Nanoha FanFiction Discussion

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

...

May I have your permission, when I have the time and the energy, to write out that possible scenario?

A yuri-fangirl version of the epilogue? Sure!

[Kaijo]

Now, for something different... this is a shortfic based off "Nanoha the Movie 1st". This is an idea I actually had rattling around in my skull for quite awhile, and finally decided to write it.

Spoiler for The Importance of Safety:

The Importance of Safety
A “Nanoha the Movie 1st” short fic


They had only known each other a short time.

“I want to be your friend!” Nanoha told the other girl with sad eyes.

But in that time, they had made a connection; one that would last for the rest of their lives.

“I wanted to answer you,” Fate admitted nervously. “I want to be your friend, too.”

Although neither could have imagined how short that would turn out to be.

Nanoha didn't even notice when Yuuno put his hand on her shoulder while he talked to Admiral Lindy on the Asura, as she was too busy crying into Amy's arms.

“..and it was an accident,” Yuuno was saying. “By the time I got here, it was too late.”

“NO!” Nanoha shouted, surprising everyone with it's intensity. “I killed her! It's all my fault!”

“Nanoha, you didn't-” Yuuno started to say.

“We've reviewed the tapes,” Lindy said solemnly, interrupting him. “We know what happened, and while it's true it was an accident... it was partially Nanoha's fault.” She crouched down in front of Nanoha, placing her hands on the girl's shaking shoulders. “Not that we are blaming you, but-”

“There will need to be an official investigation,” Chrono finished for her. “And a punishment.”

“Chrono!” Amy chastised. “I think she's been punished enough!”

Nanoha shook her head and dried her eyes on her sleeve. “No, Amy, it's alright. It's my fault...”

“They were just playing around!” Yuuno protested. “If you're going to blame anyone, it should be me! I'm the one who-”

“Yes, you'll shoulder some of it, too,” Chrono told him pointedly. “There are rules regarding intelligent devices and the revelation of magic to new people so they don't get hurt. And now Fate and Arf have paid the price.”

“Stop it!” Nanoha demanded, jumping in front of Yuuno with her arms outstretched. “I'm the one who should have known better; I helped him of my own free will. I should have known the risks!”

Lindy sighed. “Calm down, I'm sure we can work out something. Amy, would you take Nanoha and Yuuno back to their rooms? We'll talk about this late after I contact the TSAB.”

Yes,” Amy said softly, then turned to the two children. “Come on, you two.”

“And Nanoha,” Lindy said, before the two had gone too far down the hall. “I hope this shows you how important safety is, with regards to magic. Learn from it.”

Nanoha, paused for a bit, not turning around, but seemed to shudder a bit before continuing on. After they disappeared around the corner, the admiral turned to the now sealed door that served as Fate and Arf's temporary quarters, which they had been confined to. The mess would have to be cleaned up, but not before she made her report.

Chrono seemed to read her mind. “May I ask what you plan to put in your report?”

Lindy sighed again. “Just what happened. Nanoha visited Fate and Arf in their room. They played around, like girls do. Nanoha brought out Raising Heart to show Fate, things got out of hand, and the weapon went off.” She shuddered, remembering the red on the walls.

Chrono shook his head and looked at his own device; just why did people put triggers on dangerous weapons these days, anyway?

[Nanya01]

Originally Posted by Kaijo

Now, for something different... this is a shortfic based off "Nanoha the Movie 1st". This is an idea I actually had rattling around in my skull for quite awhile, and finally decided to write it.

Spoiler for The Importance of Safety:

The Importance of Safety
A “Nanoha the Movie 1st” short fic


They had only known each other a short time.

“I want to be your friend!” Nanoha told the other girl with sad eyes.

But in that time, they had made a connection; one that would last for the rest of their lives.

“I wanted to answer you,” Fate admitted nervously. “I want to be your friend, too.”

Although neither could have imagined how short that would turn out to be.

