Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[00-Raiser]

Posted Of Mice and Men to FF.net.

And now, who wants some Chrono/Yuuno?!

Spoiler for Playground Logic:

“And I’ll need this one, this one, oh and this one too, by the end of the day.” Chrono said, holding out a list.

Yuuno gawked at him. “You just read off every book on that list!”

“What’s the problem?” The older male asked flatly.

“That’s over fifty different books!” The librarian complained. “And you want them by the end of the day?”

“Of course. I’m not asking for much.” Chrono deadpanned.

“Not…!? Did it ever occur to you that I might have other things to do?”

“Of course you don’t have other things to do.” Chrono snorted. “You don’t have a life. Now get to work, ferret-boy.”

Yuuno felt the vein in his head threaten to burst and he tried to calm himself. “You know, Chrono, I’ve been wondering, but why do you always give me such a hard time?!”

“Hm?” Chrono blinked. “You have all the knowledge of the universe at your fingertips and you don’t even know that?”

“Know wha…” Yuuno was cut off when the other male pulled him in and crushed their lips together. The blond went wide eyed and stayed that way even after Chrono had pulled away.

“Everyone knows that you tease the person you like.” He said monotonously, enjoying the look of shock and confusion on Yuuno’s face. Chrono then turned and exited, leaving an utterly baffled archaeologist in his wake.

X---X

Some time later…

Yuuno blushed, feeling the coolness of the sheets on his naked back as he looked up into the eyes of his equally naked lover.

“What’s wrong?” Chrono asked. “Not ready?”

“N-No, I guess I’m ready…” Yuuno glanced away. “But… can I ask something first?”

“Okay.”

“… Why is Amy here?” The males both looked at the woman sitting in the corner holding a video camera.

“A condition of the divorce is that she gets to watch.” Chrono explained.

“Oh don’t mind me, boys.” Amy grinned, making sure her camera was recording. “Do continue!”

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by isagrimorie

The Arrows Fall Backwards

Part 1: Brave New World

Spoiler for The Arrows Fall Backwards -- Part I: Brave New World:

Spoiler for Author's Note:

The title was snapped up from Tom McRae's Mermaid Blues and chapter heads taken from the lyrics of TV on the Radio by DLZ.

This story idea took root a few months ago before I knew anything about the plot of Nanoha Movie 1st film and movie. So, I hope you forgive whatever similarities you might find. And, despite what happened and will happen I'm really not trying to write a Darker and Edgier version but I did want to explore what would if, for whatever reason, Nanoha and Yuuno were unable to meet and take it from there.

Also, I'm having a WIP amnesty month so you might see more of my works in progress this month!

Oooh, this one! From the destruction involved, I could see the TSAB needing someone to take the fall, even if that someone is a nine-year old girl. I wonder how Nanoha will react to it all, since she might blame herself for giving Fate a chance, or use Fate as a target for her grief and anger...

And now to wonder what's happening next ....

Originally Posted by Thunderbird

Because I was bored...probably been done before, but I've never seen it. More for RB though since she likes this sort of thing...I think

Spoiler for Well done...my daughter...:

*runs before she gets skewered by bullets*

Fascinating concept , I've always been fascinated with that scene in the first season. Having Fate be infused with a Jewel Seed is an interesting idea, but I'm wondering, what was Fate's wish? If she wanted to help her mother, I wonder if she could have taken Precia to Al-Hazard instead of fight...

Fate's characterization post-Jewel Seed insertion didn't really sit with me...she seemed a little too dark and harsh, unless the process altered her personality?

Great idea though, I like it!

Originally Posted by synaesthetic

Double post for great justice... and also fic!

false light
a false light casts a darker Shadow...

Interesting, interesting . Lutecia's going to have her hands full there, as her mission seemed to have gotten more complicated in one day!

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Well I had a thought of a particular something that Vivio could abuse if she wanted to:

Spoiler for Get Out of Jail Free Card:

Vivio happily skipped down the steps in her empty home. The rest of her family had left early in the morning, giving her the perfect opportunity is enact her plan for the day.

Glancing at the wall clock, she counted down the seconds until she heard a knock at the door.

Exactly on time.

Vivio pulled open the door to see the two red heads she was expecting.

“Heya, Vivio!” Wendi greeted, hopping inside. “You all set?”

“You bet!” Vivio grinned. “I’ve been waiting for so long!”

“I know getting the new single is important and all…” Nove spoke up hesitantly. “But is it really okay for you to skip school like this, Vivio?”

“Don’t worry, Nove.” Vivio assured her. “We’re just reviewing some stuff in class today, that’s all. I can afford to miss it this once.”

“Even so, won’t you get in trouble for not being there?” Nove added.

“That’s easily taken care of!” Vivio went over to the house terminal and called up a screen. She blocked the video and then input the number for her school. While it rang, she cleared her throat.

“St Hilde Magic Acadamey.” The secretary greeted. “How may I help you?”

“Yes, this is Yuuno Scrya, Vivio Takamachi’s father. I’ve called to inform you that my daughter will be absent from school today because she’s not feeling very well.”

“Okay then, Mr Scrya. Thank you for letting us know.”

“You’re welcome.” The call ended and Vivio returned her voice to normal. “There, all set.”

“Wow, you sounded just like him!” Wendi gasped. “How do you do it?”

Vivio just shrugged.

Spoiler for note:

For those who don't know, Yuuno and Vivio share a voice actress

I had forgotten about the VA detail, so it was only after I read the author's note that I laughed !

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

I spent the last two days working on this, and honestly, for some reason I couldn't quite pin it down even though I knew what I wanted from the characters. Anyway, this is the romantic short I've owed Syn for awhile, the official start of the Celica/Victor ship, if you will.

I apologize if it's a bit disjointed, that tends to happen when I stretch the writing period over several days.

Spoiler for But:

Thoughts of romance didn’t cross Celica’s mind often or overwhelmingly. She was hardly a stranger to the concept, but to her the idea was a distant one; something often portrayed in books and movies between two people who magically fell madly and deeply in love with each other within five seconds of meeting while pretty harp music played in the background.

