Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha Character Creation and Discussion

[USB500]

Originally Posted by Kha

Yare yare, Erio-kun is turning out to be a bigger Spiral than Kha was at his age...

Though when both Meister and Page powers are combined, no girl is safe.

(runs from pitchfork army)

NO WAI!!!!!!!11111oneoneleven

This is ridiculous! Not even Hikki and his Big Daddy Yo's pimpin' skill can match their power!

*runs from berserk fan girls*

[Kha]

Originally Posted by USB500

NO WAI!!!!!!!11111oneoneleven

This is ridiculous! Not even Hikki and his Big Daddy Yo's pimpin' skill can match their power!

*runs from berserk fan girls*

GOOD LORD! If Hikki, Big Daddy, Kha and Erio unite...

[LoweGear]

Originally Posted by Kha

GOOD LORD! If Hikki, Big Daddy, Kha and Erio unite...

If Hikki, Big Daddy, Kha, Erio, Takeru combine their powers...

Wait a minute, aren't most of them already Recepticons?

[Nightengale]

I don't have that doujin, (( still looking. Damn, I thought Type-G dojins are quite popular? )) but if it interests you, here's the link to some 'sample' pages.

Spoiler for NFSW:

http://www.toranoana.jp/mailorder/co...970/index.html

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

... Hey you know, after Jail's bold declaration about banging all of his Numbers, suddenly that Ginga image doesn't seem so impossible...

Oh boy...

SEVEN ARCS/KING RECORDS LOVES ME!

But really, Ginga for now... I don't see anything happening to her. But I wouldn't be surprised if she's not totally free from Jail's control if a S4 happens. Don't they have that 'secret activation' cliche?

And it's not like he really 'banged' his Numbers... unless he modified it so that any child conceived from his seeds somehow becomes him. But heck, I'll take what I can. I want to see how the nano-guy is going to go around that part with the shotacon Jail part. Same with the whole 'Zest's subordinates are like him as well.' thing. :3

And if you ask me, it really looks like there's more to his revival plan than what he told Fate, since he seems so bloody confident he will live one way or another even though Fate now knows enough to screw him plans up, but at the same time, he's fully prepared to die. It's like he's hiding something...

[USB500]

Originally Posted by Kha

GOOD LORD! If Hikki, Big Daddy, Kha and Erio unite...

Originally Posted by LoweGear

If Hikki, Big Daddy, Kha, Erio, Takeru combine their powers...

Wait a minute, aren't most of them already Recepticons?

God please help us.

I thought I'd like to share some teasers

Spoiler for Magical Cinderella, actually:

“Signum.”

“What?”

Chrono pointed to the tight attire she was donning. “What is this for?”

Signum glanced at her suit. "Don't ask me. Meister Hayate wanted me to dress up as a certain Loveless person," she spoke.

Chrono became intrigued. "Loveless?"

By now, fan boys and male audience started ogling at Signum Loveless. All of them murmured “Jiiiiiiiiiiii~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~” while sticking their eyes on Signum’s unrealistically loaded racks. Signum did not realize it yet, but when some of the boys whispered “those are surely squishy in our hands,” she made them eat the dust by firing an instant Sturm Falke at them.

“You surely know how to respond, don’t you?” Chrono asked.

Signum ignored it and handed him the invitation letter. “The royal family wishes to see you and your family present at the castle,” she spoke.

You know what might happen when we have Signum Loveless on the block.

*Sturm Falke >>>>>>>> USB500*

And why do I have a strong feeling that

Spoiler:

is going to be featured in Neo Alternate Timeline?

[haiz123321]

Originally Posted by Kha

GOOD LORD! If Hikki, Big Daddy, Kha and Erio unite...

Lord save us all if it ever happens

Gwendolyn
Melee: 3
Range: 6
Nuke: 7
Magical Stamina: 10
Attractiveness (Both Male and Female ): 1000

?!?!

[Keroko]

Originally Posted by Nightengale

To be fair, I wouldn't simply go and throw the 10 label so easily. Maybe their Limit Breaks allow them to reach that number for a while through severe strain, but other than that, in their casual condition, I'd pull those numbers down a tad bit. After all, it's not something that can be casually used like it's nothing either.

After all, Episode 24 showed how ridiculously h4xx Overdrive can be for Fate. Pfft. She was on-par with Tre/Sette, and suddenly, it's like she's 2 times stronger. It felt really cheap, but I suppose it's a sign of Overdrive pinnacle. I'd give Fate a '10' in melee if she can consistently perform like that, but she clearly cannot.

Then again, my Saga is a 6/6/6 despite being SS-rank... maybe with all the h4xxes thrown around here, it's hard to grasp what the number '10' truly represents.

Those numbers were just a re-calculation of Aaron's 0-6 ones, though.

But I agree. To me, the number defines the skill in said area, not the power. Signum would score a solid 10 in melee as well going by this idea.

Of course, as others have said, numbers like these mean little. For example, Keroko scores an 8 in range, but has no long-range attack to speak off. Perhaps ICB or Orbital Bombardement, but they require her to stay in place, and that's not a good idea for someone with low defence. Also, Keroko is very bad at large scale-energy attacks like Nanoha. Ion Blast is among her least used skills, and ICB has special conditions. It's easier for her to create and controll many small attacks, or concentrate energy in a small spell instead of one big attack. Nanoha comments on this during the home-training scene in A's.

