Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[Thesinwithin]

I've realized that I've been rather lax in participation these past few days. So I fix:

This follows 'Rings and Things' (link).

Spoiler for Fic:

Nanoha remembered a lot more than she let on to Fate about the time in their lives that has so marred Fate's public confidence about their relationship. She remembered Fate standing in front of her crippled form, defending her from the evils of her classmates as clearly as if it were yesterday. She remembered the shame and humiliation she felt at the hands of those cruel individuals who refused to accept her for who she was.

Fate had just been trying to help her then, offering her services in exchange for a quick kiss on the lips that Nanoha was more than willing to offer her anyway when they were discovered. Awkward positions situations often go hand in hand with being in middle school, and this one would have been no different, save for the fact that Fate had refused to drop Nanoha's hand - an old habit from long ago - and the boys had accused them of something that neither of them wanted to admit to.

They were girls, they were in love.

They'd been in love for many years now.

They'd never actually talked about it before that day.

Nanoha remembered feeling as though her world was falling apart around her as she struggled to keep up with a raging Fate later on, when they'd escaped their peers for the sanctuary of the school grounds. She wasn't fast on crutches, but her want to walk was far outweighed by her concern for her friend. She had to keep up. Fate couldn't run away again.

"Fate-chan, wait!" she shouted after her friend. Her hand slipped and her crutch shot out from under her arm, pulling her with it towards the ground.

Fate caught in in an instant, using a sonic move without her barrier jacket or device. "Be careful," she said, her eyes begging Nanoha to understand. Nanoha knew that she was Fate's world. The girl had failed the Enforcer Exam twice due to worry about her wellbeing, it would not happen again. "I can't lose you."

The jeers had filtered though to their ears then, the boys were back, this time with their classmates and the rumor mill was going in full. Nanoha closed her eyes and allowed Fate to hold her close.

They'd bested it then.

Nanoha's ring was on her finger as she pulled Fate down onto the bed. "I love you," she said quietly.

Fate smiled, so much like she'd smiled in the mast, her fists raised and ready to beat down the next person who insulted Nanoha. "It's nice to hear you say that," her red eyes smile bright and Nanoha blushes.

She's been bad at the whole love thing too, it seems.

"We've got to try harder, ne, Fate-chan?" Nanoha grinned, trailing her fingertips along Fate's jawline. There was a stubborn set to it that told Nanoha that she would get nowhere asking Fate to wear the ring again today.

They were still falling in love, even after nearly seven years of love between them.

"Nanoha," Fate reached up to grasp Nanoha's hand. Cool metal met her fingers as Fate laced their fingers together. "I won't hide it any more."

I'm not afraid of a ghost of the past... The words go unspoken between them and Nanoha knows that she's won out over the insecure and tentative Fate that she knew in the past.

This Fate can rise above her less-than-conventional origins and accept the fact that even people in love can accept the odd looks that they're sometimes doomed to get.

"Fate," Nanoha leaned forward and kissed her lover soundly on the mouth. She'd done it many times before, but this time it felt different, like she was finally sealing a deal that she'd started negotiations for a long time ago. "Never leave," she said, pulling back.

"I won't." Fate promised, wrapping her arms around Nanoha's shoulders, "I have a family here."

Nanoha smiled. "And they love you very much, Enforcer Harlaown."

[Satashi]

This is the information part, made as a ".5" chapter because it isn't going to interrupt the current vote. I just figured that it would be nice to explain a few things hehe.

Oh, and if you want Fate's complete past... you'll just have to wait :P

Spoiler for Vampire!Fate pt.14.5:

What a night to rain. My mood reflected the night sky as rain pounded on the glass I was leaning against. Chrono had left several hours ago but I was still troubled by his words. Paladins were hurting humans...

As far back as I could remember, there were paladins. From when I was just a little girl clinging to the pants leg of my master, the one who changed me, I could remember seeing them. Bright shining armor, a tabard with a cross, and sharp weapons. They said they were sent from god himself to rid the world of evil, to fight demons and slay the devils plaguing the world.

At the time I was still young, both physically and mentally as far as vampires go. I was still learning everything, getting a grasp on how to live and why we did what we did. My master explained it to me then but I didn't understand until many years later.

We were a race born from a single man, Yakshaw as I heard his name was. Some called him Kain, others had different names that were too many to mention. He was a legend in his own right, a warrior topped by none. He was never harmed in battle until that one day. He was struck down by another and was left to die. The man was saved by an angel, legend says. He was to return home and never fight again in return for his life being spared.

But he didn't fulfill his promise. Instead he hunted down the one who had bested him, and slew him in battle... Then drank his blood to celebrate victory. The angel cursed him then; to live forever by drinking the blood of beasts. Yakshaw found that his power grew with each animal he beat and soon moved onto humans. He ones he drank from were also cursed, and the new ones who found the taste of blood only spread the poison. From there it was only a matter of time before the plague spread far and wide.

I wasn't alive then, but my master told me about it. Generations of vampires passed and soon it no longer cursed the victom from just drinking. I asked him why but didn't get an answer. Instead I was told how it works. I remember the words as if we spoke them yesterday:

“You see, there are three types of things in the bloodstream. One helps blood flow, the second helps heal wounds, and the third is a multi purpose stimulus cell. Normal humans do not possess the last one, but we do.”

“What does it do?”

“A little of everything. It heals our wounds, makes us stronger, doubles as adrenaline to make us move quicker and think faster. For those of us who truly understand them, they stimulate our powers to a point where even magic is possible.”

“Then why do we drink blood from others?”

“Our bodies make these cells from others. When we drink, we get the things we need to create these special cells. When we use them, we must drink more to create the ones lost.”

“Why do I thirst more than you?”

“You are young still, your body is maturing and changing so you need to create more than I do. The more powerful you become, the less you need to drink and the longer you can stay in the sun.”

“Why does the sun hurt?”

A chuckle. “You sure are inquisitive today. The sun's light makes our bodies grow darker, and our special cells don't like that, so they are used and we grow weak when exposed for so long. As before, the more you have the less you will have to worry.”

“So your blood is powerful enough to fight off the bad things?”

“Yes, my child, and one day yours will be too.” A sparkle came from a cross on a bracelet...

Lightning flashing made me jump back to the present time and shake the memories. I walked from my balcony windows and over to the kitchen area to get myself a drink of orange juice straight from the carton. Over the span of countless years I had become powerful, my blood now black as night. My master was wise beyond his time, knew things that were only recently discovered by humans. I inherited most of his knowledge and learned a lot on my own after... after that happened.

Moving back to my living room, I sat on the couch and leaned back to look up at the ceiling. I heard Erio's soft breathing from upstairs in my bed and I smiled lightly. I guess here really was the safest place for him. Paladins never really messed with me, despite me being a top priority on their hit list. I've had many skirmished with them; some good, some bad. Generally I stayed out of their business and in return they normally left me alone. Granted, they would take a chance if they had it, but they haven't actively sought me out in a long time now.

Paladins... The word echoed in my head, past battles flashing across my eyes. They were so much different than they used to be now. They trained people since they could walk, brain washed them into believing they really were sent from their god. The last time I fought a group of them I had been seriously hurt, but I secured Bardiche, who has been with me for ages now. The advanced gem that required so much power to use it was deemed worthless on the battlefield... Luckily my innate affinity was electricity. I could power the gem constantly and use it's power against the very people who created it.

