Deathrip's Light Novel Project: Magic Maelstorm x Trinity + Artworks
So for a while I had been thinking about drawing and writing a light novel and since three months ago I started drawing and thinking of a Light novel I would love to write. This is what came from it. I have yet to think of a name tho
Magic Maelstorm x Trinity
Synopsis
Since Miga was born in the Teru Family he has been familiar with magic since he was born. The Teru Family is the family who had revealed the magic "Trinity Forming Magic" after long researching. Trinity Forming is a kind of magic which is so strong that it requires three people to bond together to create a 'Trinity'. Since the reveal of Trinity Forming 20 years ago every school started only teaching Trinity Forming. It includes individual learning as well. Now Miga is 15 years old, he decides to enter Horo Academy, the leading Trinity Forming teaching high school, together with his friend Kagari. What he doesn't know is that this school has a secret which shouldn't be kept a secret. A dark secret which could erase all the magic off this world. If that isn't bad enough the world isn't in it's most peaceful state either. This is the story of a Trinity leader.
Spoiler for Chapter 1:
Chapter 1
11:10 AM 21 Februari 2045
'Miga where are you going?' asked Mayumi.
'I'm off to the school's entrance exam' .
'Ohhh! Who are your partners?'. Mayumi was clearly excited about her brother deciding to take the entrance exam. The reason is because her brother usually does everything
by himself. That doesn't mean he has no friends, else this entrance would've been impossible. Reason being is that the exam is taken in groups of three people chosen by one self.
'Kagari will be the one taking the male spot and the female spot will be determined on the Valiant Side.' said Miga while he was tying his shoelaces.
'Valiant Side huh... was brother not able to find a girlfriend to join his Trinity?' said Megumi with a teasing smile. Miga decided to play a bit with his little sister. 'Oh it's not that I didn't find a girlfriend to join the Trinity, but it's just that my girlfriend is... How do I say it without being unfaithful to her?' Miga knew all too well how his little sister would react to what he said. He has known her for twelve years already so it wouldn't be a surprise.
'Y-y-you do have a girlfriend!?!' As expected shes faltering out of surprise.
'Ah yes but she's not joining the Trinity because she wouldn't stand a chance. I still love her tho! That's all I'm gonna tell you. I'm going now.' Miga put on a smile and walked out of the house, ignoring what his little sister would say.
'Telecast Horo Academy.' Five seconds is all it took and Miga's vision blurred for a few seconds. First thing he saw was "Welcome to Horo Academy". The entrance was really empty for a high school with capacity for 1000 students. It can't be helped because all the students are probably gathered at the Valiant Side, the arena where the entrance exams are gonna be kept, trying to see how everyone skill is like. While Miga was drown in his thoughts he heard four small explosions behind him;the sound of Telecasting.
'We're finally here!' said an unknown girl voice. As Miga turned around he saw four girls. If he had to describe them the word beautiful would've been enough, except for one girl which stood out to him. Three of them had the same outfit, which exists of a lavender colored blouse with flower-like trimming on the lower end and the neck and arm area. They also wore a lavender colored skirt with the same trimming which covered their thighs and an emblem around the left thigh . It seems they already designed an emblem for their Trinity; a rose with an arrow through it in the way a cupid heart would look like with an arrow through it. The girl which stood out wore all day clothes just like Miga. As they walked pass him he was looking at that girl the whole time, wondering why she is with the other three. A Trinity exists out of three people after all. He got his answer when her back was turned against him; a blue fire in the form of a triangle came from her left hand which was placed behind her back. The meaning of that? Trinity Watcher.
11:30 AM 21 Februari 2045
After waiting another five minutes Miga heard another explosion sound beside him.
'Yo~ Sorry I'm late , my brother~' said no one other than Kagari.
'I'm not your brother, I'm your boss.' Miga tried hard to keep his pokerface when he saw Kagari looking as if he's retard. When one just finished Telecasting, one doesn't instantly gain back his senses.
'Boss my ass' said Kagari with a small bit of anger in his voice as he regained his senses. They kept a staring contest for ten seconds before both bursted into laughter. 'Long time no see Kagari. In two days and three hours it would've been exactly one year since I last spoke to you.'
'Exact as always aren't we?' Kagari showed a smile.
'Well talks aside, let's get to Valiant Side. I've already seen one candidate.' Miga's expression basically said 'cute girl!' so Kagari didn't ask further.
When they stood in front of the Valiant Side they saw nothing but an empty field.
'Active Force Camouflage it seems?' asked Kagari. He was almost sure of it because there wouldn't be another spell which could cover a whole arena of 1000m by 1000m. Miga nodded while looking around. The arena was completely surrounded by the Horo Forest. Suddenly they heard footsteps from their right, which would be the direction of Horo Academy. It seems to be the teacher in charge of the Valiant Side.
'Welcome you two. I assume you two want to enter into the Valiant Side? If you want to you must first defeat me hahaha~' As both the Kagari and Miga kept quiet the teacher became serious.
'Ahem, that of course wasn't a serious prerequisite to enter. The only thing you need to do is pass me your names, nationality and Trinity name and what gender Watcher you're looking for.The last is to confirm if we have enough Watchers. If you already have an emblem then that should be included as well, but I assume you don't because having an emblem before having a complete team could be a problem. Reason being should already be known by you two, right?'
'Yes we know. My name is Miga Arita Teru. My little friend's name here is Kagari Hogu.' Even tho Miga said little, Kagari is actually as tall as Miga. Since this is a serious matter Kagari didn't mind it.
'We have yet to decide on a Trinity name. We value the name of the Trinity just as much as the emblem thus why we don't want to decide the name without our third member. That should be fine right, teacher?' As Miga said that the teacher was thinking a bit.
'Yeah that's fine. You guys are actually the first of many being considerate towards your third member even tho you won't know that person until very soon. I appreciate that.' The teacher showed a small smile.
'Then next our nationality and needed gender. I'm born and raised in Korea but my parents are Japanese. Kagari is also born in Korea but on the age of seven his parents decided to go to Japan to work. We're looking for a female Watcher.' Miga is quite good at handling serious talk like this. He grew up while always needing to make these kind of talks. The teacher nodded.
'The administrations are finished. If there is a problem feel free to summon me. My name is Atella Schwarz. All information will be told before the start of the Valiant. Walk through the gate and you will be able to see the Valiant Side and everyone in it. I wish you two the best of luck finding your Watcher.' The teacher slowly vanished after saying that. The effect of an illusion by the teacher it seems.
'Lets go in and see who will step up to us?' Kagari was clearly excited to get into the Valiant Side. Miga couldn't suppress his excitement either and agreed.
12:15 PM 21 Februari 2045
'So many people...' Kagari forgot to close his mouth.
'It is a school with a much bigger capacity compared to other schools after all. Yet is it still the most prestigious school in Asia when it comes to Tri-forming.' Doesn't seem like Kagari was listening.
'So many pretty girlsss~' Kagari's eyes were forming hearts. Miga sighed while looking for the girl he saw earlier. Miga always had a good eye for skill. That's how he met Kagari as well when he was a kid. He couldn't find the girl he is looking for so he decided to go to the explanation area dragging Kagari with him, literally. The explanation about Valiant Side should be starting soon. This information should be known to most people here but perhaps there are some new rules added since last year. Also the entrance exam should be starting in a few hours. While thinking that, he was still looking for the girl he saw earlier but it was really to crowded to see far. After waiting a minute they heard a voice. The source was unknown so it would be safe to assume this is done by Voice Dispersion, a spell to make ones voice heard over a wide area.
'Welcome to Horo's Academy Valiant Side. This is the Student Council President speaking. Normally this explanation would be told by the Principal but there is some business he had to handle. My name is Caitlin Johnson. I hereby start the explanation of the Valiant Side.' Hearing the voice of the student council president and the way she spoke made Miga think that she is a strict person.
'The Valiant Side is the scouting place for a third member of a Trinity. The people who are looking for a Trinity are called Watchers. They all have proven them self individually through tests and other prerequisites to be a Watcher just like how every incomplete Trinity here has proven them selves through tests as well. Watchers are people who didn't manage to join a Trinity due to the Trinities they were interested in, were already full. So how does scouting work?'
The teams look for their third member of course. The last few years it always had been like that. Miga's thoughts were proven wrong.
'The Watcher chooses their team.' The people got a bit noisy. What!?! Kagari ,who had recovered, made eye contact with Miga.
'Just listen to what else she'll say' is what Miga said through their eye contact.
'Reason for this change is because the results from the Watchers were substantially better than the incomplete Trinities. This isn't because the Trinity teams from this year are worse, the Watchers from this year are just stronger than the Watchers from the last few years. By making this change we expect better made Trinities due to Watchers having better Observation skills than the Trinity team them selves for this year. If you have complains about this feel free to talk to the Principal.' The commotion stopped the moment she said the last sentence. Horo's principal is known for being unreasonable. Combine that with being the strongest individual of Horo. Not the best combination one could hope for. Even Kagari understood why everyone went quiet.