All these things factor in battle too, but you can't see them from numbers alone.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Nanoha gets a-
Nanoha: Don't tell!
I'll see if I can put it in a chapter late-<Divine Bustered>

And I guess maybe I can put Fate's case in that next scenario as well-<Haken Saber'd>

Spoiler for A line from Aurion:

"There will be times that I'll see some potentially dangerous problems in your characters. <grins> And sooner or later, I'll have to break you to be able to fix you properly..."

... I want to see this. The drama potential is through the roof.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

They're not married yet, right?

Hmm...

Fate: Kha... <holds her stomach> You should take responsibility!

*runs from Kha's imagination exprozion*

Wha?

Originally Posted by Nightengale

StrikerS's felt too jumped on.

It was H~A~P~P~Y~~ one small battle ~ H~A~P~P~Y ~ one relative battle ~D~R~A~G~ OMG SUDDENLY END OF MID-CHILDA ~ OMG good guys in a pinch ~ ONE HIT KILL H4XXXXXX!!!!

If that's not bad execution, pacing, etc, I don't know what is.

The H4XXXX wouldn't have been so bad if the fights were lonbger, better choreographed and beter animated. Right now the Fate one-hit-kill scene is 'awesome' in my book, but it could have become epic with a bit more effort.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

I demand a shota! or teenager!Jail in S4 + Lone Island Syndrome with Fate. Since that kid won't really be 'Jail', maybe they could have a decent conversation for once.

I smell crack potential.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

My Saga is starting to look like Keroko and Aurion's lovechild...

AurekoKerionAurekoKerionAurekoKerionAurekoKerionAu rekoKerionAurekoKerionAurekoKerionAurekoKerion



*runs from ICB and Astranagant*

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Heh, the troubles of being popular

Keroko-chan: ...

Keroko-kun:Conflicting emotions, huh?

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Well that, unfair development treatments, and the general lack of any sense of danger and urgency. I mean, it's the dullest end of the world battle I've ever seen... I just don't see the threat of Cradle, it doesn't strike me as - "HOLY F-!"

It's just a floating tin can.

Hell, I went "Whoa?!" just by seeing the moon's deathstar cannons popping out after they destroy just one

They should make it do something that will go "HOLY-!" Like, blow up a city or something. Whipe out a bunch of mages. Anything!

Originally Posted by LoweGear

So unlike a true ranged bombardier, who can simply keep the enemy out of range through their busters, and a true melee, who can tie up an enemy in close combat, Keroko uses her ranged attacks to disrupt enemy retaliation, and close combat for hit and run harassment to keep them on their toes?

Exactly, mid range is the most ideal of all the ranges, as she is disadvantaged in long range, but without knowing the oponent getting into close combat is like asking to lose, especially when concidering her low defense.

Originally Posted by LoweGear

Nice stylish character Wyatt is, but another person Vita hates? Alot of people want to piss off Vita don't they?

It's her personallity. Hell, even Nanoha pissed Vita off in the beginning.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

Not until we finish harem-nizing Keroko.

With Kha having a harem-potential the size of any self-respecting bishoujo games, what Keroko needs now is a harem the size of any self-respecting NeoRomance games.

Keroko-chan: *grows redder and redder untill steam blows out, before falling backwards in a dead faint, swirly eyed and all.*

Keroko-kun: I think you broke her.

[Chaos2Frozen]

You know, instead of number rankings, maybe we should just have sticked to alphabets Or maybe we could label the numbers like

0 = Hopeless
1 = Pathetic
2 = Sad
3 = Unimpressive
4 = Acceptable
5 = Common
6 = Good
7 = Outstanding
8 = Talented
9 = Elite
10 = Unrivalled

* note: Lets be honest now Though I can expect very few of us to go below 4 And be sure you understand fully the meaning of 'Unrivalled' and that your character really has to be unstoppable in whichever factor...

... Also, how about a rule that only one stat can be 'Talented' or higher? *

Originally Posted by Keroko

The H4XXXX wouldn't have been so bad if the fights were lonbger, better choreographed and beter animated. Right now the Fate one-hit-kill scene is 'awesome' in my book, but it could have become epic with a bit more effort.

I have a feeling they were betting on Fate's Barrier Jacket to save the episode...

Originally Posted by Keroko

I smell crack potential.

Chrono: Unacceptable!

Kha: NOOOOOOooooo!!!!

Originally Posted by Keroko

Keroko-chan: ...

Keroko-kun:Conflicting emotions, huh?

Jeno: "Hehhhh~ ?"

Originally Posted by Keroko

They should make it do something that will go "HOLY-!" Like, blow up a city or something. Whipe out a bunch of mages. Anything!

I'm telling ya, both Yuuno and Jail got it wrong! That thing is UNHARMLESS!

Originally Posted by Keroko

Keroko-chan: *grows redder and redder untill steam blows out, before falling backwards in a dead faint, swirly eyed and all.*

Keroko-kun: I think you broke her.

Clyde: "Ma'am, are you feeling uncomfortable? Do you need to rest somewhere?"

[Aaron008R]

Bad news. My mass data storage device got lost. It had a particularly large chunk of newer works. I have a backup at home, but that was a good number of pages of progress lost.

Anyway, I'm not one to be put down by that. ONWARDS!!!!

Originally Posted by USB500

God please help us.

I thought I'd like to share some teasers

Spoiler for Magical Cinderella, actually:

“Signum.”

