Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by Shigan

Nay! As long as I breathe and live and can type, the bunnies and rainbows shall persist!

*dodges the torrents of divine shooters coming at her from the animesuki crew*

How about dodging something out from the best RPG's ever made by man?
*cast Ultima with quadra-effect at Shigan then follow up with a quadra-effect Meteor*

[Shigan]

Originally Posted by mega1987

How about dodging something out from the best RPG's ever made by man?
*cast Ultima with quadra-effect at Shigan then follow up with a quadra-effect Meteor*

*counters with Luminaire of Chrono Trigger in the name of love!*

*Finishs with Fragmented End of Tales of the Abyss, just to be sure*

Those who've played Tales of the Abyss and actually made it to fighting Nebilim knows exactly why this hurts like a &%/&%/...

We could sit here for weeks discussing which RPG is the best ever -_-. Let's not go there...

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

Spoiler for Hayate x Vivio Story, normal deathcurse style:

Hayate x Vivio story, normal deathcurse style

It was ironic.

Hayate had broken Vivio’s heart on purpose many years ago, because she did not want Vivio to be with someone like her.

(Empty. Loving, but loveless. Hollow at the core, and unable to move past the past.)

Instead, Vivio ended up just like Hayate.

Hayate saw Nanoha’s jaw clench in frustrated anger as Vivio stayed out yet another night, sleeping with whatever girl or boy the blonde happened to pick up for the evening. She saw Fate’s heartbreak as her friend glanced at the old pictures on the fireplace mantel, with a smiling Vivio at fifteen dressed proudly in her military uniform. The pictures ended there.

Vivio wasn’t a TSAB officer anymore.

She went to university though, which was something. Vivio was getting excellent grades, despite her appalling social lifestyle. Indeed, they had all known that Vivio was brilliant if she really applied herself.

Vivio had ended up just like Hayate.

Brilliant and capable, but for absolutely nothing of value. Oh, yes, fulfillment in life didn’t come from romantic love alone. It wasn’t like Hayate found no meaning in life.

But it’s the idealism.

It’s the dreams.

It’s believing that yes, the impossible can be done.

I can do the impossible.

It’s caring about tomorrow beyond the fact that it’s coming.

The last thing Hayate had ever wanted was to see Vivio broken on the inside, disillusioned and bitter enough to not bother fixing the important things in her life. Because who really cared about grades, or military ranks, or diplomas? The valuable light in a person’s eyes when they woke in the morning, that drove them out of bed with a smile and looking forward to a new day—that was important.

Days blurred for Hayate. It really didn’t matter what day it was. Day in, day out, work…it was all the same.

And if Hayate had a heart to break, hers would have broken at the sight of Vivio going through life carelessly, charming and fooling everyone who didn’t know her. But Hayate had given up her right to feel sad, or ashamed, or guilty a long time ago.

So she watched.

As High Marshal, Hayate watched over everything and everyone. She didn’t miss a thing.

So Vivio flirted and seduced and fucked lovers carelessly, her beautiful eyes cool under the mask. She wasn’t waiting for her true love. She wasn’t waiting for an epiphany, an angel, a salvation.

And Hayate watched.

It was a good reminder—that the woman who was Hayate Yagami was alive only to repay the world what she owed.

There was only one salvation Hayate longed for.

But she would never deserve it.

Spoiler for Author's Note:

Sorry, having a bit of Creator Meltdown . School and life and plotting problems are merciless.

Fanfics can be written in minutes if it was like this. But I’m trying to reform , so I apologize that people have to wait for some time for updates.

To be clear, no, this is not canon in the Hayate and Vivio Files.

Originally Posted by Tiresias

Strange. I was supposed to feel sad reading this, but instead I am filled with enjoyment with how the world has returned normal

Originally Posted by Moczo

... I am forced to agree with Tiresias. I know I should be depressed, but it's more like the feeling you get when you run into an old friend you haven't seen in a long time.

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

Oh thank god. I was starting to worry I'd see nothing but rainbows and sunshine from you for the rest of my life.

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

She's back, you guys.

In all seriousness, though, a very lovely piece and a rather dark look at the outcome of the Hayate x Vivio chronicles as a whole, if Hayate ever chose to go down that route believing it was best for Vivio. Talk about the best intentions backfiring in the worst way possible!

And then Lutecia comes along and makes it all better and... *SHOT*

Aside from that, you could just as well make this AU of the chronicles, if you want to. I did that with the "Sunset" universe and "Borderline".