Nanoha didn't even notice when Yuuno put his hand on her shoulder while he talked to Admiral Lindy on the Asura, as she was too busy crying into Amy's arms.

“..and it was an accident,” Yuuno was saying. “By the time I got here, it was too late.”

“NO!” Nanoha shouted, surprising everyone with it's intensity. “I killed her! It's all my fault!”

“Nanoha, you didn't-” Yuuno started to say.

“We've reviewed the tapes,” Lindy said solemnly, interrupting him. “We know what happened, and while it's true it was an accident... it was partially Nanoha's fault.” She crouched down in front of Nanoha, placing her hands on the girl's shaking shoulders. “Not that we are blaming you, but-”

“There will need to be an official investigation,” Chrono finished for her. “And a punishment.”

“Chrono!” Amy chastised. “I think she's been punished enough!”

Nanoha shook her head and dried her eyes on her sleeve. “No, Amy, it's alright. It's my fault...”

“They were just playing around!” Yuuno protested. “If you're going to blame anyone, it should be me! I'm the one who-”

“Yes, you'll shoulder some of it, too,” Chrono told him pointedly. “There are rules regarding intelligent devices and the revelation of magic to new people so they don't get hurt. And now Fate and Arf have paid the price.”

“Stop it!” Nanoha demanded, jumping in front of Yuuno with her arms outstretched. “I'm the one who should have known better; I helped him of my own free will. I should have known the risks!”

Lindy sighed. “Calm down, I'm sure we can work out something. Amy, would you take Nanoha and Yuuno back to their rooms? We'll talk about this late after I contact the TSAB.”

Yes,” Amy said softly, then turned to the two children. “Come on, you two.”

“And Nanoha,” Lindy said, before the two had gone too far down the hall. “I hope this shows you how important safety is, with regards to magic. Learn from it.”

Nanoha, paused for a bit, not turning around, but seemed to shudder a bit before continuing on. After they disappeared around the corner, the admiral turned to the now sealed door that served as Fate and Arf's temporary quarters, which they had been confined to. The mess would have to be cleaned up, but not before she made her report.

Chrono seemed to read her mind. “May I ask what you plan to put in your report?”

Lindy sighed again. “Just what happened. Nanoha visited Fate and Arf in their room. They played around, like girls do. Nanoha brought out Raising Heart to show Fate, things got out of hand, and the weapon went off.” She shuddered, remembering the red on the walls.

Chrono shook his head and looked at his own device; just why did people put triggers on dangerous weapons these days, anyway?

Uh... Wow...

And they say guys have problems with control. *Shot repeatedly*

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Kaijo

Now, for something different... this is a shortfic based off "Nanoha the Movie 1st". This is an idea I actually had rattling around in my skull for quite awhile, and finally decided to write it.

Spoiler for The Importance of Safety:

The Importance of Safety
A “Nanoha the Movie 1st” short fic


They had only known each other a short time.

“I want to be your friend!” Nanoha told the other girl with sad eyes.

But in that time, they had made a connection; one that would last for the rest of their lives.

“I wanted to answer you,” Fate admitted nervously. “I want to be your friend, too.”

Although neither could have imagined how short that would turn out to be.

Nanoha didn't even notice when Yuuno put his hand on her shoulder while he talked to Admiral Lindy on the Asura, as she was too busy crying into Amy's arms.

“..and it was an accident,” Yuuno was saying. “By the time I got here, it was too late.”

“NO!” Nanoha shouted, surprising everyone with it's intensity. “I killed her! It's all my fault!”

“Nanoha, you didn't-” Yuuno started to say.

“We've reviewed the tapes,” Lindy said solemnly, interrupting him. “We know what happened, and while it's true it was an accident... it was partially Nanoha's fault.” She crouched down in front of Nanoha, placing her hands on the girl's shaking shoulders. “Not that we are blaming you, but-”

“There will need to be an official investigation,” Chrono finished for her. “And a punishment.”