So, okay, maybe she was being a little cynical. If romance didn’t work, Chrono wouldn’t be married with a family; the same for Hayate. And Lutecia, for all her cracks and hang-ups, was still happily dating her girlfriend. The simple fact was that Celica tended to be logical in choosing her partners; at times she was driven by an attractiveness factor, but largely, she knew what she wanted and didn’t let romance cloud her head.

With a scowl, the agent brushed loose strands of hair out of her eyes. Why was she even thinking about romance, anyway? It wasn’t like starting to date someone always had to be a romantic thing. It could just as easily be casual, or hell, it could be a one-night stand where they went to work and didn’t acknowledge it had happened the next day. Besides, romance and Victor Stormhawk didn’t exactly fit together—

And dammit, she’d acknowledged it. Fuck.

Cursing, Celica clicked the file she’d been working on closed and leaned back into her chair with a sigh. “I blame it on Alphine,” she mumbled to nobody in particular. Lutecia didn’t look it, but the woman was a master matchmaker; or, at the very least, she was getting tips from Caro. Considering that Victor had a not-so-well-hidden crush on Celica, the work was pretty much half done for her.

… Okay, so, it wasn’t like Celica was exactly unwilling. She was busy and logical, not dead, and Victor was a damned attractive man. Not overly muscular, but he kept in shape, and the fact that Lutecia’s recent habit of giving the man’s dirty blonde hair a light yank when he got over eager about something (made easier because he kept his hair in a short rat’s tail). And those eyes….

Yes, Celica was a sucker for blonde hair and brown eyes. She didn’t need to be reminded.

Grumbling, the gray-eyed woman slid off her glasses and rubbed her eyes, feeling the soft ache of a developing headache. But, she mused. If it was just a physical thing, she could get it out of her system; she was no stranger to it. And if Victor was just some guy she knew on the street, she would have no issue with it.

But.

Victor was someone she knew; not necessarily someone she cared about (she would never admit otherwise), but still someone she respected and trusted, someone she even joked with when she was in the mood. And to top that off, they were both good friends with Lutecia; anything that happened between them would undoubtedly spill over to her.

But.

And of course, the lovely morality issue. Thinking of it made Celica smirk; with Shadows, it always circled back to morality, but in her case it was very simple. She had no problem admitting that as far as morals went, killing wasn’t something that kept her up at night. Oh, she was certainly not a psycho looking for her next victim, she didn’t enjoy it, but she never lost any sleep over it. She didn’t have regrets, and she didn’t have some kind of faint emotional attachment to her victims like Lutecia tended to.

Victor certainly wasn’t as bad as Lutecia; he knew to keep his distance, to keep the line between victim and friend drawn clearly in the sand. But at the same time, he wasn’t as cold as Celica was, wasn’t as methodical, as merciless. He still had a certain degree of attachment; he had his ideals of right and wrong; he knew he was taking a life and acknowledged it, paid his dues for it. It wasn’t a large difference, but it was still there.

Celica saw in shades of gray, occasionally in black. Victor still had a little white in his world, even if only a few dots and splashes.

“So, okay, it’s a stupid reason, stop reminding me.” Grumbling to herself and wondering if she needed to get out more often, Celica pushed her glasses back into place. She knew it was…. odd was the best word she could use, to not try to chase after someone because of morality. But Celica was logical, and in her mind, this was the biggest trip-up of anything they could have together. How could they possibly function if they were on different planes of morality?

No sooner did the thought form, then she heard the voices in her head start to chatter, to point out the counterexample to her thought. After all, Lutecia’s girlfriend didn’t even know what Lutecia did for a living; no doubt their takes on morality were as different as day and night, and that the summoner probably did a million things every day that broke the other girl’s rules. Yet, they were happy together! …. Okay, so, maybe Lutecia was hiding her job occupation, but that was a required part of being a Shadow.

Now, the woman growled as the thought continued to nag at her. “Would you just shut up and leave me alone?”

“Aw, but I just got here.”

… Dammit.

Cursing her luck, Celica whirled her chair around to see Victor casually leaning against the frame of the door to her office. “What are you doing here?” she asked. She knew the answer before he even spoke; no doubt Lutecia knew she was working long hours and didn’t want her to be left alone.

“Alphine asked me to keep an eye on you.” As if sensing Celica’s thoughts, he shrugged at the look she gave him. “Said she’d have done it herself, but she had some errands her mother asked her to run.”

That was either true, or it was the worst lie Lutecia had ever come up with; in any case, Celica wasn’t going to think about it too much. “Her mom has her wrapped around her finger, if that’s the case,” she commented, and turned back to face her computer, smirking at Victor’s soft snort of laughter. “Anyway, don’t you have somewhere to be tonight?”

“Nowhere important, unless you count a date at home with late night television.” The man shrugged. “And I’ll probably get a call from maintenance scolding me because I let Stella get banged up during my last mission.”

“What an exciting night.”

“I live for it.”

The response was in line with Victor’s usual snark, and while Celica didn’t laugh, she still smiled a little. The work she had to finish for the night wasn’t time-consuming or meaningful—she just had to complete a few reports, but she had felt a lazy streak and had pushed them off until the end of the day—so despite the fact that she worked, she was well aware of the man’s presence.

Screw not thinking about it too much. Lutecia had clearly set this up; Celica was certain that somewhere, the summoner was snickering to herself at the position she had managed to put both of her friends in. Payback for all those times she had been teased about her nonexistent sex life.

But.

It wasn’t like Lutecia didn’t have good intentions—deep, deep down. And really, if she wasn’t willing to go along with it, Celica would have made herself clear and the purple-haired woman would have backed off. Morality issue aside, there was no way of denying it: at the very least, a simple attraction was there.

And personally, I’m not a huge fan of living my life by ‘buts’.

“Hey, Vic.” Almost on reflex, she added, “Don’t touch.”

He immediately retracted his hand from a computer; he meant no serious harm, he was just a little too curious for his own good sometimes when it came to her work. “Yeah, Iris?”