'Watchers can either straight up choose one team or two which will be set up for a 2 versus 2 match. Winner will get the Watcher as team mate. Of course if one of the teams do not agree to do a 2 versus 2 match they are allowed to, but they instantly forfeit that Watcher. A team can also deny a Watcher, but I will also warn you: there are not enough female Watchers for every incomplete team here. The scouting will start in twenty minutes so make sure to get to your designated space before the scouting starts; Every team will have a number appear above them when I'm finished speaking. The number indicates which field you'll be on. You're free to do anything you want to impress the Watchers. there are 74 incomplete Trinities here so everyone has about 13 by 13 meters for their team. Fighting other Trinities for any another reason other than competing for a Watcher is prohibited. If one still decides to do so, they will be punished by taking their qualification to take the entrance exam and will be kicked out of the Valiant Side. Of course if one is attacked they're allowed to defend them selves. We have enough teachers watching over the field to see who the offender is if a battle breaks out. That's all, good luck and I hope to see some strong first year Trinities.'
So it's about to begin. Even tho Miga and Kagari's plan had to be changed due to them not being the one selecting their third member, they were very excited.
12:50 PM 21 Februari 2045
The number that appeared in front of them is the number 37.
'We couldn't have gotten a better spot eh? We're exactly in the middle.' Kagari said that while him and Miga were walking to their designated field.
'It certainly is a good spot to be scouted as everyone can see what we're capable of,but I have no intentions to show my abilities this early. Only thing I'll be doing is create a fire in the form of a circle.' Miga said that with a complicated expression. A fire in the form of a circle means that they're looking for a female Watcher. What Miga didn't know is that it was actually totally unnesassary to do so.
'Still haven't gotten over what happened in elementary school it seems. Don't worry about it. I'll do the fighting if some cruel Watcher sets us up against another Trinity.' Kagari was full of confidence when he said that. To the right of their field, which would be field number 36, Miga saw two girls arriving. The instant they stepped within their field boundaries they instantly created a castle of ice big enough to be seen over the whole Valiant Side. Seems like they exactly covered their whole own field. They sat on top of that castle to see what other people were gonna do. Only thing Miga could do was feel complicated as they created something that big beside the field he was on.
'We have to do something right right?' Kagari felt as if his pride would've been hurt if he didn't.
'No we don't. We know what we're looking for and that person doesn't need to know what we're capable of. We need a girl who isn't a power hungry person and can actually match us' When Miga said that he suddenly heard a voice which indicated anger.
'So are you saying we are power hungry girls !?' The girl screamed that from above her castle.
'I'll go talk to her. Kagari if you want, go say hi to field 35. Seems like they arrived as well. It never is a bad idea to know more people. Oh and isn't that girl your type?' Kagari looked over to field 35 and saw two girls as well. One looked around with no certain emotion while the other was looking his way. Kagari thought she was looking at him but in reality she was actually looking at the ice castle. She has beautiful eyes is what Kagari thought.
'Oh yes she is.' And he walked towards them.
'Hey you! Are you gonna react or not?' said the girl irritated. The moment Miga confirmed that nobody was looking other than the girl he instantly appeared in front of her.
'W-What? H-how? No cast time Telecast?' She looked clearly shocked. Her friend looked relative amused as she sat down and leaned on her hand. As Miga doesn't like other digging into what he is capable he tried changing the objective.
'Also good morning to you, beautiful lady.' Now Miga is closer to the girls he saw that they were also looking for a female Watcher due to the circle being burned into the ice behind the girls. Just like the girls he saw when he just came to Horo Academy they were beauties as well. Their clothing could be described as Goth but it looked more gentle than usual what goth clothes look like.The one looking amused had purple hair and the one speaking has pink hair color.
'Looking for a girl member eh? Does she also need to be a show off like you two?' Miga decided to take the mocking tone.
'We ain't show offs! We just want to show the Watchers and everybody else what were capable of!' The girl put on a long mouth. The other girl was still observing with an interested face. Miga decided to drop the mock attitude and went back to how he normally is;calm.
'I think you just described what a show off is,but if you say you aren't then let us go with that. I apologize for my rudeness.' Miga showed an innocent smile.
'I'm Miga Arita Teru. Just call me Miga.' The girl her eye brow twitched.
'Don't you think that you can get off that easily after calling me a show off!’ What an interesting fellow.
'Then what would you make me do? Please be gentle with your punishment.' Miga kept his smile. The girl her eye brow twitched again.
'I-I L-Let you go this time. Just don't call me a show off again.' Miga smiled and nodded. The girl in the back stood up and walked up to Miga as she concluded that the conversation was over.
'So now you have this ice castle beside your field, what are you planning on doing? That technique you used just now wasn't Telecast was it? Telecast requires one to connect to the Link which is spread over the whole world. Through the Link you choose your designated spot and you'll get transported there. The spell Telecast is actually pretty misleading. One would think Tele means Teleport but it actually stays for Tegry Levio which means Location Chosen in Trinity magic language. That spell of yours shou...'
'Don't say it.' There was a bit of angerness to be heard in Miga's voice.
'Then I won't. Your name was Miga wasn't it? Seems like you'll be one of the more interesting first years of Horo. I'm called Jasmin Chang and this tsundere girl is called Anna Chang.'
'I'm not tsundere!' Seems like Jasmin would be the sister and Anna would be the little sister. Jasmin seems more like the mature one.
'Nice to meet you Jasmin, Anna. You were asking what I was planning on doing now you've put on such castle. I don't plan on doing anything at all. You see, the Watcher were looking for doesn't require to know what were capable of. What were looking for is a person which can observe without the need to have everything put in front of her nose to notice. If you, Jasmin were a Watcher, you would definitely be one to be considered if you stepped up to me and my friend.' Seeing how Jasmin probably knew what skill he used to close up to Anna, she must be one hell of a person. The skill he used is a skill taught only to those who mastered light dividing and gravity control, which includes only members of the Teru Family. The skill name is called "Light Falter". One does not know what happened if that person had not known about it before. The Teru family isn't very keen either on letting other people know how this skill works either. This skill is a skill which can only be used when there is a direct light source. In this case it was the sun. When light falls on an object, directly or indirectly, the mind converts that into an image. In short that's how perception works as of now. When Light Falter is casted the light which would normally fall on the caster will be totally blocked from a 360 angle, or else the illusion part won't work. After that the caster needs to control the gravity on the way to the designated place so that he can get there with the speed of light, literally. Flying isn't quite possible yet after all. After that the caster releases the spell and light will fall on the caster again, making it look like teleporting.
'Quite the smooth talker aren't we, Miga?' Even tho Jasmin said that she still put up an honest smile.
'Just telling the truth.' Miga smiled back. As Anna was listening she starting to feel more and more shut out.
'Don't you dare to steal my sister from me.' While saying that the grumpy Anna moved towards the ice throne she had made.
'I won't dare.' Even tho Miga said that, he couldn't help but feel that Jasmin definitely is an attractive girl.
'That being said,I will have to excuse my self and get my team mate back on track, the scout is starting soon after all. He most likely is trying his best to hit on girls.' Looking towards field 35 it definitely looks as if he is in a full conversation.
'Ara~ and aren't you?' Jasmin showed a teasing face.
'No I am not. It was your little sister who called out to me after all.'
'Well that's true.' Miga showed a smile towards Jasmin for the last time and said goodbye to the sisters. When Miga left the tower Anna asked Jasmin with a complicated emotion
'Hey sis. You seem interested in that person, in a romantic way. Am I wrong?' Jasmin slightly blushed.
'Well he sure has the looks and he is a person who is stronger than me. A girl needs a person she feels she will be protected by, you know. But I haven't fallen that deep in love with him yet that i'll leave you for his Trinity, so please don't look at me with such face. You know I can't help but feel guilty when I see my little sister like this.' That seems to have hit the spot because Anna cheered up after that. But even then Jasmin was amazed by the fact that Miga was able to perform "Light Falter" to such perfection. She was already amazed that her Elementary School Trinity partner was able to pull off one which wasn't even close to perfect but still did the job. But that member isn't there anymore. He was Jasmin best friend and one could almost say they were in a unofficial relationship. But that person isn't there anymore. That person died. That person was killed. A tear rolled over Jasmins beautiful face. It's a good thing Anna didn't see that or else she would've have to make up an excuse. She doesn't like lying to her sister. She sure did miss him. The person named Kogami Teru.
Spoiler for Chapter 2:
Chapter 2 1:12 PM 21 Februari 2045
As Miga descended from the ice castle he moved to field 35. Kagari seemed to have befriended the two girls he was talking to.