“Chrono!” Amy chastised. “I think she's been punished enough!”

Nanoha shook her head and dried her eyes on her sleeve. “No, Amy, it's alright. It's my fault...”

“They were just playing around!” Yuuno protested. “If you're going to blame anyone, it should be me! I'm the one who-”

“Yes, you'll shoulder some of it, too,” Chrono told him pointedly. “There are rules regarding intelligent devices and the revelation of magic to new people so they don't get hurt. And now Fate and Arf have paid the price.”

“Stop it!” Nanoha demanded, jumping in front of Yuuno with her arms outstretched. “I'm the one who should have known better; I helped him of my own free will. I should have known the risks!”

Lindy sighed. “Calm down, I'm sure we can work out something. Amy, would you take Nanoha and Yuuno back to their rooms? We'll talk about this late after I contact the TSAB.”

Yes,” Amy said softly, then turned to the two children. “Come on, you two.”

“And Nanoha,” Lindy said, before the two had gone too far down the hall. “I hope this shows you how important safety is, with regards to magic. Learn from it.”

Nanoha, paused for a bit, not turning around, but seemed to shudder a bit before continuing on. After they disappeared around the corner, the admiral turned to the now sealed door that served as Fate and Arf's temporary quarters, which they had been confined to. The mess would have to be cleaned up, but not before she made her report.

Chrono seemed to read her mind. “May I ask what you plan to put in your report?”

Lindy sighed again. “Just what happened. Nanoha visited Fate and Arf in their room. They played around, like girls do. Nanoha brought out Raising Heart to show Fate, things got out of hand, and the weapon went off.” She shuddered, remembering the red on the walls.

Chrono shook his head and looked at his own device; just why did people put triggers on dangerous weapons these days, anyway?

Yeah, they did add a trigger to Raising Heart's movie design. An important lesson for the kiddies: never play around with weapons of magical destruction.

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by deathcurse

A yuri-fangirl version of the epilogue? Sure!

It's not a yuri-fangirl version of the epilogue, it's an.... alternate interpretation of the events while Teana was living with Ginga.

[Rising Dragon]

Now if she hooked up with Nove after that, we can just say that Teana has a thing for Quint and is just using the three of them as substitutes for something she can't have.

*is Crossfire Shot*

[deathcurse]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

It's not a yuri-fangirl version of the epilogue, it's an.... alternate interpretation of the events while Teana was living with Ginga.

Oops, sorry, my bad .

Originally Posted by Kaijo

Now, for something different... this is a shortfic based off "Nanoha the Movie 1st". This is an idea I actually had rattling around in my skull for quite awhile, and finally decided to write it.

Spoiler for The Importance of Safety:

The Importance of Safety
A “Nanoha the Movie 1st” short fic


They had only known each other a short time.

“I want to be your friend!” Nanoha told the other girl with sad eyes.

But in that time, they had made a connection; one that would last for the rest of their lives.

“I wanted to answer you,” Fate admitted nervously. “I want to be your friend, too.”

Although neither could have imagined how short that would turn out to be.

Nanoha didn't even notice when Yuuno put his hand on her shoulder while he talked to Admiral Lindy on the Asura, as she was too busy crying into Amy's arms.

“..and it was an accident,” Yuuno was saying. “By the time I got here, it was too late.”

“NO!” Nanoha shouted, surprising everyone with it's intensity. “I killed her! It's all my fault!”

“Nanoha, you didn't-” Yuuno started to say.

“We've reviewed the tapes,” Lindy said solemnly, interrupting him. “We know what happened, and while it's true it was an accident... it was partially Nanoha's fault.” She crouched down in front of Nanoha, placing her hands on the girl's shaking shoulders. “Not that we are blaming you, but-”

“There will need to be an official investigation,” Chrono finished for her. “And a punishment.”

“Chrono!” Amy chastised. “I think she's been punished enough!”