“I haven’t eaten dinner yet.” She continued to type away. “Unless that date you have with late night television is really hot and kinky, want to pick up something to eat with me when I’m done here? I should be out in an hour or so.”

There was a long silence. Despite what hung between them at that moment, Celica wasn’t nervous or worried; she simply waited.

But.

“Sure. You buying, or me? I have no problem either way.”

Celica smirked.

“My treat.”

As always, your little details show a lot of character . I especially like how Celica seems like a very self-aware person--she knows what makes her tick, she knows what people are probably up to, she knows how she feels about things and what kinds of ends are likely to come. Rational, yet not too cold. It fits quite nicely with how she's been shown in Syn's false light .

Payback for all those times she had been teased about her nonexistent sex life.

Now THAT'S just the best line in there!

Great job RB, and just randomly, from Victor's description he looks nothing like how I imagined him to be!

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Another short from me.

Spoiler for Question:

"Can I ask you something?"

"Hmm?" It wasn't too often that this kind of question ever came up, so she was curious as to what the question was.

"Why did you ever put up with me for so long?"

There were plenty of answers that could have been given to that. Like how she had no choice in the matter, how at least she wasn't as bad as their masters had been, or even how it could have been out of pity.

In the end, she didn't say any of that.

"Because, if I had left you, you would have been all alone, and I couldn't do that to you."

"...Thanks, Signum."

Spoiler for Notes:

According to the Sound Stages, Vita acted like a real brat to the other Wolkenritter. Makes me wonder if Vita never wondered why the others put up with her for so long.

Woah, until you mentioned "Vita" I thought it was Hayate who was talking with Signum . And that confused me some, since the lack of tags meant that I got the two speakers mixed up since neither of them were saying anything I expected them to (it was reading "at least she wasn't as bad as their masters had been" that made me think it was Hayate).

Having Signum think one thing and say another was interesting to read, it gave an interesting feel of Signum's character and thought patterns to do something like that.

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Awww, that was a sweet little short

Well here's a new fic from me. With Nanya's permission, I've written this story that is set in the Day in the Life timeline that focuses on Miyuki and Shamal.

Spoiler for Of Mice and Men:

Miyuki sighed as her eyes scanned the listings on the bulletin board. Posted for all to see were available residences in the area but unfortunately for Miyuki they were all out of her price range.

After what happened on Mid Childa, Miyuki had decided to move back to Earth to start over. While the option of returning to the Midori-ya was still open, Miyuki was against it. Doing so would feel like she was crawling back with her tail between her legs after a failed venture and her pride wouldn’t allow for that.

Besides, being around her happily married brother and sister-in-law would only serve as an unpleasant reminder.

So she was determined to find a place of her own and move on with her life using her own two feet. Right now what she needed was a roof over her head and then to find some employment. However a major obstacle was the fact that most of Miyuki’s funds were in Mid Childan currency, making them worthless on her home planet.

Sighing again, she wondered if she’d be sleeping on a park bench that night when she heard some one call out to her.

“Hey, isn’t that Miyuki?”

Miyuki turned to see a girl with brown hair that feel past her shoulders and familiar green eyes.

“Nami!” Miyuki smiled, happy to run into her old friend. Her high school chum had been one of the few people she regretted leaving behind when she moved to another world.

“Glad to see you still remember me.” Nami chuckled. “It’s been awhile, hasn’t it? When did you get back? Last I heard you moved to some distant country.”

“Err, yeah, something like that.” Miyuki forced a laugh, remembering the cover story for her absence. “But after… some stuff… I decided to come back here.”

“Oh?” Nami raised an eyebrow after catching the hesitation in her friend’s voice, but she decided not to press just yet. “Well since it’s been so long, we got quite a bit of catching up to do. Why don’t you come over to my place and we’ll chat?”

Miyuki weighed her options but saw no real reason to refuse. She knew she wouldn’t find lodging for the night, so being indoors for a bit would be nice. Plus, she had missed the company of her friend and wanted to spend some time with her.

“Sure, let’s go.”

It had been ages since Miyuki last stepped foot on the grounds of the Kanzaki shrine, but she was a bit delighted to see that it hadn’t changed at all.

“It’s been like this for centuries, so I doubt it’s going to change any time soon.” Nami grinned when Miyuki voiced her thoughts.

After heading inside, Miyuki sat at a table while Nami went to go get refreshments for her guest. Looking around the room idly, Miyuki felt something brush up against her leg. Looking down she saw a fox rubbing up against her.

“Hey there, Kuon.” Miyuki smiled, scratching behind the animal’s ears. “Haven’t seen you in awhile either.” The fox leapt into her lap and made itself comfortable.

“Looks like she also hasn’t forgotten you.” Nami smiled as she returned with a tray.

“I guess not. She…” Miyuki paused as she saw the bottle and tiny cups Nami was carrying. “Sake? I was expecting tea.”

“Well…” Nami sat and poured the liquid into a cup and passing it to Miyuki. “It looked like you could use this more.”

“Heh,” Miyuki scoffed as she accepted the cup. “Is it that obvious?”

“Do you want to talk about it, or do you just want to get drunk and forget about it?” Nami asked, pouring her own cup.

“… Might as well.” Miyuki decide, downing her cup and asking for more. “Telling you about it is probably better than holding it in.”

“So, what happened over there?” Nami poured her another cup.

“Where to start?” Miyuki wondered. “Well, in the first place I moved so I could be closer to Nanoha. She was expecting so I wanted to be there to help.”

“Really? Nanoha? I had no idea.”

“Sorry for not telling you, but yeah, Nanoha’s now with two people who love her and they have three wonderful children together. I’ll make sure you get invited to the wedding.”

“Thanks.” Nami said, taking a sip of her own drink.

“Anyways, I wanted to be there for her, mostly because I felt guilty for leaving her alone when she was little. I wanted to make up for that so I packed up and moved with my parents.” Miyuki chuckled derisively. “I guess that was a bit reckless of me, just dropping my life here and moving there.”

“You did it because you love your sister, right? I don’t see anything wrong with that.”