“What?”

Chrono pointed to the tight attire she was donning. “What is this for?”

Signum glanced at her suit. "Don't ask me. Meister Hayate wanted me to dress up as a certain Loveless person," she spoke.

Chrono became intrigued. "Loveless?"

By now, fan boys and male audience started ogling at Signum Loveless. All of them murmured “Jiiiiiiiiiiii~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~” while sticking their eyes on Signum’s unrealistically loaded racks. Signum did not realize it yet, but when some of the boys whispered “those are surely squishy in our hands,” she made them eat the dust by firing an instant Sturm Falke at them.

“You surely know how to respond, don’t you?” Chrono asked.

Signum ignored it and handed him the invitation letter. “The royal family wishes to see you and your family present at the castle,” she spoke.

You know what might happen when we have Signum Loveless on the block.

I once saw a pic of that.

And why do I have a strong feeling that

Spoiler:

is going to be featured in Neo Alternate Timeline?

Oi. LOLI's R HAXX, much?!?!

Originally Posted by Keroko

... I want to see this. The drama potential is through the roof.

I was actually wondering if I should include Keroko-chan in a scenario as well. But I seriously don't know if she had a problem along the years...

Keroko-chan: ...

Keroko-kun:Conflicting emotions, huh?

Aurion: Hora, hora. Don't tell me your taking them seriously, eh? <nudge>

Keroko: <grows redder as she flinches away>

Aurion: Oi. (She's taking them seriously alright.)

Keroko-chan: *grows redder and redder untill steam blows out, before falling backwards in a dead faint, swirly eyed and all.*

Keroko-kun: I think you broke her.

Aurion: Wasn't my fault.()

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

You know, instead of number rankings, maybe we should just have sticked to alphabets Or maybe we could label the numbers like

0 = Hopeless
1 = Pathetic
2 = Sad
3 = Unimpressive
4 = Acceptable
5 = Common
6 = Good
7 = Outstanding
8 = Talented
9 = Elite
10 = Unrivalled

* note: Lets be honest now Though I can expect very few of us to go below 4 And be sure you understand fully the meaning of 'Unrivalled' and that your character really has to be unstoppable in whichever factor...

... Also, how about a rule that only one stat can be 'Talented' or higher? *

My rankings for my character pass.

I have a feeling they were betting on Fate's Barrier Jacket to save the episode...

In the start, maybe. But 3 minutes of still not EPIC beatdown is still kinda lacking.

Jeno: "Hehhhh~ ?"

Aurion: Naive.

Clyde: "Ma'am, are you feeling uncomfortable? Do you need to rest somewhere?"

He's ALIVE!!!

[Nightengale]

Originally Posted by Keroko

But I agree. To me, the number defines the skill in said area, not the power. Signum would score a solid 10 in melee as well going by this idea.

Maybe. It's probably just that I'm not sure if considering them to be the pinnacle of skills even in their respective fields is fully appropriate. Just because they're the best in the business today doesn't mean that they're completely comparable to the greatest of all times.

Originally Posted by Keroko

The H4XXXX wouldn't have been so bad if the fights were lonbger, better choreographed and beter animated. Right now the Fate one-hit-kill scene is 'awesome' in my book, but it could have become epic with a bit more effort.

Yes, that's one thing about StrikerS that's glaring.

The direction in the 2nd half, especially the storyboarding for both action scenes and the blahblahblah scenes, are ridiculously uninspiring. Animation is one thing, but honestly, the Fate-Tre-Sette's storyboard and direction was really... urgh.

And the h4xx finale was too short and horribly storyboarded as well. I mean, c'mon! Even if they wanted to show Jail's gloves and hands holding the Zamber, there's other better directive flows.

Originally Posted by Keroko

I smell crack potential.

Jail: Don't talk as if you understand! You were just a dead girl. I am... Alhazred's child, the criminal... Jail Scaglietti. How can you ask me to live with this kind of knowledge, these memories... knowing how much weight I carry!?
Fate: *hugs him*
Jail: !!!
Fate: You are yourself... If you believe it to be so, then you are yourself, not Jail Scaglietti, not Alhazred's child... but just a child who was burdened with something you did not deserve...

Then shota!Jail can join Erio and Caro, and maybe even Lutecia. :3

Jail: Pleased to meet you, I'm Ja.. I mean, *fake name*, Lu-, I mean, your name is...
Lutecia: ....
Jail: Is..anything wrong?
Lutecia: Have we met?
Jail: !!!

Originally Posted by Keroko

Keroko-chan: ...

Keroko-kun:Conflicting emotions, huh?


Keroko-chan: *grows redder and redder untill steam blows out, before falling backwards in a dead faint, swirly eyed and all.*

Keroko-kun: I think you broke her.

We need a poster or something.

Keroko in the middle, surrounded by... Serge, Joseth, Aurion, Kha, Lance, Yuuno, Jun, Chrono... who else...?



*runs*

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Chrono: Unacceptable!

Kha: NOOOOOOooooo!!!!

How about a female Jail then?

Since being male in Nanohaverse is almost...sinful or something.

Then we'd get character development + fanservice!

[Chaos2Frozen]

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

I was actually wondering if I should include Keroko-chan in a scenario as well. But I seriously don't know if she had a problem along the years...

Everybody have problems

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Aurion: Hora, hora. Don't tell me your taking them seriously, eh? <nudge>

Keroko: <grows redder as she flinches away>

Aurion: Oi. (She's taking them seriously alright.)

