2015-04-03, 08:09 | Link #56481 | |
Lumine Passio
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Join Date: Jul 2013
Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
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Hmm... Do you think that Chifuyu is actually a student in the Shinonono's dojo? Houki and her are the only two who two uses Katana in both hands.
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2015-04-03, 09:52 | Link #56483 |
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I wrote that thing out in my celphone. Kamen Rider OOO and Freezing are in my laptop. And trust me when I say the Freezing and OOO chapter is a lot more messed up. I still need to redo some parts and finish a flashback.
So what do you mean by jarring? Like the conversation without any out of quote sentences?
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2015-04-03, 10:04 | Link #56485 | ||
Some say I'm the Reverse
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2015-04-03, 12:19 | Link #56487 | |
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This does fuel my imagination for previous Shinonono priestesses to have also been warriors. Houki does place in the National kendo competitions so she's got to be pretty good. And no, this doesn't mean that Ichika's naturally 'off-balance' because he trained in a style made by women. Shadow Skill, anyone?
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2015-04-03, 22:40 | Link #56489 | |
Lumine Passio
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2015-04-04, 03:52 | Link #56491 |
Some say I'm the Reverse
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- May work, but as I said it's a matter of flow, when someone reads it. Sound effects are usually used to catch attention and break flow. Usually to change pace or to surprise the reader. If overused it gets hard to readjust consistently back to the story.
And possible story idea for Fireminer, Meister, or Demino: (looks at Rinny) https://youtu.be/i0o7lajjzBg Edit: I just imagined Ange nicknaming Iris Calling---"Gorilla Grodd". Oh, there is so much pain that will happen next...
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2015-04-04, 07:57 | Link #56492 | |
Lumine Passio
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Location: Hanoi, Vietnam
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(Maybe she has her own secret protector. A descendant of the Jinyiwei, perhaps? I'd like to see that person and Ren face each other). Say, who is the Armorer in ISA? Maybe her life would quite like this: Inside marine armory/ |
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2015-04-04, 08:42 | Link #56493 | |||
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In particular, a group of high-tech mercenaries who dress like a cross between ninjas and military troops, who seem to have a middle eastern background and have hebrew- or arabic-letter codenames. Namely, THESE GUYS: Quote:
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2015-04-05, 09:06 | Link #56494 | |
Some say I'm the Reverse
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Anothr update
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2015-04-06, 05:59 | Link #56495 |
Some say I'm the Reverse
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Having a little bit of trouble. Maybe trying to go full superhero-themed wasn't the best way to go. The story is all over the place and it's hard for me to string it all together, even though I already have an outline. I'm finding dealing with straight up cyberpunk science fiction or military/espionage thriller is easy, but since the Firemoth story and theme revolve around Firemoth's pilot being more of a "Cape" (EG an open up highly visible superhero like Iron Man or Superman as opposed to a darker character like Batman), It's hard. I'm throwing in the military bit because it's the part of the story I'm comfortable with. But the motivations of the main characters is still a very big problem to work through.
The biggest pain is that I can't even ask for advice about how to deliver it because it'll spoil the whole thing. YES IT IS DRIVING ME CRAZY. And I'm worried that it'll actually fall flat on it's face when it's damn done. ALSO: Isn't anybody else working on anything right now?
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2015-04-06, 07:06 | Link #56497 | |||
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Don't ask too much about US Army Rangers, their history is...convoluted. Mainly because prior to the 1980's, "Rangers" were not permanent units. They were activated and deactivated multiple times--in Vietnam, they went by the name LRRP (Long Range Recon Patrol). No, the 101st Air Assault is a completely different unit. Later descriptions (Vol 8) say Fang Quake been recolored to Navy Blue. Given the description: Quote:
A similar (and admittedly much nicer---relatively speaking) case happens in Tom Clancy's book Clear and Present Danger - Ding Chavez first appears in this book, recruited because he can't be traced back to the US Army. There's also mention here: Quote:
I'll be trying to link all of these into my fics later on--much later on. How is the problem.
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2015-04-06, 07:22 | Link #56498 | |
Lumine Passio
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Oh, and if they were really a CIA's production, then how the heck did the American get their hand in the scheme of the Academy? The blueprint is easily enough, but the security, the guards,... Unless they forced it out from the students - does their any rule to forbid graduated to revealing the academy's secrets? |
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2015-04-06, 07:33 | Link #56499 | |
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- Tiger Force is a task force, it only existed for one purpose, so I doubt it. Tiger Force was formed during the vietnam war. The current unit that was sent to IS academy would have been a task force as well, but a completely different one.
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...assuming Izuru hasn't messed up that part as well.
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