“Thanks, Nami. But still, it got to a point where Nanoha was okay on her own and didn’t really need my help all that much. She still asked for it, of course, but I think it was more to give me something to do. Other than being with her, I really had no life of my own there.”

“But that changed when I was given a job by one of Nanoha’s friends.” Miyuki sipped. “Her name’s Shamal and she’s a doctor. I worked as her receptionist at her clinic and I ended up moving into the apartment above it. So I had a job and my own place, but it still wasn’t enough. I got closer to Shamal, though, and it became clear she was interested in me romantically.”

“You always were the popular one.” Nami noted.

“Sometimes unfortunately.” Miyuki snorted. “There was this one patient who kept flirting with me and wouldn’t take no for an answer. Shamal eventually blew up at him and chased him away. I guess I have strong pheromones or something…” Downing another cup, Miyuki glanced at the other girl. “You don’t have the urge to jump me, do you?”

Nami shrugged a shoulder. “I’m straight.”

“I guess shrine maidens are supposed to remain pure anyways.”

“Hey, just because I’m the head priestess here doesn’t mean I’m still a virgin.” Nami huffed. “Anyways, so what went on with this Shamal woman?”

“There were a few bumps along the way, but eventually we started dating.” Miyuki explained. “It was her first relationship so she was inexperienced and unsure of herself, but we managed… for awhile, anyways.”

“Oh?”

“Yeah.” Miyuki drank again. “Well, I suppose something that started in a hospital room wasn’t exactly blessed to begin with.”

“Injured? Her or you?”

“Me,” Miyuki said. “A bodyguard job that had some… unexpected outcomes.”

“You’re still doing that?” Nami stared. Miyuki shrugged.

“So anyway, Shamal’s a good woman, so I decided to go out with her. It was nice at first, and we even started living together. I liked being with her and the sex was pretty good too.”

“Sounds like a keeper to me.” Nami noted.

“I thought so too, but the longer we were together, the more problems came up.” Miyuki held out her cup. “Let me tell you, it’s not a good idea to date your doctor. The outcomes of my last job had a few lasting effects, so Shamal would always fuss over me to make sure I was fine and I didn’t do anything to make my condition worse. Initially I thought it was sweet and it showed just how much she cared about me. She came with me when I went training and I liked doing that stuff with her.”

“But even after those lasting effects where gone, Shamal never stopped.” Miyuki sighed. “She came with me everywhere, and when she didn’t she’d always question where I went and what I was doing. If I admitted to something she didn’t like, she’d go off and start lecturing me about how I need to take better care of myself.”

“She wasn’t too far off base.” Nami pointed out. “Especially if a bunch of stuff happened to you.”

“I know,” Miyuki admitted. “But even so, it was too much. It was just my normal training regimen. I’ve been following it for so many years now so I’m pretty sure I know what I’m doing. What’s more, every time another person made a pass at me, Shamal would snap at them and chase them off. It all eventually got on my nerves. I’m a grown woman, damn it! I can take care of myself! It’s like she didn’t trust me to handle things at all!”

“Now, now.” Nami tried to calm her friend down. It seemed the alcohol was starting to affect her. If Miyuki had low tolerance or if it was just the placebo effect, Nami didn’t know.

“She was suffocating me! I couldn’t do a single thing without her watching me like a hawk! She treated me like some kind of child! I wanted a lover, not a mother! I already have two of those!”

“Did you talk to her about it?”

“Of course I did.” Miyuki slumped back. “I told her to stop fussing over me so much, but it just wasn’t possible for her. She’s just that kind of person; she is a doctor after all. Nothing really wrong with that, but it felt like she was just restraining me. It wasn’t right to ask her to change who she is either. That’s basically what she had been trying to do to me, getting me to take it easier, and I hated it. I guess we’re just two people who weren’t meant to be together.”

“I see.” Was all Nami said.

“Or maybe I’m just an idiot.” Miyuki laid her head on the table. “Maybe I shouldn’t have broken up with her. She cared about me so much, maybe I should have done what she wanted…”

“The way I see it,” Nami sipped her drink. “You had to choose between your relationship and your freedom. You just picked your freedom. I find no fault in your choice.”

“Really?”

“Yeah. If Shamal couldn’t accept your need for freedom, you just have to find some one who will. I’m sure there’s one person out there who will accept all of you as is.”

“Finding them is the problem.”

“Heh, too true.”

“Well, it’s not like this is my first break up.” Miyuki sat up straight again with a mirthless grin. “I just have to put it behind me. Besides, I have to wonder how seriously I was taking it in the first place. It’s possible I was so desperate for my own life there that I just hooked up with the first available nice person in order to add to that life.”

“So what are you going to do now?” Nami asked.

“I planned on returning to my life here.” Miyuki answered. “But I don’t want to just go back to the café. I want to find my own place and a job so I don’t have to rely on anyone.”

“That would explain where I found you.”

“Uh huh. But just my luck there’s nothing suitable for me. Looks like I’ll be sleeping on the street tonight.”

“Of course you won’t.” Nami shook her head. “You’re going to stay here.”

“I can’t do that. I said I don’t want to rely on anyone…”

“Be realistic, Miyuki.” Nami sighed. “I know you can take care of yourself, but sometimes you do need to accept help from others.”

“I don’t want to be a leech…”

“And you won’t be.” Nami smirked. “You know how big our grounds are, and some one needs to clean them. Work at the shrine and in return you can stay, at least until you can find something elsewhere. How does that sound?”

“…” Miyuki considered it before smiling at her friend. “Sure, sounds like a good arrangement to me.”

“Well then,” Nami smiled back, holding up her cup. “Let’s take good care of each other.”

“Yeah.” Miyuki tapped her cup against Nami’s before they both took a swig. “So… You sure my pheromones won’t make you jump me, right?”

Nami laughed. “I told you I’m straight.”

X---X

Across the far reaches of space on the planet of Mid Childa, Shamal sat alone in the bedroom of the otherwise empty apartment. It was only a few days ago that she would cuddle happily under the sheets with her lover, but tonight it felt so cold.

“Shamal?”

Shamal looked up, having not noticed her mistress entering the apartment.