’Sorry to disturb you guys buy we need to get ready soon. Kagari, three minutes until scouting starts. Don’t be late.’
‘Yes sir~’ As Miga moved back to field 36 he made a blue fire in the form of a circle and lied down on the grass. There are no clouds and it’s sunny so there couldn’t be a better day than today to have the entrance exam going is what Miga thought.
‘Kagari, how come you guys aren’t doing anything to try to attract Watchers? If you look around you see all kinds of creations: Lightning shower on field 34, Gravity control on field 21 which is in front of us and behind us, which is field 47, Crater creation. And next to your field you have an ice castle which doesn’t seem to be overtaken any time soon by the other attempts on creating anything bigger.’ The girl, named Vi Lui (pronounced as Lou-we), who showed no emotion at first is now confused as she is talking to Kagari.
‘You know there aren’t enough female Watchers and yet you are doing nothing to prove that you are special compared to others.’
‘Then don’t you think doing nothing makes us special already?’ said Kagari as a joke.
‘…’
‘Well, it isn’t quite the special she means. No one will scout you if you don’t do anything.’ Said Minh Lui with a worried tone.
‘Don’t worry about it. We came here prepared to not enter the Academy this year. You see my friend over there? He’s quite the monster even though you wouldn’t say so. I won’t tell you more because he might not like it. It’s time to say good bye for now and perhaps you’ll see us in the Academy. Good luck on finding the right male Watcher. They didn’t say that there weren’t enough male Watchers so take your time and choose carefully. Trinity spells have different kind of types with each gender combination type after all.’
‘Yup we know that. Else we wouldn’t be looking for a male would we? You also good luck with finding the right Watcher.’ Said Minh as she started to chant something together with her sister.
‘Thanks.’ And Kagari went back to field 36.
‘What do you think Vi?’ ‘I don’t know. Let’s watch them when we found our Watcher. They shouldn’t get one earlier then us.’
‘Agreed.’ Their field turned into void except where they were sitting. 1:15 PM Februari 21 2045
When Kagari moved back to his field he didn’t say anything to Miga because the moment he came close to Miga he heard weird noises from all around him. It seems like Miga heard it as well because he sat up the moment it started.
‘Scouting has started it seems. Actually I’m not certain how this will pan out. In the previous years it always was the Trinity who chooses the Watcher. They would’ve just fought it out in a tournament with brackets and that way they determined who chooses first.’
‘Then Miga, do you think they’ll let the Watchers fight it out? That would be interesting to see on it own.’
‘Maybe.’
As they were speculating the noise suddenly turned into dead silence and a man voice could be heard.
‘Students I hereby welcome you to Horo Academy. I believe the Student council president has explained why I was not present on the explanation.’
‘No she didn’t.’ Whispered Kagari in a voice only Miga could hear.
‘This year has a special occasion which also happened for the very first time a decade ago: The Watchers have gotten a better score than the Trinity teams, meaning the Watchers this year are extraordinary. So how will we decide on pick order? We’ll be using the exact same system we decided on 10 years ago: We’ll be going from the highest test score to the lowest. Trinity team tests are different from Watchers. The Watchers had their own test which they’re not allowed to speak of so don’t make it hard for them and don’t ask them. Teams which have a Watcher choosing them or are set up in a 2 versus 2 and wins can then test the Watcher and see if the Watcher fits their Trinity. After that it’s up to the Trinity leader to decide if they accept that Watcher. Once accepted one cannot make a change anymore so decide well. Then I will now announce the first Watcher. Her name is Sakira Rin, with a perfect score on her test she will be the first one.’
What then happened was a surprise to everyone. It seems like the Watchers will choose their teams with a view from above. In the sky appeared an image of a person big enough for everyone to see.
‘O harro everyone! I am Sakira Rin and I’ll be choosing one of you lucky girl Trinities to have me in it.’
Seems like this is how introductions will be going. That said this girl sure is a happy fellow for a number one. Miga lied down again to make it easier to look up. After Sakira said that they heard the sound of someone Telecasting in their proximity.
‘Hii~. You guys ain’t doing anything?’ Seems like Sakira had chosen to appear in front of field 36. That aside, Sakira was wearing a long black professor looking jacket. She also wore glasses of which the glasses covered a big part of her face. She doesn’t quite look as good as Jasmin but she has her own charms as well thought Miga.
‘Nope, were not’ was Miga’s answer. There was a deadly silence after that for about ten seconds. He felt the gaze of the people around him.
‘Then I made my choice. I want to either join your team or the two girls on the ice castle. Will you accept the 2 versus 2 battle?’ ‘We agree!’ said Anna while looking down. Is she able to see our ability or is she simply trying to see what we can do? Miga wasn’t quite sure.
‘We disagr...’
‘Agreed!’ said Kagari while looking at Miga. I guess I can let him have some fun thought Miga.
‘Oh the first battle has been confirmed!’
‘This should be interesting.’ All kind of conversations were starting on the field due to this battle. Seems like that changed the atmosphere in the Valiant Side.
Anna and Jasmin melted their ice castle and used the water to ‘surf’ to Miga and Kagari. A teacher also appeared next to them. It seems to be Atella.
‘Shall we commence the battle?’
‘No wait a moment.’ Surprisingly this was said by Jasmin.
‘Teacher, are we allowed to have any other battle than 2 versus 2?’ Atella frowned a bit by that question but regained his composure.
‘You are as long both members are involved.’ That made Jasmin think a bit
‘Then is it fine if one has the support role and the other one fights? The supporter can’t attack directly. Basically we’re taking the idea of the Guard Style 3 versus 3 Trinity battles but use it in a 2 versus 2.’ As Jasmin asked that the teacher frowned again.
‘I’m surprised that you actually know about that before getting into the school. Permission to grant this request, Principal?’
‘Granted.’ That was answered through Voice Dispersion.
‘I shall now then explain Guard Style battles. As previous mentioned one of both Trinities has to stay behind and one will be the attacker. The support is not allowed to move in any circumstances, even when a blow is to be received. We’re positive you’re able to defend yourselves since both teams have passed the Trinity exams for two. What you are allowed to do as support is to increase your teammate attacks or use magic to defend your team mate. An attacker can do whatever pleases him or her. The moment an attack hits a support then that team has lost. The attack must at least create a bruise or else it’s not counted as an attack but as a feint. The field we’ll be using will be your fields since it’s next to each other. Normally we would use the Dimensiona Coliseum but that is for 3 versus 3 and is too big for a 2 versus 2. Questions?’ Everyone shook their head except Kagari.
‘What if the attack is deadly?’ Anna flinched from hearing that but she didn’t say anything.
‘I’m here to prevent any serious damage attacks. You’re free to use deadly attacks but any attacks I deem will hit shall be intercepted through whatever means is necessary. We don’t want deaths do we?’ This time everyone did shake their head.
‘Alright we’re starting in two minutes. You now have time to discuss your plan. I will create a sound proof wall around each field for the next two minutes. Begin.’ A transparent wall covered every corner of field 37 and field 38.
As soon Kagari confirmed that it was sound prove he started talking.
‘Miga, how come that girl was covering for you?’ A suspicious yet teasing emotion appeared on Kagari’s face.
‘What do you mean?’
‘Well, it’s obvious that you would not want a 2 versus 2.’
‘I think you’re making a mistake by saying that. If the 2 versus 2 did happen then you would be the one in trouble since you’ll be fighting two. I’ll just sit back and defend in that case.’ What Miga said wasn’t meant as a joke. Kagari also understood that.
‘I guess you have a point. Yet I still wonder what you did to those girls that they actually chose a disadvantageous situation. Did you seduce them by any means?’
‘Nope. And it’s not that much of a setback they put on themselves. They just can’t use their combos but I can assure you that girl you probably be facing won’t be an easy opponent’ Miga pointed at Jasmin.
‘Don’t worry I’ll beat her and get us that Watcher.’ That confidence will be your doom sooner or later. So far it hasn't so I guess I should be happy with that. Miga was in his thoughts for a moment so Kagari continued speaking.
‘It also goes without saying that I’ll be the attacker and you’ll be support. Support as much as you want to but I probably won’t need it.’ Kagari raised a thumb while having a confident smile.
‘We’ll go with that.’ As they had about thirty seconds left Kagari closed his eyes. This is to keep his thoughts together. As much as Kagari seems like a playful person when serious mode is needed, serious mode will be there. As time passed Kagari opened his eyes exactly at a second before the teacher started speaking.
‘Position yourself on your own field. Support behind and attacker in front. The Countdown timer will appear in front of you when you’re in position.’
‘As expected’ is what both Jasmin and Miga thought. Jasmin was on attacker position and Miga was on support position.
The countdown started from 10.