The down side was their weapons were becoming more advanced, specifically engineered to kill vampires. I've seen things that would make even the best fiction writer green with envy. Swords that prevented wounds from healing, acid bombs that wouldn't harm a human at all but would boil the blood of a vampire, even guns that shot without bullets... The crusade was dead set on ridding the world of us, but it seemed like a never ending war. One vampire could produce one a week if they really wanted to. Those two could make two more, those four would make four more. Those eight would be sixteen, sixteen would be thirty two... Two months time and a small gang would be enough to give normal humans lots of problems. Any one of them could repeat the process...

In a way, Paladins were doing the right thing, preventing people from overtaking and becoming public. They kept everything hush-hush, prevented mass hysteria at the thought of a new biological weapon... But they still killed ruthlessly and if what Chrono said was true, they were hunting to stop this war once and for all. Would that mean that they would come for me again? Or were they that stupid? I could kill them in droves if I wanted...

Death was nothing new to me, but I didn't kill innocents. Humans were my food, but I respected them. They made things possible, they created things we couldn't, they cure diseases and help others. Just because I was stronger doesn't' mean that I should control them...

Nanoha was a good example for me. Sure, I wanted to gain her trust and friendship so I could have a sweet drink, but I wanted her to willingly donate it. I could easily bite her every day and never let her know, but that was rude. She wasn't a hit-and-miss girl, she actually held my attention and left me wanting more.

The thought of her made me smile. I brought my hand to my mouth and slowly licked one of my fingers, imagining her neck in front of me. Four days since we met now and the thought of her against my body was starting to make me squirm with delight. I didn't need blood right now, in fact I could go another month without it probably... but the anticipation!

A sound from upstairs made me jerk my head and see Erio standing at the stairs sleepily. “Aunt Fate?” He asked softly. “Are you still awake?”

“Yes,” I stood up and walked to the stairs. “Can you not sleep?”

“Thirsty,” He told me lightly with a yawn. “Can I have some milk?”

“You don't have to ask,” I guided the boy over to the kitchen area. “You are staying with me for a while so treat this place as your home, okay?”

“Thank you,” He accepted the glass I gave him and poured it. “Don't suppose you have cookies?”

I grinned. “Nope, but tomorrow I'll take you to a place that I'm sure makes really good ones.”

I had a reason to see her again now.

A.) Nanoha
B.) Fate

Nanoha: IIIII I
Fate: I
(no double voting!)

[TheShinySword]

Originally Posted by Satashi

This is the information part, made as a ".5" chapter because it isn't going to interrupt the current vote. I just figured that it would be nice to explain a few things hehe.

Oh, and if you want Fate's complete past... you'll just have to wait :P

Spoiler for Vampire!Fate pt.14.5:

What a night to rain. My mood reflected the night sky as rain pounded on the glass I was leaning against. Chrono had left several hours ago but I was still troubled by his words. Paladins were hurting humans...

As far back as I could remember, there were paladins. From when I was just a little girl clinging to the pants leg of my master, the one who changed me, I could remember seeing them. Bright shining armor, a tabard with a cross, and sharp weapons. They said they were sent from god himself to rid the world of evil, to fight demons and slay the devils plaguing the world.

At the time I was still young, both physically and mentally as far as vampires go. I was still learning everything, getting a grasp on how to live and why we did what we did. My master explained it to me then but I didn't understand until many years later.

We were a race born from a single man, Yakshaw as I heard his name was. Some called him Kain, others had different names that were too many to mention. He was a legend in his own right, a warrior topped by none. He was never harmed in battle until that one day. He was struck down by another and was left to die. The man was saved by an angel, legend says. He was to return home and never fight again in return for his life being spared.

But he didn't fulfill his promise. Instead he hunted down the one who had bested him, and slew him in battle... Then drank his blood to celebrate victory. The angel cursed him then; to live forever by drinking the blood of beasts. Yakshaw found that his power grew with each animal he beat and soon moved onto humans. He ones he drank from were also cursed, and the new ones who found the taste of blood only spread the poison. From there it was only a matter of time before the plague spread far and wide.

I wasn't alive then, but my master told me about it. Generations of vampires passed and soon it no longer cursed the victom from just drinking. I asked him why but didn't get an answer. Instead I was told how it works. I remember the words as if we spoke them yesterday:

“You see, there are three types of things in the bloodstream. One helps blood flow, the second helps heal wounds, and the third is a multi purpose stimulus cell. Normal humans do not possess the last one, but we do.”

“What does it do?”

“A little of everything. It heals our wounds, makes us stronger, doubles as adrenaline to make us move quicker and think faster. For those of us who truly understand them, they stimulate our powers to a point where even magic is possible.”

“Then why do we drink blood from others?”

“Our bodies make these cells from others. When we drink, we get the things we need to create these special cells. When we use them, we must drink more to create the ones lost.”

“Why do I thirst more than you?”

“You are young still, your body is maturing and changing so you need to create more than I do. The more powerful you become, the less you need to drink and the longer you can stay in the sun.”

“Why does the sun hurt?”

A chuckle. “You sure are inquisitive today. The sun's light makes our bodies grow darker, and our special cells don't like that, so they are used and we grow weak when exposed for so long. As before, the more you have the less you will have to worry.”

“So your blood is powerful enough to fight off the bad things?”

“Yes, my child, and one day yours will be too.” A sparkle came from a cross on a bracelet...

Lightning flashing made me jump back to the present time and shake the memories. I walked from my balcony windows and over to the kitchen area to get myself a drink of orange juice straight from the carton. Over the span of countless years I had become powerful, my blood now black as night. My master was wise beyond his time, knew things that were only recently discovered by humans. I inherited most of his knowledge and learned a lot on my own after... after that happened.

Moving back to my living room, I sat on the couch and leaned back to look up at the ceiling. I heard Erio's soft breathing from upstairs in my bed and I smiled lightly. I guess here really was the safest place for him. Paladins never really messed with me, despite me being a top priority on their hit list. I've had many skirmished with them; some good, some bad. Generally I stayed out of their business and in return they normally left me alone. Granted, they would take a chance if they had it, but they haven't actively sought me out in a long time now.

Paladins... The word echoed in my head, past battles flashing across my eyes. They were so much different than they used to be now. They trained people since they could walk, brain washed them into believing they really were sent from their god. The last time I fought a group of them I had been seriously hurt, but I secured Bardiche, who has been with me for ages now. The advanced gem that required so much power to use it was deemed worthless on the battlefield... Luckily my innate affinity was electricity. I could power the gem constantly and use it's power against the very people who created it.

The down side was their weapons were becoming more advanced, specifically engineered to kill vampires. I've seen things that would make even the best fiction writer green with envy. Swords that prevented wounds from healing, acid bombs that wouldn't harm a human at all but would boil the blood of a vampire, even guns that shot without bullets... The crusade was dead set on ridding the world of us, but it seemed like a never ending war. One vampire could produce one a week if they really wanted to. Those two could make two more, those four would make four more. Those eight would be sixteen, sixteen would be thirty two... Two months time and a small gang would be enough to give normal humans lots of problems. Any one of them could repeat the process...

In a way, Paladins were doing the right thing, preventing people from overtaking and becoming public. They kept everything hush-hush, prevented mass hysteria at the thought of a new biological weapon... But they still killed ruthlessly and if what Chrono said was true, they were hunting to stop this war once and for all. Would that mean that they would come for me again? Or were they that stupid? I could kill them in droves if I wanted...