“Hayate…”

The brunette went over and sat besides the other woman on the bed. “How are you doing?” She asked despite knowing the answer.

“Hurt… and confused…” Shamal muttered. “I don’t understand how this happened… We were so happy, and then… I don’t get it.”

“Well,” Hayate put her arm around the doctor’s shoulders and pulled her in. “Sometimes things just fall apart like this.”

“But why?” Shamal asked weakly. “I cared about her so much…”

“From what I understand, you cared about her too much.”

“Can you really care about some one too much?” Shamal looked up.

“When it gets to the point where the other person is troubled by it, yes.” Hayate said.

“But I just wanted what was best for her.” Shamal said, sounding like she was trying to convince Hayate of that fact. “Her body had been hurt so much. I just wanted to make sure she took care of herself, but she said I was suffocating her…”

“She wanted some space, right?”

“Yes, I tried to give it to her, but… I was so worried; I didn’t want anything else to happen to her. I don’t get how that was wrong…”

“Well, think of it this way,” Hayate started. “You know how much I care about you and the others, but how would you feel if I kept telling you what you could and couldn’t do, if I strictly monitored your actions, and otherwise tried to exert complete control over you?”

“… That’s like what our previous masters did…”

“Right? But I respect your desire to go off and do your own things. I allow you that freedom and I trust you to be able to take care of yourself. I think that’s what Miyuki wanted. She wanted you to allow her to do her own thing without you always trying to keep her safe.”

“I still don’t see…”

“No, wanting her to be safe isn’t a bad thing, but…” Hayate paused for the words. “But there can be too much of a good thing. You just kept the leash too short…”

“I… I see…” Shamal sounded defeated. “Is it too late to fix it?”

“I think so, yes.” Hayate said sadly. “Miyuki’s already gone back to Earth and she might not be interested in getting back together with you.”

“So in the end I’m not fit to be in a relationship after all…” Shamal started crying. “I really tried my hardest, I really wanted to be with Miyuki but… Now I won’t be able to be with anyone else…”

“Don’t be silly, Shamal.” Hayate grabbed the older woman’s shoulders and held her at arm’s length. “You can’t think like that. Yes, this relationship didn’t work out, but there will be others. You made some mistakes, but if you keep them in mind for next time, you can avoid making them again.”

“… Really?” Shamal sniffed.

“I guarantee it.” Hayate smiled. “Give it time, and once you’re ready I’m sure you’ll find some one else.”

“If you say so…” Shamal wiped at her eyes. “… Would… Would it be all right if I moved back in with you? I don’t want to be alone…”

“Of course.” Hayate brushed aside a stray hair. “We’re family, after all.”

Spoiler for notes:

Nami is Miyuki's best friend from Triangle Heart and one of the sub-heroines.

Well, it's never been a secret that I don't care for the Miyuki/Shamal storyline in Day. The idea of the pairing itself seems farfetched, but to their credit Nanya and RB did develop it decently enough, rather than them meeting and magically falling in love or something. But still, as it went on it basically became "Miyuki gets injured and Shamal worries herself sick over it" repeated several times. At this point in time, I believe it's Miyuki's 3rd stay in the hospital?

Anyways, I felt something different needed to happen, and considering the way Shamal acts towards Miyuki, I figured a break up was the most likely outcome for the reasons explored in the fic.

The idea of having Miyuki run into Nami and chat like that was inspired by an episode of the Kimi ga Nozomu Eien (I can spell that without looking it up!) Next Season OVA that had a similar set up. I thought it was really well done so I used it here.

I liked the idea of the story, of having Miyuki and Shamal split because in a way, they loved each other too much (always worrying) and also not enough (not trusting the other to properly take care of herself). The writing was good, nothing too dramatic and having both of them at a stage where they were sad, but getting that they weren't going to be able to fix what went wrong and not having hard feelings about it.

That being said, I actually think that in Day in the Life, Shamal doesn't flutter over Miyuki to the point that you describe in this story. I would actually frown more on Miyuki in Day, since she's pretty reckless with herself in a way that I find unprofessional and frankly, a tad superfluous. So actually, I could see Shamal dumping Miyuki instead, for refusing to take care of herself and ignoring medical advice.

It's a good story, but I personally have trouble connecting it to the events in Day at this point. I can see this maybe after a long, long build-up, but I'd think that Miyuki and Shamal would be the types who would be humble enough to address the issue before then . But then again, that's up to Nanya and RB .

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

I liked the idea of the story, of having Miyuki and Shamal split because in a way, they loved each other too much (always worrying) and also not enough (not trusting the other to properly take care of herself). The writing was good, nothing too dramatic and having both of them at a stage where they were sad, but getting that they weren't going to be able to fix what went wrong and not having hard feelings about it.

That being said, I actually think that in Day in the Life, Shamal doesn't flutter over Miyuki to the point that you describe in this story. I would actually frown more on Miyuki in Day, since she's pretty reckless with herself in a way that I find unprofessional and frankly, a tad superfluous. So actually, I could see Shamal dumping Miyuki instead, for refusing to take care of herself and ignoring medical advice.

It's a good story, but I personally have trouble connecting it to the events in Day at this point. I can see this maybe after a long, long build-up, but I'd think that Miyuki and Shamal would be the types who would be humble enough to address the issue before then . But then again, that's up to Nanya and RB .

Heh, well I'll admit that my mind may have embellished things Day is so huge with so much going on it's impossible to keep everything straight I was also working off the idea that after Miyuki made it through that last seal and got released that Shamal would get extra protective. People in their first relationships tend to try a bit too hard, trying to be with and please their partner as much as possible and it can usually cause a break up.

[Jimmy C]

Originally Posted by synaesthetic

Oh, and concerning the Devices, they were obtained during the Wolkenritter's rampage on Earth--they were taking out Bureau clerks to gain pages for the Book before they switched to fighting alien monsters on other worlds. Gil Graham also encountered an injured clerk on Earth as well. These guys just put out a very wide net and managed to obtain enough bits and pieces to construct some functional tech out of it.