The Valiant Side was completely silent with eyes either on the field or in the air because the fight was show through Vison Enlightment, the same technique used to display Sakira’s face, probably.
As the countdown timer hit 5 seconds Kagari made four swords appear.
Two were floating while he kept two in his hand.
As Jasmin and Anna saw that they also summoned their weapon, an ice battle rod.
These weren’t ordinary weapons. T
hey define the fight style of a person and are the tools used to strengthen one magic.
Jasmin looked at Miga and saw that he had nothing equipped which didn’t surprise her.
The Teru family members are all like that anyways.
She couldn’t help but sigh. The count hit 1.
‘Miga don’t lose on purpose please.’
‘I won’t. I can defend without my weapon, you know.’ Kagari took his battle stance.
The count hit zero.
The fight began.
All constructive criticism is welcome by PM or writen in this thread. I shall update this thread regulary and when I feel like my art is good enough I shall add illustrations. For now please enjoy the story of Miga's Trinity ^_^.
As I reread my first chapter a bit I found some grammatical mistakes which I should have found the first time I reread it. I guess trying to look for mistakes at 3 am isn't a good idea but I just wanted to get my story started ^_^. If there are still grammatical mistakes made please PM me about it. I want to keep this thread as clean as possible.
Chapter 2 is out. Does anyone feel like there is something off in these last 2 chapters?
Spoiler for chapter 2:
Chapter 2
1:12 PM 21 Februari 2045
As Miga descended from the ice castle he moved to field 35. Kagari seemed to have befriended the two girls he was talking to.
’Sorry to disturb you guys buy we need to get ready soon. Kagari, three minutes until scouting starts. Don’t be late.’
‘Yes sir~’ As Miga moved back to field 36 he made a blue fire in the form of a circle and lied down on the grass. There are no clouds and it’s sunny so there couldn’t be a better day than today to have the entrance exam going is what Miga thought.
‘Kagari, how come you guys aren’t doing anything to try to attract Watchers? If you look around you see all kinds of creations: Lightning shower on field 34, Gravity control on field 21 which is in front of us and behind us, which is field 47, Crater creation. And next to your field you have an ice castle which doesn’t seem to be overtaken any time soon by the other attempts on creating anything bigger.’ The girl, named Vi Lui (pronounced as Lou-we), who showed no emotion at first is now confused as she is talking to Kagari.
‘You know there aren’t enough female Watchers and yet you are doing nothing to prove that you are special compared to others.’
‘Then don’t you think doing nothing makes us special already?’ said Kagari as a joke.
‘…’
‘Well, it isn’t quite the special she means. No one will scout you if you don’t do anything.’ Said Minh Lui with a worried tone.
‘Don’t worry about it. We came here prepared to not enter the Academy this year. You see my friend over there? He’s quite the monster even though you wouldn’t say so. I won’t tell you more because he might not like it. It’s time to say good bye for now and perhaps you’ll see us in the Academy. Good luck on finding the right male Watcher. They didn’t say that there weren’t enough male Watchers so take your time and choose carefully. Trinity spells have different kind of types with each gender combination type after all.’
‘Yup we know that. Else we wouldn’t be looking for a male would we? You also good luck with finding the right Watcher.’ Said Minh as she started to chant something together with her sister.
‘Thanks.’ And Kagari went back to field 36.
‘What do you think Vi?’ ‘I don’t know. Let’s watch them when we found our Watcher. They shouldn’t get one earlier then us.’
‘Agreed.’ Their field turned into void except where they were sitting.
1:15 PM Februari 21 2045
When Kagari moved back to his field he didn’t say anything to Miga because the moment he came close to Miga he heard weird noises from all around him. It seems like Miga heard it as well because he sat up the moment it started.
‘Scouting has started it seems. Actually I’m not certain how this will pan out. In the previous years it always was the Trinity who chooses the Watcher. They would’ve just fought it out in a tournament with brackets and that way they determined who chooses first.’
‘Then Miga, do you think they’ll let the Watchers fight it out? That would be interesting to see on it own.’
‘Maybe.’
As they were speculating the noise suddenly turned into dead silence and a man voice could be heard.
‘Students I hereby welcome you to Horo Academy. I believe the Student council president has explained why I was not present on the explanation.’
‘No she didn’t.’ Whispered Kagari in a voice only Miga could hear.
‘This year has a special occasion which also happened for the very first time a decade ago: The Watchers have gotten a better score than the Trinity teams, meaning the Watchers this year are extraordinary. So how will we decide on pick order? We’ll be using the exact same system we decided on 10 years ago: We’ll be going from the highest test score to the lowest. Trinity team tests are different from Watchers. The Watchers had their own test which they’re not allowed to speak of so don’t make it hard for them and don’t ask them. Teams which have a Watcher choosing them or are set up in a 2 versus 2 and wins can then test the Watcher and see if the Watcher fits their Trinity. After that it’s up to the Trinity leader to decide if they accept that Watcher. Once accepted one cannot make a change anymore so decide well. Then I will now announce the first Watcher. Her name is Sakira Rin, with a perfect score on her test she will be the first one.’
What then happened was a surprise to everyone. It seems like the Watchers will choose their teams with a view from above. In the sky appeared an image of a person big enough for everyone to see.
‘O harro everyone! I am Sakira Rin and I’ll be choosing one of you lucky girl Trinities to have me in it.’
Seems like this is how introductions will be going. That said this girl sure is a happy fellow for a number one. Miga lied down again to make it easier to look up. After Sakira said that they heard the sound of someone Telecasting in their proximity.
‘Hii~. You guys ain’t doing anything?’ Seems like Sakira had chosen to appear in front of field 36. That aside, Sakira was wearing a long black professor looking jacket. She also wore glasses of which the glasses covered a big part of her face. She doesn’t quite look as good as Jasmin but she has her own charms as well thought Miga.
‘Nope, were not’ was Miga’s answer. There was a deadly silence after that for about ten seconds. He felt the gaze of the people around him.
‘Then I made my choice. I want to either join your team or the two girls on the ice castle. Will you accept the 2 versus 2 battle?’ ‘We agree!’ said Anna while looking down. Is she able to see our ability or is she simply trying to see what we can do? Miga wasn’t quite sure.
‘We disagr...’
‘Agreed!’ said Kagari while looking at Miga. I guess I can let him have some fun thought Miga.
‘Oh the first battle has been confirmed!’
‘This should be interesting.’ All kind of conversations were starting on the field due to this battle. Seems like that changed the atmosphere in the Valiant Side.
Anna and Jasmin melted their ice castle and used the water to ‘surf’ to Miga and Kagari. A teacher also appeared next to them. It seems to be Atella.
‘Shall we commence the battle?’
‘No wait a moment.’ Surprisingly this was said by Jasmin.
‘Teacher, are we allowed to have any other battle than 2 versus 2?’ Atella frowned a bit by that question but regained his composure.
‘You are as long both members are involved.’ That made Jasmin think a bit
‘Then is it fine if one has the support role and the other one fights? The supporter can’t attack directly. Basically we’re taking the idea of the Guard Style 3 versus 3 Trinity battles but use it in a 2 versus 2.’ As Jasmin asked that the teacher frowned again.
‘I’m surprised that you actually know about that before getting into the school. Permission to grant this request, Principal?’
‘Granted.’ That was answered through Voice Dispersion.
‘I shall now then explain Guard Style battles. As previous mentioned one of both Trinities has to stay behind and one will be the attacker. The support is not allowed to move in any circumstances, even when a blow is to be received. We’re positive you’re able to defend yourselves since both teams have passed the Trinity exams for two. What you are allowed to do as support is to increase your teammate attacks or use magic to defend your team mate. An attacker can do whatever pleases him or her. The moment an attack hits a support then that team has lost. The attack must at least create a bruise or else it’s not counted as an attack but as a feint. The field we’ll be using will be your fields since it’s next to each other. Normally we would use the Dimensiona Coliseum but that is for 3 versus 3 and is too big for a 2 versus 2. Questions?’ Everyone shook their head except Kagari.
‘What if the attack is deadly?’ Anna flinched from hearing that but she didn’t say anything.
‘I’m here to prevent any serious damage attacks. You’re free to use deadly attacks but any attacks I deem will hit shall be intercepted through whatever means is necessary. We don’t want deaths do we?’ This time everyone did shake their head.
‘Alright we’re starting in two minutes. You now have time to discuss your plan. I will create a sound proof wall around each field for the next two minutes. Begin.’ A transparent wall covered every corner of field 37 and field 38.
As soon Kagari confirmed that it was sound prove he started talking.
‘Miga, how come that girl was covering for you?’ A suspicious yet teasing emotion appeared on Kagari’s face.
‘What do you mean?’
‘Well, it’s obvious that you would not want a 2 versus 2.’
