, and the only idea that really struck at me was this one ^^. But I tried to keep it light-hearted enough so that hopefully it didn't get so serious that the crack pairing crumbled under the plot!

*Snicker* Well, ViCia is quite prominent on AS .

Thank you, but it didn't go terribly well . I probably should have spent more time studying instead of writing fanfic!

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Yes, you posted it!

I like how you approach the issue from the angle of the crush never being taken seriously; it's something new that I've never seen brought up before when it comes to couples with massive age differences between them, and it made poor Vivio much more sympathetic since she was pretty much the only one who knew she was serious about her feelings, even as a teenager.

I also very much like how it ends; you have enough small, subtle hints on Hayate's side to come to your own conclusion of how she feels, and it's so open-ended that it's easy to imagine for yourself what happened after the end.
The quick speed at which I was able to post was your doing . Saved me a lot of editing!

And the worst part is, even Vivio is afraid that her feelings aren't that serious, since everyone around her keeps telling her so.

Part of me was also chickening out of having to write a real resolution to it all , but yes, I wanted this piece to stand alone as Vivio's struggle over asserting her feelings, so it seemed like a good place to end.

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Unless you write a sequel, obviously.
I see what you're doing there!

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... dammit, DC, it's bad enough that I already have a cavity, are you trying to give me more?
LOL, oddly enough, I seem to do that to you often, eh? XD Despite my reputation for being a tragedy-writer! I'm glad that I seemed to have won over your sympathy for Vivio here!

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Awww, so very cute, and fluffy! Well, sort of fluffy, since Vivio is going through frustration and heartache the whole time, but it's leavened with humor so you don't start really feeling for her until nearly the end (actually, around the time she loses her temper). And as RB said, there's just enough hesitation on Hayate's part so that you can imagine she's aware of Vivio's feelings and...waiting to see.
The fluff part was the hardest to write . No, seriously . I wanted to keep it a little bit crack-y, but yet still get across deeper messages and all. (I even had to resort to "generating weird ideas while showering" method of coming up with things to say for the humourous moments--which is where the bacholerette auction came from ). I'm glad the slight mood shift at the end did show through ^^.

....I really must resist getting side-tracked from all my other stories .....but it's so hard to resist wanting to give poor Vivio some kind of resolution!

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I've got an idea for a Justice League Unlimited/Nanoha StrikerS crossover. Members of the Justice League and Enforcers from the Time-Space Administration Bureau both find an orphaned, homeless little girl with amazing magical potential. Both groups want to protect and care for the child, but the TSAB plan to encourage her adolescent enlistment into their government's military. The Justice League, upon finding out about this, decide to do whatever it takes to keep the girl out of the Bureau's hands, though the only thing the Enforcers who found girl know is that menacing, violent strangers just kidnapped someone they planned to protect and raise as a typical adolescent Mid-Childan magical prodigy. With strong writing skills and a firm grasp of the characters' personalities I imagine you could have some fascinating arguing and ruminating being done by the characters. What would Flash, a person who spends time working at an orphanage, have to say about Caro and Erio being allowed and encouraged to put themselves in dangerous situations? (Poor writing, obviously, would make the Bureau out to be baby-eating savages and nothing more complicated, but that's a problem with the execution, not the plot.) I don't see much trouble balancing the different sides' power levels. You can always give the weaker team more numbers to even things up if nothing better seems convincing. I can imagine a few ways the Justice League would find out about what the TSAB plan to do, though I didn't have any one scenario in mind when I put this idea down. Thoughts?
This does sound like an interesting idea--it's always intriguing to see stories of Good Versus Good. I imagine there would need to be something in the plot that pushes things along (say, citizenship issues, public opinion pressure, or the child's powers needing urgent instruction to keep under control, etc) to prevent things from petering out to a solution where both sides simply work together in the child's best interest, or take their time investigating the other organization and such. But it does sound like a neat conflict.
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Old 2011-05-30, 17:12   Link #30985
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So, talking to someone on AIM gave me a heck of a plot bunny.

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I have to wonder just how big a family Hayate wanted Such news is never easy regardless, but it's good to know she has a strong support system. Nice short
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Old 2011-05-30, 18:11   Link #30986
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Sometimes, you have to stop fiddling and just post. Although most of the delay is due to replaying Dragon Warrior/Quest games 1 thru 8, heh.

Future Tense
Chapter 36: Before I Sleep

In which Nanoha and her friends find freedom... or death.

Previous chapters can be found here.

Spoiler for Future Tense, Chapter 36: Before I Sleep:


Copious Author's Notes to follow in a separate post. Reminder for any comments to be please have spoiler tags.

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Old 2011-05-30, 18:18   Link #30987
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Old 2011-05-30, 18:44   Link #30988
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... better. Much better, after that total mindfuck you gave us in the last chapter.
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Old 2011-05-30, 18:51   Link #30989
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Edit: I just remembered something.

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Old 2011-05-30, 19:16   Link #30990
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I liked it.

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Old 2011-05-30, 19:42   Link #30991
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The end. No moral!

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Sometimes, you have to stop fiddling and just post. Although most of the delay is due to replaying Dragon Warrior/Quest games 1 thru 8, heh.

Future Tense
Chapter 36: Before I Sleep

In which Nanoha and her friends find freedom... or death.

Previous chapters can be found here.

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Copious Author's Notes to follow in a separate post. Reminder for any comments to be please have spoiler tags.
Last batch of corrections in quote.

Spoiler for spoiler:


Well, I do have a new chapter of Materials no Jikan ready but I guess I'll hold off on it since everyone will focus on this.
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Well, I do have a new chapter of Materials no Jikan ready but I guess I'll hold off on it since everyone will focus on this.
Materials no Jikan?! WHERE?!
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Materials no Jikan?! WHERE?!
On my hard drive =/
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You were supposed to.
Yes, and I obey!

You Never Lose By Loving is now posted on FF.net...so that I can post this companion piece here .

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Yes, and I obey!

You Never Lose By Loving is now posted on FF.net...so that I can post this companion piece here .

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Oh hey, there's that stabbing sensation of a twisting knife that was missing from Vivio's side.
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Thanks for the comments everyone!

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Old 2011-05-30, 23:34   Link #31000
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Oh hey, there's that stabbing sensation of a twisting knife that was missing from Vivio's side.
*Bursts out laughing*

Er, that might be an inappropriate response . But I did laugh . RD, you say the most awesome things sometimes ....

Hm, well, hopefully I wrote it right and left enough hints to show that it might not be as bad for poor Vivio as it might sound?
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