I love these reactions! It is kind of strange, if you think about it, to see happy-fluffy-warm-&-fuzzy written by our Queen of Tragedy. The fic was really beautiful in its dark way, though, all about the tragedy of good intentions (seriously, I'd rather risk crashing and burning honestly than crashing and burning based on a lie) and about one of life's cruel truths which anime and manga do not usually acknowledge: just because you wish and hope that someone will love you someday is not going to make them suddenly change their mind.

@dc: I'm sorry you're having school and life problems (especially the latter), but I'm glad my review/critique prompted a story idea! BTW, I'll reply to your e-mail on the subject tonight...weirdly, I actually have personal experience of initially-dubious-but-not-openly-hostile-but-who-come-around-eventuallu parents that might be somewhat relevant to Nanoha and Fate's position.

[shiroi mahotsukai]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

It depends on what you like about it, I think. On the one hand, it's a story about Lutecia and her struggles to balance out her life between a work she's good at, sort of likes, yet hates terribly, and her relationship with Vivio who makes her feel the complete opposite of what she suffers through every day at work as a Shadow. And how all those emotional contradictions are tearing Lutecia apart, and her long journey to fixing herself over it.

And on the other hand, it's a political spy-thriller where half the TSAB gets painted black or dark shades of gray, and good people do terrible things and the authors giggle madly about it .

After reading this I think I finally know what makes me continue reading the Shadowverse. It's the same feeling I got when reading the Dresden Files(the latter books especially) that one keeps reading for the awesome stories and great memorable moments while enduring that feeling of being ran through by swords of frozen steel again and again.

[Craxuan]

Suddenly have an idea, although I'm not sure whether someone has written on it or not.

It's about Nanoha's and Fate's hair style. In Strikers they seemed to have switched with each other if I'm not mistaken; Nanoha has twin pony tails when she's put on her Barrier Jacket. Is there a story regarding this?

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by Tiresias

Strange. I was supposed to feel sad reading this, but instead I am filled with enjoyment with how the world has returned normal

Originally Posted by Moczo

... I am forced to agree with Tiresias. I know I should be depressed, but it's more like the feeling you get when you run into an old friend you haven't seen in a long time.

Originally Posted by Craxuan

Wow, perfect. This should be made canon in your files, just an alternate universe to keep the er, plot bunnies dancing xD. One day you'll read them back and find how remarkably possible both stories are, how the turning points in life could determine happiness and sadness.

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

She's back, you guys.

Originally Posted by Kuroi Hadou

Oh thank god. I was starting to worry I'd see nothing but rainbows and sunshine from you for the rest of my life.

Originally Posted by blissfullyunaware

I liked this and would also like to see it as an AU. Really, it is a beautiful piece.

.........

Well, these reactions are unexpected .

Should I take it as a sign that my attempt to utterly destroy Hayate and Vivio wasn't received with horror but with...delight?

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

In all seriousness, though, a very lovely piece and a rather dark look at the outcome of the Hayate x Vivio chronicles as a whole, if Hayate ever chose to go down that route believing it was best for Vivio. Talk about the best intentions backfiring in the worst way possible!

And then Lutecia comes along and makes it all better and... *SHOT*

Aside from that, you could just as well make this AU of the chronicles, if you want to. I did that with the "Sunset" universe and "Borderline".

I was in such a black mood yesterday that I just had to let it out on poor Hayate and Vivio, and after I started writing I realized that death would be the easy way out ...and hence the fic, with the worst case scenario, emerged. And it's annoying how quickly I was able to come up with this dark approach when I'm having so much trouble with the happy stuff!

LOL, sequeway into Shadowverse?

It could be AU. It's a bit short for a story though , but I may tack it on another story or something just as an extra.

Originally Posted by Shigan

My sole purpose in the Files HxV universe is to never let dc run amok and let this happen .*starts typing on the next VxH story madly*

Originally Posted by Shigan

Nay! As long as I breathe and live and can type, the bunnies and rainbows shall persist!

LOL, good thing you're writing this stuff with me . Or else you see what one mood turn can do to a series in my hands!

Originally Posted by DezoPenguin

I love these reactions! It is kind of strange, if you think about it, to see happy-fluffy-warm-&-fuzzy written by our Queen of Tragedy. The fic was really beautiful in its dark way, though, all about the tragedy of good intentions (seriously, I'd rather risk crashing and burning honestly than crashing and burning based on a lie) and about one of life's cruel truths which anime and manga do not usually acknowledge: just because you wish and hope that someone will love you someday is not going to make them suddenly change their mind.

@dc: I'm sorry you're having school and life problems (especially the latter), but I'm glad my review/critique prompted a story idea! BTW, I'll reply to your e-mail on the subject tonight...weirdly, I actually have personal experience of initially-dubious-but-not-openly-hostile-but-who-come-around-eventuallu parents that might be somewhat relevant to Nanoha and Fate's position.

