SOTM 2009 - September (Cybernetics) - Entry Thread

[White Manju Bun]

@escimo: Umm her face looks weird, like its schmunched, or maybe its too long, I dunno but it looks odd to me Colors are nice, I like the bg alot.

@LKK-Sensei: ver2 looks much better, I like the stats in the back and DANGER flashing faster is more eye catching.

Sooooooo...I wasnt gonna enter since Cybernetics aint my thing...til I saw Miko Miko entry and remembered I have seen Saikano.

Ver 1


C&C please, dunno if Ill make many changes, my 2nd job starts tomorrow -_- Gonna be a busy Bun! But also happy to hear what I can do to make it better.

[escimo]

Originally Posted by White Manju Bun

@escimo: Umm her face looks weird, like its schmunched, or maybe its too long, I dunno but it looks odd to me Colors are nice, I like the bg alot.

So what do I do?
Redo the colors and the background and do nothing to the face...

a late night draft...

[PreSage]

@ganbaru: The girl is still a bit hazy. Perhaps erasing some of the layers over the girl so she stands out clearer. Not liking the font and font colour very much.
@vandakiara: Very nice sig. Can't think of anything more to change.
@ayu-smepai: Has a unique look but a bit too simple. Feels like there are a lot of empty spaces around.
@KiNA: Does the shadow underneath suppose to flicker on and off like that? And I agree with Evil Rick that the border changes shade during the animation - don't know if that was intended or not. The bubbles at one point seem to stand still before cycling through the animation. But overall, excellent sig.
@Urei: Very lovely sig. The one dark border at the bottom gives an imbalance feeling to the sig, though - makes it feel like something is missing.
@Moonie: I like your first draft better. The bright purple background of the second version doesn't work for me.
@LKK: Looks good. May I suggest making that white insert/info screen and the honeycombs a different colour to make it stand out more from the orange background.
@Bun-bun: Haha, Saikano was the first and only series that popped into my head when I first saw this them. Lovely sig. Don't know if that's the best arrangement for the text (but then I'm il-text-erate). Background seems a bit too simple. But then you said you don't have much time - welcome aboard .
@escimo: i agree with Bun-ipin. The face seems a bit stretched.

[NorthernFallout]

Originally Posted by White Manju Bun

C&C please, dunno if Ill make many changes, my 2nd job starts tomorrow -_- Gonna be a busy Bun! But also happy to hear what I can do to make it better.

I'd say the only thing that doesn't fit is the text. Font and color is quite wrong I dare say and I think it can be placed in another area entirely.

Maybe a small extraction but I think it does its job fairly well. Effects and such also fit in nicely. Might be a tad bit bright but that might just be me.

Originally Posted by escimo

So what do I do?
Redo the colors and the background and do nothing to the face...

a late night draft...

I get what Manju is saying about her face being "too long" although I personally don't have a problem with it.

For the rest though, I can't find much error. Wonderful color and composition, great effects. Typography looks good but can be improved slightly. This is just nitpicking but moving "my eyes" to the left so the "m" starts where the "t" to through is will make the position better... I think. Still learning myself about it and that's a very large nitpick

[ganbaru]

Moonie, it look better this way
Escimo exepting than the text is somehow complicated to read, I have nothing to say
LKK it's better but the red-yellow-green thing is out of place
White Manju Bun the text is bugging me ( by the presence of the blood, it look like the render came from the manga. )

I changed the border and reworked the text ( I am not really for the generic ''Sotm september'' but I don't know if anyone would cattch the reference to '' The Raven '' )

Spoiler for previous version:

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by Cyz

I thought I should make an attempt



^ Sucks Might've overdid something....

The word at the right side looks a bit more up than the word at the left side.

Originally Posted by Moonie

Second draft ~su.
CnC appreciated ~su.

The japanese text doesn't seems to feet a lot with the idea of the sig.

Originally Posted by LKK

Version 2.



Comments?

Spoiler for version 1:

I think that the green bg feets quite a lot more than the orange one, also that black text bog behind the animated text looks really bad.

Originally Posted by White Manju Bun

Ver 1


C&C please, dunno if Ill make many changes, my 2nd job starts tomorrow -_- Gonna be a busy Bun! But also happy to hear what I can do to make it better.

Well, overall it's really good, only the text looks wrong placed, try to stick it on a corner.

Originally Posted by escimo

Quite a cool style of BG and Text, great job!

Originally Posted by ganbaru

Moonie, it look better this way
Escimo exepting than the text is somehow complicated to read, I have nothing to say
LKK it's better but the red-yellow-green thing is out of place
White Manju Bun the text is bugging me ( by the presence of the blood, it look like the render came from the manga. )

I changed the border and reworked the text ( I am not really for the generic ''Sotm september'' but I don't know if anyone would cattch the reference to '' The Raven '' )

Spoiler for previous version:

Honestly, noone of the versions look good with the text. Try to change the color og the text to one lees "distracting".

As a personal sugestion, once you have the text right click on the text layer and click "Resterize Layer" then with a soft brush using an opasity of lets say... 50% or 60%, erase the part of the text that's going in the oposite direction of the light source (for example if your oput the text at the left of the light, then erase a bit the left part). That would give thje efect of the text beeing under the light and would look cool.

[capture]

I would like to join either ^^

this is my 1st time joining here so don't bash it too much XD

Here's my entry ^^

V1

[KiNA]

WIP #2

A bit over limit, but C&C please

edit
WIP #2, V2 - AS safe version

[vandakiara]

Originally Posted by KiNA

WIP #2, V2 - AS safe version

definitely better now no complaints here

@capture - seems good.. maybe you could add a 1px black border to the top to set the limit of the sig

@Moonie - I've been forgetting about your sig, I don't know why D8 I like it but the jap text doesn't seem right indeed...