Death was nothing new to me, but I didn't kill innocents. Humans were my food, but I respected them. They made things possible, they created things we couldn't, they cure diseases and help others. Just because I was stronger doesn't' mean that I should control them...

Nanoha was a good example for me. Sure, I wanted to gain her trust and friendship so I could have a sweet drink, but I wanted her to willingly donate it. I could easily bite her every day and never let her know, but that was rude. She wasn't a hit-and-miss girl, she actually held my attention and left me wanting more.

The thought of her made me smile. I brought my hand to my mouth and slowly licked one of my fingers, imagining her neck in front of me. Four days since we met now and the thought of her against my body was starting to make me squirm with delight. I didn't need blood right now, in fact I could go another month without it probably... but the anticipation!

A sound from upstairs made me jerk my head and see Erio standing at the stairs sleepily. “Aunt Fate?” He asked softly. “Are you still awake?”

“Yes,” I stood up and walked to the stairs. “Can you not sleep?”

“Thirsty,” He told me lightly with a yawn. “Can I have some milk?”

“You don't have to ask,” I guided the boy over to the kitchen area. “You are staying with me for a while so treat this place as your home, okay?”

“Thank you,” He accepted the glass I gave him and poured it. “Don't suppose you have cookies?”

I grinned. “Nope, but tomorrow I'll take you to a place that I'm sure makes really good ones.”

I had a reason to see her again now.

A.) Nanoha
B.) Fate

Nanoha: IIIII I
Fate: I
(no double voting!)

Nice little piece of exposition

Erio's adorable

[Thesinwithin]

Originally Posted by Satashi

This is the information part, made as a ".5" chapter because it isn't going to interrupt the current vote. I just figured that it would be nice to explain a few things hehe.

Oh, and if you want Fate's complete past... you'll just have to wait :P

Spoiler for Vampire!Fate pt.14.5:

What a night to rain. My mood reflected the night sky as rain pounded on the glass I was leaning against. Chrono had left several hours ago but I was still troubled by his words. Paladins were hurting humans...

As far back as I could remember, there were paladins. From when I was just a little girl clinging to the pants leg of my master, the one who changed me, I could remember seeing them. Bright shining armor, a tabard with a cross, and sharp weapons. They said they were sent from god himself to rid the world of evil, to fight demons and slay the devils plaguing the world.

At the time I was still young, both physically and mentally as far as vampires go. I was still learning everything, getting a grasp on how to live and why we did what we did. My master explained it to me then but I didn't understand until many years later.

We were a race born from a single man, Yakshaw as I heard his name was. Some called him Kain, others had different names that were too many to mention. He was a legend in his own right, a warrior topped by none. He was never harmed in battle until that one day. He was struck down by another and was left to die. The man was saved by an angel, legend says. He was to return home and never fight again in return for his life being spared.

But he didn't fulfill his promise. Instead he hunted down the one who had bested him, and slew him in battle... Then drank his blood to celebrate victory. The angel cursed him then; to live forever by drinking the blood of beasts. Yakshaw found that his power grew with each animal he beat and soon moved onto humans. He ones he drank from were also cursed, and the new ones who found the taste of blood only spread the poison. From there it was only a matter of time before the plague spread far and wide.

I wasn't alive then, but my master told me about it. Generations of vampires passed and soon it no longer cursed the victom from just drinking. I asked him why but didn't get an answer. Instead I was told how it works. I remember the words as if we spoke them yesterday:

“You see, there are three types of things in the bloodstream. One helps blood flow, the second helps heal wounds, and the third is a multi purpose stimulus cell. Normal humans do not possess the last one, but we do.”

“What does it do?”

“A little of everything. It heals our wounds, makes us stronger, doubles as adrenaline to make us move quicker and think faster. For those of us who truly understand them, they stimulate our powers to a point where even magic is possible.”

“Then why do we drink blood from others?”

“Our bodies make these cells from others. When we drink, we get the things we need to create these special cells. When we use them, we must drink more to create the ones lost.”

“Why do I thirst more than you?”

“You are young still, your body is maturing and changing so you need to create more than I do. The more powerful you become, the less you need to drink and the longer you can stay in the sun.”

“Why does the sun hurt?”

A chuckle. “You sure are inquisitive today. The sun's light makes our bodies grow darker, and our special cells don't like that, so they are used and we grow weak when exposed for so long. As before, the more you have the less you will have to worry.”

“So your blood is powerful enough to fight off the bad things?”

“Yes, my child, and one day yours will be too.” A sparkle came from a cross on a bracelet...

Lightning flashing made me jump back to the present time and shake the memories. I walked from my balcony windows and over to the kitchen area to get myself a drink of orange juice straight from the carton. Over the span of countless years I had become powerful, my blood now black as night. My master was wise beyond his time, knew things that were only recently discovered by humans. I inherited most of his knowledge and learned a lot on my own after... after that happened.

Moving back to my living room, I sat on the couch and leaned back to look up at the ceiling. I heard Erio's soft breathing from upstairs in my bed and I smiled lightly. I guess here really was the safest place for him. Paladins never really messed with me, despite me being a top priority on their hit list. I've had many skirmished with them; some good, some bad. Generally I stayed out of their business and in return they normally left me alone. Granted, they would take a chance if they had it, but they haven't actively sought me out in a long time now.

Paladins... The word echoed in my head, past battles flashing across my eyes. They were so much different than they used to be now. They trained people since they could walk, brain washed them into believing they really were sent from their god. The last time I fought a group of them I had been seriously hurt, but I secured Bardiche, who has been with me for ages now. The advanced gem that required so much power to use it was deemed worthless on the battlefield... Luckily my innate affinity was electricity. I could power the gem constantly and use it's power against the very people who created it.

The down side was their weapons were becoming more advanced, specifically engineered to kill vampires. I've seen things that would make even the best fiction writer green with envy. Swords that prevented wounds from healing, acid bombs that wouldn't harm a human at all but would boil the blood of a vampire, even guns that shot without bullets... The crusade was dead set on ridding the world of us, but it seemed like a never ending war. One vampire could produce one a week if they really wanted to. Those two could make two more, those four would make four more. Those eight would be sixteen, sixteen would be thirty two... Two months time and a small gang would be enough to give normal humans lots of problems. Any one of them could repeat the process...

In a way, Paladins were doing the right thing, preventing people from overtaking and becoming public. They kept everything hush-hush, prevented mass hysteria at the thought of a new biological weapon... But they still killed ruthlessly and if what Chrono said was true, they were hunting to stop this war once and for all. Would that mean that they would come for me again? Or were they that stupid? I could kill them in droves if I wanted...

Death was nothing new to me, but I didn't kill innocents. Humans were my food, but I respected them. They made things possible, they created things we couldn't, they cure diseases and help others. Just because I was stronger doesn't' mean that I should control them...

Nanoha was a good example for me. Sure, I wanted to gain her trust and friendship so I could have a sweet drink, but I wanted her to willingly donate it. I could easily bite her every day and never let her know, but that was rude. She wasn't a hit-and-miss girl, she actually held my attention and left me wanting more.

The thought of her made me smile. I brought my hand to my mouth and slowly licked one of my fingers, imagining her neck in front of me. Four days since we met now and the thought of her against my body was starting to make me squirm with delight. I didn't need blood right now, in fact I could go another month without it probably... but the anticipation!