Man, people complain that I tear their hearts out and send them to depression when I write normally, then when I write happy stuff they comment on how weird it is and that they want back to the tragedy!

Yes, it's the fact that Hayate lied in the beginning which makes it worse in my view. And yet at the end she can't fix the damage she did to herself and to Vivio . Tragic.

@Dezo: Well, to specify, it's more like school problems and life stress . So not too terrible, just...frustrating . Thanks, and sorry again for the ranting and raving ..... And I'd appreciate that a lot, thank you! ^^

Originally Posted by shiroi mahotsukai

After reading this I think I finally know what makes me continue reading the Shadowverse. It's the same feeling I got when reading the Dresden Files(the latter books especially) that one keeps reading for the awesome stories and great memorable moments while enduring that feeling of being ran through by swords of frozen steel again and again.

LOL, does that make us a sadistic bunch?

[shiroi mahotsukai]

Probably not, you're just good at what you do. So what if it's fun all the way.

[mega1987]

Originally Posted by Shigan

*counters with Luminaire of Chrono Trigger in the name of love!*

*Finishs with Fragmented End of Tales of the Abyss, just to be sure*

Those who've played Tales of the Abyss and actually made it to fighting Nebilim knows exactly why this hurts like a &%/&%/...

We could sit here for weeks discussing which RPG is the best ever -_-. Let's not go there...

well, I tried...

[Jimmy C]

Originally Posted by Craxuan

It's about Nanoha's and Fate's hair style. In Strikers they seemed to have switched with each other if I'm not mistaken; Nanoha has twin pony tails when she's put on her Barrier Jacket. Is there a story regarding this?

Both girls changed hairstyles before Strikers. They had been wearing those hairstyles since they were 15 as shown in the A's ending. However, they retained the old hairstyles with their Barrier Jackets that they had been using since they were 9. They finally changed those a year after Strikers.

[yuiseppe]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

.........

I was in such a black mood yesterday that I just had to let it out on poor Hayate and Vivio, and after I started writing I realized that death would be the easy way out ...and hence the fic, with the worst case scenario, emerged.

What are we going to do with you?? Sorry to hear you had a bad day though.

The fic was very well done - I love how you highlighted the way Hayate and Vivio waste themselves. Brilliant people who somehow manage to get a part of their lives so wrong.

But... whenever you write about Hayate's work... I feel a little sad

[SilentOutlaw]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

Spoiler for Hayate x Vivio Story, normal deathcurse style:

Hayate x Vivio story, normal deathcurse style

It was ironic.

Hayate had broken Vivio’s heart on purpose many years ago, because she did not want Vivio to be with someone like her.

(Empty. Loving, but loveless. Hollow at the core, and unable to move past the past.)

Instead, Vivio ended up just like Hayate.

Hayate saw Nanoha’s jaw clench in frustrated anger as Vivio stayed out yet another night, sleeping with whatever girl or boy the blonde happened to pick up for the evening. She saw Fate’s heartbreak as her friend glanced at the old pictures on the fireplace mantel, with a smiling Vivio at fifteen dressed proudly in her military uniform. The pictures ended there.

Vivio wasn’t a TSAB officer anymore.

She went to university though, which was something. Vivio was getting excellent grades, despite her appalling social lifestyle. Indeed, they had all known that Vivio was brilliant if she really applied herself.

Vivio had ended up just like Hayate.

Brilliant and capable, but for absolutely nothing of value. Oh, yes, fulfillment in life didn’t come from romantic love alone. It wasn’t like Hayate found no meaning in life.

But it’s the idealism.

It’s the dreams.

It’s believing that yes, the impossible can be done.

I can do the impossible.

It’s caring about tomorrow beyond the fact that it’s coming.

The last thing Hayate had ever wanted was to see Vivio broken on the inside, disillusioned and bitter enough to not bother fixing the important things in her life. Because who really cared about grades, or military ranks, or diplomas? The valuable light in a person’s eyes when they woke in the morning, that drove them out of bed with a smile and looking forward to a new day—that was important.

Days blurred for Hayate. It really didn’t matter what day it was. Day in, day out, work…it was all the same.

And if Hayate had a heart to break, hers would have broken at the sight of Vivio going through life carelessly, charming and fooling everyone who didn’t know her. But Hayate had given up her right to feel sad, or ashamed, or guilty a long time ago.

So she watched.

As High Marshal, Hayate watched over everything and everyone. She didn’t miss a thing.

So Vivio flirted and seduced and fucked lovers carelessly, her beautiful eyes cool under the mask. She wasn’t waiting for her true love. She wasn’t waiting for an epiphany, an angel, a salvation.

And Hayate watched.