Simply being able to kitbash together a makeshift Device out of broken pieces isn't going to help anyone on Earth figure out the technology. Reverse engineering doesn't work that way. Devices depend on two things that the people of UAW 97 have no idea about. First, an energy source that isn't supposed to exist according to their worldview. Second, the "generator" for this energy being inside humans. They'd need someone who knows about magic and Linker Cores to show them the way. Otherwise, they won't even know if they've got a working Device or not.

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Heh, well I'll admit that my mind may have embellished things Day is so huge with so much going on it's impossible to keep everything straight I was also working off the idea that after Miyuki made it through that last seal and got released that Shamal would get extra protective. People in their first relationships tend to try a bit too hard, trying to be with and please their partner as much as possible and it can usually cause a break up.

That's fair , as it's your idea. It's definitely possible from what's being shown in Day, but I guess I'm far more optimistic about Miyuki and Shamal's ability to talk things out!

Although if you say "please their partner", I'd think that it might be more likely that Shamal tries her hardest to give Miyuki her space and just bottles up her own concerns, possibly leading to conflict in other areas as the tension and unsaid worries build . Or maybe she would sneakily keep tabs on Miyuki, but when the truth comes out it causes a huge rift. It would fit with her character, as the Wolkenritter spent their whole existence before Hayate blankly obeying and pleasing their past masters.

But anyways, that's just logistics . The story itself was very good, I liked the maturity in everyone, it really came through in your writing.

[yuiseppe]

Just another piece of fanart for fanfic because I finally got some time - Satashi's version of Keroko's Syn. Originally was going to be based on Dezo's cracktastic comment on synergy a while back, but this came out instead :S

Spoiler for At ease, soldier.:

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... because 'regulation hairstyle' doesn't exist in the Nanoha universe.

EDIT: attributions.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

It fits quite nicely with how she's been shown in Syn's false light .

Extremely relieved to hear that. I'd already discussed Celica's character at length with Syn before I sat down to type the short out, but I swear Celica was fighting me every step of the way; in the end, I'm glad people thought she was true to how she's been potrayed in false light, that means I didn't fail completely at showing her thoughts and feelings!

Now THAT'S just the best line in there!

Lutecia tends to be the Butt Monkey in this area. A lot of people like to tease her about how she isn't getting any.

Great job RB, and just randomly, from Victor's description he looks nothing like how I imagined him to be!

Victor's description was, again, something I discussed at length with Syn before I finally settled on what he looked like. I figured it was about time we had a physical description of the man, since he's never been properly described before.

[Nanya01]

Another short, I just keep thinking things up. *Shrug* Go figure.

Spoiler for Sleeping:

People thought that Nanoha and Fate were lesbians, after all, they shared a bed, slept together, were in the companty of women more often than they were with men, raised a daughter together.

The answer was a lot different than that. They would never say that they were lesbians, even if they did love each other. The truth was, Nanoha and Fate just preferred to sleep together because they liked to know that someone was near them when they slept. Fate never could sleep well on her own, knowing that there was someone near her allowed her to sleep though nearly anything.

As for Nanoha? She liked to cuddle when she was asleep. Until she adopted Vivio, it wasn't uncommon for her end up next to Fate as the two slept together.

There were only a few people that knew this. Hayate did, which was why she gave them a room together when they were in Riot Force Six. Lindy knew about Fate's sleeping problems, since the blond had slipped into her bed when she was little several times. The older woman had thought it was cute when she woke up with Fate hugging her side in the mornings. Yuuno knew that Nanoha liked to cuddle a lot. He discovered it completely by accident when he tucked Nanoha in one night after working hard. The girl had grabbed him and pulled him right into bed with her. At first, he was worried that she'd hurt him by accident, like that time she had thought he was food and tried to eat him. In the end, she calmed down completely and just snuggled up to him, smiling.

So, in the end, Nanoha and Fate sleeping together just made sense. Their sleeping problems just made things easier for them to sleep when they were in the same bed.

Spoiler for Comments:

Hey, look, a NanoFate short from me. Will wonders never cease? So, yes, I can do NanoFate too.

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

Extremely relieved to hear that. I'd already discussed Celica's character at length with Syn before I sat down to type the short out, but I swear Celica was fighting me every step of the way; in the end, I'm glad people thought she was true to how she's been potrayed in false light, that means I didn't fail completely at showing her thoughts and feelings!

Lutecia tends to be the Butt Monkey in this area. A lot of people like to tease her about how she isn't getting any.

Victor's description was, again, something I discussed at length with Syn before I finally settled on what he looked like. I figured it was about time we had a physical description of the man, since he's never been properly described before.

It was very well done .

I liked how Lutecia seems to absorb the jokes now and gets even, since it edges her into a more mature and calm personality that I like for her.

Yeah, funnily enough, I kept imagining Victor to look somewhat like Vice . Dunno why!

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Another short, I just keep thinking things up. *Shrug* Go figure.

Spoiler for Sleeping:

People thought that Nanoha and Fate were lesbians, after all, they shared a bed, slept together, were in the companty of women more often than they were with men, raised a daughter together.

The answer was a lot different than that. They would never say that they were lesbians, even if they did love each other. The truth was, Nanoha and Fate just preferred to sleep together because they liked to know that someone was near them when they slept. Fate never could sleep well on her own, knowing that there was someone near her allowed her to sleep though nearly anything.

As for Nanoha? She liked to cuddle when she was asleep. Until she adopted Vivio, it wasn't uncommon for her end up next to Fate as the two slept together.

There were only a few people that knew this. Hayate did, which was why she gave them a room together when they were in Riot Force Six. Lindy knew about Fate's sleeping problems, since the blond had slipped into her bed when she was little several times. The older woman had thought it was cute when she woke up with Fate hugging her side in the mornings. Yuuno knew that Nanoha liked to cuddle a lot. He discovered it completely by accident when he tucked Nanoha in one night after working hard. The girl had grabbed him and pulled him right into bed with her. At first, he was worried that she'd hurt him by accident, like that time she had thought he was food and tried to eat him. In the end, she calmed down completely and just snuggled up to him, smiling.