‘I think you’re making a mistake by saying that. If the 2 versus 2 did happen then you would be the one in trouble since you’ll be fighting two. I’ll just sit back and defend in that case.’ What Miga said wasn’t meant as a joke. Kagari also understood that.
‘I guess you have a point. Yet I still wonder what you did to those girls that they actually chose a disadvantageous situation. Did you seduce them by any means?’
‘Nope. And it’s not that much of a setback they put on themselves. They just can’t use their combos but I can assure you that girl you probably be facing won’t be an easy opponent’ Miga pointed at Jasmin.
‘Don’t worry I’ll beat her and get us that Watcher.’ That confidence will be your doom sooner or later. So far it hasn't so I guess I should be happy with that. Miga was in his thoughts for a moment so Kagari continued speaking.
‘It also goes without saying that I’ll be the attacker and you’ll be support. Support as much as you want to but I probably won’t need it.’ Kagari raised a thumb while having a confident smile.
‘We’ll go with that.’ As they had about thirty seconds left Kagari closed his eyes. This is to keep his thoughts together. As much as Kagari seems like a playful person when serious mode is needed, serious mode will be there. As time passed Kagari opened his eyes exactly at a second before the teacher started speaking.
‘Position yourself on your own field. Support behind and attacker in front. The Countdown timer will appear in front of you when you’re in position.’
‘As expected’ is what both Jasmin and Miga thought. Jasmin was on attacker position and Miga was on support position.
The countdown started from 10.
The Valiant Side was completely silent with eyes either on the field or in the air because the fight was show through Vison Enlightment, the same technique used to display Sakira’s face, probably.
As the countdown timer hit 5 seconds Kagari made four swords appear.
Two were floating while he kept two in his hand.
As Jasmin and Anna saw that they also summoned their weapon, an ice battle rod.
These weren’t ordinary weapons. T
hey define the fight style of a person and are the tools used to strengthen one magic.
Jasmin looked at Miga and saw that he had nothing equipped which didn’t surprise her.
The Teru family members are all like that anyways.
She couldn’t help but sigh. The count hit 1.
‘Miga don’t lose on purpose please.’
‘I won’t. I can defend without my weapon, you know.’ Kagari took his battle stance.
The count hit zero.
The fight began.
And here comes chapter three. I always feel so motivated about things I just started so I literrally will spend 4-7 hours writing if I can.
Does it read better with spaces in between?
I finally thought of a title and then I find out you can't edit thread titles.* Sob *
Spoiler for Chapter 3:
Chapter 3 6:00 PM 5 Januari 2035
Before Sera Hogu could even say ‘I’m home’ there was already an all excited cute little boy running at her.
With a smile she greeted that boy.
‘Hello Kagari my cute little nephew.’ Kagari was very happy to see his cousin.
Reason being is that she always comes with some kind of surprise. At least, it has been like that for the last 2 years.
She dotes on Kagari more than his own mom does. It can’t be helped because she just thought he's such a cute person.
Last year she promised that if she didn’t fail her Horo finals he’ll get something big this year.
Kagari hasn’t forgotten that but before anything else he wanted to show his cousin, who he refers to as sister, what he learned.
Kagari ran to his garden, which is a 20 by 25 meter ‘field’ one could say and also had a lot of beautiful flowers, and said with a happy tone: ‘Sis look what dad taught me two days ago.’
The moment Sera went outside she saw two wooden swords flying around which almost made Sera’s eyes tear out of happiness.
Hogu’s prided magic art ‘Sword Dancer’ which took herself about half an year to control, took her nephew only two days to control. She couldn’t help but feel proud of her nephew.
Also this is one of the reasons why she loves her nephew so much: His talent for magic is incredible.
‘Sword Dancer’ works through Force control, Acceleration control and Gravity control. The swords as they move are actually on falling motion all the time. By putting force on parts of the swords to make it twist around and putting accelerating force at the right moment to make cuts happen is what makes this skill hard. Then you also need to control gravity in the area of the sword only. That is how you get the float effect.
One could say if ‘Sword Dancer’ were to be mastered, it could be called art.
And Kagari managed to keep control over the swords in two days. That does not mean he has mastered it. Controlling and mastering is a big difference after all.
‘Kagari, let us have a little fight. You’re able to control the sword to the extent that if it takes force from any other direction than you intended, control won’t be lost right?’
‘Yup!’ Sera couldn’t get enough of Kagari’s proud smile and showed him her smile as well.
‘Then how about this? If you win I give you the present I promised.’
‘Ehhhh. That’s unfair! You’re way better than me at this!’ Kagari made a :< emotion.
Sera laughed as she said: ‘That’s true. Then… How about if you manage to land a blow on me? The only thing I’ll be doing is defending.’
That seemed to put Kagari in a better mood. He nodded.
‘Then let us start this friendly match between nephew and cousin.’
There was a pile of wooden sword in the left corner the most close to the house. Sera also chose to control two wooden swords to make it fair. She waved her hand from left to right and two swords started floating.
As soon Kagari saw she was in a stable stance he closed his eyes for ten seconds.
Seems like his father has taught him the art of mind calmness thought Sera. Any form of control is hard to do without a clear mind after all.
The moment Kagari opened his eyes he made five quick motion with his hand.
Wave left hand from the left to the right to the left.
Wave right hand from above to below.
Wave left hand from left diagonally to below.
Wave Right hand from below to left to above in a ( motion.
Wave both hands to the middle where his heart was.
When Sera saw that she couldn’t help but remember how she used to be when she just learned controlling two swords. It was almost like dancing but she enjoyed doing so.
She also sees how much Kagari enjoys doing what he is right now because his confidence is showing through his body movement.
Someone wants his present. Sera smiled.
Kagari’s swords went into full motion and started to strike from the directions his hand motioned in.
Sera easily predicted the sword movements because she saw his hand motion.
And blocked every one of them, except the last strike which was supposed to come from above and below.
The moment she saw Kagari’s sword move in a different direction then he waved she once again couldn’t believe how talented he is. Kagari managed to control the swords without hand motion at the age of 5.
She could’ve block that attack but decided to let it go through.
Sera braced for impact and closed her eyes.
The swords went in an arc motion from below and above, aiming for the face and the torso, but stopped the moment they touched Sera’s clothes and face.
Kagari looked kind of disappointed as he said: ‘Why didn’t you block that, sis? I know you could’ve blocked that.’
A wind could be felt.
Sera sighed and said: ‘I just got surprised by how talented you were and my control slipped a bit.’
‘I don’t believe that from someone who succeeded in the Horo finals.’ Kagari pouted his mouth.
‘Well don’t you want your present?’
‘I do!’ Kagari’s emotion changed in a blink of eye from unhappy to happy.
‘Let’s go back inside’
As they went back inside Sera closed the door to the garden.
They were now in the living room which was humongous. Furniture made of black glass, A device which displayed holographic TV and a soft bench one would easily fall asleep on if one were to lie down.
Sera lied down and put the little Kagari on top of her. Kagari always loved this because Sera always felt so soft.
Sera was looking at Kagari innocent face and she hugged him for a bit before telling him to turn around.
The moment he turned around while still lying on Sera he saw four sword scabbards floating in front of him. They all had an animal head displayed on them.
They consisted out of: a snake, lion, lioness and a spider.
He heard a story from his dad before, which was about the ‘Animal sword set’ which consists of nine unique swords.
It was about how the first of the Hogu family created swords with the use of animal extracted spirits. The spirits also determined how the sword movement would be. For example the snake has to move like a snake or control would be lost and the sword would simply drop down to the ground.
Because of that reason they're extremely hard to control compared to a normal sword. You’re essentially using a spirit after all.
As Sera moved her head a bit so she could see Kagari’s face she felt satisfaction. She has never seen such a fascinated face by him before.
She also is sure that she won’t regret the following.
‘Choose two.’
Kagari’s eyes became big and with a bit a disbelieve he said:‘What! Really?!’
‘Yes. You know how you’re able to control two wooden swords now? Have you ever tried controlling more than that?’
‘Yup I have! I couldn’t keep control tho.’
‘Then imagine you controlling four wooden swords and multiply that degree of difficulty by five or six times. That’s how hard it is to control four of the ‘Animal Set’.
‘Are you able to do that?’ Kagari’s eyes were blinking.
Sera laughed and said: ‘Sorry to disappoint you but no I can’t. Since I got these swords from my grandpa, who passed away, I’ve spend countless hours training in secret when I was in Horo Academy but I couldn’t control all four of them simultaneously. So I decided to give two of them as present to you. I could only control two of them perfectly.’
Kagari accepted the explanation and chose the snake and the spider. The reason behind that was because he wanted to leave the lion swords for Sera.
Also he liked the difficulty being higher on these two swords. He always thought that the skills presented to him were too simple and he got bored fast from learning magic taught to him.