A sound from upstairs made me jerk my head and see Erio standing at the stairs sleepily. “Aunt Fate?” He asked softly. “Are you still awake?”

“Yes,” I stood up and walked to the stairs. “Can you not sleep?”

“Thirsty,” He told me lightly with a yawn. “Can I have some milk?”

“You don't have to ask,” I guided the boy over to the kitchen area. “You are staying with me for a while so treat this place as your home, okay?”

“Thank you,” He accepted the glass I gave him and poured it. “Don't suppose you have cookies?”

I grinned. “Nope, but tomorrow I'll take you to a place that I'm sure makes really good ones.”

I had a reason to see her again now.

A.) Nanoha
B.) Fate

Nanoha: IIIII I
Fate: I
(no double voting!)

.... wait. can we vote again? Because my Vote for nanoha from last time still stands, ne?

AND OMG NANOHA + FATE + ERIO. I may die of happy lol-induced squee.

[wanwan1203]

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

I've realized that I've been rather lax in participation these past few days. So I fix:

This follows 'Rings and Things' (link).

Spoiler for Fic:

-cut-

This is so sweet. It's nice to know the reason why Fate wouldn't wear the ring before (Rings and Things). It was believable... I think. An event like that would have made Fate reluctant about their relationship, especially considering her history, her past (being a clone, not knowing where to fit in). The way you wrote the story made her fears and worries believable. So yeah.. I guess this Fate.. I could see her being like this and I like it very much. The resolution was touching and seeing Fate overcoming her fears made me smile. So simply put, I like the fic. I like how you wrote the characters. *thumbs up* I will be looking forward to more Nanoha fics from you! weeee!!!

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by TheShinySword

Nice little piece of exposition

Erio's adorable

XD

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

.... wait. can we vote again? Because my Vote for nanoha from last time still stands, ne?

AND OMG NANOHA + FATE + ERIO. I may die of happy lol-induced squee.

All votes were counted from last time. The voting is going as if this chapter never happened ^_^

don't forget Caro

[ghazghkull]

Originally Posted by Satashi

This is the information part, made as a ".5" chapter because it isn't going to interrupt the current vote. I just figured that it would be nice to explain a few things hehe.

Oh, and if you want Fate's complete past... you'll just have to wait :P

Spoiler for Vampire!Fate pt.14.5:

What a night to rain. My mood reflected the night sky as rain pounded on the glass I was leaning against. Chrono had left several hours ago but I was still troubled by his words. Paladins were hurting humans...

As far back as I could remember, there were paladins. From when I was just a little girl clinging to the pants leg of my master, the one who changed me, I could remember seeing them. Bright shining armor, a tabard with a cross, and sharp weapons. They said they were sent from god himself to rid the world of evil, to fight demons and slay the devils plaguing the world.

At the time I was still young, both physically and mentally as far as vampires go. I was still learning everything, getting a grasp on how to live and why we did what we did. My master explained it to me then but I didn't understand until many years later.

We were a race born from a single man, Yakshaw as I heard his name was. Some called him Kain, others had different names that were too many to mention. He was a legend in his own right, a warrior topped by none. He was never harmed in battle until that one day. He was struck down by another and was left to die. The man was saved by an angel, legend says. He was to return home and never fight again in return for his life being spared.

But he didn't fulfill his promise. Instead he hunted down the one who had bested him, and slew him in battle... Then drank his blood to celebrate victory. The angel cursed him then; to live forever by drinking the blood of beasts. Yakshaw found that his power grew with each animal he beat and soon moved onto humans. He ones he drank from were also cursed, and the new ones who found the taste of blood only spread the poison. From there it was only a matter of time before the plague spread far and wide.

I wasn't alive then, but my master told me about it. Generations of vampires passed and soon it no longer cursed the victom from just drinking. I asked him why but didn't get an answer. Instead I was told how it works. I remember the words as if we spoke them yesterday:

“You see, there are three types of things in the bloodstream. One helps blood flow, the second helps heal wounds, and the third is a multi purpose stimulus cell. Normal humans do not possess the last one, but we do.”

“What does it do?”

“A little of everything. It heals our wounds, makes us stronger, doubles as adrenaline to make us move quicker and think faster. For those of us who truly understand them, they stimulate our powers to a point where even magic is possible.”

“Then why do we drink blood from others?”

“Our bodies make these cells from others. When we drink, we get the things we need to create these special cells. When we use them, we must drink more to create the ones lost.”

“Why do I thirst more than you?”

“You are young still, your body is maturing and changing so you need to create more than I do. The more powerful you become, the less you need to drink and the longer you can stay in the sun.”

“Why does the sun hurt?”

A chuckle. “You sure are inquisitive today. The sun's light makes our bodies grow darker, and our special cells don't like that, so they are used and we grow weak when exposed for so long. As before, the more you have the less you will have to worry.”

“So your blood is powerful enough to fight off the bad things?”

“Yes, my child, and one day yours will be too.” A sparkle came from a cross on a bracelet...

Lightning flashing made me jump back to the present time and shake the memories. I walked from my balcony windows and over to the kitchen area to get myself a drink of orange juice straight from the carton. Over the span of countless years I had become powerful, my blood now black as night. My master was wise beyond his time, knew things that were only recently discovered by humans. I inherited most of his knowledge and learned a lot on my own after... after that happened.

Moving back to my living room, I sat on the couch and leaned back to look up at the ceiling. I heard Erio's soft breathing from upstairs in my bed and I smiled lightly. I guess here really was the safest place for him. Paladins never really messed with me, despite me being a top priority on their hit list. I've had many skirmished with them; some good, some bad. Generally I stayed out of their business and in return they normally left me alone. Granted, they would take a chance if they had it, but they haven't actively sought me out in a long time now.

Paladins... The word echoed in my head, past battles flashing across my eyes. They were so much different than they used to be now. They trained people since they could walk, brain washed them into believing they really were sent from their god. The last time I fought a group of them I had been seriously hurt, but I secured Bardiche, who has been with me for ages now. The advanced gem that required so much power to use it was deemed worthless on the battlefield... Luckily my innate affinity was electricity. I could power the gem constantly and use it's power against the very people who created it.

The down side was their weapons were becoming more advanced, specifically engineered to kill vampires. I've seen things that would make even the best fiction writer green with envy. Swords that prevented wounds from healing, acid bombs that wouldn't harm a human at all but would boil the blood of a vampire, even guns that shot without bullets... The crusade was dead set on ridding the world of us, but it seemed like a never ending war. One vampire could produce one a week if they really wanted to. Those two could make two more, those four would make four more. Those eight would be sixteen, sixteen would be thirty two... Two months time and a small gang would be enough to give normal humans lots of problems. Any one of them could repeat the process...

In a way, Paladins were doing the right thing, preventing people from overtaking and becoming public. They kept everything hush-hush, prevented mass hysteria at the thought of a new biological weapon... But they still killed ruthlessly and if what Chrono said was true, they were hunting to stop this war once and for all. Would that mean that they would come for me again? Or were they that stupid? I could kill them in droves if I wanted...

Death was nothing new to me, but I didn't kill innocents. Humans were my food, but I respected them. They made things possible, they created things we couldn't, they cure diseases and help others. Just because I was stronger doesn't' mean that I should control them...

Nanoha was a good example for me. Sure, I wanted to gain her trust and friendship so I could have a sweet drink, but I wanted her to willingly donate it. I could easily bite her every day and never let her know, but that was rude. She wasn't a hit-and-miss girl, she actually held my attention and left me wanting more.