Nanoha shook her head and dried her eyes on her sleeve. “No, Amy, it's alright. It's my fault...”

“They were just playing around!” Yuuno protested. “If you're going to blame anyone, it should be me! I'm the one who-”

“Yes, you'll shoulder some of it, too,” Chrono told him pointedly. “There are rules regarding intelligent devices and the revelation of magic to new people so they don't get hurt. And now Fate and Arf have paid the price.”

“Stop it!” Nanoha demanded, jumping in front of Yuuno with her arms outstretched. “I'm the one who should have known better; I helped him of my own free will. I should have known the risks!”

Lindy sighed. “Calm down, I'm sure we can work out something. Amy, would you take Nanoha and Yuuno back to their rooms? We'll talk about this late after I contact the TSAB.”

Yes,” Amy said softly, then turned to the two children. “Come on, you two.”

“And Nanoha,” Lindy said, before the two had gone too far down the hall. “I hope this shows you how important safety is, with regards to magic. Learn from it.”

Nanoha, paused for a bit, not turning around, but seemed to shudder a bit before continuing on. After they disappeared around the corner, the admiral turned to the now sealed door that served as Fate and Arf's temporary quarters, which they had been confined to. The mess would have to be cleaned up, but not before she made her report.

Chrono seemed to read her mind. “May I ask what you plan to put in your report?”

Lindy sighed again. “Just what happened. Nanoha visited Fate and Arf in their room. They played around, like girls do. Nanoha brought out Raising Heart to show Fate, things got out of hand, and the weapon went off.” She shuddered, remembering the red on the walls.

Chrono shook his head and looked at his own device; just why did people put triggers on dangerous weapons these days, anyway?

.....bloody and sobering! This is why they have trigger guards .

EDIT:

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

Now if she hooked up with Nove after that, we can just say that Teana has a thing for Quint and is just using the three of them as substitutes for something the can't have.

*is Crossfire Shot*

*is laughing too hard to respond properly*

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

Now if she hooked up with Nove after that, we can just say that Teana has a thing for Quint and is just using the three of them as substitutes for something the can't have.

*is Crossfire Shot*

You mean like how Fate really secretly lusts after Momoko, but since Momoko is happily married to Shiro and getting plenty she instead settles for Nanoha because they happen to look and act alike?

*is Starlight Breaker'd*

[Arkeus]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

You mean like how Fate really secretly lusts after Momoko, but since Momoko is happily married to Shiro and getting plenty she instead settles for Nanoha because they happen to look and act alike?

*is Starlight Breaker'd*

That would work if Nanoha wasn't spending that much time with Vita and Subaru and Yuuno and Tea and Chrono (after asking Kyouya to distract amy) and...

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by Arkeus

(after asking Kyouya to distract amy)

So in MGLN, Kyouya has now unlocked the brand new, super secret Amy route that never made it into Triangle Heart?

[Arkeus]

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

So in MGLN, Kyouya has now unlocked the brand new, super secret Amy route that never made it into Triangle Heart?

Why do you think she stayed in Japan while her absentee husband emos alone?

Lindy has better taste though (shiro)

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Arkeus

Why do you think she stayed in Japan while her absentee husband emos alone?

Only problem with that is Kyouya is living in Germany with Shinobu

[Rising Dragon]

Such a distance means nothing when you have access to magical teleportation, really.

[Nanya01]

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

Such a distance means nothing when you have access to magical teleportation, really.

...

So you're suggesting that Amy goes from Japan to Germany to spend time with Kyoya and Shinobu while Lindy shacks up with Shiro and Momoko?

All because Nanoha can't decide how to spend her time between everyone that might be remotely romantically interested in her?

...Since when did this series turn into a harem?

[Rising Dragon]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

...

So you're suggesting that Amy goes from Japan to Germany to spend time with Kyoya and Shinobu while Lindy shacks up with Shiro and Momoko?

All because Nanoha can't decide how to spend her time between everyone that might be remotely romantically interested in her?