Sera once again hugged him and told him that if he manages to control the two blades perfectly together with 36 normal swords, she will give him the other two animal blades.
Kagari accepted even tho when he got a bit older he thought it was a bit selfish.
From then on he chose to master the Animal swords.
What he didn’t know was that the swords weren’t just six times harder to control, but more like twenty times.
He isn’t the type to give up but he stopped using the swords and promised himself that he will pick it up by the age of 7 again.
He wanted to increase his skill.
And when he turned seven he spend five hours a day after school training in the garden.
Sera came once in a while and helped him and after three months he managed to control one, the snake sword.
From then on he decided to keep the swords with him through ‘Object Storing’. A skill used to put objects in a magical chest located where the user chooses to place it and objects can be placed and taken from that box, as long the location is exactly the same as one remembers.
The first day he went to his elementary school with the swords stored he met Miga. A person with a scary aura is what he thought at first but he seemed to have gotten used to Miga’s personality after a while.
And then when he thought he knew Miga an accident happened. The accident Miga still does not want to speak of today.
1:35 PM 21 Februari 2045
Kagari kept the two Animal swords in his hands.
It’s not that he couldn’t control them but he wanted to see if the enemy is worth it.
A cold wind could be felt from Jasmin’s field.
‘It’s coming Kagari.’ said Miga who was in a sitting position with his legs crossed.
Jasmin took a deep breath and she took a stance in the form of a + but with her body facing the side of the battle arena and her rod facing Kagari.
‘Make it hail… Explosion!’
A piece of ice broke into pointy icicles.
Seems like that’s one of her ways of chanting is what Kagari thought.
Dozen pieces of icicles were being shot with the intention of hitting Miga. Every one of them was destroyed by Kagari’s ‘Sword Dancer’.
Seeing that Jasmin knew that her enemy wouldn’t be defeated easily
‘Anna, reinforce.’ Jasmin got serious because she no longer showed a soft emotion but instead was looking as serious as ever.
‘Understood.’
Once again Jasmin tried the same spell but with bigger and stronger icicles but yet again everything was destroyed by the quick swords controlled by Kagari.
‘Is this what you warned me for Miga?’ Kagari looked over his shoulder as he said that and pulled a mocking face.
The short tempered Anna eyes were almost shooting fire and screamed: ‘Jasmin finish this cocky bastard!’
The moment she said that the whole battle arena turned cold. Everyone who was still talking about the match outside the arena also went quiet.
One could hear the wind.
Because of what happened next, even the teacher got stunned for a second.
‘Make it hail… Release!’
An ice block big enough to pulverize the whole field Kagari and Miga were on was dropping at high speed from the clouds.
Kagari and Miga smiled a bit by that sight.
Sakira made an Oohh! sound.
As it was coming close Kagari made his Animal swords float as well.
‘Teacher, don’t interfere.’ He nodded.
‘Miga don’t help.’
‘Wasn’t intending to.’
As the big block of ice was closing in he closed his eyes for a second and took a deep breath.
‘Hogu Sword Art: Sakura Storm.’
Kagari raised his right hand and countless swords appeared all around the ice block.
It sure would be an eye catching show.
He took a last good look at the ice block and closed his eyes once more.
What happened next stunned everyone including Jasmin and Anna even more.
The whole ice block got sliced in to small blocks and the snake and spider sword cut the blocks into dust with a little help from the other swords.
The moment the swords finished their motion they started dropping but disappeared the moment they almost hit the ground.
Kagari took advantage of the moment and raised his left hand towards Anna.
A sword appeared behind her.
Anna’s eyes were focused on the ice block and didn’t see what Kagari did and Jasmin couldn’t cast another spell fast enough after casting something that big.
All she could do is watch how her little sister will get cut.
It’s a surprise to her that Kagari didn't have to put everything into his last spell.
The sword moved fast towards Anna’s neck but stopped a meter behind her.
The teacher was about to jump in but Kagari saw that.
His intentions never were to cut Anna anyways.
‘Will you surrender? I don’t like hurting girls, especially cute ones.’ Kagari held his hand up because he too was actually at his limit, so he had to control with hand motion.
‘Why would we surrender, you bastard!?’ Seems like Anna still didn’t know there was a sword behind her.
Jasmin shook her head disapproving her little sister behavior and said: ‘Look behind you.’
Were that to come from Kagari she would have thought that it was a trap.
She turned around and she turned around again with a shocked emotion.
Kagari made his head hang diagonally while waiting.
As Jasmin figured that her sister won’t say anything she surrendered.
The official announcement had been made. Miga’s Trinity won.
1:45 PM 21 Februari 2045
All kinds of talks happened after that.
‘Why didn’t they do anything previously?’
‘Maybe they didn’t want to let people know their magic type?’
‘That would make sense.’
They were referring to before the Watchers came.
The sky cleared up again which caused a rainbow to be formed through the ice dust being spread all over the Valiant side.
A satisfying feeling should be felt but Kagari and Miga didn’t feel anything of sort.
Kagari walked passed Jasmin while saying well fought. Jasmin replied back with well fought as well. Kagari went to Anna and he extended a hand to help her get up.
‘Well fought, lady I don’t know the name of.’ Kagari showed a refreshing smile.
For a while Kagari thought she would’ve slapped his hand away because she was looking at him with the same shocked emotion she had when she looked at the sword.
But her emotion loosened up. She sighed and grabbed Kagari hand.
‘I really hate losing and you even forced me into surrender. And my name is Anna’ Anna was sulking a bit.
‘I’m sorry my lady. Anything particular you would want me do to make you happy?’
‘That somehow sounds like something I heard not too long ago.’ Jasmin looked at Miga.
He smiled at her and also walked to the three standing on field 38. ‘It wouldn’t be a surprise if two great minds think alike when it comes to comforting the same person.’ On purpose Miga looked as if it was nothing.
‘Anna is just such a cute girl that when she is a little bit sad, anyone would want to comfort her, right Miga?’
‘For sure.’
‘M-Me cute?’ Anna looked surprised and blushed a bit.
‘Ahem if I may interfere~’ Sakira also walked up to the group.
‘So since you two have won I’ll be joining you. I hope we get along and have a lovely relationship.’ She sure is an overjoyed person.
‘You’ll be joining Jasmin, this ice caster girl’s Trinity.’ Miga said that without a particular emotion and walked back to his field.
‘Ehhhh~ Whyy?’
‘You won’t fit in our Trinity casting style.’ Miga continued walking.
Sakira looked at Kagari with cute eyes.
Kagari shrugged and followed Miga.
‘His word is law when it comes to our little group. Sorry~’
That also caused a commotion.
‘They declined the number one!?’
‘They dare to make such a beautiful sad?’ What sad? Miga thought.
‘Quiet down. It’s up to the teams to accept a Watcher if they want to. It also is up to the Watcher to choose a team even though he or she might get denied.’ The principal strict voice could be heard loud and clearly.
‘Why would they fight though?’ That question came from around field 22.
Kagari answered with all confidence. ‘I enjoy a good fight and that’s all to it.’
‘We will go with that. That’s it for the chit chat. We’ll be continuing the Trinity selection.’
And so the selection continued with field 38 having the first Watcher.
Time passed by and quite some Watchers tried to exclusively choose Miga’s team but they all got denied.
A few people even started speaking about that they did it on purpose and didn’t come here to enter the school.
Miga didn't mind those useless thoughts of people and just continued to observe.
Field 36 got their watcher when the fifteenth Watcher was revealed. A blonde guy, who seemed to be in butler clothes for who knows what reason.
And so Miga and Kagari kept waiting. Miga is one of the persons Kagari truly trusts so he didn’t say a word when the principal said that there are only five female Watchers left and Miga declined the two which came to him.
‘These are all Watchers who saw your ‘Sword Dancer’ and were amazed by it.'
And thus came the last female Watcher.
‘Hello Valiant Side. My name is Akairi. Just Akairi.’
Miga thought he wouldn’t find a Watcher this year but the moment he looked up he remembered.
‘That’s the girl I saw this morning.’ Miga eyes became big.
Chapter 4
2:00 PM 21 Februari 2045
Kagari felt that something changed about Miga. Kagari has gotten so used to the aura Miga radiates that if something changes he feels it as if something changed in himself as well.
That’s the bond between two close friends who swore to make the strongest Trinity.
‘That’s the girl you mentioned as candidate huh?’
‘Yes she is. What I don’t understand is why she’s last.’ Miga was in a state of confusion but remained calm.
His ability to see how good someone is has never been wrong.
Yet, this girl he had his eye on is last on the Watcher list which is based on a test.
What test could result into a person who Miga had his eyes on, becoming last? Kagari wondered because this is something new to him too.
‘I’m coming down.’ The sound of Telecast could once again be heard.
The girl who was displayed in the sky fell from about half a meter face down on the ground.