The thought of her made me smile. I brought my hand to my mouth and slowly licked one of my fingers, imagining her neck in front of me. Four days since we met now and the thought of her against my body was starting to make me squirm with delight. I didn't need blood right now, in fact I could go another month without it probably... but the anticipation!

A sound from upstairs made me jerk my head and see Erio standing at the stairs sleepily. “Aunt Fate?” He asked softly. “Are you still awake?”

“Yes,” I stood up and walked to the stairs. “Can you not sleep?”

“Thirsty,” He told me lightly with a yawn. “Can I have some milk?”

“You don't have to ask,” I guided the boy over to the kitchen area. “You are staying with me for a while so treat this place as your home, okay?”

“Thank you,” He accepted the glass I gave him and poured it. “Don't suppose you have cookies?”

I grinned. “Nope, but tomorrow I'll take you to a place that I'm sure makes really good ones.”

I had a reason to see her again now.

A.) Nanoha
B.) Fate

Nanoha: IIIII I
Fate: I
(no double voting!)

Well that was most enjoyable :3

I vote A

[Mae]

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

I've realized that I've been rather lax in participation these past few days. So I fix:

This follows 'Rings and Things' (link).

Spoiler for Fic:

Nanoha remembered a lot more than she let on to Fate about the time in their lives that has so marred Fate's public confidence about their relationship. She remembered Fate standing in front of her crippled form, defending her from the evils of her classmates as clearly as if it were yesterday. She remembered the shame and humiliation she felt at the hands of those cruel individuals who refused to accept her for who she was.

Fate had just been trying to help her then, offering her services in exchange for a quick kiss on the lips that Nanoha was more than willing to offer her anyway when they were discovered. Awkward positions situations often go hand in hand with being in middle school, and this one would have been no different, save for the fact that Fate had refused to drop Nanoha's hand - an old habit from long ago - and the boys had accused them of something that neither of them wanted to admit to.

They were girls, they were in love.

They'd been in love for many years now.

They'd never actually talked about it before that day.

Nanoha remembered feeling as though her world was falling apart around her as she struggled to keep up with a raging Fate later on, when they'd escaped their peers for the sanctuary of the school grounds. She wasn't fast on crutches, but her want to walk was far outweighed by her concern for her friend. She had to keep up. Fate couldn't run away again.

"Fate-chan, wait!" she shouted after her friend. Her hand slipped and her crutch shot out from under her arm, pulling her with it towards the ground.

Fate caught in in an instant, using a sonic move without her barrier jacket or device. "Be careful," she said, her eyes begging Nanoha to understand. Nanoha knew that she was Fate's world. The girl had failed the Enforcer Exam twice due to worry about her wellbeing, it would not happen again. "I can't lose you."

The jeers had filtered though to their ears then, the boys were back, this time with their classmates and the rumor mill was going in full. Nanoha closed her eyes and allowed Fate to hold her close.

They'd bested it then.

Nanoha's ring was on her finger as she pulled Fate down onto the bed. "I love you," she said quietly.

Fate smiled, so much like she'd smiled in the mast, her fists raised and ready to beat down the next person who insulted Nanoha. "It's nice to hear you say that," her red eyes smile bright and Nanoha blushes.

She's been bad at the whole love thing too, it seems.

"We've got to try harder, ne, Fate-chan?" Nanoha grinned, trailing her fingertips along Fate's jawline. There was a stubborn set to it that told Nanoha that she would get nowhere asking Fate to wear the ring again today.

They were still falling in love, even after nearly seven years of love between them.

"Nanoha," Fate reached up to grasp Nanoha's hand. Cool metal met her fingers as Fate laced their fingers together. "I won't hide it any more."

I'm not afraid of a ghost of the past... The words go unspoken between them and Nanoha knows that she's won out over the insecure and tentative Fate that she knew in the past.

This Fate can rise above her less-than-conventional origins and accept the fact that even people in love can accept the odd looks that they're sometimes doomed to get.

"Fate," Nanoha leaned forward and kissed her lover soundly on the mouth. She'd done it many times before, but this time it felt different, like she was finally sealing a deal that she'd started negotiations for a long time ago. "Never leave," she said, pulling back.

"I won't." Fate promised, wrapping her arms around Nanoha's shoulders, "I have a family here."

Nanoha smiled. "And they love you very much, Enforcer Harlaown."

That was so sweet. And the background story of when they were in high school was so believable. One of the most realistic pieces I've ever read. Kids can be so cruel over the smallest of things.

But sonicmove!Fate for the win. I love when she uses it.

Originally Posted by Satashi

This is the information part, made as a ".5" chapter because it isn't going to interrupt the current vote. I just figured that it would be nice to explain a few things hehe.

Oh, and if you want Fate's complete past... you'll just have to wait :P

Spoiler for Vampire!Fate pt.14.5:

What a night to rain. My mood reflected the night sky as rain pounded on the glass I was leaning against. Chrono had left several hours ago but I was still troubled by his words. Paladins were hurting humans...

As far back as I could remember, there were paladins. From when I was just a little girl clinging to the pants leg of my master, the one who changed me, I could remember seeing them. Bright shining armor, a tabard with a cross, and sharp weapons. They said they were sent from god himself to rid the world of evil, to fight demons and slay the devils plaguing the world.

At the time I was still young, both physically and mentally as far as vampires go. I was still learning everything, getting a grasp on how to live and why we did what we did. My master explained it to me then but I didn't understand until many years later.

We were a race born from a single man, Yakshaw as I heard his name was. Some called him Kain, others had different names that were too many to mention. He was a legend in his own right, a warrior topped by none. He was never harmed in battle until that one day. He was struck down by another and was left to die. The man was saved by an angel, legend says. He was to return home and never fight again in return for his life being spared.

But he didn't fulfill his promise. Instead he hunted down the one who had bested him, and slew him in battle... Then drank his blood to celebrate victory. The angel cursed him then; to live forever by drinking the blood of beasts. Yakshaw found that his power grew with each animal he beat and soon moved onto humans. He ones he drank from were also cursed, and the new ones who found the taste of blood only spread the poison. From there it was only a matter of time before the plague spread far and wide.

I wasn't alive then, but my master told me about it. Generations of vampires passed and soon it no longer cursed the victom from just drinking. I asked him why but didn't get an answer. Instead I was told how it works. I remember the words as if we spoke them yesterday:

“You see, there are three types of things in the bloodstream. One helps blood flow, the second helps heal wounds, and the third is a multi purpose stimulus cell. Normal humans do not possess the last one, but we do.”

“What does it do?”

“A little of everything. It heals our wounds, makes us stronger, doubles as adrenaline to make us move quicker and think faster. For those of us who truly understand them, they stimulate our powers to a point where even magic is possible.”

“Then why do we drink blood from others?”

“Our bodies make these cells from others. When we drink, we get the things we need to create these special cells. When we use them, we must drink more to create the ones lost.”

“Why do I thirst more than you?”

“You are young still, your body is maturing and changing so you need to create more than I do. The more powerful you become, the less you need to drink and the longer you can stay in the sun.”

“Why does the sun hurt?”

A chuckle. “You sure are inquisitive today. The sun's light makes our bodies grow darker, and our special cells don't like that, so they are used and we grow weak when exposed for so long. As before, the more you have the less you will have to worry.”