...Since when did this series turn into a harem?

Since Hayate joined the cast.

[00-Raiser]

Originally Posted by Nanya01

...Since when did this series turn into a harem?

Well, it is based off an h-game, after all

[RadiantBeam]

Originally Posted by 00-Raiser

Well, it is based off an h-game, after all

Only now, the harem lead is Hayate Nanoha instead of Kyouya.

[deathcurse]

Okay, all edits are in! Long Time No See is now posted on Fanfiction.net.

I've added some more details and incorporated more suggestions by Dezo into the story . Hopefully it's now more in line with what I was trying to get at....and if not, ah well, it's an optional ending anyhow!

Thanks guys, for all your feedback!

[synaesthetic]

So yeah, I've been away from FFT for some time as my original "verse" has been getting a lot more attention from me than my fanfiction has. Also, with my new laptop on the way, I've been holding off writing much of anything, since netbook keyboard is not terribly comfortable and I'll be able to stretch out on a nice full-size keyboard in a week or so!

*apologizes profusely to false light and also RadiantBeam and deathcurse*

What was once just the setting for a single standalone novel has become an entire fictional world spread across multiple short stories and is even being used by other people I know to write their own related fiction...

This sounds awfully familiar...

Anyway, with that out of the way, it's time for a Very Lazy and Careless Backlog Breaker!

Originally Posted by Tempest Dynasty

Crosspostan from OCT

No CCs here. Just OCs.

Spoiler for A fine mess:

-snip-

That was awesome. I like your vision of ancient Belka. It's not dissimilar to my own.

Originally Posted by deathcurse

Spoiler for Crime Never Sleeps, part 7:

-snip-

Spoiler for Author's Note:

I know there's not much about Raven Gallant here, but she's only one part of the big mess of plots Hayate and Auris are both involved in .....

Mayor Magnus is a made up character who's the uncle or something of Runessa Magnus, Teana's former aide in Sound Stage X.

Really enjoying this story of yours and I'm finding so many ways how it lines up with what's going on in false light. So much has changed in your story that it could very easily be set after the events of false light and not look strange or have plot holes.

Plus, the events of my fic would be a good reason for Chrono to retire and someone like Auris to take his place.

*feels the plotbunnies gnawing on her toes*

Originally Posted by deathcurse

*words about Teana/Subaru/Vice fic*

It's not specifically my thing, but I did like reading this fic. I am personally a shipper of Teana and Subaru (even though the tsundere thing is old and tired and cliche), so I'm not too keen on shipping Teana with Vice. (Not that it worked out in the end anyway...)

Especially since I sail the Signum/Vice ship!

Originally Posted by deathcurse

My god, the yuri-fangirls are unstoppable!!

We are legion!

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

Now if she hooked up with Nove after that, we can just say that Teana has a thing for Quint and is just using the three of them as substitutes for something she can't have.

*is Crossfire Shot*

laughing

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

You mean like how Fate really secretly lusts after Momoko, but since Momoko is happily married to Shiro and getting plenty she instead settles for Nanoha because they happen to look and act alike?

*is Starlight Breaker'd*

so hard

Originally Posted by RadiantBeam

So in MGLN, Kyouya has now unlocked the brand new, super secret Amy route that never made it into Triangle Heart?

at this

Originally Posted by Nanya01

...

So you're suggesting that Amy goes from Japan to Germany to spend time with Kyoya and Shinobu while Lindy shacks up with Shiro and Momoko?

All because Nanoha can't decide how to spend her time between everyone that might be remotely romantically interested in her?

...Since when did this series turn into a harem?

amazing running gag.

Originally Posted by Rising Dragon

Since Hayate joined the cast.

QUOTED FOR EPIC TRUTH.

[Kaijo]

The Importance of Safety is up on ff.net here. Or should be soon, if it doesn't work for you, heh. Waiting to see how badly the NanoFate fans crucify me over this...