@LKK - quoting evil rick here- black text bog behind the animated text looks really bad.

@White Manju Bun - I hate how you always come up with really beautiful sigs D8 gives us a chance here ;_; jk x) it's really well done and the only complaint I have is the text as rick said.

@escimo - it's great but the face bugs me a bit ._.

@ganbaru - text is still the problem... try to do as evil rick said


and my Final version is here ~ thanks for all the C&C you guys :3

[Kana Futayo]

@Evil Rick and vandakiara - thanks for telling me ~su.

Here's 3rd draft ~su (I sux at fonts). D:
I used a different quote so it's not a direct translation of my previous draft ~su.

[ganbaru]

capture a good idea is it too dark ?
KiNA way better now, someone have to search hard now for finding a imperfection
Moonie don't worry, I , too , sux at font But the text sound strange to me .

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

As a personal sugestion, once you have the text right click on the text layer and click "Resterize Layer" then with a soft brush using an opasity of lets say... 50% or 60%, erase the part of the text that's going in the oposite direction of the light source (for example if your oput the text at the left of the light, then erase a bit the left part). That would give thje efect of the text beeing under the light and would look cool.

Sorry but I can't find the '' Resterize Layer'' thing than you are talking about ( photoshop element mightn't have this tool ) but I tried something than I hope would be good . C&C would be welcome .

Spoiler for previous version:

[Urei]

@ White Manju Bun Hm, I think adding a bit more contrast would help. Changing the text would be good as well. The font makes it hard to read.
@ escimo The size of the head might have been ok but without the hair, it looks a bit odd.
@ LKK I agree with Evil Rick on this one.
@ capture That's certainly one eye capturing border there. Hm, the only complain I have is her position in the sig. Maybe you could rotate her CW a bit. She looks as if she was about to fall over right now.
@ KiNA nice work there, I really like the bubbles.
@ Moonie Darn, I'm a fan of strong/visible borders and your last version, well, somehow doesn't cut it for me in that aspect. Although I admit that the current one might fit the whole signature better. Also, about the background. I must say that I liked the first one better. It had this 'Tech' feel to it and although a bit monotonous, it felt right. And the font you used that time. Pretty nice Eh, now I went and made it more complicated for you, sorry

V3


V4 (cut lower border)



Thx for the comments To tell the truth, I was suppsed to insert text there. C&C ?

[Katocchi]

First draft



CnC ??

[Drake]

Urei Real sharp. Love it.

Katocchi Text is the weakest part imo but overall very nice.

[escimo]

Thanks for the comments everybody.

4th version... (yup I know, I didn't post the third...)



Remasked the hair, (that was a good call Urei) made some color tweaks, and reduced the height just a bit to counter the horse face.

[Evil Rick]

Originally Posted by capture

I would like to join either ^^

this is my 1st time joining here so don't bash it too much XD

Here's my entry ^^

V1

Overall it looks really good and efective, maybe adding a 1px black border to the sig would make it look better.

Originally Posted by KiNA

WIP #2

A bit over limit, but C&C please

edit
WIP #2, V2 - AS safe version

No complains either, I think it looks great.

Originally Posted by Moonie

@Evil Rick and vandakiara - thanks for telling me ~su.

Here's 3rd draft ~su (I sux at fonts). D:
I used a different quote so it's not a direct translation of my previous draft ~su.

Yeah, text feets more properly.

Originally Posted by ganbaru

Sorry but I can't find the '' Resterize Layer'' thing than you are talking about ( photoshop element mightn't have this tool ) but I tried something than I hope would be good . C&C would be welcome .

Spoiler for previous version:

It's not a tool, right click over the text layer on your layers window, a dialogue box should appear, search the option called "Resterize Layer''.

Originally Posted by Urei

V3


V4 (cut lower border)



Thx for the comments To tell the truth, I was suppsed to insert text there. C&C ?

V4 for me, nothing more to complain about.

Originally Posted by Katocchi

First draft



CnC ??

Try to redouce the source of lights to 1 and not 3.

Originally Posted by escimo

Thanks for the comments everybody.

4th version... (yup I know, I didn't post the third...)



Remasked the hair, (that was a good call Urei) made some color tweaks, and reduced the height just a bit to counter the horse face.

I think it looks good this way. Nothing to complain about.

[ganbaru]

Urei , I agree with Evil Rick, Ver 4 is fine.
Katocchi I did know than someone would go with BRS.... seriously, why the lend flare on that particular spot of the gun , it seem to be there for no particular reason , no ?
escimo, it look good to me, nothing to complain.

Originally Posted by Evil Rick

It's not a tool, right click over the text layer on your layers window, a dialogue box should appear, search the option called "Resterize Layer''.

I have thy this too, and I don't have this option. BTW what is supposed to do this '' Resterize Layer'' is supposed to do ?

[KiNA]

It makes your text into raster drawing (normal layer).. you cant edit the text with text tool after that.

Make sure you clicked on the layer name.. not the thumbnail.

@ Katochi .. lol ..thats my current wallpaper I'm using

First roundup tomorrow.. make sure the final entry tag is there if you wish to submit. Dateline is still 10 days left .. so no rush either ..

[ganbaru]

Thank KiNA for the explaination. So ''Resterize Layer'' is about the same thing as ''simplifier layer'' ,like when I want to add noise on the text or is it something different ?

BTW this will be my Final entry

( I never made so much version of one sig before )

[Evil Rick]

Normally a text layer cannot be edited in many ways, 'Resterize Layer' turns the text layer into an normal layer so you can edit it and add it efects as if it were a mere image which is very usefull to work unique texts.