Brilliant

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Aurion: Wasn't my fault.()

Keroko: "Please take responsibility... !"

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

My rankings for my character pass.

SSSSuuuurrreeeee....

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

In the start, maybe. But 3 minutes of still not EPIC beatdown is still kinda lacking.

No Erio/Lutecia moment! Those bastards !

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Aurion: Naive.

Jeno: "I don't want to hear that from a kid "

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

He's ALIVE!!!

Who's joking...

[Aaron008R]

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

Brilliant

Thanks.

Keroko: "Please take responsibility... !"

Aurion: It depends on what sort of responsibility. By the book, or colloquial?

Jeno: "I don't want to hear that from a kid "

Aurion: Same as the Wolkenritter, I guess I'll still consider you younger.

[Kha]

Originally Posted by Nightengale

Jail: Don't talk as if you understand! You were just a dead girl. I am... Alhazred's child, the criminal... Jail Scaglietti. How can you ask me to live with this kind of knowledge, these memories... knowing how much weight I carry!?
Fate: *hugs him*
Jail: !!!
Fate: You are yourself... If you believe it to be so, then you are yourself, not Jail Scaglietti, not Alhazred's child... but just a child who was burdened with something you did not deserve...

Then shota!Jail can join Erio and Caro, and maybe even Lutecia. :3

Jail: Pleased to meet you, I'm Ja.. I mean, *fake name*, Lu-, I mean, your name is...
Lutecia: ....
Jail: Is..anything wrong?
Lutecia: Have we met?
Jail: !!!

The first part made me go. That's so possible, though "Jail" there sounds like Eriol... Probably Fate should pick a new name for him. William Lambroguini would be good.

ErioCaro, LuluJail?

And when Jail's cover gets blown, will we have ShinjiMatsuri Sweetcheesium all over again? :3

Originally Posted by Nightengale

We need a poster or something.

Keroko in the middle, surrounded by... Serge, Joseth, Aurion, Kha, Lance, Yuuno, Jun, Chrono... who else...?



*runs*

Any takers?

Originally Posted by Nightengale

How about a female Jail then?

Since being male in Nanohaverse is almost...sinful or something.

Then we'd get character development + fanservice!

Well... Going by your 2nd gen Scaglettis, probably only 1 would be male, and the rest would be female... Maybe Uno's gonna have twins, where the male appears, and the rest females.

With this canon revelation, I beseech you to create JailNumber combos for the rest of the Numbers!




Goddammit overshot the size limit for the 3rd time Xp. I've never ran into another forum that's as tightly regulated as AS. At least it keeps the weeds out, but when its due to one overshooting by 3 pixels and 5 KB...

So if I get banned suddenly, it's probably my sig.

[Liingo]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

*phew*

Now THIS is truly THE most DIFFICULT piece I've ever written for OC

Someone here said that descriptive writing was more difficult than script-style, and he was right. But, in order to bring this Arc of mine to a conclusion, I felt that the effort was worth it.

And to top off this Arc from last time:

[Warning: Dangerous levels of sweet and fluffy Cheesium ahead, recommend Insulin Shots beforehand to prevent diabetes]

Spoiler for Sunrise:

The dawn brought with it cold seaborne breezes, blowing gently over the waters of the bay, and permeating the atmosphere with the cool, invigorating scent of the tropical oceans that with each breath penetrated and spread through one’s self, refreshing the body for the still early day. The dim, soft, orange glow of the rising sun crept away at the bluish darkness of the skies.

Amidst the surface of the dark waters yet to receive the sun’s grace of light, stood a long, concrete bridge, lined on its flanks by equally long, wooden catwalks, which appeared to stretch on to the horizon of the west still shrouded by darkness. It is known as the Friendship Trail Bridge, a place that once served as one of three arteries connecting the cities of St. Petersburg to the west, still shrouded by the evening darkness, and Tampa to the east, adorned by the rising sun. Now closed to vehicular traffic, it is a span most frequented by the early morning joggers and bicyclists, performing their warm-up exercises nearby, wishing to fulfill their quota for physical fitness; the fishermen by the catwalks laden with their assortment of gear wishing to snatch the living prizes of the bay; and most of all the average casual early morning person, wishing to behold the early morning wonders of this living estuary, to invigorate and calm the soul, to tackle the day ahead.

But for one soul, nature’s wonders could not grant her peace.

She leaned her elbows forward unto the railings by the catwalk, and bowed her head, looking out at the distant waters by the horizon. The young brunette girl seemed to quietly ponder a thought, whose subject only she was privy to. But the subdued yet visible distress in her expression told of a worry that might soon manifest itself. And with each inch that the golden sun rose over the horizon, her worry grew more and more pronounced.

“Matsuri, what’s wrong?”

Leaning to her left she saw the young boy with whom she had arrived with, stretching his arms and breaking the remnants of his slumber with a yawn. His question seemed to lift her from her quiet reverie, and yet her distress remained.

“It’s been three days now since you’ve arrived here Shinji. Three days.”

Her partner wrapped his arms over her shoulders, pulling her to him. She felt his gentle warmth spreading through her, the morning chill leaving her body. Truly, she was grateful for his simple act of affection, of which she openly savored, and reciprocated by leaning her head on his stern yet accepting shoulder.