So, in the end, Nanoha and Fate sleeping together just made sense. Their sleeping problems just made things easier for them to sleep when they were in the same bed.

Spoiler for Comments:

Hey, look, a NanoFate short from me. Will wonders never cease? So, yes, I can do NanoFate too.

Great thought, it could neatly explain why those two like sleeping together . I know it was probably just a random short, but I was a little disappointed in how it was written. I guess I'm biased, but I find the reasoning behind why Fate and Nanoha may like to snuggle interesting (say, for Fate it's because she's insecure, and for Nanoha maybe she's more clingy to others in sleep than she is normally?). So I'd much rather see a more "show" version that might hint at the deeper reasons why those two snuggle, while still keeping the light and fuzzy mood . I think I laughed the most at the part where Yuuno recounts the time Nanoha tried to eat him, that was one of my favourite eye-catches!

So yeah, I liked the whole idea running through the short, but it really felt like a wasted opportunity to write a great fluff-fic-with-hinted-deeper-meaning. The "tell" style is okay, but I think that you could do some pretty amazing things if you did it in a "show" style.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by yuiseppe

Just another piece of fanart for fanfic because I finally got some time - Satashi's version of Keroko's Syn. Originally was going to be based on Dezo's cracktastic comment on synergy a while back, but this came out instead :S

Spoiler for At ease, soldier.:

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... because 'regulation hairstyle' doesn't exist in the Nanoha universe.

EDIT: attributions.

*FLAILS* stop making me want to write more Synergy!!!!

It's already ruined because of Vivid T_T If I were to continue it, I'd have to add in Corona/Rio/Einhart.

.... Though I can see Rio laughing her butt off at Vivio being chained to Syn....

At any rate, I love it She's so..... AWESOME looking

[synaesthetic]

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

Simply being able to kitbash together a makeshift Device out of broken pieces isn't going to help anyone on Earth figure out the technology. Reverse engineering doesn't work that way. Devices depend on two things that the people of UAW 97 have no idea about. First, an energy source that isn't supposed to exist according to their worldview. Second, the "generator" for this energy being inside humans. They'd need someone who knows about magic and Linker Cores to show them the way. Otherwise, they won't even know if they've got a working Device or not.

The Devices that the US government picked up weren't nonfunctional, they were just damaged. Because Devices are keyed to their original owner, they weren't able to just pick them up and use them. But they were able to tear them down and take a peek inside at the guts, which they do understand to an extent thanks to the various leftovers from Al'hazred, the basis for all magitech.

Plus it's not like the mage folks who used Earth for their own personal battleground were very discreet. Also, the agency that runs this base has had their hands on the Precursor Artifact since the 1970s. They've had over forty years to study it. And they've existed longer than that--since after World War II, and they've found plenty of unusual things between then and MC 0088.

We already know that while most of Earth's humans have dormant Linker Cores, those who are active are very active. Terran-born mages are rare, but not impossible (i.e. Gil Graham, Nanoha Takamachi, Hayate Yagami and also Genya Nakajima's ancestors).

The Bureau takes a hands-off approach, even though NSIS knows about some of this, the Administrative Council does not and most military does not, either. Furthermore, it's easier to understand why this is possible when you understand just what the Precursor Artifact does. It was partially mentioned in Chapter 1, and if you want the whole story, you'll have to read the rest!

Because seriously this is the absolute core of the plot and there's no way I'm spoiling it here, even under tags.

It's also important to remember that this is an AU, RadiantBeam has already played very fast and loose with canon and I'm doing it even more so (since false light depends upon many things canon doesn't touch on or doesn't explain very well).

Edit:
To clarify, the Americans don't know anything about magic, specifically about styles or methodologies. They just know about the energy source that powers what Mid folks refer to as magic. In Chapter 4, there is a scene where Tizona picks up the protomages on his sensors and informs Celica that they are emitting magical energy signatures, but there's no indication of core logic. They don't know how to cast spells; they just figured out how to tap into that energy source to power technology that is, compared to what the Bureau has, very primitive. Wait for Chapter 4 to get more info.

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

That's fair , as it's your idea. It's definitely possible from what's being shown in Day, but I guess I'm far more optimistic about Miyuki and Shamal's ability to talk things out!

*Double takes* Who are you and what have you done with the deathcurse who likes angst and endings that are vauge and inconclusive?!

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Another short, I just keep thinking things up. *Shrug* Go figure.

Spoiler for Sleeping:

People thought that Nanoha and Fate were lesbians, after all, they shared a bed, slept together, were in the companty of women more often than they were with men, raised a daughter together.

The answer was a lot different than that. They would never say that they were lesbians, even if they did love each other. The truth was, Nanoha and Fate just preferred to sleep together because they liked to know that someone was near them when they slept. Fate never could sleep well on her own, knowing that there was someone near her allowed her to sleep though nearly anything.

As for Nanoha? She liked to cuddle when she was asleep. Until she adopted Vivio, it wasn't uncommon for her end up next to Fate as the two slept together.

There were only a few people that knew this. Hayate did, which was why she gave them a room together when they were in Riot Force Six. Lindy knew about Fate's sleeping problems, since the blond had slipped into her bed when she was little several times. The older woman had thought it was cute when she woke up with Fate hugging her side in the mornings. Yuuno knew that Nanoha liked to cuddle a lot. He discovered it completely by accident when he tucked Nanoha in one night after working hard. The girl had grabbed him and pulled him right into bed with her. At first, he was worried that she'd hurt him by accident, like that time she had thought he was food and tried to eat him. In the end, she calmed down completely and just snuggled up to him, smiling.

So, in the end, Nanoha and Fate sleeping together just made sense. Their sleeping problems just made things easier for them to sleep when they were in the same bed.

Spoiler for Comments:

Hey, look, a NanoFate short from me. Will wonders never cease? So, yes, I can do NanoFate too.

Is that really NanoFate? Cuz it seems to me that's just explaining the reason they plutonically share a bed, something along the lines of what I thought why they did that.

Anyways, it was very nice

[00-Raiser]

Sorry for the double post, but it's slow tonight...

