2010-04-25, 18:48 | Link #24521 | |
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Anyways, I said it was easy for anyone to make that conclusion, it's just even easier for SubaTea fans to see what they want. It basically boils down to "Both Subaru and Teana are single, and are now on good terms with each other", thus leaving the possibility of them hooking up open. The only real way to solve this is to have either Subaru or Teana (maybe both) in romantic relationships with other people when they meet up again.
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2010-04-25, 19:10 | Link #24523 | |
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2010-04-25, 19:27 | Link #24525 |
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And the problem with going that route was that there was no way it could have worked. I highly doubt Subaru would go back to someone who thought she was cheating when she just wanted to see a friend, and IMO for Teana the divorce was still too fresh. Besides, who says they won't date other people after? In the end it's all up to interpretation.
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2010-04-25, 19:48 | Link #24527 |
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I personally felt Deathcurse did a great job getting that feeling across. In the end it isn't something she can control; the ending is what it is based off the interpretation of the people who read it. She has no control over that. To say she "failed" at something when it all comes down to how people interpret it is hardly a valid argument.
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2010-04-25, 20:38 | Link #24528 |
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But there are ways to control how a reader interprets things, as well as ways to leave no room for interpretation. Like, maybe Teana joined the St Church and took of a vow of celibacy? That would certainly qualsh any couple potential
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2010-04-25, 20:41 | Link #24529 | |
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The problem is that there is no reason for Teana and Subaru to be in relationships at this point; absolutely none. It's not important to the characters, or to the story itself. There's no reason for Teana to take a vow of celibacy, unless you want to imply that her marriage with Vice got so bad that she never wanted sex again.
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2010-04-25, 21:57 | Link #24534 | |
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2010-04-25, 22:00 | Link #24535 | |
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2010-04-25, 22:01 | Link #24536 |
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Alright, I did a bit of fiddling, and wrote up a new section that will hopefully get rid of some of the vagueness .
It's a flashback scene, and I copied the scene right before it to give it some context ^^. Spoiler for New scene in Long Time No See:
I also tweaked the ending . Spoiler for New ending:
Hopefully, it'll give a different perspective on Subaru and Teana's interaction , and push that friendship angle more...
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2010-04-25, 22:17 | Link #24537 | |
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And on the ending.... personally, I like it, but either way I think you're going to have no choice over how people interpret the ending. It's just something that will happen regardless of what you do either way.
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2010-04-25, 22:20 | Link #24538 | |
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Edit: I got to agree with RB here. Heck, all my comments were my interpretations on it. Just pick what you feel is the right one and stick with it.
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2010-04-25, 22:26 | Link #24539 | |
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The added line to the ending... hmm... I dunno, if anything I think it makes the possibility of Subaru falling for her again even more valid since Teana had to stop and consider it. I think you should emphasize that it was just a joke and they both understand it won't actually happen. But now that I look at it again, having the narrator say "maybe they could have a better friendship this time around" does a good job of emphasizing the friendship part, since it's basically Voice of God. Maybe adding "even though they won't be anything more" would be good.
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EDIT: I utterly cannot believe how much changed since I started typing up this post! I swear, I got ninja'd by eight posts including an updated version of the story I'm commenting about! *facepalm*
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But the problem is that things are open to interpretation. Consider the following: Spoiler for Stuff driving my interpretation:
So what I bring away from it is the impression that Subaru never fell out of love with Teana, despite the separation, and that Tea wants to start over because this time she intends to respond to Subaru's feelings instead of stringing her along, never confronting them. I'd also like to emphasize here that I come away with that ending not as a SubaTea shipper. On the contrary, that isn't a pairing that I like--mainly because I don't like tsundere romantic leads; Teana and Subaru being a manzai duo type of friendship works for me, but Subaru and Tea being a romantic pair leaves me cold. So it's definitely not wishful thinking (though the opposite may apply--the "please don't let it be SubaTea, please don't let it be SubaTea, please don't let it be--aw crap, it is!" I won't exonerate myself from that possibility!). So how to fix it (if deathcurse decides that she wants to do so)? Spoiler for Suggestions for changes:
Oh, and on another matter--I'd just like to say that I loved Wendi and Nove's playfulness. Wendi is the kind of girl who strikes me that she'd be silly like that right until her senior-citizen years, and the kind of relationship she and Nove has seems like the kind that just doesn't change over time even as they grow up. So I didn't find that strange or unusual at all. Pageclaim for enthusiastic, multi-party discussions of fanfiction! Last edited by DezoPenguin; 2010-04-25 at 22:32. Reason: Totally ninja'd there! |
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