Yet she was still troubled, even more so now. And she knew exactly why.

“To think that you’ll be leaving so quickly. After only three days…”

“Yeah.” Her partner answered, his sad sentiment matching her own, as with both hands he took her into his chest.

His lavender scent mingled with the cool, ocean breeze, a scent that subtly blanketed her, a scent that relaxed her nerves. The soft radiant sunrays that bathed them in much need warmth, along with his protective embrace. The slow, delicate stroking of her hair by his gentle fingers. Her heart beating in sync with his own rhythm. And when she looked at him he greeted her with his honest smile, and his fond, tender gaze that he filled with the sight of only her, and filled her soul with indescribable love. Each second she spent with him, each moment in his presence, her heart felt content. Needed. Fulfilled. Their silent bliss. As with all who know of such joy, she wished for time to grant her eternal wish, her selfish desire. To remain in this embrace forever.

But that same contentment was the reason for her distress. As time is unforgiving, stopping for sake of no puny man, no puny woman. Because soon, her short-lived eternity of peace will stop.

And there was also her guilt.

“Three days. I wish I had spent them better. That instead of doubting you, I had spent them understanding you. I wish I hadn’t been so arrogant and stubborn, so I could’ve seen the person that you are, instead of the program that composed you….”

That guilt filled her breaking voice as she buried her face by his neck, her warm tears flowing freely, staining his skin with her sadness.

“…I wish… I wish so badly…”

“Don’t wish Matsuri.”

She looked up at his confidently smiling face, his consoling whisper meek, yet carrying an unexplainable strength.

“Don’t wish for that we cannot have.

I also wished that we had revealed the truth to you in better circumstances. I wished that I had spent with your company, sharing each happiness with you, rather than chasing for your understanding.”

His voice seemed to falter for a second, but melancholy did not reign over his voice.

“But those same circumstances revealed how much you actually mean to me Matsuri. If I never knew the pain of loss, I would never appreciate how much your trust meant to me.”

She tugged on his shirt tighter now, bowing her head. “And I might have never changed...” She added with her own trembling voice, broken by the shame she held, for the weakness she perceived in herself. Quietly she shed her remorseful tears, desiring to let out the guilt that afflicted her that tender moment.

Carefully, she found herself pried from her position by his arms. She felt her face flush with her racing blood as he cupped his right hand by her cheek, and wiping away her tears with a careful stroke of his thumb.

“The past is over now. No matter how much pain we may have gone through in the last few days, we’re here now. All that matters to now, is that you’re here now with me...”

He gently lifted her face by the chin, and once again she found herself gazing at his compassionate eyes.

“…and I’m here for you.”


With those words, the haze of distress that clouded her sight lifted, and for the first time, she truly saw his eyes. In the soft gaze of his dark, caring eyes she felt a force on her soul, unquestioning, unassuming, indiscriminately dissolving the melancholy that held sway to her emotions. What was this force taking over her pitiful soul? This warm acceptance that filled her beating heart with hope? And what was that she saw falling from those tender eyes of his? A tear? But this was not a tear shed for sadness. It was a tear from his own well of emotion that could not be contained any longer. A tear for both of them.

As he had done so gently for her, she slowly raised both her hands to his face, and wiped away the lone tear.

No more was she burdened by the weight of guilt. Gone was the despair that had clouded her mind. Defeated was the pain that only a short while ago suffocated her feelings. There was only a still calmness in her soul. And in that calm, was reflected the image of this very moment of solitude between them.

He had been her source of light in dark times. Her beacon of hope when all seemed lost. Where all had abandoned her, he had persisted, and in his care she had slowly flourished with the kindness that he freely gave to her.

Now, there were words she wished to declare. And for the first time today, her expression was dispelled of all sadness. For the first time today, she smiled. A smile filled with her own compassion, her own tenderness. Most of all, a smile overflowing with gratitude. And with her voice filled with the essence of her warm smile, she spoke to him.

“Thank you Shinji. You don’t know how much your words mean to me. Your kind words have always meant a lot to me, and I cherish them always. But just as you say that you are here for me, I want you to know that I too, will always be here for you.

I made a mistake once, of seeing you by the external parts that composed you, and not the heart of the person inside, and because of that I nearly lost the most precious person in my life. I won’t make that mistake again. No, I cannot make that same mistake again. Because it would pain me greatly to lose you again, you who gave my life so much meaning, you who can make me smile like I do now.

I know that you’ll be leaving for a place that I cannot yet hope to follow. A place filled with many marvelous and dangerous things that I can’t imagine, let alone explain. But no matter where you go Shinji, know that I will always be here, as I have for the last two years, willing to accept you as you are. Let me care for you, as you have cared for me. Let me be kind to you, as your kindness has for me. And let me love you, like the love that you have given me today.”

“Matsuri…” He could only utter her name in reply, an honored name he treasured and called out with much reverence. She blushed to hear him say it so tenderly. And she watched as he too reddened from his words. The smile she wore could not be any more beautiful than at that moment.

It was his turn now to receive. To bask in the radiant warmth that she beamed from her smile, and her sincere pledge. A sight that touched him deeply. It was now his silent tears that fell, his tears that responded to her honest words of love.


“Now Shinji, please allow me to repay the kindness that you have given me. I hope you don’t mind.”

“Don’t mind what?” He asked bewildered, as the girl removed her hands from his face, and laid them on his chest, his curious anticipation building slowly as she stroked his chest.