A soft poof sound could be heard.
Kagari looked with a painful emotion. That’s the girl eh…
She landed in front of field 50, one of seven Trinity teams who were looking for a female Watcher.
‘A chance!’ They looked happy.
As Akairi stood up she realized she telecasted to the wrong position. ‘Oops my bad. I was supposed to be at field 37.’
And… she just walked through field 50, trampling their last hopes, and is now standing in front of Miga.
‘Hey. Uhm… will you reject me too?’ She took the cute approach and put a finger on top of her mouth and stood with one foot on her toes.
She was wearing a loose yellow-colored dress-like top combined with a yellow skirt.
Her clothes combined with her looks and the approach she took made a few boys in the Valiant Side get nosebleeds.
‘They will reject her as well huh?’
‘I’m almost sure they will.’
Miga took a good look at Akairi. This for sure is the same girl I saw this morning.
Why does her aura feel different? There isn’t even a slightest bit of power in it and yet the person this morning had an incredible aura.
‘Akairi.’
‘Um… yes?’ she slightly moved her legs a bit. Seems like she is nervous.
‘Create the sign displaying that you’re a watcher.’
Kagari frowned upon hearing this but remained quiet and continued watching.
‘Umm… Okay I’ll try.’ Try? Miga also frowned.
‘They didn't reject her yet?’
‘How is the worst Watcher able to not get rejected instantly while the number one did?’
‘That guy who is doing the talking must have fallen for her.’
Miga started to get annoyed by the comments but remained calm and kept his sight on Akairi.
Because of all the things that were being said Akairi got even more nervous.
‘Relax and focus your senses on me and me alone.’ Only Akairi and Kagari could hear that.
After he said that he realized how much it sounded like flirting but he didn’t mind.
‘Ok-Okay.’ She took a deep breath, looked deep into Miga’s eyes, held both her hands in front of her chest in a triangle form and closed her eyes trying to focus.
Suddenly a big blue fire erupted out of her hands and burned a big part of field 37’s grass; she lost control.
Miga and Kagari were unhurt due to them putting up a fire resistant magic shield.
Akairi seemed as if she was on the verge of crying and bowed down.
‘I’m very sorry!’
Miga looked around him and saw that the fire created a big black triangle even tho that wasn’t exactly what he asked for he accepted it.
‘Look up, Akairi.’
She looked up with a sad face.
‘How come you are so different compared to how you were this morning?’
Akairi got shocked when he said that that.
‘Umm… what do you mean?’
Miga saw through her reaction that she is playing the oblivious game.
He also understood that she wanted to hide something and it's not like he doesn't understand.
It’s not as if he was completely secret less when it comes to magic.
He looked at her a few seconds longer before sighing.
‘I’ll accept you if you win.’
Jasmin mouth looked as if she said ‘Oh?’ while Anna was still sulking with her arms crossed. The Lui sisters on field 36 looked with interest.
‘In a fight you mean?’ Akairi had a bit of hope in her. Then she realized what she just did and remembered that the way she is right now, she won’t have the slightest chance of winning. She was actually thinking that she had to fight Kagari.
‘Yes. You’ll be fighting…’ Miga pointed at himself.
Kagari's corners of his mouth raised.
‘Don't fight that jackass! Just come and join us!’ Field 50 made a desperate try, which was completely ignored.
So far every Watcher who attempted to join Miga’s Trinity had been rejected without even getting the chance to show anything.
‘Also we’ll be fighting in the ‘Desolated Void’, ever heard of it? It’s the arena which covers a certain area and anyone outside it without 'permission' can’t see inside or enter. The ones allowed inside will be: you, Kagari, the teacher and me. Do you accept?’
That’s actually advantageous for me thought Akairi. ‘I… know of it and I… accept.’
The Valiant Side went quiet again.
‘I won’t allow it unless I can see what is happening inside.’
‘The principal of course is allowed too. I’m sorry for not mentioning.’
‘Hum.’
Kagari stood up and winked at the Lui sisters. He then walked to Miga.
‘Have some fun.’ Is what he whispered. Miga shrugged.
‘Teacher, create the Void please.’ Miga already walked to his starting position. Akairi followed and also walked to her starting position. Kagari went to the side.
‘Alright, the field will only consist of field 37. The winner is determined when one person isn’t able to continue fighting or surrenders. Here goes.’
Atella walked to the middle of field 37 and stretched both his arms in front of him and opened his hands.
Darkness surrounded field 37 for a bit but then cleared. The principal seems to be watching through the ‘roof’ as his face could be seen outside.
‘The Void is complete. Nothing can enter, see or hear from the outside. Are both sides ready?’
Miga took a look at Akairi again and saw no change in her. Maybe during the fight a change will happen?
Miga nodded.
Akairi seemed to be saying something. ‘Can we do it?’ is what Miga read from her lips.
We huh. I guess that is what is going on is what Miga thought.
After Akairi seemed to have confirmed something she nodded as well.
As Miga wasn't concerned any more about others seeing what he could do he released his seal he put on him self.
Kagari felt a chill but still smiled as he saw Miga's aura change back to the monstrous he had back in elemental school.
'Not going easy huh. Just don't go too wild on her, alright?'
'What do you mean too wild!?' Akairi got a bit shaken by those words.
'Don't worry to much about it. He wouldn't be the way he is right now if you weren't worth it.'
'...'
The teacher was waiting patiently while the youngsters were finishing their small talk but even he felt the change of Miga. I hope the girl will be alright is what he thought.
'Then let's start.'
And so the same count down appeared as in the match between the ice twins and Miga and Kagari.
As the counter counted down Miga kept his eyes on Akairi.
Just when the counter hit two seconds left an immense aura which probably matched Miga's aura was released out of Akairi.
Akairi, who's hair originally was chestnut brown which gradually transitioned into light red and her eyes, which were brown became black.
Come to think of it, her hair was actually black when I first saw her. So my thoughts were right.
As she looked up she no more had her nervous and cute look in her eyes; they were full of hatred and killing intent.
The atmosphere felt incredible heavy which made Kagari feel like some crazy battle was about to commence.
He wasn't wrong because the next moment an eruption of magic came from both sides.
Miga, who unleashed his seal, shot out multiple force pulses ,which were strong enough to destroy a thick metal wall, but they were all blocked by Akairi's own force pulses.
Not only did they block Miga's pulses but they also continued moving with a high speed towards Miga.
All he did was move a few steps to avoid them.
Neither of the two were surprised what the other could do.
Miga this time decided that it was time to finish it.
He raised both his hands in front of him and shot another force pulse.
Straight after that he used Light Falter three times. Each time he would move exactly 120 degree and shoot a force pulse.
Akairi made a spin and stretched both her hands, which actually made her look as if she was crucified, and one giant tornado instantly appeared around her.
The force pulses all created big holes in the tornado but closed a moment after.
Akairi didn't expect two force pulses from the front and so the force pulse went through the hole in the tornado the first force pulse created.
Miga thought he had hit her because he was sure the pulse went through the tornado, so he decided to Light Falter in front of the tornado.
The moment he stood in front of the tornado he crystalized the tornado and ran over it to get inside. The reason he couldn't crystalize everything was because he could not see inside.
What cannot be seen cannot be hit through magic, which is an image created by the brain and transmitted towards the world.
What was inside shocked Miga greatly.
As he jumped down he saw that Akairi was unhurt looking up with a sadistic smile showing her teeth.
She had something in her hand. It was a transparent ball as big as a tennis ball.
And then he had realized. She actually caught his force pulse, compressed it into a ball and because it's compressed it means the force within isn't going in one direction.
She shot it and afterwards greatly increasing the gravity around Miga causing him to fall faster.
Miga tried countering with decreasing the gravity but he was a tad too late.
The force ball hit him straight in his solar plexus and he would've fainted if he didn't create a quick metal bar in front of him.
Since the ball was so strong it went through the bar but it did decrease the power of the magic coming through.
As Miga almost hit the ground he quickly decreased the gravity which made him hit the ground with no damage.
Akairi who was still laughing sadistically. 'Oh oh. The almighty Trinity leader who rejected all those cute girls is now lying in front of me. I think I should punish him.' The mocking tone was as clear as glass. The nervous Akairi was no where to be seen.
'Mister, weren't you suppose to go wild on me, you dirty pervert?'
Miga saw that Akairi was slowly approaching him.
Just a little bit closer is what he thought.
When Akairi was three steps away Miga suddenly dissapeared from her sight.
Akairi sighed and bursted the ice behind her and controlled the shatter pieces to hit behind her. It would've actually killed someone if that were to hit.
'If you want wild you could've just asked for it.'
The moment he said that she felt alot of pieces hitting her. Pieces which she should be controlling.
She felt her consciousness fading. Huh. That's not right? Is what she thought.
