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Li Jianliang · 2005-12-30, 03:43

Let's see if I can actually bring this series to a completion of some sort.
Check back every once in a while for new pages! ^_^

Oh yes, please read from right to left. (If there are actual words to read so far)

Page 01
Page 02
Page 03
Page 04

sarrah · 2005-12-30, 09:21

i think ur art is very nice....

BUT...sorry for the but....

the frames either their should be more...or they should be larger...less blackness!
although i wana know what she saw!

back ground needs work..more detail

vary thickness of lines

what is she looking over? not made clear

3rd page...i dont know what the images are or where she is..unless thats the point?
good luck!!!

kira_lacusXX · 2005-12-30, 12:17

the girl looks like shes got a lot of character from her expressions and she seems very sad maybe youll talks about that later. anywho i like how you draw but like sarrah said...maybe less blackness and make some of the lines thinner. also you should add some words if youre going to show so little drawings b/c its kinda confusing. and yeh i have no clue what shes looking over. maybe a scene of her field of vision beside it. might give the reader more of the idea! great work though id love to see more of this w/e it will be called!

malvado · 2005-12-30, 13:10

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Originally Posted by Li Jianliang

Let's see if I can actually bring this series to a completion of some sort. The title will (?) be revealed on page 5.

Oh yes, please read from right to left. (If there are actual words to read so far)

you are like the guy whose style I wanna copy now. You are a great artist I wanna make my drawings look exactly like yours. Your art is nice.

chison · 2005-12-30, 13:46

WELL...i think
the chara's head is good enough...as a complete style
i rate the head for 8,9/10
but the object don't as good as detail~maybe is the style...but

anyway...is a pro to me...fightO

Cracknut · 2005-12-30, 18:01

Good Brush Strokes. I would assume you used a lot of ink to cover your entire screen?

Keep it up! It's great!

Li Jianliang · 2006-01-01, 03:33

I'm also fairly inexperienced in drawing backgrounds. Is there a good tutorial on drawing backgrounds of trees/buildings somewhere? Or just point out what can be improved on them to me. ^_^;;; Gah, look at Page 05. The trees...they look so horrible. Barely passable as background. >_<

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Originally Posted by sarrah

the frames either their should be more...or they should be larger...less blackness!
although i wana know what she saw!

back ground needs work..more detail

vary thickness of lines

what is she looking over? not made clear

3rd page...i dont know what the images are or where she is..unless thats the point?
good luck!!!

Overall I'm trying to achieve a dark mood for the manga...looks like that's going too sloppily for now. Aack. I think I'm getting better at controlling light/shadows as this goes on, though...

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Originally Posted by torrencee

the girl looks like shes got a lot of character from her expressions and she seems very sad maybe youll talks about that later. anywho i like how you draw but like sarrah said...maybe less blackness and make some of the lines thinner. also you should add some words if youre going to show so little drawings b/c its kinda confusing. and yeh i have no clue what shes looking over. maybe a scene of her field of vision beside it. might give the reader more of the idea! great work though id love to see more of this w/e it will be called!

Thanks! What she's looking over would be revealed by the time you read this post... XD So far, no 'real' words yet. I think I may not put dialogue into this manga until the very end.

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Originally Posted by malvado

you are like the guy whose style I wanna copy now.

Oh, who's the guy? ^_^? Also, may I ask you to edit the manga pages from your post, since they are extraneous and stretching the thread page?

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Originally Posted by Cracknut

Good Brush Strokes. I would assume you used a lot of ink to cover your entire screen?

Keep it up! It's great!

Yesss... You can't believe the amount of Sharpie markers that went into this! And the permanent stains on my shirt!

nani · 2006-01-01, 13:44

Quote:

Originally Posted by Li Jianliang

I'm also fairly inexperienced in drawing backgrounds. Is there a good tutorial on drawing backgrounds of trees/buildings somewhere? Or just point out what can be improved on them to me. ^_^;;; Gah, look at Page 05. The trees...they look so horrible. Barely passable as background. >_<

If you are drawing CG, this may be helpful : http://www.imanimetions.net/tutorial....php?view=tree

If you are drawing "real" picture,
- Draw the branches first (try Google Image Search on "Tree Shape" or "Tree Branch" for samples);

- The leaves can be drawn via "dry-brushing" using a fan-shape brush. Start with dark green, wait for it to dry. Repeat the process three or four times, using a lighter green each time.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Li Jianliang

Overall I'm trying to achieve a dark mood for the manga...

Dark indeed, I have got the feeling that she is going to jump off the cliff... Overall, I find your work interesting, let's see how the story unfold.

2005-12-30, 03:43	Link #1
Li Jianliang This is my ____ face Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: In front of my laptop Age: 29	Experimental Manga Let's see if I can actually bring this series to a completion of some sort. Check back every once in a while for new pages! ^_^ Oh yes, please read from right to left. (If there are actual words to read so far) Page 01 Page 02 Page 03 Page 04 __________________ Umineko no Naku Koro ni Chiru episode 5: End of the golden witch Translations & summaries & a billion screenshots Part I \| Part II \| Part III \| Part IV \| Part V \| Part VI \| Part VII \| Part VIII \| Part IX \| Part X \| Part XI \| Part XII In progress Umineko no Naku Koro ni Chiru episode 6: Dawn of the golden witch Translations & summaries & screenshots Part I \| Part II In progress Last edited by Li Jianliang; 2006-01-16 at 03:39.

2005-12-30, 09:21	Link #2
sarrah tikki Join Date: Dec 2005	i think ur art is very nice.... BUT...sorry for the but.... the frames either their should be more...or they should be larger...less blackness! although i wana know what she saw! back ground needs work..more detail vary thickness of lines what is she looking over? not made clear 3rd page...i dont know what the images are or where she is..unless thats the point? good luck!!!

2005-12-30, 12:17	Link #3
kira_lacusXX LOVELY☆COMPLEX Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Ontario, Canada	the girl looks like shes got a lot of character from her expressions and she seems very sad maybe youll talks about that later. anywho i like how you draw but like sarrah said...maybe less blackness and make some of the lines thinner. also you should add some words if youre going to show so little drawings b/c its kinda confusing. and yeh i have no clue what shes looking over. maybe a scene of her field of vision beside it. might give the reader more of the idea! great work though id love to see more of this w/e it will be called!

2005-12-30, 13:46	Link #5
chison GSNMaSter Artist Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: Sheffield Age: 31	WELL...i think the chara's head is good enough...as a complete style i rate the head for 8,9/10 but the object don't as good as detail~maybe is the style...but anyway...is a pro to me...fightO

2005-12-30, 18:01	Link #6
Cracknut The Village Idiot Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: In a house	Good Brush Strokes. I would assume you used a lot of ink to cover your entire screen? Keep it up! It's great!