“Close your eyes for me please?” she whispered to him, complying in kind. Even as she closed her own eyes, his gentle face, so relaxed, as if sleeping. The face of the man to whom she pledged her love to, she will forever engrave in her mind, and her heart.

Hushed now, as she leaned her face towards his.

“Shinji my love, thank you.”

Beautiful stuff. The way you wrote is the style in which I would eventually want to write in. Hat's off to you.

Originally Posted by Reiji Tabibito

15 pages backlog... AND NO ONE MISSED ME? Uguu~!

YOSHA!!

*pats* Hey I was away for a whole week. They didn't miss me either..

Originally Posted by Dream_Traveller

Now, just to tide you over until something bigger (Scarlet Berceuse Part III, Edgar vs. Signum Part III or Storm of Silver Part III, or anything else) comes again, here are two new characters, both mercenaries, that I shall introduce, via a brief bio and appearance pictures.

This brings my total character quota up to 38...actually 39, counting Enzo...eh. But I only have to work on bios for some, the newest ones, really.

The first:

Spoiler for Wyatt Cavendish:

Name: Wyatt Cavendish.

General Appearance:



Age: 25.

Hair color: Light brown.

Eye color: Light brown.

Height: 170cm.

Weight: 68 kg.

Birthday: 7/2/1982, Earth date.

Birth Place: Talis City, 62nd Administrated World: Levany.

Home World: 62nd Administrated World- Levany.

Affiliation: In the employ of the Time-Space Administration Bureau.

Position/Rank in TSAB: None, but is in their service as a mercenary.

Device: Puck, named after the character in A Midsummer Night's Dream.

Device appearance: A blade with a square hook, similar to this:



Save for it being slightly longer.

A simple wakizashi might be more reasonable, though...

Device TypeN: Armed Device.

Magic style: Levan.

Magic circle: Levan rhombus.

Magic color: Mahogany.

Magic element: Generally none.

Partner: Kilroy Schwartz.

Appearance: Taking the general appearance of a street-talker, so he says, he is frequently seen dressed in an olive green overcoat with matching trousers and a white shirt. He wears a bowler hat to top it off, giving himself a somewhat odd yet eccentric look. Wyatt states that the hat is the one "unique facet" of his outward self. His clothes are usually ruffled or creased in places, and yet the hat is kept in an almost impeccable condition.

Personality: A gambler by nature, he is a fast-talker, born and bred. Several people have been annoyed by his constant tendency to jut in during conversations. He is also rather snide, yet he is so in a comic fashion. Towards his foes, he frequently taunts them no matter who they might be, yet some suspect he holds an inner respect for those who match him in combat. Due to his off-the-wall speaking, he is disliked to a degree by Vita. Wyatt has had to suffer the temperance of the Iron Knight more than once, yet he seems to conformed to her berating (and, on the rare occasion, death threats) sent at him for misplaced remarks.

Well, it was to be two...but due to time restraints, that isn't possible.

But I'll leave you with his appearance:

Spoiler for Kilroy Schwartz:

And maybe a third or fourth...?

Spoiler for Random:

*Runs.*

Whoa... that many???? Jeez.... I wish I had your imagination.. (and your time)

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Spoiler for A line from Aurion:

"There will be times that I'll see some potentially dangerous problems in your characters. <grins> And sooner or later, I'll have to break you to be able to fix you properly..."

Links it is!
Aces: Resolution,
The Other Side of Identity: Deals,
Enter: Sophia,
Tyrfing: The Baptism of Fire

Have fun!

Sounds Interesting with Aurion. Who's the line directed at?

1) I just noticed this but Kha-chan
So are we allowed to kill Kha yet? Or does that have to wait...
hmmm, the talk with Saber was interesting to say the least.

2) No comments here...

3) Nice battle there. Just one comment that I want to make... It doesn't really feel right for Signum to be using storm falcon... Since from what we've seen it's more of her 'super' attack (super as in powerful, finishing).. ALthough I could be wrong of course. Yes she can use it, but from canon it would seem that it's only used agaisn't someone/thing that she can't defeat with her sword.

Originally Posted by Saint X

[fanboy]ERSTIN MUST BE REVIVIED!!![/Fanboy]

/off topic. Did you see the end of Otome Zwei 4?

Originally Posted by Tk3997

A small snippet of the Inspection bit I’m working on… partly inspired by Aaron’s recent epic efforts

Spoiler for The Aftermath:

======================
“Vita what the hell were you thinking?!” Hayate crowed as she burst into the infirmary.

“Mostly I was thinking about how much I wanted to bash his face in with a hammer…” She slurred grumpily through her busted swollen lip.

“The correct answer is ‘I wasn’t, sorry master!’ If you didn’t look like you’d gone 10 rounds with Mike Tyson I’d give you The Fist™!” Hayate shouted half crazed as Vita flinched visibly.

It was ruined! All ruined The General was surely now an enemy for life!!!

Nearby:
=====================
“So…” Jack remarked casually rolling back and forth a bit on the balls of his feet beside Felix’s cot.

“Yep.” Felix mumbled back nursing his thrashed arm.

“Did you win at least?”

Felix glared as he answered. “Not exactly, double KO.”

“You blew yourself up as she was about to kick your ass just to spite her didn’t you?” Jack saw through the cryptic response easily.

“Way to make me sound look a loser.” Felix grumbled annoyed.