“So your blood is powerful enough to fight off the bad things?”

“Yes, my child, and one day yours will be too.” A sparkle came from a cross on a bracelet...

Lightning flashing made me jump back to the present time and shake the memories. I walked from my balcony windows and over to the kitchen area to get myself a drink of orange juice straight from the carton. Over the span of countless years I had become powerful, my blood now black as night. My master was wise beyond his time, knew things that were only recently discovered by humans. I inherited most of his knowledge and learned a lot on my own after... after that happened.

Moving back to my living room, I sat on the couch and leaned back to look up at the ceiling. I heard Erio's soft breathing from upstairs in my bed and I smiled lightly. I guess here really was the safest place for him. Paladins never really messed with me, despite me being a top priority on their hit list. I've had many skirmished with them; some good, some bad. Generally I stayed out of their business and in return they normally left me alone. Granted, they would take a chance if they had it, but they haven't actively sought me out in a long time now.

Paladins... The word echoed in my head, past battles flashing across my eyes. They were so much different than they used to be now. They trained people since they could walk, brain washed them into believing they really were sent from their god. The last time I fought a group of them I had been seriously hurt, but I secured Bardiche, who has been with me for ages now. The advanced gem that required so much power to use it was deemed worthless on the battlefield... Luckily my innate affinity was electricity. I could power the gem constantly and use it's power against the very people who created it.

The down side was their weapons were becoming more advanced, specifically engineered to kill vampires. I've seen things that would make even the best fiction writer green with envy. Swords that prevented wounds from healing, acid bombs that wouldn't harm a human at all but would boil the blood of a vampire, even guns that shot without bullets... The crusade was dead set on ridding the world of us, but it seemed like a never ending war. One vampire could produce one a week if they really wanted to. Those two could make two more, those four would make four more. Those eight would be sixteen, sixteen would be thirty two... Two months time and a small gang would be enough to give normal humans lots of problems. Any one of them could repeat the process...

In a way, Paladins were doing the right thing, preventing people from overtaking and becoming public. They kept everything hush-hush, prevented mass hysteria at the thought of a new biological weapon... But they still killed ruthlessly and if what Chrono said was true, they were hunting to stop this war once and for all. Would that mean that they would come for me again? Or were they that stupid? I could kill them in droves if I wanted...

Death was nothing new to me, but I didn't kill innocents. Humans were my food, but I respected them. They made things possible, they created things we couldn't, they cure diseases and help others. Just because I was stronger doesn't' mean that I should control them...

Nanoha was a good example for me. Sure, I wanted to gain her trust and friendship so I could have a sweet drink, but I wanted her to willingly donate it. I could easily bite her every day and never let her know, but that was rude. She wasn't a hit-and-miss girl, she actually held my attention and left me wanting more.

The thought of her made me smile. I brought my hand to my mouth and slowly licked one of my fingers, imagining her neck in front of me. Four days since we met now and the thought of her against my body was starting to make me squirm with delight. I didn't need blood right now, in fact I could go another month without it probably... but the anticipation!

A sound from upstairs made me jerk my head and see Erio standing at the stairs sleepily. “Aunt Fate?” He asked softly. “Are you still awake?”

“Yes,” I stood up and walked to the stairs. “Can you not sleep?”

“Thirsty,” He told me lightly with a yawn. “Can I have some milk?”

“You don't have to ask,” I guided the boy over to the kitchen area. “You are staying with me for a while so treat this place as your home, okay?”

“Thank you,” He accepted the glass I gave him and poured it. “Don't suppose you have cookies?”

I grinned. “Nope, but tomorrow I'll take you to a place that I'm sure makes really good ones.”

I had a reason to see her again now.

A.) Nanoha
B.) Fate

Nanoha: IIIII I
Fate: I
(no double voting!)

Fate is so kind! I love her philosophy on her position compared to that of humans. And Erio was adorable. I'd give him all my cookies.





I think I might have to take the "Lurker" out from my info thing. I haven't been lurking lately.

[kasu1127]

Finally decided to get myself an account after lurking around here for a month. I visit this place everyday for the past month to feed my hunger for Nanoha fics, so I thought... Maybe it's about time I came out and said hi?

So hi! *waves*

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

I've realized that I've been rather lax in participation these past few days. So I fix:

This follows 'Rings and Things' (link).

Spoiler for Fic:

Nanoha remembered a lot more than she let on to Fate about the time in their lives that has so marred Fate's public confidence about their relationship. She remembered Fate standing in front of her crippled form, defending her from the evils of her classmates as clearly as if it were yesterday. She remembered the shame and humiliation she felt at the hands of those cruel individuals who refused to accept her for who she was.

Fate had just been trying to help her then, offering her services in exchange for a quick kiss on the lips that Nanoha was more than willing to offer her anyway when they were discovered. Awkward positions situations often go hand in hand with being in middle school, and this one would have been no different, save for the fact that Fate had refused to drop Nanoha's hand - an old habit from long ago - and the boys had accused them of something that neither of them wanted to admit to.

They were girls, they were in love.

They'd been in love for many years now.

They'd never actually talked about it before that day.

Nanoha remembered feeling as though her world was falling apart around her as she struggled to keep up with a raging Fate later on, when they'd escaped their peers for the sanctuary of the school grounds. She wasn't fast on crutches, but her want to walk was far outweighed by her concern for her friend. She had to keep up. Fate couldn't run away again.

"Fate-chan, wait!" she shouted after her friend. Her hand slipped and her crutch shot out from under her arm, pulling her with it towards the ground.

Fate caught in in an instant, using a sonic move without her barrier jacket or device. "Be careful," she said, her eyes begging Nanoha to understand. Nanoha knew that she was Fate's world. The girl had failed the Enforcer Exam twice due to worry about her wellbeing, it would not happen again. "I can't lose you."

The jeers had filtered though to their ears then, the boys were back, this time with their classmates and the rumor mill was going in full. Nanoha closed her eyes and allowed Fate to hold her close.

They'd bested it then.

Nanoha's ring was on her finger as she pulled Fate down onto the bed. "I love you," she said quietly.

Fate smiled, so much like she'd smiled in the mast, her fists raised and ready to beat down the next person who insulted Nanoha. "It's nice to hear you say that," her red eyes smile bright and Nanoha blushes.

She's been bad at the whole love thing too, it seems.

"We've got to try harder, ne, Fate-chan?" Nanoha grinned, trailing her fingertips along Fate's jawline. There was a stubborn set to it that told Nanoha that she would get nowhere asking Fate to wear the ring again today.

They were still falling in love, even after nearly seven years of love between them.

"Nanoha," Fate reached up to grasp Nanoha's hand. Cool metal met her fingers as Fate laced their fingers together. "I won't hide it any more."

I'm not afraid of a ghost of the past... The words go unspoken between them and Nanoha knows that she's won out over the insecure and tentative Fate that she knew in the past.

This Fate can rise above her less-than-conventional origins and accept the fact that even people in love can accept the odd looks that they're sometimes doomed to get.

"Fate," Nanoha leaned forward and kissed her lover soundly on the mouth. She'd done it many times before, but this time it felt different, like she was finally sealing a deal that she'd started negotiations for a long time ago. "Never leave," she said, pulling back.

"I won't." Fate promised, wrapping her arms around Nanoha's shoulders, "I have a family here."

Nanoha smiled. "And they love you very much, Enforcer Harlaown."