So it seemed that no one wanted some Chrono/Yuuno =/ Well, I uploaded it to FF.net anyways.

Also got a new short. In this, Nanoha discovers that no matter how good you are at something, some one will always be better.

Spoiler for Game Breaking:

“STARLIGHT BEAKER!” Nanoha screamed as she fired the blast. The pink energy engulfed the immediate area in a blinding light, forcing her to shield her eyes. She panted heavily, having gone into Blaster 3 and put her all into that single attack. She could barely stay airborne, but her act had been a necessary one.

Nanoha could only pray it had been enough.

The blast subsided, leaving only dust and debris in the air. It soon began to fade, but Nanoha’s face had turned to one of horror even before she could see again. Pulsating through the air was the sound of what could only be described as a mechanical heart beat. Beyond the cloud of dirt an orb of light shone faintly, becoming much more brilliant as the air cleared.

The Ace of Aces could now see her foe, a giant humanoid metal monstrosity that towered over everything. To her dismay its metallic body did not even have the slightest scratch on it.

“No way…”

The machine merely stood there, staring at her with the large orb in its face, seemingly taunting her as if saying “Is that the best you can do?”

It then slowly moved its arms up towards its chest, the orbs on the back of its hands and in its chest growing brighter.

“Uh oh!” Nanoha moved to defend herself from whatever was coming, but it seemed like a futile effort.

When the three orbs came together, it made a sound that was like an ominous voice emanating from the machine itself.

Meioooooou

The explosion that followed could be seen from space.

Spoiler for note:

The mecha featured is Zeorymer of the Heavens from Hades Project Zeorymer. As you can see, it makes things go boom real good! The title is such because Zeorymer breaks whatever Super Robot Wars game its in (SRWJ even gave it an upgrade!)

Well, Nanoha herself is no stranger to Zeorymer's methods

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by synaesthetic

It's also important to remember that this is an AU, RadiantBeam has already played very fast and loose with canon

Canon went flying out the window for Shadowverse around the time I revealed what kind of job Lutecia had. Everything else up to that could probably be considered at least loosely canon material at best, until Vivid was published.

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

*Double takes* Who are you and what have you done with the deathcurse who likes angst and endings that are vauge and inconclusive?!

Haha , well, your ending wasn't really inconclusive now, was it?

Seriously though, in regards to Day I guess I see Miyuki and Shamal as likely being able to patch things up because neither of them seem to take themselves too seriously, and people like that are typically good with admitting they're wrong (which is huge in resolving these kinds of conflicts). I guess that's why I see it as a stretch to have them split up at this point, unless everything that could go wrong went wrong between them!

(Of course, if Miyuki died as a result of that story arc, and Shamal's heart is quietly broken and she continues on as usual but all her friends know that she's broken up inside...now that would be a nice vague and angsty ending! )

[00-Raiser]

*Points to Deathcurse* See, now here's a girl whose brain you want to pick for ideas!

[Nanya01]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Sorry for the double post, but it's slow tonight...

So it seemed that no one wanted some Chrono/Yuuno =/ Well, I uploaded it to FF.net anyways.

Also got a new short. In this, Nanoha discovers that no matter how good you are at something, some one will always be better.

Spoiler for Game Breaking:

“STARLIGHT BEAKER!” Nanoha screamed as she fired the blast. The pink energy engulfed the immediate area in a blinding light, forcing her to shield her eyes. She panted heavily, having gone into Blaster 3 and put her all into that single attack. She could barely stay airborne, but her act had been a necessary one.

Nanoha could only pray it had been enough.

The blast subsided, leaving only dust and debris in the air. It soon began to fade, but Nanoha’s face had turned to one of horror even before she could see again. Pulsating through the air was the sound of what could only be described as a mechanical heart beat. Beyond the cloud of dirt an orb of light shone faintly, becoming much more brilliant as the air cleared.

The Ace of Aces could now see her foe, a giant humanoid metal monstrosity that towered over everything. To her dismay its metallic body did not even have the slightest scratch on it.

“No way…”

The machine merely stood there, staring at her with the large orb in its face, seemingly taunting her as if saying “Is that the best you can do?”

It then slowly moved its arms up towards its chest, the orbs on the back of its hands and in its chest growing brighter.

“Uh oh!” Nanoha moved to defend herself from whatever was coming, but it seemed like a futile effort.

When the three orbs came together, it made a sound that was like an ominous voice emanating from the machine itself.

Meioooooou

The explosion that followed could be seen from space.

Spoiler for note:

The mecha featured is Zeorymer of the Heavens from Hades Project Zeorymer. As you can see, it makes things go boom real good! The title is such because Zeorymer breaks whatever Super Robot Wars game its in (SRWJ even gave it an upgrade!)

Well, Nanoha herself is no stranger to Zeorymer's methods

I don't know Zeorymer, other than the Valzacard is more Gamebreaking. (6 SP base, nearly the size of Gunbuster, dodges pretty well.)

But still, something she can't break?

Unpossible! =O

Edit: BTW, didn't realize that it was you who wrote the Chrono/Yuuno snippet above.

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

I don't know Zeorymer, other than the Valzacard is more Gamebreaking. (6 SP base, nearly the size of Gunbuster, dodges pretty well.)

But can it do this?!

Originally Posted by Nanya01

But still, something she can't break?

Unpossible! =O

Even if she could get through its force field, it's got instant regen too!

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Edit: BTW, didn't realize that it was you who wrote the Chrono/Yuuno snippet above.

Heh, I guess it is outside my usual range of content I recall a few people suggesting I do some Chrono/Yuuno awhile ago *shrug*.

I sure write a variety of pairings, don't I?

[Nanya01]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

But can it do this?!

Yes, Yes it can, and then it breaks dimensions.

[deathcurse]

I'm going to be busy for a while with school and other stories, so I thought that I might start posting some of my random shorts in Fanfiction.net .

Looking Out, where Chrono gets into a fight and Lindy can guess why...

As for Crime Never Sleeps, Angel and Logs, they'll all likely be on hold for a little bit while I work through the various problems I've been having with them . Sorry about that!