“Don’t worry you aren’t a loser, you’re a sore loser.”

“I’d give a witty or hate filled reply but I can’t get my rage going through these painkillers... So I’ll just tell you to bite me instead.”

Yes a Fight Scene will occur. It was fairly inevitable really, neither has any tact and one of them would probably talk smack to his own mother while the other has a temper more unstable then nitroglycerine. It’s like tossing a pair of pitbulls into a ring nature is going to take its coruse…

??
Well this looks interesting.

Originally Posted by Nightengale

My Saga is starting to look like Keroko and Aurion's lovechild...

AurekoKerionAurekoKerionAurekoKerionAurekoKerionAu rekoKerionAurekoKerionAurekoKerionAurekoKerion



*runs from ICB and Astranagant*

SO this makes how many partners for Keroko now

I demand a shota! or teenager!Jail in S4 + Lone Island Syndrome with Fate. Since that kid won't really be 'Jail', maybe they could have a decent conversation for once.

I fear the crack that has just been unleashed

Originally Posted by Wibbles

I made a new character. He works with Section 6, but doesn't participate in combat.

Spoiler for Largo Sercosan:

Name: Largo Sercosan
Nicknames: King (rarely answers to anything else)
Sex: Male
Age: 31
Birthday: October 6
Homeworld: Midchilda
Relatives: None known
Occupation/Rank: TSAB
Unit: Section 6
Code Name: King
Mage Rank: Unknown (is believed to have power equivalent to an S-rank mage)
Magic Type: Unknown, possibly Mid-childa
Magic Circle Color: Grey
Favored Element: None
Area of Expertise: Tactics and strategy
Height: Around 6'5
Weight: About 179lbs
Hair: Messy, black
Eye Color: Brown (his right eye is his only real eye)
Build: Solid
Personality: Eccentric, arrogant, laid-back

Device Name: Atamoni
Device Appearance: Multiple nodes that produce an extremely detailed 3D map
Dormant Appearance: Eye-shaped orb (Largo keeps it in his left eye socket)
Barrier Jacket: Crystalline eyepiece on left side of face

Um, considering he's with the Ground Forces, I would think that they would force him into battle, considering the low quality of their forces.

Otherwise he seems pretty good to me.

Originally Posted by Kha

Oh why can't they screen the last epi of Otome Zwei?!

/off topic. You do realise the last ep is out and subbed right?

Originally Posted by Nightengale

Not for another week or 2 sadly.

I'm right now in my examination period. It's still early with the easier subjects, but towards the end of the week, I'll have to up my throttle, else I suffer possibilities of failing one or 2 subjects.

Damn you Eng.Maths and Thermodynamics...

Good luck with the exams!!!

Mechanical engineering I see. Nice.
How many more years until you graduate?
<--- Eng student my self.

Originally Posted by Chaos2Frozen

You know, instead of number rankings, maybe we should just have sticked to alphabets Or maybe we could label the numbers like

0 = Hopeless
1 = Pathetic
2 = Sad
3 = Unimpressive
4 = Acceptable
5 = Common
6 = Good
7 = Outstanding
8 = Talented
9 = Elite
10 = Unrivalled

* note: Lets be honest now Though I can expect very few of us to go below 4 And be sure you understand fully the meaning of 'Unrivalled' and that your character really has to be unstoppable in whichever factor...

... Also, how about a rule that only one stat can be 'Talented' or higher? *

This ranking system looks good to me.
All my characters fit quite well into this.

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Bad news. My mass data storage device got lost. It had a particularly large chunk of newer works. I have a backup at home, but that was a good number of pages of progress lost.

Anyway, I'm not one to be put down by that. ONWARDS!!!!

Ouch. Sucks to hear that.

Hope you can remember what you lost..!!

FIGHTO!!

[Aaron008R]

Originally Posted by Liingo

Sounds Interesting with Aurion. Who's the line directed at?

Still pending...

1) I just noticed this but Kha-chan
So are we allowed to kill Kha yet? Or does that have to wait...
hmmm, the talk with Saber was interesting to say the least.

Hehe. Lucky bastard.

3) Nice battle there. Just one comment that I want to make... It doesn't really feel right for Signum to be using storm falcon... Since from what we've seen it's more of her 'super' attack (super as in powerful, finishing).. ALthough I could be wrong of course. Yes she can use it, but from canon it would seem that it's only used agaisn't someone/thing that she can't defeat with her sword.

I'm following Nighty's example by how Signum fought against Isdera. Sturmfalke with no cartridges used for easier and more shots

Ouch. Sucks to hear that.

Hope you can remember what you lost..!!

FIGHTO!!

Thanks.

@Nighty: Good luck with the exams!

[LoweGear]

Somewhat busy

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Bad news. My mass data storage device got lost. It had a particularly large chunk of newer works. I have a backup at home, but that was a good number of pages of progress lost.

Anyway, I'm not one to be put down by that. ONWARDS!!!!

Youch... First Satashi, then Nighty, then Me, and now you?! I smell a curse somewhere

Hope you retrieve, or at least recall your works.

And DON'T DESPAIR!!!!

FOR YOUR DRILL IS THE DRILL THAT PIERCES THE HEAVENS!!!!!

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

Aurion: Hora, hora. Don't tell me your taking them seriously, eh? <nudge>

Keroko: <grows redder as she flinches away>

Aurion: Oi. (She's taking them seriously alright.)