She didn't see blood on her but she knew that one could die through a wound by magic, which has the possibility to cause a wound without one being able to see it.
As she felt forward she felt an arm catching her.
The next moment she felt that she moved up at a high speed and lost consciousness right after that. Her hair color and eye color also changed back to normal
Miga brought Akairi to the teacher after he jumped down from the frozen tornado.
The teacher confirmed that Akairi was uncounscious and thus declared Miga the winner.
Slowly the void dissapeared and everyone from the outside could see field 37 again.
Everyone also saw that Akairi was the one who lost.
Anger was to be felt from a few boys.
Kagari stood up and walked to Miga.
'I see that we won't have a Watcher this year?' There was a bit of dissapointment to be heard in Kagari's voice.
Miga stayed quiet for a bit and looked at Akairi, who's look turned back to how it was at first. Her monstrous aura was no where to be found, just like how Miga also covered his own power again.
Miga walked to Akairi who was still lying unconscious and hit the locking spots on her body with force magic.
Her eyes opened instantly and she looked around.
She saw Miga, who had a calm look, squated beside her and realized that she had lost.
She wanted to just walk away. She never liked to let her 'other self' take over her body.
Just when she wanted to stand up and go to another field Miga pressed her back down and came closer to her ear.
If this were to be seen from the side it for sure would look like Miga was trying to kiss her.
'Dual personality with such big difference in power. One of the Khal-Liner survivors, aren't you?'
The Khal-Liner was an experiment which happened twelve years after Trinity Forming was shown and it tried to greatly improve the magical power of a person. What happened was that the test subject all got a second personality, which was the complete opposite of how that person usually is. They could not control when their other personality came up so some of them became crazy due to not being able to handle the change.
In overall that experiment was a success because more than 70% of the subjects lived. But what happened was that the government, which exists out of the most of the strongest mages, did not agree with the experiment but the scientists still did the experiment.
When the government found out they decided to exterminate the people who survived the Khal-Liner experiment. The reason for this is because the potential of a war breaking out versus the government to gain power was pretty big.
Out of the 70% survivor 80% were found and purged by the government.
The other 14% were most likely were trying to hide there existence.
Akairi was on the verge of crying when Miga asked that question.
'Just like most of the Teru's, I can read people their aura. What surprised me is that you actually came in to the academy in your second personality but don't worry, I won't sell you out.'
Akairi who was looking down all this time looked up straight into Miga's eyes. She was crying a bit. This made Miga's heart skip a beat. As serious as he usually is, he too is a boy in puberty.
Everyone in the Valiant Side was waiting patiently for what is gonna happen next. Some looked with displeasure and some looked with interest.
'Why wouldn't you sell me out?' Is what Miga heard. Akairi wasn't exactly speaking clearly because she was sobbing a bit.
'Because you're our third and last Trinity member.' Miga showed a smile.
This caused Akairi to stop crying and instead made her surprised.
The government put a relative big bounty on Khal-Liner subjects. Big enough to live a relative good life for a while. This is one of the things that made Akairi be surprised.
She also felt a bit of contradiction in everything that happened. She decided to go into her second personality in the Desolated Void. Four people saw her go into her second personality and yet none of them decided to sell her out.
She was truely thankful for this.
The reason she wanted to win so bad, that she even risked going into her second personality while knowing that the chance of her being sold out was pretty big, is because she also has the ability to read aura. She hasn't told this to anyone. Even tho she went into her second personality she couldn't keep up with Miga.
This is also another point which caused her to be surprised. Miga said that she'll be allowed to join if she won but she didn't yet he still accepted her.
Miga saw that Akairi was a bit confused so he made a guess about what he thought confused her.
'I accepted you because your magic control isn't something to laugh at. You also seem to be able to read aura because it seems like your second personality is a mimic type isn't it? You almost perfectly matched my aura. This for sure would fit in the Trinity Forming Kagari and me want to do. That clears up your confusion right?'
Akairi nodded.
During Miga's life he has only seen a mimic type magician once. Seeing how Akairi is able to almost perfectly mimic his aura made him feel a bit nostalgic. The person who had the ability to mimic was the third member of Miga's Trinity in elementary school.
She was forced to part ways with Miga and Kagari due to her parents not allowing her to go to Horo Academy because she would have to live in the dormitories of Horo, which her parents didnt like.
'Then I will make the announcement.' Miga stood up.
It's always cool to see people post their stories that they've been wanting to write. Anyways, I read the first chapter and I've highlighted some comments on just the first section:
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Originally Posted by Deathrip
11:10 AM 21 Februari 2045
You need to setup the scene somewhere here. Either before Mayumi's first line or after her first line. Pretty much the start of any anime/manga/film is an establishment shot of the setting, whether it's a school, a house, etc. It helps ground things, otherwise there will be a gap in people's perception of the scene, like actors acting in front of a green screen.
'Miga where are you going?' asked Mayumi.
This would be where setting up the scene would pay off. The way the dialogue is going seems to suggest that Miga's sister just caught him as he's leaving the house. However, it wouldn't make sense that Miga would just leave without telling his sister, so it'd make more sense if this conversation took place at the dining room table as the siblings are eating breakfast. However, this whole thing seems like a really big deal so it'd also be strange that Mayumi wouldn't know about it.
'I'm off to the school's entrance exam' .
You can just remove the word school here, it's already implied and in a real conversation he'd just use entrance exam.
'Ohhh! Who are your partners?'. Mayumi was clearly excited about her brother deciding to take the entrance exam. The reason is because her brother usually does everything by himself. That doesn't mean he has no friends, else this entrance would've been impossible. Reason being is that the exam is taken in groups of three people chosen by one self.
This part is a bit awkwardly written, I think something like this is a bit more clear->"Mayumi was clearly excited about her brother's decision. During all the years they've been living under this roof, Mayumi has always known Miga to be a lone wolf. The fact that Miga is undertaking this exam demonstrates that he is finally willing let his friends share the burden, as the exam must be taken in a group of three. "
'Kagari will be the one taking the male spot and the female spot will be determined on the Valiant Side.' said Miga while he was tying his shoelaces.
The dialogue here is a bit stiff, I think something more direct for the Kagari line, and something a bit more playful for the female spot line would be better ->"Kagari is taking the male spot, as for the female spot, I guess I'll find out at the Valiant Side."
I think what you need even before the first conversation is a short bit on what the Trinity System is, why it's important to Miga. You don't have to reveal hidden back stories or anything, but he should be excited for this, so describe his emotions/thoughts as he's getting read to leave for the entrance exam. Make the audience feel like this is a big deal and they'll be more interested in following along.
In general I feel the dialogue is a bit stifled. One thing you can try to do is say your lines out loud and then see if that's something you'd actually say. You'll realize that a lot of times people don't talk in complete sentences and will often drop words or allude to objects/persons without actually naming them. There are also a lot of breaks in between smaller phrases, which should be emphasized in the writing.
Finally, it might be a good idea to plan out where you want to insert your illustrations and just put them into the chapter themselves with placeholder descriptions.
When I started I thought out the Trinity System and wanted to have the story tell how it works, but now you mention it, it probably is confusing that it's not explained earlier.
Regarding the dialogues, I definitely will try to work on them and try to make them better after chapter 4. A really usefull tip, thanks.
The illustrations are already planned out on my own txt/word file ^_^.
Location: On the whole, I'd rather be in Kyoto ...
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Always assume you're going to rewrite something a dozen times or more -- and you may *still* find things awkward or wrong with the product. I make it clear that what people are seeing in my thread is "version 0.9" at best. My actual latest version is almost like an entirely new book (which would make sense as I'd actually like to publish it this year).
I'm trying to address some deep structural problems in my story that someone just pointed out -- painful after several hundred pages of rough drafting.
I read chapter two, and I think one of the biggest problems aside from the flow I pointed out in chapter one is you voice POV. You're basically using Third Person Omniscient right now, which is very difficult to write in if you don't have enough experience. One of the biggest problems caused by Third Person Omniscient is head jumping, where you quickly swap between the perspectives of the different characters all in the same scene, making it much more difficult for the reader to follow. It also feels less personal, and is used better for epics involving a lot of characters and a lot of narration.
Since you're going the light novel route where much of the interactions occurs via dialogue, and you're pretty much focused on your main character, something like third person limited is a much better fit. To change your story to third person limited, you just have to tweak it so that everything is viewed through Miga's point of view. Instead of directly telling us what other people are thinking, you can either allude to it via their dialogue or Miga can tell us what he thinks the other people are thinking based on his observations.
Miga is a far more interesting character than Kagari or any of the girls that you've introduced so far. If you wrap everything through Miga's point of view, he could give some interesting commentary based on his observation of what's happening. This is particularly useful to inject some additional flavor to the narration, which might be a bit dry otherwise.