Part of the reason I registered was because I wanted to comment on this. I really liked the atmosphere that was set up for the second half of the fic; It was peaceful and calm, I couldn't help smiling as I read. The very last line made me feel all warm inside.
Although I did think Fate overcoming her fears seemed a bit too sudden... It might have something to do with me re-reading The Ring and Things right before this though. :P



As for Vampire!Fate... I want to see more of Fate + Erio (because this family deserves more attention ), but I guess either Nanoha or Fate's POV would work out this time, considering Fate and Erio would be visiting Nanoha (or at least, that's what it seems like ). But for the sake of voting... A

[Thesinwithin]

... I delurked someone? me?!?!?!

-faints dead away-

Edit: Welcome to the thread.

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by kasu1127

Finally decided to get myself an account after lurking around here for a month. I visit this place everyday for the past month to feed my hunger for Nanoha fics, so I thought... Maybe it's about time I came out and said hi?

So hi! *waves*

hi! *waves* welcome aboard! I've given the welcome speech several times now but I still mean every word ^_^ feel free to ask me or PM me any questions you might have and remember that you're welcome here <3 all votes are open and remember to post lots!

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

... I delurked someone? me?!?!?!

-faints dead away-

*confetti* grats!

[EDIT] like your new avatar.

[EDIT EDIT] For those of you who think Vampire!Fate was inspired by Vampire Knight, the anime series.... you're wrong~~ Haru linked me the series and told me to check it out around part 13 I just now watched it. Really good series, but I'm going to stay away from using it as inspiration since it's new and cool. I want to be as original as I can.

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by Satashi

@thread:You guys have crazy ideas

If we haven't, this thread shall not be fun

Originally Posted by kasu1127

Finally decided to get myself an account after lurking around here for a month. I visit this place everyday for the past month to feed my hunger for Nanoha fics, so I thought... Maybe it's about time I came out and said hi?

So hi! *waves*

Part of the reason I registered was because I wanted to comment on this. I really liked the atmosphere that was set up for the second half of the fic; It was peaceful and calm, I couldn't help smiling as I read. The very last line made me feel all warm inside.
Although I did think Fate overcoming her fears seemed a bit too sudden... It might have something to do with me re-reading The Ring and Things right before this though. :P



As for Vampire!Fate... I want to see more of Fate + Erio (because this family deserves more attention ), but I guess either Nanoha or Fate's POV would work out this time, considering Fate and Erio would be visiting Nanoha (or at least, that's what it seems like ). But for the sake of voting... A

Welcome to the thread kasu1127, I'm Evil Rick, dam I'm happy to meet you
In page 1 you will find links to most of the stories posted here, have fun and if you have any doubt, feel free to ask

@TSS: Now what are you planing to do?

[Thesinwithin]

Originally Posted by Satashi

[EDIT] like your new avatar.

[EDIT EDIT] For those of you who think Vampire!Fate was inspired by Vampire Knight, the anime series.... you're wrong~~ Haru linked me the series and told me to check it out around part 13 I just now watched it. Really good series, but I'm going to stay away from using it as inspiration since it's new and cool. I want to be as original as I can.

Why thank you. I made it myself. :3 Yours is rather... boobtastically awesome, if you don't mind my saying so. /gay

Wow. Vampire Knight? I hadn't even thought of that. I don't follow the series, but will likely power though it later on in the season in time for the finale. (I'm only watching Special A this season) Also, I'm too busy reading Twilight and being even more frustrated at that book than I am at Vampire!Fate... -cries- no vampire sexings for Sin, ever. D8

-sighs- Oh well. I'm sure that Fate at least will bite Nanoha at some point. This awful book, however, I can't be sure. (I've read better fanfic, is that bad?)

[wanwan1203]

Originally Posted by kasu1127

Finally decided to get myself an account after lurking around here for a month. I visit this place everyday for the past month to feed my hunger for Nanoha fics, so I thought... Maybe it's about time I came out and said hi?

So hi! *waves*



Part of the reason I registered was because I wanted to comment on this. I really liked the atmosphere that was set up for the second half of the fic; It was peaceful and calm, I couldn't help smiling as I read. The very last line made me feel all warm inside.
Although I did think Fate overcoming her fears seemed a bit too sudden... It might have something to do with me re-reading The Ring and Things right before this though. :P

Welcome!!!!! Hope you have fun here!

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

... I delurked someone? me?!?!?!

-faints dead away-

Yayyy!!! I think you deserve it! Go pat yourself in the back. Congratulations!! Woot!!! Party!!



wooo hooo!!!

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by Satashi

hi! *waves* welcome aboard! I've given the welcome speech several times now but I still mean every word ^_^ feel free to ask me or PM me any questions you might have and remember that you're welcome here <3 all votes are open and remember to post lots!



*confetti* grats!

[EDIT] like your new avatar.

[EDIT EDIT] For those of you who think Vampire!Fate was inspired by Vampire Knight, the anime series.... you're wrong~~ Haru linked me the series and told me to check it out around part 13 I just now watched it. Really good series, but I'm going to stay away from using it as inspiration since it's new and cool. I want to be as original as I can.

I feel more that Vampire Fate had more of Dracula from Bram Stoker

[ghazghkull]

Originally Posted by kasu1127

Finally decided to get myself an account after lurking around here for a month. I visit this place everyday for the past month to feed my hunger for Nanoha fics, so I thought... Maybe it's about time I came out and said hi?

So hi! *waves*

Welcome, welcome.

I do hope you enjoy your stay here :3

[TheShinySword]

New Phantom of the Lyrical part. This one is wedged right in between the music of the night scene and... whatever the name of the one that comes after it ^^;

Spoiler for Exploration and a Magic Scythe:

Spoiler for Magic Lasso:

song at 1.42 :3

“Nanoha~” Arf skipped through the now dark halls. Nanoha had been suspiciously absent from the dorm rooms. Arf had heard Mr. Yuuno Scrya had gone to visit Nanoha early and Arf made it her solemn duty to make sure Nanoha hadn’t been too excited to see her childhood friend again.

“Nanoha~” Arf called out again. It wasn’t like Nanoha to be late. She was normally always the first to bed and the first to rise.

Arf stopped outside of Nanoha’s dressing room door. “Are you still in here?” She tried the doorknob, it was locked. That was odd, even Nanoha didn’t have the lock to the room. Only the managers and Alicia did.

Arf snickered; of course when you had magic or a master with magic mere locks were nothing you couldn’t handle. Arf’s hands glowed for a minute and then she easily opened up the door. Magic made everything easier.

She poked her head through the doorway. No one around it seemed. Arf entered the room. Curious, if Nanoha had left then Arf surely would have seen her. Arf ran her hand over the things left behind. Dozens of bouquets, a hair tie and… a single rose. Arf picked it up, examining it curiously. Somehow it seemed familiar to her. She shook her head. It didn’t matter. She put it down.

Arf looked around the room. There didn’t seem to be anything out of place or unusual. Except... was the mirror always on hinges.

Arf walked over to the mirror. She took it in her hands and tested it. It was heavy but sure enough it opened right up. Common sense would tell most people to run and get help but it told Arf to go on an adventure.

Arf climbed into the dark corridor. It was eerie. There were no candles, no light bulbs, no nothing, just darkness and the squeak of a rat. Arf winced, she didn’t like rats. Arf could smell the dampness wherever it led was wet.