And Aurion's making it worse

Originally Posted by Aaron008R

He's ALIVE!!!

True men never die even when they are killed?

Originally Posted by Nightengale

Jail: Don't talk as if you understand! You were just a dead girl. I am... Alhazred's child, the criminal... Jail Scaglietti. How can you ask me to live with this kind of knowledge, these memories... knowing how much weight I carry!?
Fate: *hugs him*
Jail: !!!
Fate: You are yourself... If you believe it to be so, then you are yourself, not Jail Scaglietti, not Alhazred's child... but just a child who was burdened with something you did not deserve...

Then shota!Jail can join Erio and Caro, and maybe even Lutecia. :3

Jail: Pleased to meet you, I'm Ja.. I mean, *fake name*, Lu-, I mean, your name is...
Lutecia: ....
Jail: Is..anything wrong?
Lutecia: Have we met?
Jail: !!!

I smell good things coming out of this scenario Then Jail can reform his FATED HAREM!!!

Originally Posted by Nightengale

We need a poster or something.

Keroko in the middle, surrounded by... Serge, Joseth, Aurion, Kha, Lance, Yuuno, Jun, Chrono... who else...?



*runs*

Keroko-chan is PIMPIN

Originally Posted by Nightengale

How about a female Jail then?

Since being male in Nanohaverse is almost...sinful or something.

Then we'd get character development + fanservice!

...

DOES NOT COMPUTE

Originally Posted by Kha

Goddammit overshot the size limit for the 3rd time Xp. I've never ran into another forum that's as tightly regulated as AS. At least it keeps the weeds out, but when its due to one overshooting by 3 pixels and 5 KB...

So if I get banned suddenly, it's probably my sig.

Be careful now, you wouldn't want to end up in Stasis like me

[haiz123321]

@C2F: Maybe we can limit the total number of stats. E.g if there's 4 traits, we give them a limit of 20 points or something but i like your idea better though.
But don't forget that when 2 unrivaled clash, one will drop to elite while one stays unrivaled

@Kha: lol gl =X

According to C2F:

0 = Hopeless
1 = Pathetic
2 = Sad
3 = Unimpressive
4 = Acceptable
5 = Common
6 = Good
7 = Outstanding
8 = Talented
9 = Elite
10 = Unrivalled

Koumyou:
Melee: 7
Range: 6
Nuke: 0
Tactics: 7

Koumyou: Berserk Drive
Melee: 8
Range: 6
Nuke: 0
Tactics: 2

Koumyou: Berserk Drive Stage 2
Melee: 10
Range: 6
Nuke: 0
Tactics: 0

Clawad:
Melee: 7
Range: 8
Nuke: 0
Combination: 9
Tactics: 0-9(depending whether he is fighting recklessly or strategically)

Clawad: Relic Charged Weapon
Melee: 10
Range: 8
Nuke: 0
Combination: 10
Tactics: 0-9

I don't think it's that h4xxed cause there were some parts where it has a big ZERO
EDIT: For Clawad's range, if anyone could give me the rating range of Sei's deep diver, I'll change

[Arrow]

Originally Posted by Nightingale

How about a female Jail then?

Since being male in Nanohaverse is almost...sinful or something.

Then we'd get character development + fanservice!

Originally Posted by LoweGear

...

DOES NOT COMPUTE

My sentiments exactly. o.o It's not entirely true that being male in the Nanoha-verse is sinful...there're a few male characters (although for some reason pretty much all significant (as in non-redshirt) magical combatants are female, Erio being an exception.

Geez, given the male/female ratio of things so far, perhaps Nanoha/Fate is considered typical by Mid-Childan standards.

You know, instead of number rankings, maybe we should just have sticked to alphabets Or maybe we could label the numbers like

0 = Hopeless
1 = Pathetic
2 = Sad
3 = Unimpressive
4 = Acceptable
5 = Common
6 = Good
7 = Outstanding
8 = Talented
9 = Elite
10 = Unrivalled

* note: Lets be honest now Though I can expect very few of us to go below 4 And be sure you understand fully the meaning of 'Unrivalled' and that your character really has to be unstoppable in whichever factor...

... Also, how about a rule that only one stat can be 'Talented' or higher? *

I like that scale. Stat-wise, maybe it should be added up to a certain sum for non-canonical characters. Like, all stats, when added up, have to be equal to 30 or something. Of course, it depends on how many stats in question you use. The normal ones are, of course...

• Physical Attacks
• Ranged Attacks
• Area/HE Attacks
• Defence for said physical/ranged/area attacks
• Mobility (includes agility and reflexes)
• Accuracy (you can have all the attack in the world, but it's useless if you can't bring it to bear)

Something like that. We can further streamline it if we need to.

[haiz123321]

Some images i may use in the future

Spoiler for Random:

If anyone used these images, plz tell me

[Nightengale]

Originally Posted by LoweGear

DOES NOT COMPUTE

Originally Posted by Arrow

My sentiments exactly. o.o It's not entirely true that being male in the Nanoha-verse is sinful...there're a few male characters (although for some reason pretty much all significant (as in non-redshirt) magical combatants are female, Erio being an exception.

Geez, given the male/female ratio of things so far, perhaps Nanoha/Fate is considered typical by Mid-Childan standards.

I wasn't completely serious, but it'd make for a decent homage.



Now if only someone can photoshop the blue hair => purple... and the eyes gold...