It was a good reminder—that the woman who was Hayate Yagami was alive only to repay the world what she owed.

There was only one salvation Hayate longed for.

But she would never deserve it.

Spoiler for Author's Note:

Sorry, having a bit of Creator Meltdown . School and life and plotting problems are merciless.

Fanfics can be written in minutes if it was like this. But I’m trying to reform , so I apologize that people have to wait for some time for updates.

To be clear, no, this is not canon in the Hayate and Vivio Files.

Ah, the Queen of Tragedy returns. This hit pretty close to home. I'd be interested in seeing a fic from Vivio's perspective *nudge*

[Nanya01]

Just so people know...

Started posting "Red" to FF.Net.

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by yuiseppe

What are we going to do with you?? Sorry to hear you had a bad day though.

The fic was very well done - I love how you highlighted the way Hayate and Vivio waste themselves. Brilliant people who somehow manage to get a part of their lives so wrong.

But... whenever you write about Hayate's work... I feel a little sad

Hehehe...pile me with awesomeness overload by seeing awesome work? *nudge nudge* Thanks for the concern ^^. It really wasn't insanely terrible of a day, just stress about assignments and about leisure activities turning not so leisurely, and deadlines @_@.

I'm glad you liked it . A generation of "hollow men"*, indeed . In this worst case scenario, I can see both of them being very successful and yet have nothing to show for it at the end .

*T.S. Eliot, for those who might be interested

Oh, I'm sorry! Is it bad then that I have a half-written one-shot all about Hayate and her work? (Fuyu can attest to how indirectly depressing that one will be .)

Originally Posted by SilentOutlaw

Ah, the Queen of Tragedy returns. This hit pretty close to home. I'd be interested in seeing a fic from Vivio's perspective *nudge*

Hope it didn't hit too hard .

Eh, don't rile up the plotbunnies please . They're dangerous creatures!

[DezoPenguin]

Originally Posted by Craxuan

Suddenly have an idea, although I'm not sure whether someone has written on it or not.

It's about Nanoha's and Fate's hair style. In Strikers they seemed to have switched with each other if I'm not mistaken; Nanoha has twin pony tails when she's put on her Barrier Jacket. Is there a story regarding this?

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

Both girls changed hairstyles before Strikers. They had been wearing those hairstyles since they were 15 as shown in the A's ending. However, they retained the old hairstyles with their Barrier Jackets that they had been using since they were 9. They finally changed those a year after Strikers.

Basically, the only difference between their Barrier Jacket hairstyles in S1/A's and StrikerS is that they both grew their hair out longer, so Nanoha's twintails are about the length Fate's used to be while Fate's are...quite long.

[Jimmy C]

My opinion is the twintails style did not look good with their 19-year old forms.

[Nanya01]

Originally Posted by Jimmy C

My opinion is the twintails style did not look good with their 19-year old forms.

Considering that they didn't change their voice pitches between A's and StrikerS, why should their hairstyle change?

Seriously, Nanoha, Fate and Hayate sound exactly the same between A's and StrikerS. =/

And I know they didn't change VAs. I'm just saying they could have changed pitches between A's and StrikerS.

[Rising Dragon]

I always figured Nanoha changed her regular hairstyle to the side ponytail style because her hair grew out during the recovery from her accident.

[NTFTH]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

Considering that they didn't change their voice pitches between A's and StrikerS, why should their hairstyle change?

Seriously, Nanoha, Fate and Hayate sound exactly the same between A's and StrikerS. =/

And I know they didn't change VAs. I'm just saying they could have changed pitches between A's and StrikerS.

Really? Fate at least sounded slightly different to me in StrikerS.

Judging from the A's epilogue their voices sounding the same won't be a problem in the English dub if one ever get's made.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

.........

Well, these reactions are unexpected .

Should I take it as a sign that my attempt to utterly destroy Hayate and Vivio wasn't received with horror but with...delight?

You are our appointed Queen of Tragedy. You should have seen this coming ever since you announced that PoTB was overall going to have a happy, fluffy sort of ending. We aren't used to seeing happiness and fluff from you.

I was in such a black mood yesterday

*hugs*

It could be AU. It's a bit short for a story though , but I may tack it on another story or something just as an extra.

Hey, a dark AU is always fun to have on the side if you ever need to vent and can't take it out in the canon events. I've poured quite a bit of nasty emotion into the "Sunset" universe when I can't handle the happier stuff. It's a handy little way of easing frustration.

[Kuroi Hadou]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

You are our appointed Queen of Tragedy. You should have seen this coming ever since you announced that PoTB was overall going to have a happy, fluffy sort of ending. We aren't used to seeing happiness and fluff from you.

You don't have much room to talk.