But where was she? Arf seemed to be going lower and lower but she couldn’t really tell. Most people would have stopped long ago but Arf wasn’t most people. Maybe her determination to continue was a testimony to her creator.

“Arf!”

Arf stopped and turned. Her eyes brightened, “master!”

Alicia held up her lantern, allowing a small amount of light to surround her face. “It’s time for bed. Let’s go back.”

Arf nodded enthusiastically. “Sure!”




“If you aren’t careful he’ll kill you, eh he he heh hem,” Jail Scaglietti spun around the girl’s dorm room using an old ratty blanket as a cape. “If you leave the dorm at night the Opera Ghost will take you as his bride.”

“Oh be quiet Jail,” one of the girl’s, a red head, called out. He was an annoying little stagehand; he always refused to leave anyone alone.

“All I’m worried about is your health dear girl,” he tapped her chin she winced.

“Hey leave Nove alone,” a different red haired girl yelled out this time.

Jail sighed and swept back his make shift cloak. “Never appreciated.” He tapped the side of his head as he shook it. “Never never.” His purple bangs covered his eyes. “Well,” he waved his arms and his cloak about. “I suppose as I’m the only one in this building to have ever seen the monster myself I’ll have to illuminate you all.”

He half bowed like a demented maitre d. As he rose back up he slicked back his hair, reveling his sickly yellow eyes. “Like yellow parchment is his skin,” His voice slunk around the room like a snake, sending shivers down every girl’s spine.

He covered the bottom half of his face with his cape. “A great black hole served as the nose that never grew.”

He whisked the faux cape away, “You must be always on your guard.”

He raised his hand to his neck and made a slashing motion. “Or he will cut you with his golden scythe!”

“A truly wicked demon roams below your feet.” He snickered, crudely snaring one of the girls, a glasses wearing brunette, around the waist. He laughed again.

Rapid taping filled the room as Alicia could move quite well for someone who required a cane. With a single swift move she removed Jail from his prize and sent the girl to her bed. She turned to face Jail but stopped halfway. “Those who speak
of what they know,” her eyes were dark. “find, too late, that prudent silence is wise.”

She turned around fully, “Jail Scaglietti,” she jabbed his chest with her pointer finger. “Hold your tongue.”

The girls watched them curiously, knowing clearly who the winner was in this minor skirmish.

“Perhaps I’m not the only one who,” he leaned down whispering the last part in her ear, “knows a bit too much.”

Smack! Jail’s head jerked to the side. He just laughed, he just laughed as if he had been told the funniest joke in the world while Alicia shook with rage.





On the bank of the Phantom’s canal Alicia waited. Alicia didn’t have long to wait. The Phantom was never late. She was always punctual, always, even if Alicia had only given her a thirty minute warning. Alicia on the other hand was always too early or too late which drove the Phantom utterly insane. Luckily for Alicia she was perhaps the only person in the world who could drive the Phantom insane and not get severe bodily harm in exchange.

And then she came. Her small boat glided through the water with out making as much as a splash. Alicia would have surprised had she not seen it a thousand times before.

The second the boat hit the shore the Phantom elegantly climbed out of it. They may have been the same height but she always managed to look taller then Alicia. Alicia certainly felt smaller.

The Phantom tilted her head slightly to the side. “And what do you want from me?” Her calm deep melodic voice was different from Alicia’s high sharp one yet eerily similar.

Alicia rubbed her forehead, had this been any other day she would have made a small joke to lighten the mood, it wouldn’t have amused the Phantom but Alicia would have found enjoyment in the Phantom seriousness. Tonight however was no laughing matter.

“Has Jail Scaglietti ever seen you?”

The Phantom’s brow furrowed. Whatever she had been expecting this wasn’t it. “The stage hand? Once perhaps, maybe twice. Why does it matter?”

“I think,” Alicia looked away. “He’s making a connection.”

The Phantom made a small surprised noise between a gasp and a grunt. “Between us?”

Alicia nodded.

The Phantom shook her head anger filling her eyes. “Damn him. He’ll have to be taken care of.” She met eyes with Alicia, “I expect you’ll handle this. As you know I’m busy,” She looked back at her boat and Alicia knew exactly what she was busy with.

“Of course. I’ll do what I can to see he’s transferred by the end of the season. But…” Alicia looked up. “You need to keep a low profile, send less notes, try not to visit the main stage as much an—”

“No.”

Alicia could tell from her voice this was not arguable. “Then I’ll trust you.”

“I’m not a child,” The Phantom reached up and delicately removed her mask revealing the face identical to Alicia’s in all ways but one. The Phantom’s eyes were undeniably the same color as blood. “I’m just like you remember.” An eerie smirk came across her face.

Alicia fought hard not to shiver as The Phantom replaced her mask.

The Phantom spun around, her cape flaring out behind her. “Your warning is understood. I have to go now. I don’t want her waking up alone.”

Alicia watched as the Phantom and her boat disappeared into the mist.

Spoiler for Notes and Changes:

And slowly but surely I'm moving further and further away from the Phantom of the Opera's original plot Of course the last scene is entirely new and I'm rather fond of it really. But oh dear Jail seems to be quite the problem. That too is new, I gave Jail two new lines of singing he really creeps me out.

on another note:

Eh? another delurker. Welcome.

Hey all you lurkers out there I know your there because I can see how many guests are looking at the page due to the handy dandy active users bar. If you guys like what you see be kind and delurk and comment. We writers live off comments so the more the merrier really. Besides we don't bite... well most of us don't.

@Evil Rick
Right now I plan to finish up Phantom of the Lyrical then start up Bounty Hunter!Yuuno (If anyone hasn't read the preview yet please go back a few pages *bow* ) And I'm writing Bodyguard!Nanoha while doing both of the others.

[Thesinwithin]

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

I feel more that Vampire Fate had more of Dracula from Bram Stoker

More Stoker than anything else, it's a pretty original Vampire concept as far as I'm concerned. I rather like it, where being a vampire isn't debilitating, just having Paladins around is.

Edit - Holy crap there's a lot of people online right now. -waves-

[Satashi]

Originally Posted by Thesinwithin

(I've read better fanfic, is that bad?)

Not at all. One of my favorite book series (Harry Potter) was very poorly written. Book 5 was pathetic, and the fanfic "Harry Potter and the Psychic Serpent" was 100 times better. Book seven was absolute garbage that felt like a 3 year old wrote. I won't point out specifics 'cause this isn't a Harry Potter thread, but more or less it seemed to have "Everything that fans wanted" crammed into one book that had almost nothing to do with the main character. Pointless romance for the sake of romance was thrown in, and it seemed as if the author rushed to finish it and didn't proof read their own work. Overall it felt like that "cheap fanfic that no one likes but still read."

So yeah, that was my own personal view and I'm not about to argue it's validness because it's only an opinion

Back to Nanoha!

Seems like Nanoha won next part. I don't think I can get it out tonight but I'll start writing anyway.

[lil-d01]

Originally Posted by Satashi

[EDIT EDIT] For those of you who think Vampire!Fate was inspired by Vampire Knight, the anime series.... you're wrong~~ Haru linked me the series and told me to check it out around part 13 I just now watched it. Really good series, but I'm going to stay away from using it as inspiration since it's new and cool. I want to be as original as I can.

That's good to hear! I'm quite enjoying your version of a Vampire-world.

EDIT: W-Why do I have such good timing in delurking and getting a page claim almost every time...^^"